OOOoooo Wound regenaration... Love the story so far. Keep it coming!

Metal Warriors - Manowar

MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

2 years

I changed some stuff in the first 3 chapters, mostly grammar errors, but I did change a couple pieces of dialogue in Chapter 1. It's not a lot, so you don't need to re-read it, and it won't impact the plot at all, just thought I'd tell you guys.

In other news, since I have nothing better to do and I found some awesome music to listen to while writing, I'm working on Chapter 5 as I type. Hope you guys like it! And thanks for reading the story, as well as liking/favoriting it. It means a lot to me

The guy from FJ here.

I'm a little confused.

Everything is steamed powered, right?

So how do the elements of harmony exist?

There magic powered and you give no other explanation for there reason of being there.

Unless magic exists in a few ponies, it's a very rare thing or just a myth in this world, I don't know...

Anyway I'm gonna move onto the next chapters.

Well.... I'm not exactly sure how I feel about this story, it's story line so far is interesting, but it doesn't feel like MLP anymore just one character from it. That being Twilight Sparkle. I'm not sure what too say, I like it, but at the same time I don't... I'm gonna give it a fave and see where it goes.

I feel like you could of given a little history to this version of Equestria instead of that little description.

It doesn't give us much to go on, and leaves me a little confused. I guess I will just wait and see where it goes.

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I do see your point. I also feel like the history of this universe is a bit under-explained, but I can't think of a proper way to explain it, especially this late in the story. If I do end up finding a way, I'll be sure to include it.

Thanks for the feedback as well, every bit helps.

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I look forward to see where it goes.

I love the akwardness