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Shadowed Rainbow 55949

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    Shadowed Rainbow's Stories (5)

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    The many stories known as "creepypastas" are much like campfire stories - stories spread around that are meant to scare.  But what if those stories turned out to be true?

    And worse still, what if you had to experience them?

    The Mane Cast and others find themselves trapped in a dangerous game at the will of the Iridescents, color-shifting ponies who are the primary hosts in a hub of these stories turned fact.  In order for the Equestrian residents to safely return home, they are forced to traverse and survive several levels of these urban legends, all the while attempting to seek out what are known as Slender Notes, attributed to the infamous legend of Slender Pony.  But in a plethora of worlds such as those the legends bring, survival is never guaranteed.

    Can the residents of Equestria make it through the various tales that await them as they play through the Iridescents' trials? Who will survive, who will perish, and who will meet a fate worse than death?  And what purpose do the Iridescents and their assistants really serve in the Hubworld?

    All creepypastas involved belong to their respective owners.

    IMPORTANT NOTE: Pony-based grimdark fics, as entertaining as they are, will NOT be included here as story worlds. Since they take place in the universe of Friendship is Magic itself, I may give a mention to them, but they will not be worlds that the participants enter and are forced to go through, due to their setting and characters involved.

    First Published
    4th Aug 2012
    Last Modified
    29th Sep 2012

    Comments ( 324 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Alright, creepypasta fic is a go! :pinkiehappy:

    Now, there's something I'll be doing with this fic that's actually kind of unique: considering how many creepypastas there are and how many opportunities there will be, while I have some major key events planned out, I don't know every single creepypasta I'll include.

    So... if anypony has any suggestions, I shall be happy to hear them, and just might use them.  Which ponies make it through or not, though, will ultimately be for me to decide. :pinkiecrazy:

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1019095

    Please, anything BUT Jeff the killer. That guy's just plain terrifying.

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I'm sorry, but you've earned my love.

    IDC what anyone else says, if you can make a Creepy Pasta adaptation of MLP I SHALL LOVE YOU FOREVER!!

    Now I must read!!  :rainbowkiss:

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This...Will...Be...Epic!  :pinkiegasp:

    Very good intro, and good set up for the things to come!  I can't wait to read more!  :pinkiehappy:

    One problem, I think you stumbled over your words:  "The first speaker shook her head in exasperation, causing her the shimmering colors of he mane and body to shift in waves before they settled, into their steady change of color."

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Bay-oot-ifi-ule.

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1019095

    I wrote that before reading. Never mind.

    P.S. Make them play Pilobolus!

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    YES! I'VE BEEN LOOKING FOR THIS KIND OF STORY!

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Please no Herobrine or anything Amnesia / Slender related x.x i get REALLY SCARED REALLY FAST!! Im gonna read it...

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1026756

    kay.. nevermind. I LOVE IT SO FAR!!! Tracking once i have learned how XD

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    So many creepypastas, so many lost hours of sleep.

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1026613 Hey, earning your love is awesome in my book!

    >>1026631 Thanks! :pinkiehappy:  And dangnabbit, you can scour through a story a zillion times to make sure you get things right before you post, and there's often one little thing or two that slips by. :eeyup:   I shall edit that shortly...

    >>1026634 That's one of the ost unique ways I've ever seen "beautiful" spelled as. :twilightsmile:

    >>1026649 Pilobolus?  Seems I have a new creepypasta to look up!

    >>1026742 Lol, nice pic!  What's it from?

    >>1026791 Faving is basically tracking. :twilightsmile:

    >>1026821 I feel your pain friend - that, and places like TV Tropes, Cracked.com, and Youtube. :pinkiecrazy:

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    By Celestia's teats!  Jeff, Slender Man, the russian sleep experiment!  This story is gonna rock, I can feel it in my pin!

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1026855 I chuckled at the beginning of that comment!  But glad you think it's gonna rock, and I think it will as well. :scootangel:

    #14 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    lost silver please

    #15 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1026871 You'll be happy to know that I have a fondness for the Pokemon game hacks... :pinkiehappy:

    #16 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1026847 I Bing! :twilightblush: ... It doesn't have that catchy ring like "I Google!" :ajsleepy:

    #17 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I like it this story offers more than the ones I've read before

    I'll keep my eye on this story, good job on it by the way

    #18 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    #20 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1019095 There better be a Jeff The Killer chapter... And Lavender Town. And BEN DROWNED. And A couple MLP lost episode ones. And Buttercup.avi

    This is gonna be insane...

    >>1027238 I hate you. I scrolled up from typing and was rewarded with his face. Better be glad the story was pretty damn good...

    #21 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1027334 well looks like you got revenge i was reading a creepypasta and then the notification noise was heard it startled me touche touche

    #22 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Cleverpone: You shouldn't have done that.

    ^^^ That better be in.

    #23 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Hmmm....

    I got a few.

    1. Herobrine

    2. Tails Doll

    3. Russian Sleep Experiment

    4. BEN (aka Haunted Majora's Mask Cartridge)

    5. Cthulu (not technically a pasta, but still)

    6. Smile.jpg

    7. Lavender Town Syndrome/Gary's Raticate

    8. Candle Cove

    9. Suicidemouse.avi

    10. Squidward's Suicide

    11. Ted the Caver

    12. Giygas

    13. Missingno.

    14. Whitehand

    15. Polybius

    16. B.O.B (Brutal Obscure Beast)

    17. Cupcakes

    That's all I got. Also, have all my spikes::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

    #24 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1027647 Candle Cove?

    #25 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1027342

    You have no idea how much I hate you right now.

    #26 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1027790 Eeyup. You don't know what it is? I'll give you a tl;dr version.

    Some people remember this old show called Candle Cove with a guy that takes skin or something and the OP asks their mom and they said they were watching static.

    #27 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I have a suggestion, there is a story about why the creek of the river in Pallet town is fenced, and how Tangelas are involved, it is a comic made by Soara of the Pokesho website (you can find it more easier on danbooru tho..), it is pretty darn creepy and pretty much made me think about Tangela's shoes more.:raritydespair:

    #28 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1027119 Never heard of I Bing... but too bad, no catchy I Google catchphrase...

    >>1027155 Thank you! :twilightsmile:

    >>1027238 Thank goodness I've gotten used to Jeff's picture now, or seeing him there would have freaked me out like i\he used to!

    >>1027334 Notice how Jeff was introduced at the very beginning?  He's gonna be a rather prominent character... :raritywink:

    >>1027639 Ah, that lovely classic Ben Drowned quote... :raritywink:

    >>1027647 Yay, I've read most of those (Candle Cove is one of my favorites :twilightsmile:), and now I have a few more to read and investigate! :pinkiehappy: Except, there's one thing I ought to make clear, and I probably should put it in the description:

    I will NOT be doing Cupcakes, or Rainbow Factory, or any of those.  Why?  Because they don't qualify as creepypastas at all, and I don't know why people think they are. :twilightangry2:  Like is stated in the story's description and the 1st chapter, creepypastas are urban legends, stories that blur the line between fantasy and reality, or things that break the fourth wall and talk to you.  Thus, the only MLP things that could be considered creepypastas are the Blank Flank ending of Super Filly Adventure (and that only a lesser extent- they talk to the player at the end by referencing Ben Drowned), and Luna Games (this to a much greater extent, since they address the play, you can only play through a few of them one time, and they mess with your computer as part of the game's programming - it's not harmful to your computer though).

    Are Cupcakes and Rainbow factory and the like creepy stories?  Yes.  Are they creepypastas?  NO.

    >>1028006 Is it "hacked Pokemon game" kind of thing?  If it's just a theory on why the creek of Pallet Town's river is fenced, then that doesn't qualify as a creepypasta.  See my above rant thing .

    #29 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Haunted games?! That means Ben will appear!! :pinkiehappy:

    ...And then we're aaaaaall gonna die!! :pinkiecrazy:

    #30 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028552 For some reason when I read your comment, I read the "aaaaaaall gonna die" part like this one townsperson in episode 7 of Avatar Abridged (around 6:53 in the video) :twilightsmile:

    #31 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028589 Well it's supposed to be in Goku's voice in DBZ Abridged

    #32 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028599 I haven't watched DBZ abridged before.... is there a particular episode that's from?

    #33 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028645 Well he doesn't exactly say it, but I just think it sounds funny if you say it in his voice...

    #34 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028691 In that case, time to look up DBZ abridged!

    #35 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    As I stated before, I am really scared really fast so, um... what's the Russian Sleep Experiment in a very short explination... no links pwease... I want to keep my sleep :3 :moustache:

    #36 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028725 Okay, The Russian Sleep Experiment is basically where these scientists put several guys into a room with a gas that would make them stay awake for thirty days to see how they'd fare with it.  But by the 15th day, they're all crazy and cannibalistic.

    #37 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028849 O_o okay. That.. that will take away my sleep for a good long period of time :twilightangry2:

    #38 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028589 Completely irrelevant, but, OMG THEY HAVE AN AVATAR ABRIDGED?!

    #39 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1026649

    Do you possible mean Polybius? Either way, make them play it, >>1028722, and Haunted Majora's Mask. Also, make them experience the Russian Sleep Experiment, The Rake, Unbranded Laptop, The Girl In The Photograph, Lost Silver, Lavender Town Syndrome, Snow on Mt. Silver, and AbandonLONLINESS.

    #40 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028898 At least I didn't go into the details...

    >>1028922 Indeed they do!

    >>1028928 Oh man, they're all gonna be put through so much bad stuff...

    #41 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028947

    I'm 30 seconds into episode 1 of Avatar Abridged, and already I nearly fainted from lack of oxygen.

    #42 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028970 It only gets funnier! :pinkiehappy: (also, when I saw The Last Airbender movie, I quoted the "iceberg pinata" and "sketicism" parts. :twilightsmile:)

    #43 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1029009

    F*** YA! You sir, deserve something that can only be done with pictures...

    *Pause For Dramatic Effect*

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    #44 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    You'd better have them encounter the Rake... also, you could include the Lavender Town theme from Pokemon. (FYI, The legend is that it caused children in Japan to commit suicide.)

    Really looking forward to this. :rainbowdetermined2:

    #45 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1029017 Lol, nice "pause for dramatic effect"!  *ultimate brofists back*

    And by the way, I'm a girl. :twilightsmile:

    >>1029135 We shall seee... :raritywink:

    #46 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I also forgot to mention the puppets from Candle Cove! :twilightsheepish: But there's prbably too many for me to recall, anyway. Indeed, we shall see... :moustache:

    #47 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1029174 Cnadle Cove is one of my favorite creepypastas. :pinkiehappy:

    #48 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yume Nikki

    and Zalgo stuff

    #49 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Jeff the Killer= Carnage from Spiderman of at least that's how I see him in this story

    #50 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1029264 And I guess now it's time to look up just who Carnage is...

    EDIT: ...Yup, Jeff is pretty much like Carnage in this. :pinkiecrazy:

    #51 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1028536 It was more a comic, but well, if I wasn't using the wii now to comment, I could pass you comic, but well, all I can do is suggest, keep the awesome job! :rainbowkiss:

    #52 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I just want to say one more thing, and then I will leave you alone until chapter two... This is the kind of story that seems dumb at first, but then keeps you up all night wondering just what will happen to Slenderpony/Slendermare/Slendermane. I really, Really, REALLY love this story so far, and I think this will earn the Featured Box if it hasn't already :twilightsmile: Have fun writing, I can't wait for more scares and nightmares from ya! :raritywink:

    #53 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1029766 Well, it hasn't earned the Featured Box yet (it probably would have if it hadn't been approved so late at night, though it still might, so who knows), but based on the way things are going, I won't be surprised if it will soon, or when it updates. And glad you really love this so far! :pinkiehappy:

    #54 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I Once kicked slender man in the balls...:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

    he looked at me, tilted his head and then walked away to never return

    i think i Scared the wuss:rainbowlaugh:

    i bet he never had anyone fight back or, kick him in the balls for that Matter...

    #55 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    oh and by the way you should have slendermane fight slenderman for a normal life

    #56 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1029855 It may be all because everyone either runs, or tries to fight but are outmatched...

    #57 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This sounds rather promising. Can't wait for more.

    #58 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1030218 Thanks. :twilightsmile:  Also, I like your avatar. :scootangel:

    #59 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1030227 Thank you! :pinkiehappy:

    #60 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1030237 You're welcome!  Where'd you get it?

    #61 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1030263 It's the logo for the "A Perfect Circle" band. This particular picture was made by Deviant Diciembre7. The link to the actual thing can be found here.

    #62 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1030272 Oh, okay! :pinkiesmile:

    #63 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >1028536

    I was expecting that you wouldn't do Cupcakes. I thought of cupcakes whilst my friend was making a gorefic

    #64 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1033430 Heh, well I might read that gorefic of your friend's sometime, I can handle gore.... *glances at my story Pages of Harmony*

    #65 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    How about Winonas face turns to Smile.jpg?:pinkiecrazy:

    #66 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1034308 Pfff, interesting idea! :scootangel:

    #67 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1029182

    While it isn't a creepy pasta, maybe they can get sent to The Moon from Majora's Mask.

    #68 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1042895 Perhaps by way of moon cannon. :trollestia:

    #69 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1043251

    Do you know what the moon level from Majora's Madk looks like? In the game, the moon's eyes glow, and you appear in the area now called "The Moon."

    #70 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1043262 Well, I know what the Moon looks like in MM, but I never knew about the level... (besides where you fight Majora)

    #71 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Dis gonna be goood:pinkiehappy: here are some more suggestions: Pokemon ghostblack, some pony gets slender sickness, lighthouse, 666,  just look at the creepypasta survival guide, heaps of stuff there:moustache:

    #72 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1044908 Oh trust me, Slender sickness will definitely be involved. :pinkiehappy:  And Ghost Black too because I love that one. :pinkiecrazy:

    And speaking of Ghost/Cursed Black... It's gonna be real. :pinkiecrazy:

    #73 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #74 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1045162 Hey, if I recall correctly I think that green hilly stage thing at the beginning was used in the Ben Drowned video! (haven't watched/read the full thing of Ben yet though):twilightsmile:

    #75 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1045239

    I'm not sure, but maybe it was. Still, think you could use it in the story?

    #76 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1045243 The Moon Level you mean?... I'll see if I can find a way to fit it in... :scootangel:

    #77 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1045257

    Sweeeeeet...

    #78 · Chapter 1 · 41w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1045270 I may be able to tie it in with Ben Drowned (if that is indeed part of it, I only watched part of that video), but if not, I still might be able to find a place for it... :twilightsmile:

    #79 · Chapter 2 · 41w, 42m ago · · ·
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    Alright everyone - this is where you come in. :pinkiecrazy:

    There are a LOT of creepypastas out there, and considering how the 8 different levels increase in difficulty, I am willing to hear suggestions for Level 1 at the moment - creepypastas that are for the most part harmless, other than being scary.  After all, nopony wants to lose a life on Level 1.  

    Also, if you happen to have more specific suggestions - as in, which character(s) to go in a specific one, just post away.  If there's any specific one that multiple people agree on (and/or one I really like), that wouldn't contradict an overarching plot I have here, I just might go along with it. :pinkiehappy:

    So, yup, hope you liked the chapter!

    #80 · Chapter 2 · 41w, 8m ago · · ·
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    Suggestion: He who walks behind the rows, should be a level, extremely creepy stuff that. Or no, that one about the train station that brings you to different dimensions and you get "stuck" forever riding them. I'm not too sure about there names, but I'm pretty sure you can get a plot device out of either suggestion. Maybe include some SCP elements. However, that was a tangent from the get go; my suggestion for level one is that thing that's trapped inside the glass that just stares at you (smiling) , again I don't know there names only the nightmares they've given me. This is entertaining, please continue!

    #81 · Chapter 2 · 41w, 6m ago · · ·
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    THIS WAS EFFING EPIC!  The way you introduced everypony was amazing!  Congrats on that one!  I especially like how you portrayed Chrysalis and Discord, among the other background ponies.  :pinkiehappy:

    As far as a CP for level one would go...if the floors aren't dedicated to specific types of stories, and instead just difficulty...  :pinkiecrazy:

    "Upstairs" would be a good choice.  Simple, creepy, and no harm to anypony.  It could be very easily modified to fit whomever enters its portal.  Just a thought!  :twilightsmile:

    #82 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1052148 Well, at least I have "He who walks behind the rows" as a title, and I might be able to find the others if I try looking those specifics up or something. Thanks for the suggestions! :twilightsmile:

    >>1052161 Thanks!  I wanted to make sure I introduced everypony adequately enough, and I'm glad I seemed to do that justice! :pinkiehappy:  And as for why I decided to go with difficulty, I figured that it would seem a bit more orderly that way, and there are such a variety of creepypastas that it would be hard to fit into neat little orders like that. :pinkiecrazy:

    And thanks for the creepypasta link!:twilightsmile:

    #83 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Mixed ideas concerning this new chapter.

    On the plus side, I am greatly happy that you decided to incorporate just about everyone that has a name and significant presence within the series into this. It bears similarity to the beginning of "Total Magic Pony Island" (a story done by Tailslover13, if you don't know). Makes it all the more nerve-wracking about who's going to get offed and who doesn't, since I've grown to like nearly all of them. Though it's not eye-candy, it is well-written - which is an automatic plus from the get-go. But on the negative side, I can't help but feel the ponies just give off too much of an innocent aura around them. Their reaction to Jeff saying "carnage" was very humorous as well as somewhat embarrassing.

    That particular colt doesn't have eyelids and is standing right beside other freaks of nature without a care in the world! Obviously there's something wrong with that, you morons! :flutterrage:

    Sorry to say, I haven't been reading up on creepypastas well enough to give a potential idea. But I am hoping that whatever you'll choose will turn out for the best. Best of luck to you on that department.

    So, that's it for my review of this chapter. Can't wait for more! :yay:

    #84 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I dunno. It felt rushed to have all of these characters introduced so quickly. Still, I look forward to the next chapters, and the "games" the Iridescents have planned.

    #85 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1052501 Note to self: try to focus a bit more on the characters there.  That's the downside of writing a 5000 word chapter - it gets so long that you want to make sure you don't bore people, but you lose a bit of characterization through rushing it.  :facehoof:  But too late to change it a bit now, since people have already read it...

    ... You know what, it's early as far as story update time, I'm gonna improve on it a bit anyway! :rainbowdetermined2:

    #86 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1052566 *:facehoof: for rushing* I didn't want to make the chapter too long but I wanted to introduce everypony... *sighs, then goes to edit it a bit*

    Hopefully I'll be able to do a lot better on the chapters after that, not so much introductions and explaining.

    #87 · Chapter 2 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Beautiful, Shadowed. I suggest Herobrine stalking everyone for Round One, so as not to be too heavy. Stealing and hiding the Slender Notes now and then, making false passage ways, and rigging traps and contraptions. Here's the link to Herobrine on the Minecraft Wikia, Because I was too scared to go on creepypasta wiki x.x :twilightsheepish:

    I can't wait for more, you do not know HOW many times I've looked for an update! :pinkiehappy:

    Thank you so much for a new chapter! :twilightsmile:

    Here's some Spikes: :moustache::moustache::moustache:

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    >>1052632 Thanks! :pinkiehappy:  Aha, so you mean Herobrine being a bit of a meta example and throwing them off... interesting sort of idea... Perhaps whoever it is could go through his creepypasta world, and then even after they leave he starts messing with them... :pinkiecrazy:

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    Very good so far. The only complaint I have so far is that Jeff the Killer doesn't really seem to act very insane, and I would suggest making his craziness a bit more on the creepy side. :pinkiecrazy: WIth that said, I would say that the best creepypasta to use for level one would be Candle Cove, seeing as it isn't particularly deadly at all.

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    >>1052687 Yes! That would be such an awesome thing. If by 'his world' you mean Minecraft, I have ideas for that, but it is your story. :pinkiehappy:

    I'm also watching you! (In that FIMfiction way cuz GOD that sounded weird :twilightblush:)

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    Tell me, do you remember that thing under your bed, the thing in your closet? The movement in the corner of your eye when you were walking home during the night?The thing that was standing behind you, but when you turned around there was nothing there?

    You know what I'm talking about. Well let me tell you, there WAS something there. One or many of them.

    The Shadows. Beings with no body or appearence. Always hiding.

    But year, after year you felt them less and less. Why? Because time toughened you, made you stronger, and caused your mind to become stable.

    That's what made them disappear. Your mind. It didn't believe in supernatural things anymore. And that's what they need. A bit of belief, a moment of weakness.

    That is all what they need to come back.

    You might not break, or become weak, but they are still there.

    Waiting.

    Watching.

    Hoping.

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    >>1052857 Well, I did add a bit more of Jeff just a bit ago, when I edited the chapter a bit ago, but trust me, his craziness  will come out quite a bit later... :pinkiecrazy:

    >>1052869 I''ll keep  that in mind. :)

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    >>1052958 Woah... did you make that up?!  Because that sounds EPIC! :pinkiehappy:

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    >>1051980 lost silver can be one and ben drowned can be another

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    >>1053924 Well, the player character does kind of "die" at the end of Lost Silver, so I might save that one for later in the Levels, but good suggestion for both of the for use in the fic overall! :twilightsmile:

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    After just hearing Mr CreepyPasta's Jeff vs. Jane, I was surprised to log on and find this updated.  It is almost as if it was timed like that on purpose.

    So far, digging the 'Slender Notes' reference.  I get up to seven, then BAM!  Face full of Slendy!

    Would be kinda funny of Vinyl and Octavia ended up in Lavender Town and hear the original music that was said to cause people to kill themselves.  The ironic/dark funny because of the two going nuts because of music.  :pinkiecrazy:

    And then there's the 'haha' funny of Vinyl dubstepping it or something.  :rainbowlaugh:

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    I'm not sure for what level this would be, or if it even counts, but the Horrifying House Guest? Maybe Luna Game or Squidward's Suicide?

    Edit: Well, how about...

    Russian Sleep Experiment

    Wong Chong Dong ghost... or however you say its Korean name (It's a Korean scare comic).

    SMILE.pny

    Creepy Silver

    >>1054324

    Forget sleep. Who needs it?

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    >>1054335

    Sleep? What's that?

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    My best reccomendation for floor 1: Smile.jpg.

    A mansion with all the walls looking like this:

    (IT IS UNKNOWN IF THIS IMAGE CAUSES MENTAL DEFECTS. VIEW AT YOUR OWN RISK!)

    Perhaps replace it with Winona...?

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