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canonkiller


<- this horse is gay and there's nothing you can do about it

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I have been told that, at one point, there was color in this world. That the borders of our populace were not marked with deep trenches and walls of fog. That all races lived together, in harmony.

This is the fault of Him. He was the one who changed our lands.

But... He vanished. A thousand years into this limbo, when the sun and the moon vanished from the sky. That was when the last of the rebels vanished as well, eight ponies who had stood against him.

I will challenge the Eight to their honor, find Him and face Him. He will fall, and the world will become pristine again.

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** This story was written when I was 15, and the quality and content reflect that. Please be aware that my position on topics contained within may have changed in the time between publishing and now, and I apologize for any offensive material that I may have condoned in my younger years. **

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Comments ( 14 )

His punishment must be more severe

This sounds most intriguing I shall begin following this. Now I wonder who were the eight, I have a few guesses but eh. Either way best wishes!

This has my interest. Tracking!

Ooooh.... I'm liking this.
But did the spirit tell the truth, or only say what she was commanded?

This... is interesting.

I am eager to see where it goes.

I am intrigued by the premise here. only complaint is you need to go back and check your editing.
8/10 followed

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Any large errors? I may as well deal with them now.

I for one an very confused.

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If you could point out some places where you're confused, I might be able to help explain (and correct the story in turn)

Why does he keep talking about howls? Is that a year or something?

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Five more Howls - what I have been told signify the change from awake-time to sleep-time - and then all the foals will be brought to the Caves.

A Howl is a day.

Oh, ok that makes more sense. Thank you

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