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Twilight was expecting to have a nice, relaxing morning bath. What she did not expect, was for Rainbow Dash to interrupt her by crashing through the window. Twilight, instead of yelling at Rainbow, invites her to take a bath together.
> not TwiDash
That aside, this was a nice one shot. Good job.
Not a shipfic huh?
Well alright then... friendshipping is an acceptable alternative. Great story!
I liked it... But I have to say that I would have liked it a lot more if it weren't for the grammar errors or the way some of your sentences seemed to repeat themselves or drag on. I suggest joining that pre reader group.
That being said, I loved the idea. Very cute story, it's something I can see the actual show doing.
Never knew Trollestia wrote fiction! Cover image totally threw me off. That, and you can't see tags from the Featured Box. Saw the image, read the description, clicked the Featured Box, and never looked back... except to do a WTF when the wing massage never went beyond a wing massage. When on FimFiction does THAT ever happen?
“Soarin’! It’s Soarin’, all right?”
Woot! My favorite! (Even if nothing comes of it in this story...sequel maybe?
)Very nice story though. Saw a number of typos scattered about but nothing major. Mostly things like "in" when it should be "on".
Concept? 4/5
Execution? Left a lot to be desired.
Your dialogue for both Twilight and RD felt... Stilted? Forced? Wrong?
I don't know, but your diction really bugged me, I was struggling to read this. I mean, they were simultaneously perfectly in and out of character. Everything they DID was perfectly in character, but the WAY they did it left a funny taste in my mouth...
It's sort of like watching a TV show that's been translated from another language.
>>1230320 Hey. You should totally troll all the peoplew who love this by doing a clop version. Just my opinion. I think it would be hilarious, and that's what I'd do. I would write the cutest story ever written, and then I would mind-buck all the bronies by rewriting it as clop. But then again, not everypony is a troll.
You have my thumbs-up, my favorite, and my
. Please write more!
Well that was interesting, I usually don't read things with a suggestive title, but this one caught my eye for some reason, and it was actually a really good story.
I must say the characterization of Rainbow was really good, nearly spot on with the show itself.
And Twilight, that was just lol-able.
Good story, thumbs up! and a moustache for you lol
An interesting fic, to be sure. Given the picture included with the story, it seemed to be setting up for some sort of TwiDash comic ship, with Twilight dropping all sorts of not-so-subtle innuendo while Dash remains oblivious. Instead, you gave what would otherwise be a "saucy" concept a heartwarming quality. That takes some skill. The bath scene could have easily been extremely distracting and bemusing; ridiculous as it still is, the context settled into its own rhythm.
Structurally, I think the dialogue could have flowed a little more smoothly. It's mostly about style, of course, but when a lot of action/description is included within the same paragraph as lines of dialogue, it can be like riding in a car which starts and stops frequently. In other words, it can be difficult to follow the content of the conversation. Sometimes, especially for poignant sections of dialogue, you may want to divorce description from speech in order to heighten dramatic impact. For example, when Dash reveals Soarin' as the object of her crush, setting her line ("Soarin'! It's Soarin', all right!") apart from everything else can accentuate the importance of the information relative to both Dash and the narrative.
Nevertheless, to each his or her own. I still liked the concept you presented, and the execution is still worthy of note. 
Short and sweet.
It's Nice To See These Sisterly Interactions Between The Main 6. =)
It Made Me Go 
D'awwwww At The End.
So Sweet! .
This When Twilight And Rainbow Dash Started Crying,
It All Most Made Me Cry With Them,
Just So Adorable.
And It Was Very Heartwarming!
It Was Definitely A Pleasant Read.
I Feel Warm And Fuzzy,
I'm A Wee Bit Teary Eyed.
So Now I Feel
So HAPPY And Warm And Fuzzy!
Warm. Check.
Fuzzy. Check.
A wee bit teary eyed. Check.
Simple amazing fic. I have such a polluted mind to read the descripition and look for the "sex" little tag on the end.
You have my congratulations, I not a real fan of light histories, but this one is really heartwarming, probally because I always wanted to have a little sister to protect and love...
Thank you for the sweet moment.
I loved this story ! I found it to be cute and sweet but not cheesy or corny like I expected it to be. I did notice a tiny little thing that I would change but take it as you will.
She let out a faint gasp, feeling as the warm water soothed the tension on her hoof. If a single hoof in the water felt so good already, she sure was up for a very relaxing bath.
Gasp doesn't really work here. It's pretty much just for surprise or shock. Sigh would work best here but I have a feeling you sue gasp here because you didn't want to overuse sigh. I would just suggest describing the sigh. For example "She let out a faint but drawn out sigh of relaxation,"
Keep up the great work!
I'm pretty sure this was everyone else's reaction, but yeah: I am bloody astonished to not see any romance tags, nor a rating any lower than "teen". What I also didn't expect was a rich, story, one that fits the show to a tee.
In short, this story is incredible. Great job!
You managed to write two of the most commonly shipped equines in history taking a bath together without having any shipping at all?
You're awesome.
So I read the summery and I clicked on this fic just to see if it was a ship-fic or not. Glad it wasn't. I love intimate moments between friends. There's so much shipping going on out there that when I come across stories like these I can't help but appreciate them more than the average story I read. I must say through that there were moments in here that you could have easily turned this into a ship-fic even after Rainbow told Twilight, but you didn't and for that I am glad. Oh and there were also parts in here that were just so cheesy that I actually had to hold my mouth shut to keep myself from laughing. But with emotional moments like that between two girls, never know what goes through a females mind, it was understandable.
This was a great story and a wonderful read. Congrats on hitting the feature box and hopefully you'll mae another story that'll do the same. Till next time!
Quavera_Tava
This. Was. Amazing. You made my day (Well, night) my mom came in on the cover page and saw the ic of TwixDash in the bathtub. It took a while to exlain it to her, then she got all weirded out. Oh yeah. i'm 16 and fat. and a guy. Mom didn't take it too well that i'm a brony. This fanfic makes me wanna cuddle and shit. oh god.
I can't believe so many people are complaining about it not being a shipfic.
1. On fimfiction, shipfics are a dime a dozen. Go read one if you don't like the friendshipping.
2. This was well written and sweet. WHY COMPLAIN?
3. For once Rainbow Dash isn't lesbian, and that is kinda new since so many people think she is.
I can't think of any reasons why it should be shipfic.
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