Manly tears were shed...even though I am female

Gah! Ugh.... My heart... To much sweetness... Dying of... Awesome fic... Best way to die... Ever. *Expires.*

>>10399971039997

Oh god. The sweetness is contagious! gah! *dead*

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I don't think Spike would ever look at Twilight as a mom.

That aside this story has great emotion.

Such a wonderful fic...

I d'awwwwwwwed. So hard.

so. very. hard.

Quite a nice story. Well done, Myth!

WHY IS THIS NOT FEATURED!

>>10406351040635 Not enough views, not enough likes, not enough favorites.

Algorithm is used to decide these things, give it time, perhaps the story will continue to gain popularity and will be features. Kay? ^_^

A beautiful story that shows that there's family even in friendship.

There has been a good run of Spike/Twilight fics lately!

this is just a great story short, simple and enjoyable

out of

and i wasnt at any point ... urm insert applejack lie face here

Simple and sweet.  Too many writers try this sort of thing and get caught up on finicky little points that detract from the story.  You pulled it off perfectly though by keeping it simple and having them say what needed to be said.

Hats off to you!

The pure amount of love and Daww is too damn high!

>>10400461040046

I agree with this one. Sister perhaps, but not mom. Very sweet story though.

Awwww, that ending is so sweat

Diabetes!!!! I now have Diabetes

This is everything I love in a Spike story. Please make more.

I want to thank all of you for liking this one-shot... but I couldn't have done this without Darth Link 22, look out for his fics that his writing now

I CANNOT EXPRESS HOW MUCH LOVE I GIVE THIS STORY...

*sniff*

It's awesome! and I cried...I ought to write another Twilight and Spike story! THank you soooo much for posting! You made my day!

I CANNOT EXPRESS HOW MUCH LOVE I GIVE THIS STORY...

*sniff*

It's awesome! and I cried...I ought to write another Twilight and Spike story! THank you soooo much for posting! You made my day!

No matter how much I love Spilight shipping, I love this story as well.

    It is beautiful and comforting to see that little by little, this reality is made present in the community. some have that hope, to see a day in the series, a chapter where this statement, this reality, mother and son, it would be more sad if dirijen well written and well, can be crowned as one of the great, but although beautiful is dangerous, it can also mark the end of it.

and you know the why ....

Es bello y reconfortante ver que poco a poco, esta realidad se haga presente en la comunidad. algunos tenemos esa esperanza, en ver un dia en la serie, un capitulo donde se de esta declaracion, esta realidad, madre e hijo, seria algo triste es mas si lo escriben bien y dirijen bien, puede coronarse como uno de los grandes, pero, aunque bello es peligroso, tambien puede marcar el fin de la misma.

y ustedes saben el por que....

I'd just like to interject for a moment here...

According to canon, Spike was raised by Celestia for the first few years of his life. But this is better.

And I like imagining Celestia's response to the letter. "Hey Luna! Twilight just got knocked up! I think she says Spike did it!"

Can we get atleast 1 more chapter?

Well since my phone won't let me send PMs on it I'll just reply here

but like a chapter on "the Very next day" like what twilight and spike do for the day or a few years later where they and twilights friends celebrate spike being her official son or something

>>12752051275205

Hmmm.... That does sound tempting... will need to speak to my Collab

Aww nicely done

Since you guys ask so nicely for another chapter... giving it to you

D'aw! So cute! I prefer the brother/sister relationship, myself, but this was awesome.

He noticed Twilight doing the same on her own body, before walking to his side and looking down at him. “Now Spike, hold onto me please,” she instructed. He complied as he wrapped his arms around her leg. “Now close your eyes, until I say to open them.”

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He was confused, but obeyed nonetheless. Twilight used her magic to form a sphere around them that soon closed in on itself. With a pop, they were gone.

>>13974831397483

Thank you

Great story, but you just might want to fix that little bit where it shows some code

She crossed off “Send Report to Princess Celestia” before she spoke. “Just stand still for a moment please Spike,” she instructed him as he obeyed. She closed her eyes and focused her magic. A lavender aura surrounded Spike, and he began to feel a tingling sensation originating from his feet. He looked at them, but nothing happened. The aura ceased and he looked around his body to see any changes. No changes were made and he just shrugged it off.

He noticed Twilight doing the same on her own body, before walking to his side and looking down at him. “Now Spike, hold onto me please,” she instructed. He complied as he wrapped his arms around her leg. “Now close your eyes, until I say to open them.”

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He was confused, but obeyed nonetheless. Twilight used her magic to form a sphere around them that soon closed in on itself. With a pop, they were gone.

>>13975161397516

Been fixed

Lovely

HNNG~

YES. CONTINUE! Or something. Either way, I enjoy expanding upon the SpiLight relationship whether it's romantic or motherly.

not a bad story, but I thought it was already established that Twilight was spike's mother...

Ah well.

Oh. My. Gosh.

I just gotta say this fic is damn near perfect.  The first chapter is something I wish they'd touch more on in the show (come on Season 3...), while the second is just cute beyond words!

Kudos to you my good man!

The level of D'AAAAAAWWWW is too damn high!

I really wish the show could do something like this. It would show they had serious guts if they made an episode specifically aimed for adopted kids with Spike and Twilight as the main focus. This is one of my favorite stories on this site just because I support the mother/son relationship of those two.

For now, I'll just stick with this story! I don't think I can give you enough props for this. You sir, kick ass!

Love it!

I hope their relationship is defined more clearly in the series. They need more sickeningly sweet moments together.

I personally dislike the idea of the two having a mother/son relationship. Lauren Faust's original intention was to have Celestia raise Spike, and it's pretty clear (or so I thought) that Spike is supposed to be a stand-in for a little brother. The show is, after all, aimed at little girls who typically have younger siblings, not kids.

Although I do hope that this image of their relationship dies sooner rather than later, this is probably the only fanfic ever written (aside from everything written by The Descendant ) that that I really loved.

And thank-you for pointing out that major problem with Winter Wrap-Up. Cindy Morrow obviously did not think that one through very carefully. And yet, even if he never would have drowned on the show, it is still unfortunately canon that the ponies were laughing at him while he got sick. That episode cannot be fixed.

TWILIGHT NOOOO!!

Don't shove Spike down the hole of the Pegasus machine in the Rainbow Factory!!

In the Rainbow Factory, where your fears and horrors come true...

Sorry everyone, the reference had to be done.

Aside from that, a real heartwarming fic. Now if you'll excuse me, I need to call 911. My heart stopped functioning 2minutes ago

OHMEGARSH!   this story was to damn sweet.......I did a sonic rainpuke!

For realz.....this was very heartwarming!  keep it up!

Okay, I've got really über-fantabulousticly-awesome news, and very, very minorly bad news

über-fantabulousticly-awesome news:  this is f***ing amazing!  Keep it up!

Very, very minorly bad news: in the first chapter you ought to put horizontal lines between your perspective changes.  It really tripped me up at first.

All-in-all: you are awesome.

>>12508501250850

Lol, it can read that way.

That was a cute story. Even though I think that the mother/son thing is kind of a weird, though generally nice, way to go with Twilight and Spike, I liked it.

Kudos to you, sir.

Ermahgurd, Spike and Twilight mother-son fan fic! I absolutely love those kind!

>>10403791040379 I'd say more like a sister.

“Well of course,” Twilight said, checking off “Take a Tour of the Weather Factories” and “Buy Spike a Suvionear”. “You didn’t think all that was simple did you?”

It's "souvenir," spelled wonkily because it's originally French.

But yes, many d'awws are had.

>>14115681411568

Thank you

D'awww.

>>14200131420013

They agree

D'awww.

At first, I was worried that you continued this story.  It was great as it was.  However, after reading this, I was pleasantly surprised.  This was a beautiful story.  I thought  it was funny how Twilight had 'Attend Pinkie’s ‘Pinkie Sensed’ Surprise Party' on her checklist.  Excellent work!

Sooooo cute I lvoe it

I want to see a one shot comedy sequel based on " Now I must return to Canterlot, I think a certain captain will be interested to know he is an uncle now.”  With Celestia not telling Shining the important details.

(thought if you think about it, I wonder what her parent's told Shining when she brought home a baby dragon from her exam..."Oh him? He's Twilight's son, yea she hatched him and everything!" I'm sure they would leave out the part about being plants though. They surely had a very strange day, now that I think about it.)

“Now I must return to Canterlot, I think a certain captain will be interested to know he is an uncle now.”

Be careful how you word it when you tell him Celestia, don't want to cause any unnecessary drama... or do you?

Cuuute Story

>>15679951567995

Thank you... if you liked this, you'll love the sequel "Project Ascension"

I enjoyed this alot. Well done.

>>15765421576542

Thank You

Well, you can definatly write a touching story. Great job

You knowI was doing dang good until the adoption papers came in, and then I broke down crying

:D :D :D

Yeah. Easily one of the most heart warming adopt fics EVER!!!!

I love how you portrayed this! Love, love, love!

My heart is filled.

>>16385481638548

I'm glad you like it

Great emotional story you got here, (Twilight and Spike as Mother and Son), not many of those stories around.

Great Work!

Beautiful, just beautiful. Still a fan of the other relationships with Spike and Twilight.

But this relationship for the two was just as amazing as all the others, if not more so.

... soooooooooo sweat I-I CAN'T *dies smiling*

>>16938271693827

Read the sequel "Project Ascension"

It was pretty nice, I also prefferred the brother and sister relationship but this was a well written story of those two overcoming a great deal of hardship together.

Very enjoyable. I haven't really subscribed to one school of Twilight/Spike relationship preference or the other before - whether Twilight should be a mother/son or brother/sister. I guess there's a couple of other schools, come to think: one is the boring old master/slave/BFF circumstance,  the other being the... ugh, clop/pedo version. DISGUSTING.

Okay, now I don't know where I stand anymore. This story was excellent in it's idea and presentation, and it made a strong argument for the two main characters in regards to their maturing needs. I get that Twilight would be a less studious and matronly mare if she had a reason, and I know that Spike deserves to be more than just the manservant (or dragonservant, whatever) for Twilight and her friends. At the very least, you'd think Twilight would try and set him up with Rarity's little sister or something. Come ON, he DESERVES SOMETHING. So obviously the natural progression would be for the pair to recognize their need for family and make it an official thing. Cool.

... anyway. This has made me question my beliefs in what I had perceived as a pretty strange relatioinship to begin with. Heck, some have suggested that Spike is a PET, and I think that's ABSURD! I mean, my dumb cat is like my slow little brother... the one that scratches up my bathrobe and likes to vomit under my bed. Spike CAN'T just be a pet!

This was very touching. I'm just confused now. I think I need to lie down. Thank you for recommending it to me, Myth. Thumbed and favorited.

Heyo!  OtterMatt here, one of the founding members of WRITE, here to do a review of your story!

Being completed and with over 4000 total views, obviously nothing I say here is really going to affect this story much, but hopefully, the points I go over here will be both fuel for future stories and places to watch out for.

Right off the bat, you've got some great emotion in this story.  I love the feels, man.  The way you've handled your backstory really seems good, like it actually is part of canon and we just don't know it yet.  The dynamic between the characters is fleshed out pretty well, and rather believably.  I like the way Twi really went all out to make the first day of their new family special.  On a more editorial front, your mechanics are very good.  Scarcely anything to point out, aside from one or two instances of some comma splicing, but you should be proud of your work.  You've clearly spent some time on your story, and it shows.

Some things to consider, and I'll just pull out some examples as I go:

The first rays of sunshine shined upon Twilight Sparkle’s eyes, which slowly began to open. Letting out a groan as she opened her eyes hesitantly, she tried to block the sun shining on her face.

Overall your descriptions in this story are a bit... what's the word I'm looking for...  basic, I suppose.  You're trying to compensate for a weaker description by coloring the text with words that fit marginally at best.  In the above example, you say "the sun shined and woke up Twilight," but the addition of words like "upon", "hesitantly" and such turn the prose just the slightest tinge of purple.  You also need to switch up your word usage and structure as you go.  Twice in just two lines, you use "shine" and that her eyes opened.  When I see that as a reviewer, what that says to me is that your descriptions need work, and you've noticed that, but you weren't really sure where to do it or how.

IF it were me, mind, I'd think about the scene.  Go ahead and be a bit expansive in your writing here, because it's the opening of the chapter.  It's idyllic, pastoral, even.  Describe the light, describe the stillness of the room, etc.  SEE it in your mind's eye, and then let us see it through your words.

Spike did so, and practically squealed with excitement. He was in Cloudsdale. The Wonderbolts’ Stadium stood proud in the distance, the weather factories were all clumped together in the distance and Celestia’s Sun gave the clouds a warm glow.

This is EXACTLY the type of thing I'm on about.  This is Spike's first ever glimpse of Cloudsdale!  It should be grand, sweeping, majestic!  Don't be afraid to spend time on descriptions.  Hell, Tolkien used up whole pages describing cities and mountains.  That's a bit excessive to me, but you get the gist.

The only other thing I would mention is the supporting cast.  The dialogue seems a bit heavy to me, and really, my only recommendation for that is just to keep reading it out loud.  Have fun with it, roleplay as your cast members.  Most of the dialogue in the story is accurate to the characters without going overboard, but it tends to come out like the characters are reading a script, not like they're really being natural with it, especially in the party scene.  I totally understand, though, it's not easy to write dialogue for so many different characters all in one go.

So, after all them words up there, you might be slightly confused; did I like it, or not?

Final Verdict: 4.5/5 Pinkies

You bet your flank I did.  This is a heartwarming story, heavy on the warm fuzzies, but not so saccharine that I feel I need to visit my dentist afterwards.  More to the point, though, it indicates to me that you have a pretty decent future as a writer.  Keep working and keep learning—but most importantly, keep writing!

- OtterMatt, WRITE Assignment Admin and Composer Laureate

Awws, loved it

>>18502091850209

Thank you

I just love SpiLights!

And this one is epic please continue!

The paragraph with Twilight's epiphany of "wow, I've been a jerk" seemed a bit rushed (maybe some flashbacks from Twilight's perspective?)  but I did enjoy the premise.

>>20272432027243

Good point... will try and rectify it :D

I liked the thought in this chapter. Twilight planning everything to make a perfect day (including the rainbow part) was great, and I enjoyd and the fact that Fluttershy can understand the different meanings of "hoo".

>>18214011821401 diane duane spent 2 1/2 chapters describing new york bro.

>>20272962027296 easily one of the best twilight and spike centered stories i have ever read

>>21179212117921

Thank you

You sir...made me cry.   

And I'm not just talking a few shed tears, I'm talking genuine heart-felt sobs here.

I'm normally absorbed in the stories I read, but this one...this one took my heart, and then drop-kicked liquid rainbow into it before setting off a rainboom just for good measure.

Your created one of the most heartfelt Twilight and Spike family fics I've ever read.  And mind you, I've read quite a few by now.

Still, I cannot thank you enough for this one, as it's getting my favorite and has a place of honor in the archives of fic I will read again and again.  Thank you, from the bottom of my now severely exploded heart, thank you.  

>>21324132132413

You should also thank my friend and Co-Writer Darth Link 22, check out his fics here...

Also check the sequel Project Ascension (also a mother-tone in it)

It is a fucking crime that this has such a small amount of reviews. It's a great story.

Al right, it may be a bit too sweet, and the way everyone is happy for them and acepting their new relations may be.. questionable.

I'm not a big fan of this mother and son relation. I'm actually a Spilight fan. But this story is simply good. Well done.

Before I became a member of Fimfiction, I remember this was one of my first stories I read, and it filled me up to the brim. Twilight finally realizes that Spike needs her in his life, not only as a friend, but as a caring mother toward him. In turn Twilight realizes how much she needs Spike. I wish they would do an episode maybe in Season Four with this kind of theme,or with Spike just feeling alone real badly, and Twilight with the rest of The Mane Six finally sees how Spike feels about being left alone while they go out on adventures.

Perfect way to end a day with a son. This was a very touching, and beautiful fimfic. I just really hope they would do an episode like this in a way, this would be a great episode I think. Excellent job!

You should propably add a line or something like that whenever the POV switches.The first time that happened it really disrupted the flow of the story for me.

liquid pride

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. There is no other word to describe it.

Aww..I love it! Twilight's tears and Spike's smile simply beautiful. Conicer did an awesome job with this.

I like the new cover art, it fits to the story a little better in my opinion.

well, i cried...no no i didnt i sobbed like a baby...Good show lad....

Beautiful story - needs something in season 4 about spike and twilight, perhaps as a flashback.

“Ohmygosh!WhenmytailwasgoingstraightIknowsomethinghappenedlastnightwiththetwoofyoubutIcouldn’tfigureoutwhatthatwasuntilmyeyeswateredandIknewyoutwohadasadhappymomentandwhenIspoketoyourowlhegavethreeWhosandIknewyoutoldTwilightyoulovedherasamomSpikeandIwasallcryinginhappinessandknewthatIhadtothrowyoutwoaparty,”

Perhaps i've been around too long but i could read this as if it was a normal sentence!

Awwwwwwwwwwww

You know, Chapter one could basically be a one shot on its own if you lengthened it a little.

It was very heartwarming.

>>23900262390026

It was... but Darthlink and I decided on a chapter 2 (to make it more heartwarming)