Have some sad

This idea popped into my head a little while ago, and I just couldn't shake it. I took a much longer time than I should have to write it, just because I couldn't make myself think about all the emotions involved...

Well, maybe you'll have some feels anyway. I don't think I really did this justice.

So, now I'm going to write something silly for a bit.

Then it'll be back to a serious story after that. A proper one, for once.

For any of you who didn't pick up on this, Starfire is Twilight and Rainbow's daughter. She was conceived through magic in the epilogue of ImJustAnotherBrony's story, The Scootaloo Diaries, and there's a picture of her here.

However, note that this is not supposed to follow on from that story, since the timeline wouldn't make sense.

EDIT: Blog with some things you might be thinking of asking

I loved it. You did an excellent job with what it's meant to be. I've read a couple fics that are told through letters before, but you executed it much better.

And well, here's this.

[[[SPOILERS BELOW!!]]]

First off, I want to say that I really liked the fact that you told the story backwards. It kind of reminds of that one thing that we talked about that one time. You know, the thing with the memories and whatnot. Anyway, have some of the things that I thought about while reading this. I guessed that Twi was dead before finishing the first letter, although at the time I kind of thought that Rainbow was meant to be insane or something. After a couple letters down, and rereading the first letter after I finished the story, I've concluded that she was only finding it impossible to cope, but is moving on like normal. A letter or two down, I began to think that Twi was not dead, and that she had left Rainbow alone with Starfire to go do something else, and that Rainbow was clinging to their lost relationship by sending letters to no real destination, and an unknown reader (us) was meant to be reading then, and unsure who Rainbow Dash is. That was when I felt the most sad by far. Imagining that scenario broke my heart, and I imagined pretty far into it. I kind of want to write my own story based on that misconstrued scenario.

All in all, I really did enjoy this, and I'm glad you finally got around to finishing it. So thanks for the good read. This can be my top recommendation for now. Hooray for being different! (Referring to the backwards letters, which is something I haven't seen until now.)

Woo, finally hit the front page!

I-I-I... Yeah, sad... Pretty much... Good writing though! Right? right? ...

>>11872561187256

Right.

>>11872601187260 I actually want more from the diaries thing you made... I mean if that's okay with you

BECAUSE IT WAS GOOD!

i... what... FEELS HAVE BEEN HAD

Really good story, i found i t quite sad, and that last (first?) letter got me the most

INSTA FAVOURITE AND WATCH

that hurt me in the feels. i don't know how to properly word how i felt about this story, just know that it was very good.

because this combo of so many twidash where one of the two die, I'm in depression mode for a week now

Despite of that, great job, nicely done

>>11872561187256

>>11872771187277

Thanks! And

that last (first?) letter got me the most

was exactly what I was hoping for

have a freakin' like.

I love letters and diary sort of stories. This was well done.

lotsa likes already...

Off to more fics. SUPERHERO! DUN DUNANA!

So did Twilight pass away or what? Is she lost on their planet and can't find her way back or has she moved to a different city. I'm confused, but I started to tear up throughout the whole thing. Thanks for the amazing story.

>>11873021187302 Apologies to your feels, but I'm glad you enjoyed it

>>11873181187318 Sorry about that, thanks for reading though.

Have this cute Dash gif to help a little

Image: http://denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw7727-1345405172848601.gif

>>11873891187389

Thanks I enjoy the letter format too, if it's done well

>>11873921187392

Hopefully this sentence will clarify things a little:

The funeral was today.

Regardless, thanks for reading

Read.Cry.Watch,fav,like.

Just one question, did you base this off of the song Gunnin by Hedley? Because it talks about writing letters to yourself like Rainbow is and how she waits for Twilight to come back. I was listening to the song and I got the strong idea that this is based off it.

What do you mean by "The funeral was today"?

Damn it Twi......

Oh god....

Dem feels.

Y U DO THIS TO ME AT MIDNIGHT?

Faved, thumbs up-ped, and cried.

Wow. I don't know what to say. I'm thinking about it after I read it, and it's just making me more sad. This makes me want to continue writing my fic right now. I've been having a bit of a block, on the chapter I'm currently working on, but this inspired me. Thank you.

Now i get it.       I

I didn't feel sad. Just pity.

I didn't understand it, was I meant to read it from the bottom up? It was slightly sad, but my emotions are always along the lines of "sad - normal" from life. Oh well, the writing seemed pretty legit.

This better get more views

Wow That's beautiful man

  I felt sad, but I didn't understand what happened.

This was a wonderful read. I didn't feel sad but that's only cause I'm a cold person but still a good read. You got my fav.

I better see this featured or all hope in humanity that I have left will be gone.

>>11874341187434

Nope, never heard of it

Well, till now anyway. I listened to it when I saw your comment. Sounds nice, but no this isn't based on it. Sorry.

>>11874781187478

You're most welcome my friend

Best of luck with your story

SHUT UP AND TAKE MY FEELS!!

That last letter nailed it. Well done!

>>11875401187540 >>11876101187610

It's a series of letters, in reverse chronological order, mostly from Rainbow Dash to Twilight Sparkle.

It's read in the normal way, but just realise that each new letter was actually written before the one you just read. So the first you read was the last written and vice versa.

If you still don't get it, give it another read and I'll try to explain in a bit more detail. I'd just rather not spell it out, if you know what I mean

>>11876591187659

Thank you, and hopefully! Though I doubt it will, Past Sins is still up there

>>11877611187761

Thank you

That's what I was hoping for

I cried so freaking hard.

Pretty good. That was a good few minutes well wasted.

I like this, although I would like some context.

Should I've read another story to make sense of this?

It confused me that it was backwards at first, but it makes sense if you are just reading through the letters as if they were stashed somewhere like a drawer (putting the most recent on top or something).

It was good, I can't really say anything that ImJustAnotherBrony hasn't said already, the flow was good and the feels were there (not full force but they were there).

>>11877871187787

Sorry

All of my tears.

All of them.

>>11878051187805 *Sniffles* It's okay, it proves that you're good writer, since I rarely cry over fanfics.

>>11877961187796

No, it's not related to any other story. Most of the context is left up to you to pick out from the story, but if you can't get it, give it another read and I'll try to explain it a bit more thoroughly.

I'd just rather the reader figured it out than having to spell it out here in the comments, if you know what I mean. I'm happy to do so if necessary though

>>11877981187798

Thank you, glad you liked it

>>11878121187812

It's more the fact that my brain is buzzing with theories what happened to twilight (why was she alone? How did she know she wouldn't return?)

that I want to know what happened, The letters tell the amazing story of the aftermath.. but I feel like needing to know the story before this.. if that makes sense

That is a very interesting way to set-up the order, a good one, well done sir!

It kinda confused me at first, the whole writing backwards thing. I got it figured out, though. And now I has a sad. Brb.

>>11878431187843

That 'why' is alluded to in one of the letters, although I tried not to make it too plain.

If you'd like, I could PM you what I imagined happening. I'd prefer not to post it here, as some people might form different interpretations, and I'd like that not to be swayed by me.

>>11878521187852

Thank you my friend.

Gotten over the self-cest yet?

>>11878581187858

See you soon then...

>>11878731187873

ok I'm back. wow that was seriously an amazing story. very well done!

>>11878681187868 Painful laugh is painful (my blog explains), but yes I am. Boredom of that sort does not last nearly so long!

AWWWWWWWWWWWWW

I found the reverse chronology quite confusing. I didn't end up getting it. Maybe if you put dates next to each letter? I think that would help a ton. If that's ok with you...

AWWWWWWWWWWWWW

>>11878941187894

I wish you a swift recovery!

>>11879111187911

Well, there are separators, and this comment pretty much explains the order thing

It's a series of letters, in reverse chronological order, mostly from Rainbow Dash to Twilight Sparkle.

It's read in the normal way, but just realise that each new letter was actually written before the one you just read. So the first you read was the last written and vice versa.

Maybe try reading it backwards?

>>11879151187915 Thank you, and I shall be

>>11879201187920

Well yes, but I tend to read the story before I read the comments, in case of spoilers, y'know?

>>11879491187949

True, but then, a lot of people did get it first time

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Real nice! At first, I thought with the letters and the lack of replying from Twilight, it would be like that Eminem song "Stan". But I liked it.

I'll drop a like and keep an eye on you.

...of course...

I was listening to the Celtic Women sing Amazing Grace when I started reading it... basically tears were slipping down my cheeks the entire time... nothing like the Celtic Women, Bag Pipes and Amazing Grace to add to an already well written story eh?

"Twilight,

What are talking about? What happened? You know I love you too, of course I do! Nothing could ever change that!"

"What are talking about?"

Should that be "What are WE talking about?

Still, great little read.  I thinks thats enough TwiDash for one day!

I loved this story. I liked, that it was actually written backwards!

The ending of that story.....

I sat here for a good 10 minutes with the part:

"Hey Twi,

When are you coming home?

I miss you."

on my screen trying to process what I just read. This was really sad. The ending is what got me, I was already tearing up in the middle, but the end......

Now, from a critical point of view: I like how you did a reverse timeline thing with the letters.

I didn't spot any grammatical errors, so good job

This is defiantly deserving of its spot in the feature box.

Thumbed Up, Fav'd, Following.

A TRULY touching story. At 1st I feared that Twilight had passed away. This story made me want to cry my eyes out. :.(

She died ? SHE F-ING DIED ¿¡¿ Oh, oh, o-ok...I see what you're trying to do here : You...you are TRYING to make me THINK that Twilight SPARKLINGZ IS DEAD !! Ha...haha. Ok,ok,ok.A-All you have to do is admit that you were joking and I'll be on my way, okeyi ? See right there, on the tabole ? Yeah, that right, it's your FUCKING TEDDY BEAR ! You know what's gonna happen to mister Tickles if you don't cooperate ? Hum ? Well, I'm gonna tell you what's gonna happen : Mister TICKLEZ IS GONNA FELL VERY TICKELLY-ISH, ESSPECIALY IN HIS HEART IF YOU DON'T SAY IT !!

Your faithfull dude guy,

Random out-a-nowhere hostage taking terror-man thing

>>11879561187956

Granted.

>>11879641187964

...you aren't. You're meant to find out what's happened backwards.

>>11882511188251

...I must admit, that is very fucking funny.

One glass of tears coming up. Enjoy..............

Something that people are failing to realize is the fact that this is meant to be largely ambiguous, as to stimulate our involvement with the fic

That's what makes a great, interactive story. Finding the perfect balance of information and lack-there-of to create a harmony in entertainment and mystery.

Which is exactly what this fic achieved.

As for myself, I could easily visualize the details as delivered and the scenarios described... It's written out rather clearly.

You captured the letter-esque atmosphere as well with the crossed out text and intentional typo from time to time.

I did have a fair assumption that Twilight died in the first letter, then I eased into "Maybe she left them?" towards the second and third letter, but then swayed back into believing she died, THEN found out I was right.

Reviewing your layout for the fic, it's new. I was intrigued by it (probably more than I should have been... ), and I suspected that it would take away from the tragic feel of the story. Though, whenever I finished, I did what any curious person that stumbled across these would do...

I went back a reread the letters in order.

That's when the feels hit me. That's exactly how you wanted the feels to hit too, I would suspect. The emotion isn't fully realized until you have that, "What's going on? Oh, so X happened?... Oh, wait... So THIS is what actually happened?... Then that means... *rereads* Oh my God..." experience.

As for myself? I cried. I loved the idea you introduced. Such a simplistic hook, yet the imagination runs wild. This deserves it's own genre...

I'll appropriately dub it later.. Get these feels off me...

And I'll conclude that I'll be even more devastated if my review isn't 100% accurate.

EDIT: Congratulations on getting featured, dear

I loved this?  I want a word that describes liking something because it is so bittersweet.  I almost didn't get the backward order of the letters, but that did help sell your point in the end.  Those last few, that is where the dam broke.

It also helped that as soon as I realized what had happened, I pulled up a song.  The End of Laughter by Dark Symphony.

Great job man!

>>11880431188043

If anything, it would read, "What are you talking about?" Not "we". Consider this: Rainbow's emotions are in a full crescendo. Her anxiety and fears are continuing to rise exponentially after reading Twilight's final letter. What then would be more logical to assume? That the already brash pegasus would write a flawless letter under such stress? Or that she may leave a word or two out?

Really, now. It is that hard to comprehend?

Sorry if this is insulting in any way.

This story is written well; I won't lie to you about that. I also liked the letter format you used. But there was one thing that didn't work for me.

Maybe I'm just a heartless person or have read too many of these types of stories, but I knew she was dead after the first one. I've definitely seen a lot of stories on this site follow a similar path, except that the letters are in chronological order. Throughout the entire story, I was just waiting for the 'dramatic reveal' that told us what happened.

However it wasn't what I expected- and it seemed like something Twilight would do under pressure. I'll still like and favorite, but it just didn't make me feel anything too emotional.

-SoI

Very well done.   I've always been a fan of reverse-order fics when done well.

Although I admit that I can't think of any possible situation Twilight could be in that's urgent enough that she doesn't have enough time to get help and yet still has enough time to write and send a fairly lengthy letter. What on earth could have killed her?

You sir kicked me right in the feels and I didn't appreciate being kicked there through out the entire story. Good and bad story all at the same time. Still faved and thumbed it up.

This is the first fic i've ever shed a (manly) tear to.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png

Read it three times...

MUST STOP. TOO SAD.

Damn it.

While I had shed more tears from other works I found this one compelling and emotionally packed, the way to tell the story through letters backwards was and amazing way to tell your story and it just hurts worse as you go back in history and fill the gaps left from the latest letter to the first and it only huts more when you reach the first one because that is how it is supposed to end, with those heart wrenching words.

Great work

None of the emoticons properly convey my feelings about this story. I think the closest is

It was a good story with plenty of feels! However (and this is just opinion time), I feel like it would have flowed a lot better in reverse order. I knew what was happening, but wasn't sure why I was reading them from recent to earliest.

Sooooooo sad.

it almost made me cry I'm adding this to my favorites

>>11884591188459 I guess I was looking at it more as a spelling error more than an actual part of the story.  I'm more towards it being a spelling error, but you may be right.  You do have some good points

tears were shed OP.

This fic is a perfect example of why you should not read pony fics in a busy restaurant while eating dinner. People look at you funny when you're trying your very ,very hardest not to cry all over your boneless wings.

Exceptional writing. I love the fact that my brain was trying to figure out what happened while drowning in tears of sorrow.

And, yes, that last letter was like a dagger to the heart.

>>11889331188933

I reckon it's because Silver and I are like best friends that I happen to recognize it as his technique. If there's anything grammatically questionable, it was for a reason.

My..

Feels...

My heart broke when I read the ending. I just feel..... hollow now. I think I need to find something happy.

Liked and fave'd.

....I have a gif I want to post but 'tis too funny for this fic... beautiful. But what exactly happened? Twilight knew she would die... oh. She was hit by the fire spell and slowly died in the hospital... (insert good sad 'feels' gif here all I found were too funny)

The last letter almost killed me...

Great fucking job, this is so... I can not even find words man, cried at the end. Bah.

I´m gonna keep an eye on you from this moment onwards... Good writing mate

why?

Oh god the feels... This was awesome, like My Little Dashie status of feels. Good work

This drop-kicked me right in the feels, (especially that last line), but It wasn't enough to make me cry. It was a good story, though, so have a like.

This story has more emotion in fewer words than any other (fanfiction or otherwise) that I can remember.

SO not only is TwiDash my favorite ship...

[SPOILER BELOW!!!!!]

YOU HAD TO KILL MY FAVORITE PONY DIDN'T YOU?!

That got me right in the feels. Really good story.

Welp, I think I'm really inured to sadfics now because this did almost nothing for me. I also noticed a trend in FiM fanficiton that it's almost always Pinkie or Twilight that gets killed off and it's always Dash whose reaction is put front and centre.

Anyway, this was well-written, I liked the retrochronological order of the letters. I'm not a fan of TwiDash but you presented the pain of loss well enough that I could empathise with Rainbow a bit. So, well done.

No idea who Starfire is. RD and Twi's child? AI or adopted?