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    Part 1: Science of the Lowest Degree


    "Every thing must have a beginning... and that beginning must be linked to something that went before." -Mary Shelly


    A blast of sound first began as a deafening crash, slowly dissipating into silence as the detached chamberlock lift fell deeper and deeper into the bowels of Aperture Science. Its initial rumble was nullified by the Central AI Chamber's soundproof paneling.

    The chamber's center was its focal point, and recent events made this more evident than normal; the room's only source of light was a brilliant red glow emitting from a pit located beneath the Central AI. The pit's many technological components can be seen looped and tangled around one another, but the most eye-catching piece of hardware was a huge red claw craning out from the pit's innards.

    A small potato with an even smaller battery wired in was clutched between the claw's two massive fingers. It let out a jaded sigh, with its yellow light animating in sequence. "That chamberlock cost over five grand to build. It's irreplaceable and you just destroyed it."

    "It can be rebuilt. I am the Central Core, now. Aren't I?" Wheatley's snide remark was met with silence, which he inattentively ignored. GLaDOS strove to avoid any and all conversation with the corrupted core. She despised everything about him, right down to that skittish ramble adjusted to have a Bristol accent for no logical reason. Why Aperture's scientists even gave him a voice like that, she may never know.

    Wheatley shifted his sapphire optic from the glass-littered chamberlock shaft to the potato battery; his grime-coated 'eyelids' nearly closed shut, but not quite, in an effort to mimic the act of squinting. "What should I do with you now that she is plummeting down an elevator shaft?" He said in a low, grim octave, which was soon replaced by one of childish glee. "Heh, good thing I got that ol' iron grip, right?"

    GLaDOS attempted to let out an exasperated sigh, failing in her efforts to give Wheatley the cold shoulder. Its effect was impaired, however, as it only came out as broken white noise. Ignoring the battery's own limited functions, she pursued grating Wheatley. "You have no idea how to take care of this facility, do you?" Her soft yellow light blinked with every syllable.

    Wheatley gave her chiding remark a moment of thought, which is a real feat in itself. He moved away from GLaDOS, as if she was physically interfering with his already-limited thought process. After finally coming up with a clever rebuke, Wheatley flexed the robotic arm back up to his face. "You know what I'm going to do?"

    "Destroy this facility?" the battery retorted.

    Wheatley gave off an annoyed sigh; his side emitted a small shower of sparks, alluding to his prior scuffle with the newly-reborn GLaDOS. "No," he replied, bluntly. "Since I am the new Central AI of Aperture Science, I don't need you anymore. And so I've decided to get rid of you for good."

    Wheatley then attempted to drop his grating inflection into one that was both dark and sinister. "You know what I've found?" he asked, failing to instill fear in GLaDOS due to his voice breaking into a dorky shrill mid-sentence.

    Embarrassed, Wheatley slid his outer plates forward, almost completely covering his eye; it gave him an almost clam-like look. "Sorry about that," he maundered, then chuckled bashfully. "I'm a little new to this whole 'evil' thing; trying to nail the 'evil voice'. Not working out so well."

    "Dear God..."

    "I know, right? I mean, I could try... y-y'know what? I-I'll deal with this later. I'll have plenty of time to come up with an evil laugh after I whip this place into shape. So, anyway, where was I? Ah, yes! Luv?" asked Wheatley, making a hasty return to the matter at hand. "Do you know what I found?"

    "A program that makes you into an idiot," quipped the potato battery, and quickly adding, "Oh, wait. That's scientifically impossible. You're about as dumb as they get." There was a slight hint of amusement to the potato's emotionless vocals.

    Wheatley's groan of irritation went in unison with his face plates flaring open, like a cobra hissing at its prey. He expelled a plume of hot steam from one of the pipes traveling along the exterior of the suspended central AI platform. The glossy-black panels walling the chamber seemed to fidget about with Wheatley's spike of rage. "Yep, yeah! Laugh it up! 'Heh-heh-heh', because-because you're in no position to be making snide little remarks!" The mortified sphere raved and ranted to the point where GLaDOS thought he'd blow a fuse. "But remember one thing, Luv," his voice once again dropped into a sinister, ill-boding octave, I'm the big man now. I could crush your battery at this very moment if I wanted too!"

    GLaDOS was more or less unfazed. "Good. Do it. I can't stand listening to this drivel any longer."

    Wheatley narrowed his eye. "Okay, you know what? I was going to give you a long and boring speech on how I accessed some restricted files-"

    "Wait, wait, wait!" piped GLaDOS in an insistent tone. "What do you mean 'restricted files'? Those are restricted for a reason, you idiot! Do you know why? Because there could be abandoned projects in there that could level this entire facility!"

    "Oh?" noted Wheatley in a mocking tone; he rose a panel hinged above his eye, like a human raising a brow. "Such as the, oh, I don't know, 'Project Six-Dash-Twelve', dubbed 'The Alternate Universe Projects'? Aw, this sounds interesting. i wonder what these d--"

    "Don't touch those," the battery pleaded with austere emphasis.

    The core shot his optic-lens to the darkened, crudely angled walls and let out a chided laugh, amused by the once mighty AI's plight. "What about this? The, uh, 'The Multiverse Project: Eck... que...' huh?"

    "Uh, this project!" spouted the witless core, attempting to recover what little menace he had briefly had.

    Ignoring Wheatley's buffoonish attempts at being threatening, GLaDOS pondered over what Project 6-12 was. She couldn't; then again, even a rogue AI knew not to interfere with possibly dangerous experiments. They were abandoned for a reason, she thought.

    Once again, in a more demanding tone, GLaDOS said, "Don't access those files."

    "Ha!" Wheatley spat; his optical lens sprung out from his chassis in concordance. "Your reverse psychology won't work on me, Luv!"

    "What are you talking about, you idiot!?" she exclaimed, almost damaging the battery's fragile vocal cords. "I'm trying to warn you!" Her warning was delivered with a sharp, teeth-grinding screech.

    Ignoring her pleas, the robotic claw's clamorous gears began to shift and grind against each other as Wheatley carried GLaDOS to the core-transfer module. As the console underwent its automated procedure, Wheatley began to prattle on and on in decadent victory. "I truly appreciate your concerns, which is good, considering I have no idea what this Project: Equesi-bleh will exactly do. But I am certain that this facility is better off with me in charge. I mean, let's lay out all the cards on the table, shall we? I took care of the rogue test subject. I removed a corrupt AI from the premises--"

    "Actually, she did that," GLaDOS interjected from her transfer port.

    "I--uh," Wheatley flustered, but managed to ignore her, "Uh, I became the rightful leader of Aperture Science, and-and it's better off without you, I bet!"

    "Better off as a junkyard, perhaps."

    "Not listening!" Wheatley turned around, not facing GLaDOS as she was slowly uploaded into his unveiled project. The wall panels spectated the argument, glaring at the bickering robots with malice red eyes.

    "I swear I'll get back at you for this," hissed GLaDOS in a bitter tone.

    "Core transfer to --Equestria-- is ready to begin. Central Core, are you ready to start?" the prerecorded male announcer queried in a phony upbeat tone.

    Wheatley motioned his head in a nodding rhythm. "Oh, yes indeedy!"

    "Very good. Test subject, are you ready to start?"

    "Bite me."

    "Excellent! We are ready to begin!"

    GLaDOS' vision dimmed into blackness, just as Wheatley released a gout of laughter like a maniacal cartoon villain. Second by second, her world darkened into a foreboding nothing; she was unsure how to feel. 'Fear' would be the proper reaction, but she was too proud to do so.


    Glados' eyes fluttered, bleary, but open, staring at a beautifully shaded blue sky dotted with numerous plush clouds. The atmosphere was warm, lazy. The monotonous drone of cicada were heard buzzing away in the distance. Such obvious signs indicated that it, wherever it exactly is, was the season of Summer. Yet, being outside with a tranquil breeze wasn't the first thing that processed through the dazed artificial's mind.

    It was an odd sensation, brushing up against her back. It felt rather... ticklish. Wait, felt? Felt!? In a panic, Glados' featureless marble yellow eyes made a sharp twinge to the left, then right, and by nature she took in a foreboding, quaked breath.

    Breathing... so this is what is feels like. Glados took in another deep inhale, her still-obscured stomach rose gradually. I like it. The air was sweet and light, just as how she imagined the cake would smell. Like garbage.

    This feeling, a sensation, being able to touch like an organic, it was nauseating. Terrified of whatever abstract Hell she was now trapped in, Glados reluctantly asked herself, What the hell am I?

    As if on autopilot, Glados' new body tightened its neck muscles, pulling her head up just like the arrangement of gears built into her old platform. The sight she was met with turned Glados' breathing into panicked gasps. No... no this can't be real. This has to be a dream! Then again, robots can't dream. Unless that little idiot actually killed me. Oh please God, let this be my eternal suffering instead of reality!

    From head to toe, there was only fur. Real, organic, glimmering white fur matted down into disgustingly soft layers. It took a moment for the dumbstruck AI to realize exactly what she was. She was like a human, with arms and legs of a sort, yet they ended in eerily disfigured stumps, like they were bone. No. Like hooves. Solid, alabaster hooves. Parting her hind legs just a bit, she was greeted with the heart-stopping sight of a fountain of black hair protruding out from between her legs. The execrable appendage seemed to have a mind of its own, as it wagged to and fro with the occasional flick when the breeze would pick up.

    The fact of what the once-artificial being has been reduced to hit her like a ton, no, an ocean liner of bricks. I'm an equine, in a strange, uncharted, alternate universe, overthrown by an intelligence dampening core and a mute brain-dead psychopath.

    Glados, admittedly, has never seen a live horse before. But she did see pictures of them in the files dug up from various Aperture terminals. Let's just say their design isn't what Glados would call 'desirable.' In fact, she found them to be rather repulsive, with their long, spindly legs and elongated faces and soulless eyes.

    Despite all that, thankfully, there was a cold comfort knowing this new form's walking appendages were short, though it didn't help much. Glados was still trying to process her situation, all while trying to comprehend this sense of 'feeling.' Yes, Aperture's robots had a sense of touch to some extent, but never a full-blown nervous system like humans.

    The ticklish sensation of the grass brushing against the cream-colored mare's back sent shivers down her recently developed spine. She verbally convulsed in response to the unexpected sense of touch, then went silent an abrupt second later. Horses shouldn't talk.

    Glados' contorted her soft, furred lips and let out a lazy groan. Oh my God... I'm in a world where horses can talk. This is... I don't even now what to say. These senses, this once limited perception of touch suddenly imploded with a stronger sense as well as five others, was all too much to handle.

    Well, I'm not going to get back to Aperture moping about like a child. She thought to herself, then finished aloud, "The quicker I get out of this... thing, the better." Glados' new 'organic' voice would take some getting used to, that's for sure.

    Her delivery now had actual emotion, as opposed to those auto-tuned robotic vocals she has grown to become so accustomed. Oddly enough, her actual 'voice' sounded the same, just with more 'feeling'. Nonetheless, Glados was at the very least pleased her new vocal capabilities somewhat resembled the old ones. Well at least I have something, though it isn't much.

    There was a strange, tugging feeling in what Glados could only assume was where an equine's heart is. So this is what it feels like to have a broken heart...

    Emotions. Just as she feared, they were inescapable. Glados experienced feelings before all of this, before she was murdered. But the difference between then and now is that the morphed AI can't redact these emotions like she could as a Central AI. In fact, the yellow eyed mare felt utterly useless now. She can't do anything. No turrets, no all-seeing cameras, and worst of all, no deadly neurotoxin.

    She just lied there, sulking in her own misery, watching the plethora of clouds roll by without a care of the world below. If this is where she'd spend the rest of her now mortal life, then at the very least it couldn't be as bad as being stuck in a potato battery... with Wheately.

    There was a sudden, lingering sense of dread Glados only felt once prior to her murder at the hands of that rogue test subject.

    That little idiot... I have to find a way to reach him, before he turns Michigan into a ten mile crater.

    Thus, Glados began the awkward, loathsome process of learning how to stand. Again, she saw how horses walked before. They trot like deer, only less majestic and more like a freight train. Or Chell. She sat up on her haunches, planting her front legs into the lush grass, and slowly shifted a wobbly hind leg into the soil.

    I feel like an idiot, she seethed. Almost tripping, Glados managed to settle her back-right hoof in to the ground.

    Now standing tall, Glados felt painfully insignificant. She just couldn't get over the fact that she was once the result of the most powerful minds in America, now reduced to learning how to walk in an unnatural organic body.

    Well, there's no time to waste.She mused scornfully. Time to start walking. Like a baby. Shouldn't be to hard, I just gotta... okay. Here we go. Taking a deep breath of rejuvenating air, Glados took her first step into madness, starting with one hoof raised. Front left, back right, front right, back left The mare repeated this one-way line of thinking to herself as she slowly descended the side of the hill. Nearing the base, she complacently thought, Heh, this is easy. Right when Glados thought that, she tripped and fell flat on her face.

    A new form of sensations pulsated through her nose, the feeling of pain. 'Ouch' was the first word that escaped the awkward mare's thoughts. The feeling was blunt, thick, leaving her nose in a state of a null sensation that wasn't nearly as pleasurable as her other reactions.

    "Hey partner, ya alright?" a texan-esque voice asked, sounding genuinely concerned.

    At first, Glados thought, Finally! A form of sub-intelligent life that could potentially help me escape from this hellhole! Once her head removed itself from it's planted spot in the dirt, she saw a pair of orange hooves inches away from her face. Oh, you've got to be kidding me.

    She struggled back up to all fours, with the tangerine colored mare locking a foreleg with one of her own and pulling the fallen pony up. Glados flinched at the unexpected warm feeling of an organic touching another, but her tension dissipated almost immediately.

    Standing on her hooves once more, Glados saw the most hope-crushing factor of this entire image: A Stetson nestled on the pony's bushel of ill-groomed blonde hair. Glados knew for a fact that cowboy hats obviously led to the socially awkward or inept. Dear Science, help me in my time of need.

    The orange pony held a hoof out, "Mah name's Applejack. What are ya doin' way out here?" She gave a greeting smile, accompanied by emerald eyes that were both genteel and welcoming.

    Glados remained calm, allowing a poker face to mask whatever reasonable emotions tried to escape. Her set of sun-colored eyes glowered at the pony's extended hoof, and then at the picnic basket saddled-up on her back. Applejack slowly reclined the gesture, her smile just as slowly faded.

    "Ah can see yer not the talkative type. hey, that's fine." Her face brightened up, "Hey, ah'm waitin' fer mah friends to get here for a picnic." She motioned behind her at a small hamlet in the distance. "Why don't cha sit fer a while? Get some grub?"

    The white mare lowered her head, still remained in a locked stare with Applejack. She continued glaring at the friendly pony through cage-like bangs. Glados hoped this was threatening, even though a horse isn't nearly as intimidating as a giant robot in control of an entire facility. Armed with neurotoxin.

    Rather than being terrified, Applejack instead laughed, "Y'know what? You remind me of mah friend, Fluttershy! Ah reckon you two would get along just fine."

    Glados allowed a suppressed scream to race throughout her callous mind. Get! Me! Out of here!


    A/N: Thanks go to Tsujin Rilauco for the alternate cover.

    Comments ( 273 )

    #1 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    :yay: I've finally worked up the courage to do a Portal story! It's my favorite game ever, probably because there's no actual fighting, cuz I suck at those kind of games. :twilightblush:

    But yeah, let me know if I've gotten Glados' personality right. :twilightsmile:

    And P.S. The picture is how Glados looks as a pony, minus the wings and potato cutie mark. Sorry, she's a wimpy little earth pony. That just makes it twenty times better. :rainbowlaugh:

    #2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I like it! Looks good so far.

    #3 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I am interested.

    #4 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Ooh, this. This is interesting. This is very, very interesting.

    Can't wait for more, bro.

    #5 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    this... is gonna be excellent...

    #6 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    woho another portal story:pinkiehappy:

    #7 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Its a good story :eeyup:. Can't wait to see more pony Glados :pinkiehappy:.

    #8 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Earth ponies physically out match pegasai and unicorns, think of them like the back bone of Equestria, the hard workers and people who do stuff by hand, and this is terrific exactly how i think of GLAdOS

    #9 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    you do glados realy good:pinkiehappy:

    keep it up:twilightsmile:

    #10 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I sense this will be on the front page.

    Good job, very good story :yay:

    #11 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Looks promising. Untill GlaDOS learns magic and poisons everypony with conqured neurotoxin.:pinkiecrazy:

    #12 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    This will get featured soon, you all heard it from me. :pinkiehappy:

    #13 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Added to my ever growing "Read Later" list.

    #14 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Gah, I need to play portal again now. Nice work

    >>1055197

    Lol

    #15 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544How did you get your story on the top 10? I've got almost 10x as many views, which obviously isn't the way you got featured. How DID you get featured? Not trying to sound indignant or something by stating a 'wtf, how is urs better than mine even tho i got more views'. That would b rude, so sorry if I came off sounding like that. I'm just genuinely curious on how people get stories featured.

    #16 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    You just made my night. So you deserve

    A applause!

    And five Spikes :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

    Btw I love Portal it´s such a great game and finally I´ve come to see a Portal fic.

    Also great job making this:pinkiehappy:, I´m going to keep a eye on this story for more chapters to come.

    Oni
    #17 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    All my yes are belong to you.

    #18 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Interested and fav'ed. I'll be keeping an eye on this story. :twilightsmile:

    #19 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I am interested. Very very interested.

    #20 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Yessssssssss

    #21 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    LMAO featured already!? SCORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    #22 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544

    Wimpy? :ajbemused: I hope you mean GLaDOS specifically, because just about any OTHER Earth Pony could (Not WOULD, just COULD) make you eat your own teeth over that comment.

    #23 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    this will go down in fimfic crossover history.

    #24 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    All right, I read your story. Loving it, and can't wait to see how she reacts to "THE MAGIC OF FRIENDSHIP!!!" Please make more, and we all know this is worthy of its current featured status.

    #25 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    My mind is now thinking of non random things welp there goes the neighborhood very good story though can't wait to read more and hopefully i won't lose my insanity along the way:pinkiecrazy:

    #26 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    ME GUSTA

    #27 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Get ready to do some science, some ponyscience! I will looking forward to hear Glados ironic jokes. This has potential.

    #28 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    You got GLaDOS's persenality down exactly! keep up the good work!!!

    :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

    #29 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Same thing I tell a Lot of people: Work on your tenses. Choose if you're going to speak as though it is happeneing right this instant, or as if you're describing something that has already happened. Past tense versus present tense. What you want is PAST tense, Describing something as though it has already happened, because this is a narrative as told by an omnicious, third person Narrator. Second person stories are really the only place in fiction for Present tense. It's enjoyable, but the jumping tenses keeps bumping me out of immersion

    #30 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    #31 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544

    I concur, it looks good so far. Glados is more or less anamoral and sadistic, with a sense of humour that is pretty dark and cruel. You seem to portray Glados well with her hiding her emotionals (if not misdirect) and have her passion for science dwelling in her head. I'm looking forward to more udates, keep up the good work :ajsmug

    #32 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Equestria vs. multi awarded villain of the year GLaDOS.  The land will never be the same again

    #33 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    lul, I would love if she ended up being really nice outwardly, but evil on the inside xD

    No matter what happens, dis gonna beh good c:

    #34 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Dear Science, help me in my time of need.

    :rainbowlaugh: That's great!

    #35 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1055197

    *clap*

    *clap*

    *clap*

    "Oh good my slow-clap processor made it into this thing."

    Way to call it bro.

    >>1051544

    Anyway its a great story so far, i expect great things from you, author.

    Do. Not. Disappoint. Me.

    #36 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I approve of PonyDOS. I expect to see more amazingness from you, author.

    #37 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    This should be intresting:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

    #38 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    You certainly have captured GLaDOS well, so far.  But what I'm looking forward to is seeing how you develope her personality.

    #39 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well... This should be interesting to read!

    I'll update later when I've read it.

    Edit: Oh wow, it feels soooo short, Probably because I was enjoying it to much :twilightsheepish:

    #40 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I was unsure of this at first, but this is excellent. Well thought out sentences with easy-to-read structure makes this story a gem. Plus, you have a fun, interesting, and original(?) plot that I'm eager to see more of. Keep it up my friend, you are doing a fine job.

    #41 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well you have piqued my interests! I shall watch this fic with a scrutinizing eye!

    #42 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    The only way that this could get better would be for Chell to suddenly appear as a pony...

    But already this is amazing, MOAR!

    -Jorofrarie

    #43 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    MOAR!! YOUR GOD DEMANDS IT! DO YOU DARE DEFY US DESTROYAH!? IF YOU DO NOT COMPLY WE WILL DESTROY ALL YOU HOLD DEAR!!!

    #44 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    #45 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    OH, I have found your work rather stimulating.  I will follow to see if anymore pleasurable experiences arrise from this jumbled together mass of words. :yay:

    #47 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    "Glados knew for a fact that cowboy hats led to the socially awkward or unintelligent."

    Glados has encountered neckbeards before, evidently.

    #48 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    this....is gonna be gooooood:pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

    #49 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    This is awesome! Moar please!:pinkiehappy: also, you got glados' personality right, though make her express sarcasm more. (she will go nuts with pinkie):pinkiehappy:

    I think glados should have wings, also, her cutie mark should be molecules circling around each other in diff directions just thought it would fit nicely. with her and the whole quantum space portals and what not.

    My general grammar and sentence structuring is a little off today, so dont mind that.

    #50 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Not only have you kept everything in character and provide a real outlook on how they would act you also crossed over two phenomenally different things successfully.

    So you earned a like and a favorite.

    #51 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    MUST HAVE MORE:rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp:

    #52 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Brilliant!

    Again, she saw how horses walked before. They trot like deer, only less majestic and more like a freight train. Or Chell.

    :rainbowlaugh:

    You, sir, are amazing.

    Great job, going to favorite this!

    #53 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1055290

    I don't know exactly how the favorite box works anymore, they keep changing it, but I do know they stopped counting views, since "looking at a story" isn't the same as "liking a story".  

    #54 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544

    You should probably work a description of GLaDOS pony into the story itself.  Perhaps give her a chance to find a mirror or lake and take herself in.  That way the audience won't have to rely on the inaccurate picture or reading an author's note, which I know many people skip.

    #55 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1055796Ah, then that would explain why. This has close to 40 likes (wierd, you'd think you'd need more than that) and mine has just over 10. Eh, w/e. Probly would be a bad idea if I got featured anyways. If I got featured, I might get more viewers. If I got more viewers, I might get some of the viewers that go 'plz make more'. If I got more viewers like that, I'd be pressured to crank out chapters faster and more frequently. If I got pressured, I would be stressed with too much work (considering I'm starting senior year a week from today. Seriously, start of school on a mother bucking THURSDAY! What the fuck is the school board thinking?). And if that happens, I will end up giving a mouse a cookie. If I give a mouse a cookie, the world as we know it will cease to exist.

    #56 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1055808

    Yeah, the likes seemed low to me, too.  But since they were trying to feature half new stories and half old stories, maybe 40 was more likes than the other new stories it was competing with for the new slots?

    Ah well, good luck with being a senior.

    #57 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Love it... but now i have thoughts of Fluttershy being incredibly malovelent.

    #58 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I love the story so far GLaDOS is spot on I can't wait to read her reaction when she take a look at her cuttie mark.

    #59 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    lovely, Uppvote for you my dear.:raritystarry:

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    >>1055818Thanks, although I don't know if it will be bad or good. On one hand, I have to repeat about 2 classes from last year (due to the teacher being a complete bitch, and partially due to me not thinking before I speak. Long story short, called a girl a bitch, she shouted at me, I got suspended), plus all the other senior classes like English 12, stats, econ and government. Oh god, I am not looking forward to those two. But, on the other hand, I get to see all my friends that I haven't seen over the summer. I get to mingle with society, and enjoy being a person. I mean, laying around and doing w/e the fuck you want is nice, but it can't last forever. Eh, I digress. Thanks again.

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    The moment I saw this story's title, I knew it would get into the feature box. I didn't anticipate that it would hit slot one, but hey! Never question results, right?

    Anyway, I still haven't taken the time to read chapter one, but I thought I would contribute my totally irrelevant two cents.

    #62 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    At first I was like :ajbemused: ,then I was like:rainbowderp: , then i was like :rainbowlaugh: and now im like :moustache:

    #63 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Plz make more :pinkiehappy:

    #64 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    UPDATE QUICKLY PLEASE :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::yay:

    #65 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544

    The potato mark would turn me off to the story unless it was suppose to be comedic so i think you for that.  I always picture pony GlaDOS with either a Aperture Science logo as a mark. Or a Ai core. Cell having a portal.

    Though I do think she would be a Pegasus. Earth pony's trait being strong and enduring far from wimpy. Pegasus are weak but faster it would fut the I'm powerless thing more in my opinion.  (don't get me wrong Pegasus are awesome)

    This looks like a good crossover so far. watching you.

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    I don't like much portal world but it's quite interesting

    Lets see how it will go

    #67 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    This intrigues me. Please sir, do go on.

    #68 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    You know, I used to have access to neurotoxin. But then some idiot decided that I was 'mentally unstable' and kicked me out of the Illuminati.

    Ewige Blumenkraft und ewige Schlangenkraft!

    #70 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Glados as pony...so many possibilities.

    You think Wheatley was bad? Wait till you meet Pinkie.

    Glados:...Suddenly that Potato Battery is looking OH-SO appealing right now...

    #71 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Keep going. For science. You monster.

    #72 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544 Finaly i have waited so long for a Glados turned pony in equestria story. =D

    By looking at this chapter i can tell this is gona be good.

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    You did a very good job on Glados' character. There were a few minor errors in there though:

    "Now...." The intelligence dampening sphere shifted it's blue optic towards the potato still clutched in his massive robotic claw. "what do I do with you now that the lass is plummeting down an elevator shaft?"

    its

    ...the potato still clutched in his massive robotic claw, "What do I do with you...

    She just lied there, sulking in her own misery,

    http://web.ku.edu/~edit/lie.html

    But unfortunately, being a horse isn't as intimidating as a giant robot in control of an entire facility. Armed with neurotoxin.

    ...giant robot in control of an entire facility, and not to mention one armed with neurotoxin.

    Or something along those lines.

    And I think you're pushing AJ's accent a bit.

    "Mah name's Applejack. What're in tarnation are ya doing out here?" She gave a greeting smile, her emerald eyes were soft and welcoming.

    There's a mistake in there, and I think you're using the word 'tarnation' incorrectly. Tarnation is used to express anger or annoyance, so it really doesn't fit in there. Lighter use of the accents and wording would be nice. Just because AJ has the accent doesn't mean she needs to call everyone 'partner', and that goes for other characters as well. Just because they said it once or twice doesn't mean you should have Rarity finish every sentence with 'darling', or have Pinkie say 'Okie dokie loki' when she agrees with something.

    Good effort, I'm looking forward to reading more.

    -Sparklight

    #74 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544 I'm gonna enjoy her reaction when she finds out in my opinion that she's the most limited of the three pony races.:rainbowlaugh:

    #75 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Could use some proofreading and Applejack's written accent could be toned down a little, but the concept is definitely very awesome and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes. Will keep an eye on this one.

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    Aaaaallright! Gonna say something more than that after I read it. But this looks pretty great so see you after I finish reading!

         Okay! I read it, first impressions: AMAZING!            Now that I've read it: SUPER AMAZING!!!!

    Keep up the great work and post another chapter quickly my friend!

    #77 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is good story. Wait no, scratch that. This is A GREAT STORY. You've made my, uh not midnight, you made my morning! Yea :twilightblush:

    #78 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is very relevent to my interests :pinkiehappy:

    #79 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I quite fancy this. :twilightsmile:

    #80 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Well it seems more interesting than the other one, Better Living Through Science And Ponies.

    #81 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I can't wait for GLaDOS' scathing humor to verbally slap all the ponies, hopefully in her very same robotic voice. I want more soon please.

    #82 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :flutterrage: MMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    :fluttercry: please?

    #83 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I believe an acceptable way of expressing my thought on this chapter would be something akin to this;

    And how he heck did you manage to get 265 thumbs up and only a single thumb down? Heck, I'd bet that that person didn't even read the story. Probably just disliked because it was a crossover or some such.

    I guess what I'm saying is that this is pretty freaking tops and you shouldn't stop any time soon!

    Edit: And now it's 266:2. Well now we know that you'll get at least 133 thumbs up for every 1 thumb down. Nice job!

    #84 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I can not see though the pic. Glados there is so cute. Were did you get the pic?

    #85 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is nice. Will read more. Now to criticize a bit.

    The whole "intimidating look with one eye under hair" is the only thing that put me like "Meh?" Glady should not have an idea what look can be intimidating for a equine creature, and she can not be making any poses

    >Glados knew for a fact that cowboy hats led to the socially awkward or unintelligent. Dear Science, help me in my time of need.

    Um... really? How is that scientifically accurate? Either elaborate her train of thoughts so we will not need to make the connection or think of something else.

    >"Mah name's Applejack. What're in tarnation are ya doing out here?"

    Isn't "What're in tarnation" having some kind of an aggressive intonation? For me, and everyone, who watched the show, I don't think it sounds very welcoming in AJ's voice.

    That's what got me a bit frustrated in the chapter. If you don't want to hear my blabbering - do tell and I won't bother you in the next chapters any more.

    I recommend concentrating less on frustration of being a "pony" and more on frustration of being a meatbag. It is far shocking just to breathe than to breathe like a pony if you get my thought.

    #86 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    To good i need MOAR:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

    #87 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1055290

    Well, I think the moderators or people who have acess to everything in this website has to decide if a story can get featured and not counting on how many views but by opinion and reviews???

    #88 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Well here we are again. Its always such a pleasure. :scootangel:

    Remember the time you cried to kill me twice? :pinkiecrazy:

    Oh how we laughed and laughed. Except I wasn't laughing. :ajbemused:

    Under the circumstances I've been shockingly nice.... :trollestia:

    :rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss:

    Dare you to read and listen to this!

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=25ClYY5mwbc

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    Ya I saw a comment where they wanted Chell. That would be funny. And when Glados learns about magic... there's going to be some experiments...

    #91 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This should be interesting! I'll be sure to read this.  GO GLADOS (sorry but as awesome as ponies are GLADOS is cooler.

    #93 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    well i l'île tour glados personality and or captured my intrest as fast as thé LEGENDARY Kkat fiction most of you gavé heard of bases off:derpyderp1: some obscure bethesda game called Fallout 3...

    PRETTY DAMN AWSOME

    :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiegasp::rainbowkiss::scootangel::twilightsmile::derpytongue2:

    #94 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    THE FUN LEVELS ARE AT 100% EFFIENCY! :pinkiehappy:

    #95 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiesad2: It's....It's been my life long dream to be in the featured box....LET ALONE NUMBER ONE!!!! Thanks so much everybody! I'm kinda nervous though, with everyone's expectations extremely high. But I'll try my best!

    >>1056313 And thank you for your constructive criticism. I've got nothing to say really to those comments, aside from the cowboy hat one. All's I gotta say is Glados has been known to act kind of childish at times, right?

    #96 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    And thus on this the frabjus day...

    We all hail this author and his glorious work of fan fiction.

    And we shall read it and see that it is pony. and good, that to.

    #97 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Yep I was this is awesome.  I can just picture what GLADOS would say to Chell right now.  "Oh hi how are you doing, cause I'm a freaken horse."

    #98 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This looks very promising, I will follow it. :twilightsmile:

    #99 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1051544

    I have a sudden urge to congratulate you my dear sir.

    I am not entirely sure why.

    But I think it is because you are AWESOME!

    #100 · 40w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1055625 Godzilla for the effing win. I will do as you wish, Lord DESTROYAH!

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