Cancelled
It was a dark and stormy night... Wait, no, that's not right... Hold on a second... Ah here we go.
It was just another normal(1) day in the Unseen Library, until L-space opened up and sucked the Librarian into a different universe populated by pastel ponies.
Meanwhile, in a pastel castle on a pastel mountain, three princesses happened to be in the wrong library at the wrong time and, well, I think you see where this is going.
(The author hereby warns the reader that to expect anything approaching a coherent story or plot structure is pure folly... or in his own words. "I'm doing it for the Lolz.")
(This is a comedy story using Discworld and its inhabitants(2) along with Equestria and its inhabitants(3).)
(1) For any given value of 'normal'
(2)Owned by Terry Pratchett
(3) Owned by Hasbro
(I am aware of the other, kinda similar, crossover.)
OH Celestia! What have I done?
Please leave your thoughts. I love comments! Good and Bad.
If you don't like it please tell me why.
Hope you enjoyed it!
[EDIT] All Footnotes have been moved to a G-doc for your viewing pleasure.[/EDIT]
I think the only word I can sum up my reaction to this story is...
Ook.
*Chuckles* Sounds like a good start to me. I can hardly wait to see what happens next.
Sorry, but I found the over-use of notations a bit annoying, I know Terry Pratchett does it in his books but all things in moderation. Many of your notations would be much better if you simply split a sentence with a comma like this:
"It is also unique(3) in that its Creator decided to use magic...
...(3) Relatively speaking"
would become,
"It is also unique, relatively speaking, in that its Creator decided to use magic"
This improves the flow of the story greatly as the reader doesn't have to look down to where the notation actual is and can instead just keep reading. I would reccomend that you reserve notations for when you want to make a remark that is so long that it would ruin the flow of the sentence that it is in, such as your first note.
If you find that you've used 15 notations in a single chapter then you've probably gone too far
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Thanks, I will keep that in mind for the next chapter.
...I would actually say that reducing the number of notations would be a detriment to the story; it's one of my favorite features of Terry Pratchett's works. Maybe you could try organizing them slightly differently? If you group them together more instead of putting them directly after the paragraph they refer to (maybe every time you change scenes), the flow of the story would be preserved. Changing their color is a good idea by the way; it makes them easy to distinguish from the rest of the text.
1052745 Agree with this guy now to read
Right now that I have read the story my advice keep the foot notes but move them to the bottom of the page
also the Librian is going to be happy noone ever refers to him as an organtang they make a mistake and use the m word
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I will play around with them some more.... What would you say to having them in a separate Gdoc that is linked at the beginning of the chapter?
Barrel-of-fun has a point, I will make sure that the notes are noteworthy.
1052903 that'll work just do the great man justice
Well, it could've been worse. Twilight could've said "monkey." Then she'd really be in trouble.
In any case, I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where you go with this. The Discworld is always entertaining, and the Librarian doubly so.
I'm sure a lot of fun can be brought by this
Discworld ftw~
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Right, so no pressure.
1056261 no presure just be glad I don't have the personality to trak you down and suicide you if screw up
*absolutely not a suspiciously specific denial*
Are you going to be putting this in the Binkie Pie/Starswirl in Discworld continuity? Because if you are, I'm pretty sure Luna, Celestia, and Discord all started out on the disc.
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Um, no. If you are referring to that other story... I have not read it, and now that I have started this one I do not wish to cross contaminate.
Ook!
Hey fun that you also know the anthem of Ankh-morpork. It's nice to see it in the description. It's so long since i saw it last time. And is always a good laugh
And to all of you that is to lazy to go op to the description again, here it is
My dad once told me, he said, "Together heroes endure, grandma always makes eclairs."
...I still have no idea what he was talking about.
As before I want your thoughts and comments.
If a joke didn't work please tell me.
And give some lovin' to Doomande and Ponky, without them this story probably never would have happened... So blame them, it's all their fault!
So many friggin' page breaks!
And why do I sense Discord? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png
PS. You forgot to write about Granny Weatherwax
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Well there was a lot of stuff... and jumping around is fun... especially with puddles... and with poodles... but not puddles of poodles, those don't work well.
Because you are standing next to his statue? Or
do you have Pinkie Sense? If so you might want to get it re-calibrated before you dodge into a falling object.
You mean Mistress Weatherwax? I would watch your tongue, that is unless she has given you permission to call her Granny.
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Are you Pinkie Pie? Cause.. you are SO random!
What if I'm one of the Ogg descendants?
And will you include some of the Guard? At least Cpt. Vimes would "spruce" things up!
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Only on Wednesdays.
Tis only uh far warnin' to ye. Ya ken?
Now why in the Disc would Vimes get involved in all this foolishness. That is just silly. And its His Grace, The Duke of Ankh, Commander of the Watch, and Blackboard Eraser, Sir Samuel Vimes.
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Oh you and your fancy-shmancy titles and doohickeys! Fine, you are the author here, do what you want!
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Without saying to much. Many of the people and places that you know and love will be used. We have read a lot of his dicsworld books and can see inspiration many places. So sit back, relax and trow a little piece of cheese to Hex now and then.
PS. It´s His Grace, His Excellency, The Duke of Ankh; Commander Sir Samuel Vimes and not just Vimes, thank you
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Author beat you to it:
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But I forgot 'His Excellency'. So just to make it perfectly clear
His Grace, His Excellency, The Duke of Ankh, Blackboard-Monitor; Commander of the Watch, Sir Samuel Vimes.
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Now now don´t be sad. We are just nitpickers that love Sir pratchett a lot.
So smile smile smile, read the story again and turn that frown upside down
I'd greatly like to hear more about that planet-scale Library.
Also, "alicorn" was not coined by a group of male humans from one of the more backwater planes of the multiverse who have developed a rather strange obsession with a show designed for young girls. Apparently, it was a creation of one specific male human from that plane, assuming my source is accurate.
Also also, godsdamn Auditors. I really want to see a certain draconequus and a certain milkman team up against them.
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There are a number of ways to get there. Obviously L-Space is an option, if you can find a library large enough. But the most popular vehicle of choice is a little blue box.
Anything I say about this sounds argumentative and/or like whining.
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I tried to make a joke here last time and judging by the lack of hate there are only two option...
Either nopony read it or you are all completely dense. Oh well, Have some funny.
I guessing that Celestia will meet Censured in Censured and make a lot of censoring
While Luna on the other hoof meet up with Censured in Censured and that they see a loot of censoring togetter
While I would love to be in Cadences horseshoes and meet Censured for Censured is one of my favorite characters... ohh and she pops up in Censured
Where would the princesses show up...
If nothing else, Celestia needs to meet up with Vetinari at some point. His pragmatism would probably either horrify or delight her, depending on how you write her, which would be a cool scene either way. I also would expect that he would take interest in her ability to raise the sun, perhaps even making her more indispensable than Vetinari himself.
It would be interesting to see Luna at UU, but as that would put her very close to Celestia, it would also be interesting to see her interact with the gods. She could also be sent to Uberwald or Death's abode, though, and she would probably like the Counterweight Continent... That all depends on how you want to write her.
Cadence is rather more difficult, since she is rather less developed than the other two princesses. It would probably be pretty funny to see her sent to XXXX, seeing as she is the most, to quote a (decidedly unwise) dragon, "namby-pamby" princess, and would probably take to the place like a fish to molasses. For the same reason I could also see her landing in Lancre with the Weatherwaxes to be rather humorous, though probably to a lesser extent. It might be interesting to see her interact with Tiffany, depending on when this is happening.
I do have one relatively major question, though. What shape is Equestria (or whatever the planet they are on is called; I often see Equis, but it tends to change from author to author)?
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I like some of your ideas, but alas some will be unlikely to happen.
As to the shape of Equis, I have it in my mind as decidedly flat. This is because of the raising of the sun and moon. The major difference is that Eques is smaller than the Disc. And with the sun and seasons under direct control of the ponies it has only the four standard season rather than the Disc's eight. This also means that Equus doesn't spin and the compass maintains its value, the sun rises in the east and sets in the west. Also since the sun is of normal size and Equas is not as rampantly magical the speed of light is also of a normal speed. Of course this is just my personal take on it for the purposes of this story, Equos is whatever anypony wants to make of it. Equys.
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It is said by Mayor Puddinghead that the planet they are on are round in hearts warming eve, when talking about the map.
But that is a minor detail. I was also seeing it as flat, and flat planets are more fun than round ones
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Ah, alright. I assume that it simply floats, then? That would certainly be a point of interest to the wizards (and wizzard, so that he can better run away from it) at UU. I suppose they do have Roundworld, though, so perhaps it wouldn't be that much of a shock...
I just thought of another queston, though it might be a bit of a spoiler. Will Twilight ever go to Diskworld? I can see her getting along very well with that inventor that Vetinari keeps in the hidden prison. What was his name again? I recall that he was based off of Leonardo Da Vinci, but I have no idea which book or books he was in...
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Leonardo da Quirm
And I haven't decide if anyone will cross over again. If they do it will be many chapter hence.
Celestia definitely needs to meet Vetinari! And perhaps play a nice game of...
Thud! Perhaps her arrival would ensure the appearance of (...)* Sir Vimes and
the guard!
Luna has to have the "honorable" faculty of the UU running around in circles.
I think that she might have a nice discussion with Stibbons, or scare the hell
out of Rincewind. Or even run away from Ridcully's "hunting game".
Cadence should arrive in Lancre, meet the King, and talk a lot to Nanny Ogg
about delivering children**. After all the Nanny helped deliver a demi-god once...
And if Twilight ever gets the chance to go to Discworld,
she should definitely have a nice educated talk with some of the mages or
perhaps realize how much crazy she shares with Vetinari's "guest" Leonardo.
* - Insert a ridiculous amount of titles here.
** - foals, in this case.
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*furiously scribbling notes* Brilliant! I am glad I thought of that!
I kind of want Luna to end up on the moon, especially since the Discworld's a lot nicer than Equis's. It even comes with dragons! If you want to keep the princesses to the Disc proper, I can think of nopony better to encounter Esme Weatherwax than another so finely balanced on the edge of darkness and light.
Celestia and Vetinari together sounds exquisite. Especially if she hates mimes as much as he does.
As for Cadence, I rather want her to encounter the Disc's second greatest lover. Casanunda's very existence might be enough to earn her full divine status.
One more thing to consider while we're focused on the Disc: Will any of the princesses meet Binky?
Now as for the Librarian, hopefully one of those books he found is an Ook-to-Equine phrasebook. Or, if all else fails, he can employ charades.
All told, definitely looking forward to more.
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I wouldn't worry too much about the Librarian, he is a smart mon- Ape! I said Ape!
Binky? Deaths horse? I mean if death has a reason to show up than I guess they will.... but Binky is just a horse...
1231682 Eh. I suppose.
1229669 Wow, you're so smart!
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To try and be serious for just a moment here.
I really want to stay as canon to the source material as possible with this story. This is the main reason I chose to send the Princesses to Discworld and the Librarian to Equestria. These characters don't really have much in the way of, well, character, so I can get away with a fair amount. This is as much a challenge to me to stay in character as it is to just have some stupid fun.
Enough of that mess.
So one of my pre-readers has been busy with stuff, so if you see any mistakes please let me know so that I can fix them.
As we see, Celestia has popped up in Lancre, The Chalk specifically. Hmm, I wonder where the others will be...
Celestia in Lancre... Oh my... this won't end good... not good at all...
Celestia needs to meet Esme. Imagine what she would do, when a immortal comes to Lancre. You! Get out of my country! *Magical whack* YOU DARE HIT A GODDE-*another magical whack* Shut up you.
Err, sorry but The Chalk is not part of Lancre. My apologies, and also Celestia is so screwed if she pisses off the Feegles. CRIVENS!
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Isn't it? hold on...
I believe that you are not entirely incorrect, while still being wrong.
It may not be 'Lancre' but it is close enough...
Also, I am sorry to report that this story is as dead as Mr. Slant. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Queen_Chrysalis.png
Though your support is still appreciated.
2127635 Aww.
Mr. Mead, I am leaving this comment to let you know that you are solely responsible for the single best and worst moments of my entire week. 1-media-cdn.foolz.us/ffuuka/board/tg/image/1335/77/1335772396717.jpg
I will be back later when I am fully awake to post in greater length.