This is good man, it's well written and the characterisation is good.

Oh, and first

is that a set-up for a sequel I see? or is this a prequel to something pre-existing?

Oh shit. Fluttershy has gone crazy.

This story was....awesome I loved the completely clean slasher story take. But I did have one problem with it though. The ending was really cheesy, just laughing off whatever happened to pinkie, it seemed too quick. But other than that it was a good story. YOU DESERVE MOUSTACHE

I like it. Sure, Twilight goes into the deep end pretty fast, and she goes way overboard with her friends quickly, but I still like it. They sure didn't care about what happen to Pinkie did they? I guess that's what happens when you're just so random all the time. No one takes you seriously. Unless that was actually a joke.

Liked, faved, watched, commented. Check, check, check, check.

Very nice. Some spelling errors but all-in-all, very nice. Have a scootaloo

>>10695581069558

Yeah, the ending was pretty bad. To be honest, I couldn't think of any other way to end it, besides some other idea that was stupidly grimdark out of nowhere and would've been even worse.

>>10694081069408

I dunno. I left it open in case I felt like coming back to it. I guess we'll see.

>>10696461069646

I'm quite surprised that you're the only one to mention how rushed it was. I'm glad you enjoyed it though!

>>10705811070581

Why, thank you! I've been meaning to get one of those.

>>10696751069675

Holy crap, thanks!

oh my god that was awesome twilight is best crazy psycho would be murderer

>>10722551072255

I believe the rushed pace works for this story, it keeps the feeling of dread and spookiness.

Man, you could have left Pinkie without damage, that was just mean. Look, she was merely slightly dizzy after those hits, how is it possible that it gave her brain damage?

What I don't understand is, who is speaking in the last paragraph?, it couldn't be any of the mane6 or Spike or Celestia, they are all acounted for, according to your description...

Luna, Owlicious, Scoots?

They are gonna pay, big time

>>11200121120012

Yeah, the Pinkie brain damage bit was kinda out of nowhere.

I could blame it on the fact that it was like 2am when I wrote that part and just wanted to finish it, but it's probably just my poor attempt at 'dark' humour.

As for the last paragraph, that was Fluttershy (although psycho-scoots would be awesome, somebody should get on that). I didn't say that she was with all the others visiting Twilight, at least I don't remember saying that, and the 'leaving me out of the victory celebration' bit was supposed to be the tip off. Although, I probably could've put it across better now that you mention it.

>>11862101186210

Oh, Ok. The line that confused me was:

Said unicorn smiled warmly at Celestia and her friends, all of whom stood on the other side of the glass wall of Twilight’s cell.

That seems to imply the mane6 are all there, after all they are her friends, even Flutters

On the other hand, the "Little old me" part does point to Flutters being the future Psycho...

Definitely, StalkerLoo needs to happen along with PsychoScoot

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>>11869491186949

Oh! How did I manage to overlook that line?

Although, I guess it could kinda work as a mean-spirited (and not very funny) joke, the implication being that Fluttershy isn't really her friend...

Y'know what? It was deliberate. That was my plan all along. Wasn't a mistake. Nope.

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...for some reason i really want to know what happens at the end of the book twilight was reading...