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NorsePony
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This is very good. I see absolutely nothing wrong with this. Great work,
Should be "protecting the Princess." or "protecting the Princess, Celestia."
in all honesty?
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i loved itdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
Loved it. Short sex scene, but a good one. I enjoyed the fight they had and how it was used to build up to the sex scene. This actually seems like it could happen.
1502377 Or, "Protecting Princess Celestia."
Damn. I mean... damn.
Wonderful scene-building, I love the sense of forlornness, loss, and shame you built into it. The fight was well-scripted and described- I had to keep myself from rushing through it.
A rather abrupt transition, but it fits well in the story. And... damn. You've got a way with words, there.
I really like this!
That was a remarkably efficient clop scene you wrote there. It's not a very long part of the story, but you choose your words so well that it feels so rich and vivid. I can smell their lovemaking and hear the slapping of their bodies against one another even though you don't go in depth on those details.
That is a talent, good sir, and you should be proud because you have it.
1502367 1502392 1503013 I'm glad you liked it.
1502377 1502633 1502747 The misplaced capital was an intentional choice. It was intended to reflect Rooibos' slightly odd speech patterns (which, in turn, were intended to demonstrate the formal tone of the Ooa'O dialect when "translated" to Equestrian/English), and also was meant to show his mental distance from the reality of Canterlot and the princesses.
1502545 Aw, thanks. That's high praise.
1502656 Thanks a bunch. I'm flattered you liked it, and my writing style, so much. I've got warm fuzzies over here.
1503222 I wonder if I can get a plaque: "Norse Pony, Master of Efficient Clop." I kid, I kid. I'm very pleased by your praise. It means a lot to me to hear people reading into my words. That's a good feeling. : D
Thanks for reading, everyone.
1504519
Not really that much. It's not praise when it's true. If it was an exaggeration (which it obviously isn't. look at the up votes!) then it's "praise". I'm just being....honest. I'm no Applejack, but I shall use the Element of Honesty to rate all stories!
1504519 Ah, that makes much more sense.
Wow. Wow! That was really awesome! I too think you did an excellent job portraying the battle and the sex, to the point where it all seems plausible. At no point was I struck with that sense of "yeah right" or "isn't that convenient?" A thoroughly enjoyable read!
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
*A lion prowls in, growling in disgust!* We are greatly offended by this story! We only eat our zebra neighbors in the ways they ask us to! *he flashes a toothy grin* And then they eat us in return.
Okay that was a totally unexpected turn at the end there...
Interesting turn of events, even if I thought it was unnecessarily specific. I do feel like it accelerated a little too fast, but then maybe that's what you were going for.
I must not have looked too closely at the description, because I didn't expect the sex. But everything before that... Whoa! Great character, a wonderful look at Luna, and quite a lot of fantastic imagery. You don't often see fics under 10k words that can really take an Adventure tag.
2585847 Haha, sorry about the surprise sex. Glad you liked it. : D
I'd love to see Rooibos' reaction if he just fathered a foal with the "Mother and Daughter of the Moon..."