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During Hearth's Warming Eve, Twilight is shocked to discover that all of her friends believe in Santa Hooves, and sets out to prove that he doesn't exist. (Contains two versions. The poetic version and the reworked original story I wrote first.)
Stories like this I don't usually review,
But in this case, it seemed like the thing to do.
This verse about one young unicorn's doubt,
And joy she felt when the truth she found out
is truly an epic tale, one of the best.
It made me laugh and brought warmth to my chest.
And I was truly surprised when the twist arrived
(Though some of the rhymes were a bit contrived.)
After this I will most certainly be reading more of your work.
I can't think of any more rhymes, so for now I'll just say: DERP!
Yeah, I know a lot of them are contrived. Being my first real effort at rhyming, I discovered a lot of words (particualrly Santa and Hooves) are pretty difficult to rhyme. Everyone out there who knows how to write poetry can justifiably rip this apart, and I absoutely accept that.
Still, I don't think I did that badly for a spur of the moment fic.
Rest assured, I absolutely did not mean that as a criticism. In fact, that's one of the things I found most amusing. And I realize how difficult rhyming can be. Hell, I had enough trouble with just ten lines, I could never write something as long as you did.
Oh wow that was a fun little tale. I would give so much to see this put to animation. And those reindeer names! That had me laughing. Seriously, I plan to take animation course just so I can animate half the fics I have read, even if it takes YEARS.
You really added a drop of distilled christmas spirit, didn't you? great story.
And then Princess Santlestia was 20% Cooler. That was a great 
, I didn't see it coming at all. The whole story was great, really. Twilight's skepticism (with an actual justification, for once!), her friends' attempts to change her mind, Carrot Top earning a temporary spot as Best Background Pony, the twist, obviously, Twilight helping to deliver the presents...all dawww-inducing holiday awesomeness.
A very enjoyable read. 5/5.
Hehe, I must admit I was caught off guard. Surely, I was waiting for Twilight being proved wrong, but I wasn't expecting that. It turns out really nice ! Job well done.
Just a typo right there :
[...]then surly they would believe someone older.
Merry Christmas !
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