I think it was considerably good. I LOVE Cupcakes, and I loved that creepypasta about Rarity using her friends skin to mae dresses. This story kind of reminded me of Freddy vs. Jason in an odd way. They were both evil, psychotic killers, and I those kinds of stories. The only thing that would have made this story better (in my opinion) was if they teamed up. Anyways, great job!

The line "Cutie Mark Cadavers" made me laugh awkwardly. Simultaneously, a horrible image in my mind and a great play on words. Thank you for a lovely ride. I enjoyed it immensely.

I was unsure whether to read this or not, now I'm glad I did it, I like it!

The story is definitely interesting,The strong point of this is the buildup to the climax, it leaves you hanging tight, not knowing what to expect. You handle the gore in a way that makes it bearable, I don't normally enjoy it... better said I never enjoy it, but this story had so much action going on in the climax I didn't really notice so much gore.

Though it'll probably be hated because this story and Cupcakes related to Pinkie Pie perfectly, it opened the possibility that her nervous breakdown was really just the surface of her madness showing. Deep inside sweet innocent little ponies lies a world of murder...

I know Pinkie and Rarity aren't killers, but stories like this make people think twice before taking something for granted.

But the pattern is starting to form with these types of stories, what's next. Apples? A story in which Applejack  foalnaps ponies and mixes them with apples in order to make the best apple jam in all of Equestria?

It would be interesting.

Wow.... that was something. I couldn't help but hope Pinkie would win, but I still liked the ending. I like how you think

>>10651841065184 this gives me a idea :D

>>10649321064932

Rarity's New Dress, provided thats the one you mean, made me sick. I honestly thought someone made it as a joke, but it was s out of order and grammatically incorrect... my sense to those things have heightened since i started writing myself, so it could be just me... but i found that while seeing if this idea had already been done... but thank you!

oh! and everypony else! thank you for the compliments on the story! it means so much!

>>10679751067975

I agree that it was incorrect in those ways, and wasn't as good as cupcakes. But in a way, Rarity's New Dress was the grammatically retarded sister of Cupcakes, and served as an idea -giver to people who wanted to make a story similar to Cupcakes.

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i see your point, and the ending made me LOL hard! "oh spike, take me right on top of FLuttershy" i was dying laughing

Ohioan yea, at that point I was turning red and giggling like a little school filly. It was my first clopfic, ya know, even if I didn't clop to it.

I think I just found Rarity's story for my own creepypasta story about ponies reading about themselves doing horrible things... And the best part, She's in character the whole time!

That's slightly out-of-character for me... I was terrified the whole time... (And that weird scratching sound made the matter no better ) But, I read Rainbow Factory and Cupcakes while laughing... So this will just feed my terrifying hunger for horror fics... About MLP if you thought I'm into creepypasta about... non-pony... *Shudder*

I think that just about sums up my thoughts about this story! It was well written, truly gruesome, kept in character the whole time, and left my hunger for pony-horror at it's peak!

P.s. I said fan-fictions, but don't force me to watch anything .mov. And that is an order. Got it?! And you don't want to KNOW why I put that Pinkie Crazy icon...

>>10704721070472

wait, what?

Holy shit. That was fucking awesome. I liked the fact that Rarity won too. That was an epic battle. vs.

>>10705681070568  I don't even know.

All I know is that I'm writing a creepy story about the mane six, except Twilight, reading a scary fan fiction about themselves.

Then going insane and living up to that fiction. And Dresses will be what Rarity reads!

Not sure if that good or bad thing.

Hehe...

Oh, and I thought by mistake that at the end Rarity had killed herself...

>>10714231071423

you must link me when its done!!

Ignore the haters, man. You did great. God damn, am I jealous. I have 40 follows...but you deserve every one of my followers^^

>>10719111071911  Okie dokie lokie...

let's see, that's Pinkie and Rarity down as psycho killers.. now we just need the rest of the 6.

I'm not sure if I'll lose my sleep tonight

I...I'm not sure what to think of this. Well, let me start with this; when I read other grimdark stories. Cupcakes? Surprised by the idea itself, but otherwise not too interested. Rainbow Factory? Skipped a huge part of it but a bit cool, I admit. But this? I'm speechless. I don't even know if it's the good or bad kind. And I don't even know why, but you know? I liked it!

Okay, it's not bad, I definetely give you that. It's a shame this got a lot of dislikes, but it's worse since hardly anyone has criticized it. It doesn't help to just dislike it, people; you have to give a REASON! It's a sequel by another author--big whoop! Just sayin'. But anyway, it does have really awesome stuff. I think the gore is fairly decent, but not enough to creep me out (and to think, spiders scare the hell out of me), but I imagine some of my other friends having to sleep with their lights on.

I liked the confrontation. Pinkamena vs. Rarity. Though really, REALLY messed up, seeing two "friends" try to kill one another, I think it was my favorite part a little; though I admit, I skipped a smidge because it seemed to go on for a bit, but otherwise, just fine. The fighting made me guessing, wondering who would win in the end and how it would end. And how it did...brutal, man. Just brutal. Also when Rarity realized something was wrong with Pinkamena back at the beginning was realistic (but totally hypocritical; but they both are, aren't they? Saying it's wrong to kill? They truly ARE insane), though thankfully, she didn't just jump to conclusion. Though we all know it, she doesn't; simple.

Although, the idea two ponies of the Mane Six are psychopathic killers is a bit ridiculous. If you just had Rarity be it, I'd be fine. I mean, I totally get what you were getting at--two psychos fighting to the gorey death. Really, that's cool. But in my mind, it's less likely to happen than Cupcakes being real. But then again, it's called FANFICTION for a reason, so maybe I'll let that slide.

Otherwise, I have nothing to say about this. I think it deserves more credit than it's given, but I don't see it becoming a huge success when it comes to Grimdark, simply because it's a sequel. Like I said, it's not bad at all. It's just a successor to Cupcakes and won't get recognition because of it. Shame, really.

However, if you want to catch my interest more, maybe write about Rarity doing her killing sprees. Almost like "Rarity's New Dress" (never read it, just got the concept of it...eww.), but not entirely. But that's only up to you; I'm just a reviewer giving my opinion.

(Good gosh, this is my longest review on here as of yet! Haha!)

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w-whoa, thank you for that... and i never thought about drawing back to Rarity's side... i might try that once i get some more of my Fight or flee? fic out... and tbh, i dont care if its popular or not, im just glad to be able to try my hand at writing and get responses back... so thank you so much!! ^^

>>11558151155815 "im just glad to be able to try my hand at writing and get responses back" And that's why writers love to write fanfiction. I know the feeling. And you're welcome. :)

I once saw this story on the 'New Story' page and it got my attention, but never really got around reading it, but now I did, I want to do two things. Punch you and hug you. The punching part, do not take it to serious, for making me a killer. The hugging part, because you did it so bloody well!

I mean, the ideas are just wonderful and well executed. When you made the referense to 'The Art of the Dress', I just started to clap, that was a amazing part to read! In general, I just love the story! I have no other words for it! *clicks favorite button* I do not read much stories here, and then to make me favorite a story as well, you have done a very good job.

*starts clapping her front hooves together* I salute to you my dear, you did an amazing job on this story. *stands up from her laptop and keeps clapping* You deserve a standing ovation.

Worse then cupcakes? *grins* I am afraid not. Though it has it's good amount of gore, it is not nearly as gory as cupcakes, which is maybe for the better, since the original made me lose my lunch... *shakes her head* Anyway, if I have to rate this story, a solid 9 out of 10.

If you want to read something, even worse then the original cupcakes, I suggest to read my CupCakes 2. Keep in mind, it was one of my very, very first fictions. And if you are going to read it, prepare for some walls of text.

And I would like to end this, with a question, are you going to make a sequel? -Rarity

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i had meant to amend the warning and did on the version currently on my flashdrive, i guess a slightly earlier edition went through instead because the "worse than cupcakes" was what i was originally going for, but it came out different than i expected... and as for a sequel? As of right now, I've been thinking about doing a prequel-like story for it as an above commenter tossed up, and maybe i could do an actual sequel... maybe make a full circle (except for Dash obviously) but it wouldnt keep being "oh previous killer dies, new killer!" id toss in some spins, cliffhangers, etc. I just never expected this to get that "liked" per se, seing as it was a sequel, not an original. but maybe after i get deper into Fight or Flee? i can push back some other projects I had ideas for and maybe take Dresses somewhere new... thank you for enjoying this story and for the long review/comment, it means so much that people actually take time to criticize/compliment this.

>>12211361221136 That does explain quite the lot yes, about the warning. I understand the prequel part and I can see some nice ideas. And the parts you mentioned for a sequel are good. Stepping out of that monotone and from reading your ideas, kinda made me already exited to read it, IF it ever comes that is.

Only time will tell my dear, only time will tell. But I just loved this story on it's own.

And I must thank you as well, for creating this wonderful story and taking the time to read my comment. I must say, writing my comment, I did with pleasure. -Rarity

>>12242451224245 Prequel coming out soemetime next week hopefully. once i put it from a notebook to the computer and edit it >>10709781070978 >>11559111155911 >>10714231071423

>>15995391599539 Awesome. I've decided to watch you so that I could know when it's out. Good luck on your story.

>>15995391599539 Now I can not wait to read it! But take it easy though. I shall await patiently for it to appear on the site.

>>15995581599558 >>15999101599910 >>10649321064932 >>10648571064857 >>10651621065162 >>10651841065184 >>10654041065404 >>10666421066642 >>10709781070978 >>10732781073278 >>10848591084859

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/68084/The-Cutie-Mark-Cadavers

it's awaiting approval, odds are it will get it seeing as everything is tagged properly and its rated Adult, but here's the prequel, not as long as dresses, has some more dialogue, but whatever i do next will make up for what The Cutie Mark Cadavers is lacking... Scoot's honor javascript:smilie('');

>>17482601748260 And I just found something to do this afternoon.

>>17491871749187 had to resubmit... "tragedy and sad are conflicting topics" wat .-.

>>17499371749937 I had it with a re-write of mine as well. It is odd.

>>17499371749937 Its a good story but pinkie from cupcackes would not have been scared and would not have been defeated. just too damn prepared.

>>17512161751216 its all a matter of opinion you realize... things as such tempted me to not add the epilogue

O_O *runs away from pinkie and Rarity* curse you i used to love them! heh just kidding good story though even if i hate cupcakes because pinkie wouldnt do that to her friends unless she was possessed by a demon then yeah she would.

someones question has been answered:

Twilight:But how can somebody Crazier THAN PINKIE PIE!!!???

(from Fan Made Episode Double Rainboom)