Note: This story will contain references to 'Hiatus'. Reading 'Hiatus' beforehand is recommended, but not necessarily required.

Enjoy!

YES!!! A SEQUEL!!!

Hurrah.

Yes, finally!

You have a better grip on Luna and Celestia, with only demi-canon personalities, than established characters. And this is why Hiatus was superior to your other fic

I know this is going to be good, and I hope you will sucseed with a (presumably) larger cast.

Good luck!

Looks like the ratebombers are out and about today.

Hurr.

This sounds interesting.....

And now Celestia sends out the prototype flyer in an attempt to be 'helpful'.

Awesome A SEQUAL YAAAAAAAAY

I don't know if I can wait until next christmas to get a #1 Co-Princess mug of my own.

Sir, this story is tracked!

>>8763287632

I'll admit, I had first written that scene with the mug saying "#1 Princess", but I remembered that wasn't exactly fair to Luna. It became "#1 Co-Princess" in the end.

love it

I have to say that I didn't expect this direction to be taken with a continuation of Hiatus, but I'm pumped to see where it goes!

This ought to be interesting! The perfect material for me to read while suffering from a temporal case of insomnia xD

Well, this is quite an interesting direction to take this story.  

It's unexpected to say the least, but it shows promise.  

It will be fun to see how you have the whole thing play out.

I am a bit worried about Luna's donut intake though.

Is it a possible addiction, just what do they put in those things anyway?

>>8818788187

Well, Pony Joe is a unicorn, so... magic, I guess?

And yes, I know it's an unexpected direction to take the story, but I have things planned out.

Luna picks up a new hobby. Time to play the guessing game and see if you folks can figure it out before the next chapter goes up (which is also the first time it's mentioned).

This ought to be interesting!

Waiting patiently for new chapter :3 xD

Incoming Derpy appearance.

Though I personally refer to her as 'Derpy', she'll always be 'Ditzy Doo' whenever she shows up in my fics. 'Derpy' seems more like one of those mean nicknames you use to mock someone, rather than an actual name.

I know this one was going to be good based on you previous work especially sens it being an sequel to Hiatus (best fanfic ever)

and the first chapter did not disappoint me at all, just as expected it was relay!!!! good

I want just want to add that i like the way you portray Luna and Celestia in Hiatus (and this story so far).

relay like you´r interpretation of there personalty´s in making both a bit of a prankster just having fun with each other. but still keep them serious and not completely random, and i like the over all building on Luna´s character, loves studying reading painting etc. its good to see that you take initiative to build on the characters. and last i like the Luna camp idea, first time i ever come across that concept before and im sure its going to be a blast reading it

>>8921489214

i agree whit you Axz, i like to way Luna and Celestia (especially Luna) was in Hiatus and in this one.

To characterizing Luna as a studious bookworm ho struggles a bit whit social interaction skills and her appearance to the people seams to correspond very well whit her appearance in Luna Eclipsed, and i do like seeing Luna that way, i think it somehow fits her quite well.

Btw Vargras i like the idea of making Luna interesting in painting, i think it goes very well in hand whit the way the fan community sees her (and my personal opinion), so thumps up on that one.

I was a bit unsure aboute the hole camp idea first when i read the description, but my fears are long forgotten this chapter was epic cant wait for more keep  the awesome chapters coming

great you've opened the door, now to walk through it... is that me in a door frame?

Haven't read it (or the comments) yet, but after Hiatus, this was an insta-follow.

...And now I've read it. In-story, I'd recommend Luna change "Reading" to "Literature", if I were engaged in a conversation over the flyer with her. However, the word "Reading" fits her personality, so I'm not actually suggesting you change it ; I love the story just the way it is. I'm just saying I can follow the organic feel of this story very well.

>>9032090320

No one ever said that social interaction was Luna's forte.

I actually held a pen in my mouth and talked to myself, just so I could get Celestia's speech right in this one.

Now to see if anyone misinterprets that comment before reading.

>>9146391463 so your saying you had a dick in your mouth to get Celestia's speach right?

>>9149191491

A pen. PEN.

>>9149191491  Must be a really small private eye if he can hold it in his mouth.

I've said it before and I'll say it again:

thanks for writing a story that's good, funny and doesn't involve the possible end of equestria

If your parents never had children, chances are you won't, either.~Dick Cavett

hard to image the allmighty fuhrer of equestria doing something mundane as painting

(yes i know she isnt a "tyrant" but i felt like saying it!"

i'd laugh if she turned out painting the next monet or picasso or something

>>9149291492 regarding the post you 'd at, that was such a post it hurt.

Anyway, I liked Hiatus, and find it pleasing that you continued in that universe. Please continue.

great

Next chapter will delve a bit into Celestia.

Nice one I loved the prequel and I'm loving this kinda weird how nobody else signed up I mean at least some other random campers

>>9454494544

I wouldn't expect many kids to sign up for a camp that has nothing but astronomy, reading, drawing, and painting.

>>9474894748 I would sign up because of the astronomy and reading art not so much cause I love astronomy and reading and gaming (I'm a nerd deal with it)

>>9529295292

You've also got to take into account the fact that Ponyville isn't all that big a town, I'd view it more as a glorified village than anything else.  

Also, sad to say, but seeing as the radio and the telephone were only created last year, I highly doubt they have any form of game station.  Us nerds are left out in that aspect I guess... ;-;

(By the way, if anyone reads that and catches the reference, then you get brownie points )

>>9406094060

Now, onto the matter at hand:

Why in the world have I not commented on this?  

Well, for starters, I can't see why I'm surprised about Luna's new 'hobby'.  It only makes sense, I mean, she is pretty much the goddess of the night.  Yet, I wouldn't really call it a hobby, because that makes it sound tedious and unimportant.  She is making stars, which in essence are giant, molten balls of assorted substances and elements.  Along with stars comes red giants, super novas and the occasional black hole - I would classify it more along the lines of an extreme sport.  Think of the fics and what happens when Twilight looses focus and screws up a spell, now think about what could happen if Luna does that exact same thing.  The consequences would be much greater, I can assure you that.

Next is the Ditzy Doo thing, and I have to say that that was pretty heart warming,  I'm not sure how other authors write Derpy - I tend to stay away from stories focusing on her - but I enjoy the way you do it.  She is just your normal average mare, with the exception of a lazy eye of course, no mental disability to be heard of.  Now you set her up as having a relationship with Luna, who then goes and gives her the money to pay for eye surgery, or something of the like?  Well that is extremely kind of Luna, and if it wasn't shown already, it really adds to her personality you've built.  Especially to people who haven't read Hiatus, shows she's compassionate and caring and the like.

And now you have Celestia coming up in the next chapter?  Hmm... We have seen little bits and pieces of her in your writing so far, but mainly in Luna's perspective.  From what you've shown so far, she seems like quite the tease, but it will be nice to see how you flesh out her character and build on what you already have.

I eagerly await the next chapter

>>9561295612

Okay, so it's not really a 'hobby'. It's still tedious, considering she can really only make one per night, but it's still important work. And though Twilight may be powerful, I'm pretty sure she can't make stars from scratch. As for the Ditzy Doo thing, my own headcanon has her as simply having an eye disorder, which also affects her depth perception and coordination. Leads to the 'Ditzy' part of her name. Other than that, she's completely normal. In regards to her relationship with Luna, she was gone for a thousand years. She doesn't really have any ties of her own, and the ones she does have are probably exceptionally strong.

And yep, more Celestia! I will say that it's a teensy bit darker (akin to the lucid dreaming about Luna's childhood during the Hearth's Warming Eve bonus chapter), but nothing too serious. While Hiatus itself was definitely all about Luna, I'm trying to spread it out more with this fic. Might even throw in an interlude later on that's about Celestia, and no one else.

I think you said in your blog here that people are saying this story isn't living up to Hiatus because, well... Let's face it, it's a different story. Sure, they are related, but the concept is entirely different despite being in the same continuity.

Regardless, I'm enjoying it (particularly those bits with Celly and Luna talking and overall just being your average sisters) for what it is, and hope to see more of this soon. =3

>>9598095980

Nah, I never said that. All I said was that the success Hiatus had was a complete and total fluke, and I doubt I'll be able to ever recreate that.

At the very least, it's built me up a nice little base of readers - namely, you guys.

>>9598295982

Oh, I wouldn't call it a fluke. Sure, it might have been at a good time, but it became popular because it was good, it was quite entertaining, to say the least.

And I'm sure you can recreate it. Maybe not this story (but I hope you do, and even better), maybe not the next (assuming there's one, please do one next too), but it'll happen.

>>9599495994

Nah, a lot of it was due to the old fimfiction layout. Any time a story was updated, it was reposted on the front page for everyone to see. If your story got featured, any updates put it right back up in the featured box again. Those two contributed a lot to how many views I've gotten.

Will write more tomorrow, and maybe get this chapter out as well. Dunno yet.

>>9561295612 gimmie the brownies I got it

>>9598295982 I don't think it was a fluke I think it's just people understood it better because it had happend while this is an off topic subject and by that I mean hiatus used the first episode of the seaspn to make the story while this uses a refernce from one episode so I think hiatus was just better formed at the start is basiclay what I'm saying

Hurrdidurr. I expected the CMC to pop up on that list too! xD

But yush, I get to read about Pip! I have read far too little fanfics about him. xD

Moar Celestia, and misinterpreting things! Wooooo!

Funnily enough I was just as confused as luna when I saw about the guard in the room and when he left I still had my suspicions I mean celestia s an all powerful bring,not hard to assume she could magic him and her outta bed instantly.

I c? Wut u did thar

That scene at the end is bordering on a Teen rating just because of what it implies, but I think I kept it vague enough to prevent that. It was too much fun to write anyways.

Good ol' misinterpretations. You are updating fast, I like that. =3

I particularly enjoy also just how friendly Luna has become with her guards.

>>9696896968

She's always struck me as being much more informal than Celestia. Celestia probably wouldn't mind if everyone else were more informal around her, but she's been around the public longer than Luna has - treating Celestia as royalty is basically habit at this point. Given Luna's relatively unknown status, she can get away with a lot more than her sister can.

>>9695896958

OH YOU!~

>>9698496984

Damn 'Sun', sh!t just got real for the first half.  I'm glad the tone shifted back by the end or I would've had to finish filling my #1 Co-Princess mug with tears.

>>9699996999

I did say in an earlier comment that this chapter would be a teensy bit darker, primarily because of that first half. Nothing too severe, however.

moar!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yay!

fantastic

Quite good!

And funnily enough.... I can almost see pre-NMM Luna being MORE formal because she'd be pulling the Applebloom "Ah AM a big pony!" thing. ;)

>>9757997579

Probably. Post-NMM, however, she seems more set on just reestablishing ties rather than try to keep with formalities. She's got a wounded reputation and she's trying to fix it, even if it means throwing out the 'Princess' title entirely.

Have a pretty cute idea in mind, but it'll have to wait for a later chapter.

i see no clowns or jokers???

i are confused

>>9804098040

Took me a bit, but I got your joke. I guess Pinkie makes for a pretty good clown, but Rarity isn't much of a joker.

It's 6:40 and I should sleep...

Eh -blam!- it, going from the last one I know I will not regret staying awake a bit longer.

As a rule, ponies have dirty, filthy minds. Or that just might be us. Probably both.

This chapter is all full of goodies. In particular, I think you handled Celestia's "immortal's regret" flawlessly. To be honest, I would never ask for immortality, especially if I had no one to share it with.

>>9833398333

Oh, Celestia does have someone to share it with - Luna. As stated in the chapter, however, Celestia had essentially banished herself when she also banished her sister. They both basically spent a thousand years alone, though Luna certainly had it worse.

>>9834498344

Well, that's all up in the air. If you take Lauren Faust's word as Word of God, she said that Luna was effectively comatose while Nightmare Moon was in control, although by your interpretation, which might as well be superior considering your writing, Luna DID have it worse. At least Celestia got to spend time with others, even if by her perspective their lives only lasted minutes. Luna was alone, period. It could be argued that she'd end up feeling that way even if she never would have had to banish her sister in the first place, though.

>>9836198361

Oh lawd, saying my interpretation of things is superior to Lauren Faust's. High praise, indeed.

Still, probably safe to say that being immortal ain't all it's cracked up to be.

>>9836698366 see I don't get this why do people say that's the worst thing about being immortal if your immortal the goverment could capture and test on you  FOREVER.

>>9855598555

Hmm, that depends on the person.  Seeing as Celestia is all powerful and easily could out magic almost anyone, I find it unlikely that she would ever be captured, and if she was, not for long.  Going back to what I first said, it depends on the person.  Yeah eternal pain and suffering would be extremely awful, but so can eternal loneliness.  Loneliness tends to eat you inside out, slowly filling you to the point where living a life alone doesn't seem worth it anymore.  It would seem Celestia made these bonds with these ponies to forget about the loneliness, to forget her pain.  But when they pass, it all comes flooding back, with Luna gone, she will always be truly alone.  She has no one to share eternity with, yes new ponies will enter her life, but they will always leave.  I would say that that would have to be the worst part of immortality, but that's just me I guess.

>>9836698366

I really liked this chapter, it had so many different little scenarios in it that varied in emotional impact.  It's good to see you can mix chapters up.

This was in fact a bit darker, that little scene in the beginning was quite sad.  Yet, I can't help but think it was a little rushed.  It all seemed to go a little too fast, I think you could have drawn that out a little more.  Celestia's all depressed and down, gushing her pent up feelings [that she has been holding in for thousands of years for that matter] to Luna, and trying to teach her a lesson.  Luna goes to say one thing and then Celestia is already over her 'mistake' lesson, agreeing with Luna.  I just kind of thought that seeing as Celestia held that in so long, there would have been a much larger breakdown, and she would need  a lot more calming down than one or two nuzzles from her sister.  Not that it wasn't good, it just felt like it lacked a little.

Then you have the scene with her and the guard playing blackjack, that was really light-hearted and sweet.  As you said, it shows us how laid back Luna is compared to how her sister is viewed as.  Finally when you had her go to her sisters room and heard the guard in there... xD

Maybe Luna isn't as innocent as we think

>>9907699076

Don't worry, I'm not through with Celestia just yet. I've got more planned for her.

And hey, Luna DID get all those love letters during Hiatus. She's probably had a few things planted in her head that she wouldn't want to admit to knowing about.

>>9907699076

Also keep in mind, this wasn't intended for Celestia to 'open up the floodgates', so to speak. She wasn't planning on telling her sister EVERYTHING - not yet, at least.

>>9918299182

Ah, okay, that tones down my confusion with that part.  I guess I kind of went into reading that with the mind set of it going to be a giant venting scene, so to speak, but if you have more too come of Celestia and her internal struggles then I can rest easy.

Sorry for the misunderstanding

Apologies in advance for the next few chapters - I haven't written Fluttershy, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, or Pinkie since my first fic. Haven't written Pip at all, though he shouldn't be as much of an issue. Characterizations might be a bit off at first, but I should get a handle on it soon enough.

I'm liking the way you're portraying Luna here; a little socially awkward, and a little out of sorts without being stupid.

More than a gimmicky "So and so does this, wacky things ensue!" I'm seeing this story as Luna's way to reach out to other ponies and to find herself a purpose beyond the obvious bringing of the night. The camp might be a simple project, but very important things might come out of it for her. Of course, I might be looking too far into things, but still..

One thing that stuck out to me was the scene where Luna was creating stars. I just wanted someone to come by and point out, yeah Celestia controls the sun, her sister has MADE how many of the things? And she's the weaker and less important one? Yeah.

All and all, Im glad I found the story, and I'll be watching for updates eagerly.

Another good chapter. I enjoy the expansion of the two sisters you have done. I shall patiently await the next chapter once the inspiration has struck you again.

Loved 'tia's knowledge on fun, also her longing to be treated more normally was done well. This is not much of a stretch of her established personality (gotcha).  

Hope you don't do anything nasty to ditzy... How could you be so mean?

Btw, I lI've your writing style, keep up the good work.

I was kind of expecting the camp to be in one of the forests away from any large cities to avoid light-pollution. Loved conclusion-jumping Luna; I knew that 'Tia wouldn't be doing anything, but a small part of me worried with Luna. What if...

Keep up the skilled writing, I cannot wait to see the mane 6. Pinkie and Dashie... I cannot imagine them sitting still for more than 5 min. AJ as well...

>>100387100387

The sun is also MUCH larger than the moon. Just keep that in mind.

Celestia's domain of power likely applies to other things as well.

>>100465100465

Nah, not doing anything bad to Ditzy/Derpy. My headcanon of her is that it's simply an eye disorder, and that she's actually mentally normal.

Update tomorrooooooooooooow. Just need to finish out some dialogue and some other things.

My mind wandered in the exact same places as Luna's.

I'm not sure if that's a good or a bad thing. xD

Can't wait for more! =D

I love the way Pipsqueak is written.

He sounds just like a child would, and that's a good thing.

D'AAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!

Yes, an update!

Just a quick question:

You referred to the Royal Residence as a castle, but it is actually more of a palace. There is a significant difference. Is it intentional or a mistake?

>>103839103839

What he said

For a moment there, I actually thought I was going to die.  I could feel my heart melting at the end there.

That was just a perfect little moment, when Luna comes to realize they were already her friends this whole time, and she revels in the time they spend together, or will spend.  It kind of shows Luna's, I don't want to say naive-ness so how about, social awkwardness in these kinds of situations.  

Also pip was done decently well.  He didn't talk much in this chapter, but when he did his dialog was mostly short and to the point, suited for a child like mind.  When you had him tug on her mane and ask if she could do another painting - which was extremely adorable by the way - I think you showed off his innocence that comes with being a young child.  

Overall, great chapter as always, though I fear what will happen if they leave Pinkie alone in the kitchen

>>103865103865

A mistake. I'll correct it.

>>103866103866

Pip didn't have much dialogue in 'Luna Eclipsed' either. Just something to keep in mind.

Happy Luna is happy; now for everything to blow up in her face hilariously (in a funny amusing way that you could expect to find on the show), the question is how, and will there be a friendship report at the end.

...did you just set Pinkie loose in what is probably one of the best equipped, best stocked kitchens in Equestria?

This should be good.

And Pip was the source of much d'awww.

After reading a certian story just before this I don't think I'm comfertable with the whole pip and luna thing but otherwise good chapter looking forward to the rest

>>104368104368

Look at the tags. Notice the complete lack of a 'Romance' tag.

I'm not seeing the issue here.

great

Ummm, where did Fluttershy go? You never mentioned her after they all entered the throne room.

>>104931104931

She's still there - she's simply remained quiet thus far, true to her nature. Likely just wandered around with everyone else. They'll all have a bit of time in the spotlight, don't worry.

Oh lawdy, the things I have planned for this next chapter. Might take another day or two to get it out.

You guys are aware that, compared to other authors, I update extremely quickly, right?

This is just so fucking perfect that god him self should come down and give you a bro hoof for your awesomeness

This was just omg for the fucking win! this needs MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A little bit of crude humor at the end, but I couldn't leave it out. Once it popped up in my head, I simply had to include it.

Shuffled some wording around at the end, should flow a bit better now.