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Due to a typo on her permit to build a new barn, and the meddling of a recalcitrant bureaucrat, Applejack is stuck running a bar, at least until Mayor Mare gets back to town. So sit down and have a drink in Ponyville's least likely watering hole!
Oh god, that was glorious 
Aj was exactly like her. Stubborn but stil willing to do what it takes.
The ending was FANTASTIC! I am happy to see that fluttersy's bats got adopted 
6 of 6 spikes, a green thumb and a star from me. why? It was long enough, but not too long. You had a good grammar, and a perfect pacing. The ending of the story was downright glorious!
And take an applejack for the ending 
I have a feeling that this is the first time I've ever been glad to have made a typo. Not only was this story absolutely glorious and funny, but it's likely to increase views of my own story! Which means more criticism of my skills,
Personally, I have to wonder, after that successful night, just how successful were they? Because I could theoretically see them keeping the bar if it did really well that night. It would also leave open an excellent possibility for a sequel (in both the literal sense, and a story occurring after this happens but in the same continuity.)
Have some moustached Spikes for your efforts!
use them wisely!
>>1045586 That final night was successful thanks to Applejack's friends and a community that respects her (and who can't resist a party). If she were to try to run the bar going forward, the novelty would soon wear off. If you want a drink, you're going somewhere that's easier to walk to (or stumble home from, in Berry Punch's case).
Besides, they built the new barn because they needed a new barn. It needs to be returned to its proper use.
Great story, I love the concept alone, but the execution was spot on as well.
For some reason I can see AJ as a bartender really easily. Only thing I would've liked to have seen is maybe a reference to how bad Dash's hangover was the day after. 
On an unrelated note, I found the perfect music for the last night at the bar.
Excellent job, you earn my mustache.
I like this story.
>>1045588 So does that mean that a twichy tail on Berry Punch would mean "A BAR FIGHT IS GOING TO START!"?
well I guess there will be some other senses for "somepony is going to trow a chair", "Somepony is going to flip a table", "Somepony is going to break a bottle or a glass", " somepony is going to puke his stomach out" and so many other and more with the combos like "Someponies are way too drunk that they will try to make out with each other" and many more...
I guess this hability probably will be usefull to get out of the harms way even when you're plastered
You sir deserve this.
Great story! And dat ending! Sweet sweet justice!
Caught a few errors. Nothing too serious. Just get them taken care of by the end of the next business day and there won't be any penalties. Keen Eye would have been the one doing the inspection on your story today but last I heard he was being tied up...um I mean...he's busy.
"while Big Macintosh balanced trays of drinks for the guests who 'more wanted to see' Big Macintosh carry a tray of drinks." Try using 'were more interested in seeing'.
“I'm just glad I was able to find 'out that' you had this authority by reading the town charter,” Twilight Sparkle said. You forgot two words.
after reading this i have the theme from Cheers running through my head, but ponified
Be glad there's one place in the world
Where everypony knows your name,
And they're always glad you came;
You want to go where ponies know,
Ponies are all the same;
You want to go where everypony knows your name
and now, so do you
So a typo in a story inspired a story about a typo?
Brilliant fic, would love to see a continuation?
And congrats on the number 1 feature!
A truly fantastic one-shot. It always a sign of a great writer when you take a simple idea and flesh it out into a very fun story. All of the characters fit so well, and it certainly brought a smile to my face. Well done.
Also, congrats on the number 1 stop in the featured stories box.
This... Oh you!
It is night! I can't laugh loud. You monster.
But the name fits. Really.
And whole story is great.
Maybe a Letter to Princess Celestia will have lines like "... and I learned that you shouldn't mix personal vengeance and important documents as this will always backfire to you in most unexpected ways."
For some reason after re-reading this does not sound... well... 
FiM Enhancements are awesome
:D
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Hi Bon-bon. You too, Lyra.What the fuck did I just read?
Oh well. Entertaining read nonetheless. Applejack running a bar? If you ask me, this needs to be turned into a Season 3 episode____________________________________
Hi Bon-bon. You too, Lyra.Keen Eye damn well better be a pegasus. 
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Hi Bon-bon. You too, Lyra.*Steel slow claps, very satisfied with the story.*
I must admit, this was far better than my lowly expectations could ever predict. I think AJ's rubbing off on me.
Mah cynicism is well-placed, yours is just plain crazy.
*Steel shrugs.*
Call me paranoid, but I always prepare myself for a possibly bad story. Still, it's always nice to have your expectations blown out of the water. I personally think AJ could run any kind of business well; she's certainly got the attitude for it, and seems to know her trade well enough.
Ah guess Ah could run a bar...
Dunno whether Ah'd wanna be pegged with fillin' the town with alcoholics though.
Just more business, Miss Applejack.
Well that's just a bad outlook on yer customers, Mister Steel!
Fine, fine. So don't sell the heavy alcohol, or sell alternatives along with it. Make it a place that doesn't have an age restriction.
Age restric-
Wait, AGE RESTRICTION!?
Yep. I think Equestria has an age limit of 17 before you can enter any legal establishment that serves alcohol...
Tha's if yer buyin', right?
...Could be. Not sure...should probably read up on local laws...hmm...that brings to question the age of the proprietor, as well as her staff.
To the moona?
Erm...preferably not?
I like it. My favorite part was when Rainbow Dash got herself drunk in an attempt to boost her ego.
I have a question though. Why couldn't Big Mac or Granny Smith get the typo sorted out with Red Tape on Day 1? Does he also have something against them? Or are they too shy to confront him?
how can anyone call this ugly?
>>1048146 Perhaps there's more than one bureaucrat in town hall. Perhaps she was counting on being able to elevate to the mayor if needed. Perhaps she held out hope that Red Tape wasn't still holding a grudge. Perhaps Applejack thought this was her job, because she's the one who dealt with the building inspector.
Knowing how that laws of narrative work Red Tape discovered that he actually enjoyed the bats company and didn't bother to have it revised at the next city council meeting, at least that's what he said publicly. Everpony knows you don't return a pet to Fluttershy she'll break your legs if you do.
Sometimes you want to go
Where everypony knows your name,
and they're always glad you came.
You wanna be where you can see,
our troubles are all the same
You wanna be where everypony knows
Your name.
You wanna go where ponies know,
ponies are all the same,
You wanna go where everypony knows
your name.
Ohhhhh Red Tape soooo deserved it. Although It would be honest, one would think that the Apple Family might go along with opening a 'limited' bar setup...maybe once a week or something... I mean, that could be GOOD bits.
Oh well.... Enjoyable story. You deserve a hoof. /)
The town charter needs to have a "that was obviously a typo" clause written into it. This makes me wonder what the actual name of something like that is. A "common sense" clause? What's more, I have to wonder if something like this could actually happen in real life, if certain situations were just right, and certain powerful people were nasty enough to force it.
Anyway, this was enjoyable. I kept waiting for some off colored joke to be tossed in here or there, but you played it entirely straight. Aside from the fact that it's a bar that serves alcohol (which is a major plot point), this could be an actual episode. 
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