After Pinkie Pie is found at a gruesome crime scene in downtown New York, police apprehend the suspect and ask one of their top agents and psychological profiler, Twilight Sparkle, to carry out the interrogation of the cold-hearted mare that calls herself Diane. As their little chat draws on, will Twilight be able to keep it together in front of this killer, and will she be able to bring back her pink fluffy friend from the depths of her own broken mind?
Short story that will reach 3 or 4 chapters. This story does not contain actual gore but will contain mild description. If you are sensitive to blood and guts and the idea of a serial killer Pinkie, you are warned. I think the idea of a serial killer Pinkie is quite strange actually, but it makes for a good psychological thriller. Psychology is fun :3
Also, artwork is NOT mine. It belongs to Originalham on DeviantArt. I did not ask permission to use this artwork, which I just found on google, I used it because it was fitting. Upon request from Originalham, I will take it down, move my lazy ass and commission an artwork myself.
Enjoy!
"Keep it together Twilight. Keep. It. Together!"
Please continue this. I love seeing Pinkie like this. Plus its like you put Law and Order into My Little Pony. Totally watch this pile of awesome.
It seems like you based the style of writing off of Hannible or Silence of the Lambs. Very good though i must say. Correct some of the grammar in some areas though. Other then that. Looking forward to chapter 2!
I do like this story, and I look forward to reading the rest. However, every story has flaws. I think you should go though your story paying attention to every little thing, making sure it is flawless. Also, I sometimes found it hard to understand who was speaking at the moment.
I so can't wait to read the next chapter. Loving this ^^
This is really good- I'm looking forward to mare. I like Twilight's attitude to working with her brother, as well. One formatting wobble-
"When two characters are taking, it's technically correct to put quotes around each character's words," said Twilight. "You should also end their sentences in a comma if you're about to write 'exclaimed Pinkie' or 'mumbled Fluttershy' or something like that."
"That's totally fascinating." Rainbow's sarcasm was thicker than the grammar books at hand.
"It is fascinating!"
"Yeah, like I said."
That's a correct style thing though- your dialogue itself is really good.
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I see. Thanks for the heads up
Formatting dialog can be a bitch, nobody seems to have the same idea of how it's done. Plus I learned in school that formatting was taught differently in French and in Anglo-Saxon litterature, notably when it comes to punctuation, and seeing as how I'm French, I must have been used to writing a certain way but I really don't know which is which 
Yours makes sense though, I'll keep it in mind.
1079198 Ah, that might be it. I'm native English and I still have trouble with the damn thing, so I shouldn't worry too much! I'm really looking forward to the next part. Keep it up!
New chapter. Expect
and 
Mother of Celestia. Pinkamena did nothing to the coffee. Wait, *rereads* her eyes stated unfocused....
OMFG! This is getting so damn great! Post moar!
I enjoy reading this. This reminds me of the first episode of Sherlock, where the cabby says "I'm not going to kill you, I'm going to talk to you, then you're going to kill yourself." I may be the only one who finds this story funny, I'm fucked up.
One of the most amazing stories I read.... :)
Take that Diane Twilights counter attack and its SUPER EFFECTIVE!
Fucking brilliant. This was amazing. A true psychological thriller.
1097366 Why thank you
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Now that was just freaking awesome!!
Amazing. This was simply amazing. At first I was, like:
"No! Twilight CAN'T give up! She just CAN'T!" Then, I was, like: 
"Huh? Shining armor saved her from herself?" And, finally, I was, like: 
"YAY! SHE DID IT!!! SHE SAVED PINKIE!!!!"
I absolutely totally love police themes or whatever they're called! ^^ I loved this story, it was exciting and thrilling. Beautiful work
Thank you all for your kind comments. Applejack is a mite happy you stopped by
Why do I get the odd feeling that, despite appearances, despite all the evidence, Pinkie is somehow innocent?
Must read further!
This was like
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In short:
Twilight used Operation No Tape! It's SUPER EFFECTIVE!!!!!
I don't normally give out a like until I'm completely finished with a story but, I believe I'll make an exception for this one
Grammar and Construction:
The premise, albeit known and expressed throughout the fandom, is still interesting. The way you presented it is also unique in many ways, I don't think I've ever seen a story where Twilight is the interrogating officer. There were a few grammatical errors, like the one pasted below, that appeared but nothing serious. The plot was executed clearly and concisely with fresh dialogue that wasn't generic and monotone. The description of setting and characters was also fleshy and vibrant. 9.5/10
"I dunno, said Diane. I really don't care. And neither will a judge, by the way. Having hunches is nice and all, but without evidence, you don't have shit. But... let's say I killed those two... I believe they were whores?"
^^^incorrect quotation marks
Enjoyability:
Now the most important part, enjoyability. The reason I made the exception to go ahead and give this a like is because the story is extremely compelling. I found myself racing through the text to find out what was going to happen next. My only issue here was how little actually occurred within the chapter. It says that the interrogation took 2 hours, but it felt more like 10 minutes. 7.5/10
Other than that last part it was great. Love the work
look forward to finishing it.
Overall 8/10
P.S. I'll leave in depth reviews on each chapter
and a total score at the end. Not that my input is gold or anything, I just like to analyze and pick apart stories after I read them 
This chapter shared some of the goods and bads of the last one, but was still unique. Well worded and again, well executed, the plot was alluring and pushes one forward as they read.
Grammar and Structure
There were a few more issues with quotation marks but a lot less than the last one. It was very well structured and I found its general plot to be fairly impenetrable. There was the issue of realism at a few parts, where Twi seemed to over react, or how Diane isn't cuffed whilst in the room, but they didn't destroy the overall plot sequence and it was still effectively compelling. The sequence of events seemed better placed this time with time keeping being more realistic. 7/10
Enjoyability
This chapter was an absolute edge-of-the-chair sequencer. It's progression was rapid fire and one has to read quickly to keep up. Diane's sick mind explodes into a fiery ball that consumes Twilight, overwhelming her to the point of a breakdown. This chapter is as compelling, if not more compelling, than most action/adventure based fics. This easily scored a 9.5/10 in this area.
8.5/10 Overall.
Wow. Gorgeous. This is by far the best chapter.
Grammar and Structure
This chapter had significantly less grammar issues than either of the other two and it's structure was more clear than the other two as well. It combined the realism of the first chapter and the time keeping of the second chapter to have a highly realistic plot that was driven strongly. At first, I couldn't understand why Diane gave herself up like that...then I realized, she was of the personality type that required recognition, without it, she would shutdown. Brilliant. The way that Twilight gave her no recognition was incredible, and also entirely believable. I very very rarely do this but, 10/10 on grammar and structure.
Enjoyability
This chapter really packed a punch. It was fast paced and complex, giving it a very highly sophisticated feel somewhat akin to the popular show "Bones". I found it to be an incredible ending to an incredible story, and it was very well wrapped up. It didn't just set Pinkie free and let them all live happily ever after, it actually took the time to explain exactly how everything went down. Masterful. I seriously never do this for this section but, another 10/10
Overall 10/10
Great Job!
Here is my overall synopsis of the Story:
Grammar and Structure
There were a few mistakes here and there but nothing that was outlandish or plain. It had good flow and didn't slow the plot at any point. Although it had some timekeeping issues at first, the issue was resolved by the second chapter and remained steady for the rest of the story. The plot was unique, which surprised me for a Pinkamena story. This is really a very well structured piece with exemplary grammar. 9/10
Enjoyability
This was a fast paced piece that really kept the reader on their toes. It was impossible to know what was going to happen next, and it took many twists and turns that were unexpected. Not only was it enjoyable to read, it retained an actual value of reading, allowing it to easily hit my recommendations list. 9/10
Overall 9/10
You should submit this to my Literary Value Group. Although it is a bit of a stretch to get it in (due simply to the lack of a central moral or premise) I think it could fit because of how well written it is.
BTW this is going on my favorites board on my page. Definitely worth a read to anyone here
Whoooa there dude, 'tis Equestria!
I really wish there was a sequel to this where sombra and pinkamena make a deal and she retakes control that would be pretty cool
Heh. Glad I'm not this twisted bitch.