near the end you said mate not made, also at the beginning of the gym class part, you said cuddled the rest of the class, it should be "FOR the rest of the class but either way, I will never cease to enjoy this story
1068628 Yes, I can. Fluttershy is a pure girl, meaning she has little exposure to the cruelness of the world. Having all these experiences has caused her to lose her pureness, or innocence.
Cant wait for the next chapter itz gettin good. I cant imagine what will hapen at flutters house and if there will be any trouble in music class. And are any other characters gonna show up.
1069251 I plan to incorporate Twilight next, and bring Rainbow into it more, but im having trouble writing it. I'll think on it tonight. And the next chapter is gonna be pure romance, with a shit load of details.
Keep up the good work! I put it as a favorite. Can i please spasm at how much i am loving this so far? If so... *spasms*
JUST MAKE SURE FLUTTERSHY IS SAFE, if she gets hurt in this, i think i'll die from the words being on the screen. Also, you said you had no proofreaders, i'll gladly help, I've done it for a couple friends, and I'm loving this story, it'd be my pleasure. You can email me at Flutteryshy2@gmail.com if you accept
Finally finished this. Hope you enjoy.
PLEASE POINT OUT ANY GRAMMATICAL MISTAKES/ TYPOS/ ANYTHING.
near the end you said mate not made, also at the beginning of the gym class part, you said cuddled the rest of the class, it should be "FOR the rest of the class
but either way, I will never cease to enjoy this story
Thank god I thought the scene with fluttershy and the bullies would be horrible but it was not as bad as I thought.
Good story still
1068466 Going to fix right now.
Still dont understand why theres dislikes.. i'll fix whatever people ask.
Oh good i was expecting a lot worse
Yay, moar!
1068582>>1068598 Thanks guys.
Chapter 5 will come on monday, i have work to do and stuff.
Can you explained what you meant by Fluttershy losing her innocence?
1068628 Yes, I can. Fluttershy is a pure girl, meaning she has little exposure to the cruelness of the world. Having all these experiences has caused her to lose her pureness, or innocence.
MONDAY?!!? NOOOOOOO
1068643 Thank you
It's a good story and I'm not patient
1068653 I might release tommorow night, i've already begun writing it.
Cant wait for the next chapter itz gettin good. I cant imagine what will hapen at flutters house and if there will be any trouble in music class. And are any other characters gonna show up.
1069251 I plan to incorporate Twilight next, and bring Rainbow into it more, but im having trouble writing it. I'll think on it tonight. And the next chapter is gonna be pure romance, with a shit load of details.
Another brilliant chapter and I cannot wait for the next, good job!
1069395 Next one is gonna be mushy stuff. But with more detail then you could imagine...
Only one word can describe this......FORGET THAT! I CANT EVEN DESCRIBE THE PURE AWESOMENESS PUT INTO THIS STORY!
1069512 Oh, Thanks.
1069755
Oh, no need for thanks I'm just speaking the truth bro.
1069300 Cool cause Twilights my favorite. Haha she's gonna be in study hall alot.
Keep up the good work! I put it as a favorite. Can i please spasm at how much i am loving this so far? If so... *spasms*
JUST MAKE SURE FLUTTERSHY IS SAFE, if she gets hurt in this, i think i'll die from the words being on the screen.
Also, you said you had no proofreaders, i'll gladly help, I've done it for a couple friends, and I'm loving this story, it'd be my pleasure. You can email me at Flutteryshy2@gmail.com if you accept
....What did they tie him up with?
Also, yes, that really is what's on my mind after reading this.
1072017 Rope?
1069456 I see what you did there.
1073619 hurrhurrhurr.
1073750
No breaks! GET BACK TO WORK!
1074089 Next chapter is 99% sensual.
1074101
Great! Also I got my friend to read it and he loves it aswell. Him and I share one feeling about this story. We're both jelly of Dave.
1074922 I will soon be able to experience Dave's feelings with my tulpa....
1074947
lulwut?
1074975 Go to tulpa.info in the address bar.. it explains everything.
You did a pretty good job with this. The entire story feels manga, along with it's pace. Can't wait for more.
1076672 There should be a new chapter tonight.