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The metro tunnels of Stalliongrad shelter the last remnants of ponykind from the ravages of the Apocalypse. Beneath the earth, ponies struggle to survive against mutants, radiation, and each other. But when an unstoppable threat emerges from the darkness of the Metro, one pony must brave the shadows to save not just his home, but the very existence of his people.
ARTYOM! WE MUST GET TO POLIS BEFORE THE DARK ONES STRIKE! [after many hours of shooting bandits, nazis, communists, monsters, mutants, and slimes.] Artyom! Call in the missile strike!
[shoots the missile strike box and saves the dark ones.] Oops.
I'll get around to reading this Metro 2033 crossover in a few hours maybe.
" 
" Is all I have to say about that.
Not really. I love Sunny Side and Lockbox's interaction, and I hope we haven't seen the last of Sunny now that the caravan is speeding off into the tunnel. I hope Lock can find a safe place to hide himself right now...
Great job, I can't wait for another chapter!
Loved this, definitely worth the read for enthusiastic and dedicated novel lovers. I personally have only played the game Metro 2033 and not the book (I hate myself for not buying it when I saw it D: )
One of the better Ponyfics out there, right up alongside Fallout: Equestria, which is really saying something.
Fantastic job you've done here, be really proud of yourself because you scored a 5/5 from me :)
Ohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh! 
I loved these last two chapters. I'm feeling really bad for Lockbox and his little mental trauma. I'm a bit worried about Sunny, too. It's hard to get a real read on him besides what Lock can see... Glad his wing isn't permanentally damaged though. This Sidewinder character seems interesting. I just love the way he talks! Please keep up the good work! I enjoy every second reading this!
What I like about your writing is that it has consistent quality and mostly everything makes sense. I do not know how you manage to deliver it this nicely and readable but I would like to thank you for that.
You deviated quite nicely from how the Videogame operated, the creatures (drop bears and thumpers) are described and pretty cool post apocalyptic Equestrian additions. The Wonderbolt harpoon too, never imagined that could be the name one would use with such a tool.
I greatly appreciate you taking Lockbox and his injuries rather seriously, hope to the lord that Starry Gaze DID NOT FOLLOW THEM.
The latest chapter did bring some sad points up when the mare died. 
Then again Sweet Dreams went from wanting to kill them to wanting Guild money and got micro-waved because she can't stay her mind on one target.
Everything so far has made Metro 2033 for a loveable read.
I'd say the size of each chapter is lacking but that is personal preference. 10k is more than enough for breakfast, lunch and afternoon snack.
I am in awe. When I first came across this story I figured it would just be a rehash of the game but with ponies replacing the humans or just mixed in with them. Mad that I didn't start reading this then, this story is brilliant and far more unique and original than I expected.
Pissed that Ray Drop died, just so you know. I'm RAEGIN'!!1!
This shouldn't at all be a surprise, but, MOAR!!!
I've never been a fan of grimdark, until I read this. Now I want to go buy the Metro 2033 book so that I can try to figure out what's supposed to happen next. Your writing is amazing and so full of vivid detail I can actually visualize everything that is going on. This is a beautiful, beautiful piece of fanfiction. I love you for creating this.
Very nice story mate. The chapters are pretty long, but that's partly what makes it awesome. Less interruptions and less distractions as the story is being told. Occasionally a paragraph or two runs on a little too long and could be separated into two , kind of overwhelming me as a reader. But that's really the only qualm I have.
I've been following since the second chapter, and this recent installment was awesome.
Keep up the amazing work!
I had to keep reminding myself this was in the mlp universe and not the metro one! I couldn't get an english copy of the book so I bought the game and was a huge fan of it. You did an excellent job capturing the mood in this chapter and I will be reading more!
Thank you, all commentators! I'm just glad I can make something some people actually enjoy!
I know that sometimes things tend to drag in this story; I'm still getting the hang of character development over a long period of time. I'll try to tighten that up... please do tell me what you don't like as well, or if you see any plot threads that need tying up! I have a lot to keep track of and I want this story to be its best. 
Let's drop a comment here. Reading this made me read Metro 2033, and both this and that have caused me to decide to run a roleplaying game based on the premise using the wonderful game system Apocalypse World next year. Which...well, we'll see how that goes.
So yeah, I have about five stories I keep up with on a regular basis (to the point of reading them the same day or so as they come out) and yours is one of them!
Constructive criticism? Maybe at some point.
I really love your story, RedSquirrel456. It has something, that I couldn't find in other Post Apocalypse pony stories. Lockbox is a very, very interesting character and the fact, that he's an Earth Pony makes him even more engaging. Factions and stations and how they relate with each other is really captivating, especially the greedy unicorn mages.
And the scene when they sit around the campfire, I could just imagine it around myself, with the cold of the black, dead tunnel around with only this weak fire keeping the air around.
I only read a few chapters, but I've been reading them in Artyom's voice from the actual game (well, to the best of my ability of course.) I found it extremely fitting for the whole story. Though I am amazed at how much detail you put into all of your chapters, it's amazing as it fits the general story tone and atmosphere. Hmm, I appear to be jumping from one thing to another.. Oh well, *Pinkie shrug* I really enjoy your story Redsquirrel, and I will in due time finish reading all of this.
Home is where the radiation is.
And longer and longer and longer... I didn't even realize how much I was writing until I was done!
Another dedicated reader. I think my work here is done! I think Artyom's voice is appropriate, but I imagine Lockbox's voice is somewhat squeakier and more pony-ish. 
Finally, I got to reading the latest chapter.
You sir have a gift. I don't care how long the gap between chapters is as long as you keep spewing out these masterpieces.
I didn't know I had such an effect on readers! Think of the possibilities...
>>705769 I'm sorry. I am married to my writing.
Good, good...
>>708452 Exciting things will happen, stay tuned! And it won't take two months either!
>>708783 As I'd hoped it would be! It didn't feel like it slogging through. 
>>709384 The original is great too! But thank you so much for coming over to mine first!
>>1379053 Though most of the development it's being fairly original, it's mostly a retelling of the plot in the book and the game, so you shouldn't need to play or read. But if you are interested anyway, Steam is doing a sale on Metro 2033 this weekend, so you could take a look. No idea of where to find the book, though.
And yes, it's very dark, with a fair amount of violence and gore, but mostly on a character driven sense and atmosphere.
It's always a good day when there's more MLM to be read. :3
Whoa! What a take on the hydra!
"and we really pissed off": missing 'it'
Hot Pocket is tastiest pony. Please tell me he's the one who almost got eaten. XD
Yeah, Ruby, you fuckin' deserved it, too! >:B
Oh god, Sidewinder, you are the best. He is seriously amazing.
"I tried not to let the I couldn't see it too well": not sure what happened here
"Hey, suka!": is that supposed to be "sucker"? It should be spelled "sucka" in that case.
Crap, I don't remember who this guy is. c.c
Yay, Russian!
Best plan.
GO PACKERS
Nice to see unicorns actually improvising with real magic like that.
"the parts I'd seen was only": subject-verb agreement
YES! It's about time they did something. :D You could cut their sexual tension with a knife for at least two chapters now!
Okay, Green Bay is awesome. "I got a knife." I love this guy.
Ah, my old nemesis: a tunnel full of shit.
"thick,and": missing a space
"realized I was looking water": missing 'at'
Oh man, this hydra or whatever it is. @_@
I like that he's thinking of them as his ponies now.
"recoiled and doze": think you meant 'dove'
Whew, this is fucking intense. Thank you, Brick.
Holy shit, that was amazing.
The only thing creepier than fanatical cultists wanting to kill you is fanatical cultists who respect you. Surprised you didn't end the chapter there.
I wonder what's become of Nopony as well.
Aw, shit. D:
Dammit, I just knew Green Bay was going to die! D:
I like this commander. He's a serious dickhole.
Wow. This may be the best chapter of this story yet.
Cursed Station anyone?
Alright, this needs to be said, by the way.
When I first saw this listed, I thought to myself, "Oh my god, it's going to be a straight ponification of my favorite literature. Kill me.'' (No offense.)
But now?
My god, sir, you are fantastic. I bow at you and Dimitri Gluhkovsky's feet. You have written a wonderful rendition of the world of the Metro.
You, sir, have earned my watch.
Oh. For anyone who's interested.
The Haunted Tunnels. Led to the Anomaly.
The Anomaly. Led into Cursed Station, where Artyom must blow up two tunnels that lead into the station, where Nosalises are attacking.
Just to help with imagery.
I don't know how I feel about finding this story here after so long. It's so good. But chapter 8 put me into a month-long depression.
God that sounds so sad now.
Fuck it. This is on my favorites if for nothing else than nostalgia. I'll get around to catching up some year. I swear.
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