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Mikoyose


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Blood type ABZ a very rare blood type that can cure nearly any disease, is owned by seven people in the world. James Phoenix and his brother Isaac Phoenix are two with a slightly advanced version. James Phoenix one day finds his brother having the blood drained from his body by a machine, ends his suffering by infusing Isaac's blood with his own, in the process becoming practically immortal. He lived for nearly 4000 years to find a way to end his own suffering. Only to end up a Pegasus in Equestria, his immortality intact. Will he continue to search for an end or live in this peaceful world filled with colorful equines.?

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 63 )

Oh this is gonna be awful isn't it?

1082223
Maybe, I don't really care

I want moar it just like prototype crossovers................somehow:twilightsmile:

I'll do my best, I truthfully don't give a :twilightoops: whether anyone likes it or not I'm gonna keep doing this :twilightsmile:

1082502 That usually isn't a good sign. When an author couldn't give two :rainbowwild:s about his own story or its reception by the public.

Either way, good luck.

1082586

Thank you very much, also criticism is recommended, highly recommended thank you :twilightsheepish:

1082502 Well I like it, But can you try to separate talking lines? It is hard for me to figure out who is talking.

1082675
Thank you sir. and will do

1082711 No prob. And It might get better for likes and more people will like it. Soon it might be in the Feature Box. So I say this will be great for everyone.

fight fight fight fight fight! :pinkiecrazy:

Everything is great but I think it moves a little bit to fast. Other than:twilightsmile: that, it's great!

1127878
Well sorry, I'll do my best

We have flaws, like I got bad grammer (Not saying minor I mean worse than cancer if given time) But all you have to do is seperate diolouge. It gets confusing otherwise. But It seems great so far.

1166069
:ajsleepy: I'll try but seperating dialogue isn't my strong suit. Still glad you like it.:pinkiesmile:

Good story :pinkiehappy:

EVERYONES AN ASSHOLE!!! Who the hell looks into other people's memories with no consideration of their feelings?? I'd be fucking pissed and freaking beat someone's ass!!

Just the same as I said before but it is still fantastic. I like the story but really, Twilight would object a bit or think it over instead of doing the showing of memories. Anyways beside that alright.

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:ajsleepy: I thought this was better... Oh well just goes to show don't try to write while extremely tired. I'll fix a few things, but separating the dialogue might be harder to do sorry

1270833 It is easier to not get confused. Just be glad with that. Seperating dialougues is hard, but you will get in time. It is still a great story.

1271698
How about I send you the next chapter and you clean up the dialogue?

1276063 I won't be much of help. I have rpoblems with it as well. Have a book and try to copy it like that. That is how I worked on my diolougue, and as I said, I won't be of big use for it.

1276816
*sigh* Oh well. :ajsleepy: I'll still do my best to make the next chapters better. :rainbowdetermined2:

I still like this story and I will not say what I said in the past, this is how you write, but Great chapter and Can't wait.

1405334
Oh well :yay: I still wish I had some help to write this

I like this chapter, hope it doesen't end here :__:

don't end the story
or you'll make fluttershy cry :fluttercry:

1810357
Well it could be better, Feedback helps

Criticism recommended

Flips of critics...

hoofs... don't think how just do. it' always works:pinkiehappy:

Damn it James. Stop being such a dick...

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Think about it in his point of view, his family and everyone he's ever cared about was killed because they wanted to draw him out, and what better way than to endanger a loved one?

>>Mikoyose
I know but it just annoys me how much of a dick he is. I'm just waiting for someone to slap him.

At first I was like, "OOH, I AM LEGEND CROSSOVER!"
But then I was like, "Aw...:pinkiesad2:"

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:ajsleepy: sorry for disappointing you then.

2006059 A large Improvement. Nice work. I always read this but had hardly a lot of time to comment, so sorry about that, But you are fantastic on the story.

2006059 It's alright! I may not care much to favorite it, but it's good enough for a like!:pinkiehappy:

GET TO COVER.
HE'S GUNNA BLOW!
:pinkiegasp:

um... I think he is going to make a pie out of pinkie, beccuse he is so angry

You know i would say this guy is an asshole but I can honestly say I can see why he acts this way.

He has lived for so long and the only people that find him either want to disect him or if they want to help end up dieing. I mean I would act likethis to.

You need to start a new paragraph every time somebody new is speaking.

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I thought I was... :facehoof: I'll get on it

hmmm
i like this
i really do
but i would recommend that you re-read your work and fix any mistakes you have made
or have a friend help edit this
but you have made more so ill see how the rest of your work looks
brony on mate:coolphoto:

You have really gotten better at writing from what I can see. And this story is getting greater and better to read. So keep doing the great work you have been doing.

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