Grammar needs work in some places, along with the occasional wording mix-up (greatful =/= grateful, etc.), but certainly an interesting idea. I'll wait for more before I decide anything else.

OK dude i'm going to totally be honest applejack and tell you what i feel about this....THIS IS AWESOME!

You have my attention

got me interested, will we also get to choose the race? if you do i hope you include all 3

This is interesting. Carry on.

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I meant for the story to be race neutral so the reader could choose whatever, but I'll try and figure out a way to have that choice put in.

Exilent can't wait until the next part but one thing. You're supposed to get your Pip-Buck on the day of your cute-ceañera so if you don't have a cutie mare yet (implied by the fact you're about to take the C.A.T.) how do you have one?

>>10866401086640

Well, since all the Stables are build differently, I decided to make this one of the Stable's quirks that separates it from all the others. One of those for this Stable would be to have a Stable-wide C.A.T. that all the students have to take, and another is that all the foals get a Pipbuck at a specific age when they are younger. I based this Stable off of the starting one from Fallout 3.

>>10886101088610

Thanks for clearing that up.

Interesting, but it's kinda complicated for me. Maybe I'm just stupid, I dunno. Anyhow - thumbs up!

Ahh, a history about a new upcomming game, that is about a history that got inspired of a cartoon and tha same game...

I like where this is going. Added to my watch list and a tump up from me. And do not think about that tump down that you have, Fo:E have some haters that give all the stories tump downs.

The only bad thing i have to say is that there is none emphasis on the type of pony that you are. And a history after this point would distinguish a lot, upen if you are a unicron, earth pony or a pegasus. Think abot how difrent the jobs are for them, just to take one example

>>10980901098090

Thanks for the tips. This isn't at all an official part of the FoE Game, just a bit I wrote so I could have some reference when I applied.

I'll add in the choice of earth, unicorn, or pegasus in the next update.

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you are wellcome

I like where this is going. I think you should make it so certain choices let you succeed at choices later. Like (If you have the bat and want to use it, turn to X004. If you don't have the bat or you want to use your hooves, turn to X008).

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Already planning that for the next part, though it'll all be more behind the scenes then that.