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Areo-fax 103

Joined August 2012
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    Areo-fax's Stories (1)

    • Sin of our Fathers
      A new colt moves into ponyville to start a new life and escape a tyrant king.

      2,102 words · 151 views · 1 likes · 1 dislikes

    My first days arriving in Ponyville weren’t exactly the most welcoming days. It’s seemed everyone was staring at me with a great deal of fear in their eyes. I came to Ponyville because I heard it was a peaceful place where nothing bad ever seemed to happen.  But why would an x-rebel leader want to be in a place like this. I hoped that Ponyville would be the place that I could start over and finally escape the sins that haunt my memories. Maybe I can final put my past behind me or maybe it will once again return to destroy me.  My name is Aero-Fax and this is my story.

    First Published
    12th Aug 2012
    Last Modified
    12th Aug 2012

    Comments ( 5 )

    #1 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Nice and wow its an honor to be your first reader.Hope you make this into a series.

    #2 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Nice and wow its an honor to be your first reader.Hope you make this into a series.

    #3 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Nice and wow its an honor to be your first reader.Hope you make this into a series.

    #4 · 40w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I quickly explained to her that I was a hybrid of a Pegasus and a unicorn...

    Well, at least he's not the son of Rainbow Dash and the secret Element of Bullshit. This story seems to be pretty standard and cliche Mary Sue fare so far.

    :applejackunsure:

    #5 · 39w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1071983 Thank you for your feed back don't really understand the first part of comment, but anyway thx again. I changed a lot in chapter 2 based on feed back:pinkiehappy:

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