This is too weird for me.

i'm out

Dafuq is this shit. I mean really.

theres a video game called the last of us

>>10521571052157 this is the weirdest chapter in the whole story and I really feel that this book of mine will progress further than you think

>>10523251052325 it's my book and if it weird for you then that's your problem, you could have still gave me some real critical comments.

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had to... lol...

havent read story yet, add to read later

add to read later

>>15027341502734 lol that is an awesome Simpsons episode and hope you enjoy the fanfic!

Oh, wow, I... I'm sorry... but you seriously need to go back to the drawing board on this.

I just look at the first paragaraph, and I see what seems like no regard for punctuation, pacing, formatting, or anything like that.

>>15027821502782 I just got a prereader/editor about 2 days ago and I'm going to get him to help me with all my grammar issues and such. I think that after getting no comments on this what so ever to help me fix this fanfic up I just gave up asking so thank you for the helpful insight. Also I really don't know if the grammar gets better in the later chapters. If not please inform me.

By the way, the chapter title should be spelt 'Disappointment' instead of:

Chapter 1 Can't Handle Dissapointment (28th Oct)

>>15835931583593 okay so other than that is the story fine or what?

>>18928881892888 God I haven't read my chapters in ages so tell me what is this song based off of (the scene you found this song fit) or are we being random today?

>>18928881892888 oh and dig the song

well this has been i interesting story so far hope to see more