Twilight Sparkle thinks that Cheerilee would provide a very interesting partner... to talk to... about literature. Nothing else. Right?
*raised eyebrow* Hmm, must read.
Yep, this was very amusing.
Featured comes next.
The lack of tags amuses me.
Noooo I want to see what happens AFTER the awkward conversation!
*hhhk-kshhhhh* Your lack of tags... disturbs me *rasies hand slowly*
Yes. Yes, this good.
I can see this. At first I was like "age gap?" but then remembered in the Cutie Mark chronicles Cheerilee is roughly around the ages of the Mane 6 (she's one of rarity's classmates wearing one of her costumes).
Well that ended rather... abruptly.
Completed already? Oh well...
Good story, entertaining, but a few typos were still in there.
D'aww. I liked it.
"always bring a banana to a party"
Is this a Doctor Who reference I see?
if it werent marked as completed i would say i like to see more...
also i lol'd at the , what can now be considered cliche, skipping a step on a check list and the final step being profit joke
Good story, fast ending. A follow up would be grand.
Eh, it's a comedy from Wanderer D. How the hell can it NOT be good. (Not saying you're a comedy genius, but I've always found the humorous scenes in your fics quite enjoyable.)
WHY IS THIS COMPLETE!!! NEED MOAR!
Just as I thought it was a fun set-up, it was over. I would have enjoyed seeing more meddling from Cheerilee's mother. Plus I admit to being curios how Twilight works in with her desire for Grandkids...
And it was! Bonus points for the Doctor Who reference!
Have you written more matchmaker Cheerimom by any chance? I'm sure I've seen her around before. Hmm.
Really good story, very funny in many parts. Not a fan of CheeriLight/Twirilee, but this was really cute and amusing. Good work
Obligatory George Takei for WD right here.
:looksatauthor: WANDERER D?! Dis gon b gud gud gud.
"How to Make Featured, for Dummies"
Step 1: Be Wanderer D
Step 2: Write a short one-shot with a twist!
I was searching for the Cheerilee emoticon when I realized there was none.
This was a very good story, but I think it would be even better if you add a chapter showing the rest of the mane 6 reactions. Maybe even have Celestia send Twilight a response to the letter.
Want moar. Moar awkward Twilight and Cheerilee and walking facefirst into euphemism hell. More meddling mommas, embarassed mentors and sarcastically incompetant sidekicks.
This is the good shit, and while I can understand drawing a line under it and walking, it's too good not to follow up on, at least a little. Please? Pretty please?
At first I cried tears of joy at seeing a highly rated CheeriLight fic. Then they became tears of sorrow because it was over so soon.
In other words...
>>10390821039082 you mean like this
“Step five: Profit.”
There is a distinct lack of Cheerilight around. Nice way to fill a gap. :D
definantly gonna read
A very enjoyable read, with a few minor issues (Cheerilee is "staring at the pile of paperwork, staring at it", or somesuch, and she is wondering whether Twilight is "asking asking" her something; also, I think I saw a "slowl" in there looking for its final "y").
Also, references much? Particularly the one where Twilight talks about "romance reports"? I so see what you did there. And I approve.
The ironic endin is priceless. Anyway, good story.
There's too much potential for fun and shenanigans to leave this a one shot!
But yeah, and it's good.
...Okay, that .gif creeped the shit out of me. xD
Heh this was amazingly cute. You sir earned a moustache
Sweet story! o/
since this is marked Incomplete it will go on? or does the 'The End' at the end mean it is over?
this. uhm, it seemed like a good set-up but it really wasn't, uhm ... really funny. the sex jokes in the classroom also felt a tad forced? i'm sorry, it's well written and a really good set-up but it's just not ... comedy to me. more slice-of-life.
FINISH THIS. GIVE US ONE OR TWO MORE CHAPTERS AT LEAST.
I would love to see more!
There is far to much happening in this story for a one-shot, can we have a follow up?
I do hope there is more to come. That abrupt ending really threw me off.
The one thing that I wish there was in this story is.... MOAR!!!
>>10383581038358 I know, right? Hardly anyone seems to notice that.
Wish thee was a bit more to this. But it was rather endearing nonetheless.
This was adorable...But that ending!
For some reason, I feel like I need to congratulate a certain hidden brony for this. Twilight was terribly adorkable, Cherry was as awesome as always, and the gratuitous RR references were well done.
YOUR PRINCESS DEMANDS MOAR!
"...just so abysmally hot out we're out doing thier thing."
Other than that, pleasepleaseplease continue, please.
>>10406361040636 I haven't read this yet, but looking at that sentence, are you sure it isn't supposed to be "we're"
The sun was high in the sky, the clouds had been expertly handled by Rainbow Dash, and those annoying bugs that screech when it’s just so abysmally hot out we’re doing thier thing.
How do you keep writing awesome stories like these?
Edit: Boy, is my face red now. I just read the post about the LOEG and I admit, I saw your name and I just went for it because I know that your stories are always interesting and fun to read.
dat picture you got there.
>>10407641040764 I'd be lying if I said I've never sat for a long time staring, engrossed, at my own avatar.
>>10407031040703 Ah, okay. It's quite obvious when I can see the whole sentence
She stared at the mountain of paperwork she had before her, staring at it
I was disappointed at the ending. There was an incredible humorous build up, but it feels as if you just ended a joke right before you've hit it's punchline.
You're still getting a green thumb and a fave though...
Awesome story though. CheeriLight is one of my favs.
So, in that case,
As long as you don't mind,
>>10382211038221 Dude... you are Nostradamus. Okay, what's next week Mega Million winning numbers?
who else noticed that it said Wanderer D wrote this, and now it says HiddenBrony?
"step 5: profit!"
South park reference?
Ok, so Cheerliee doesn't like Twilight? Or dose she? .........This ended so soon, GAH!
Moar, moar, moar!
they have a project where some Authors write Stories on another authors account, maybe this is one of this cases and Hiddenbrony released a story under Wanderer D's name and now that it got featured they changed the ownership of this story to the true author
EDIT: under Wanderer D's account is a blog post which states that every author got back his story
I like where this is going already! There just isn't enough 'Cheerilight' out there these days. Keep the chapters coming, HiddenBrony!
Eh not a huge fan of the random South Park "Step #: ??? Step #+1 profit" reference but other than that it was a very fun fic overall. The only reason I note that is that it feels very forced and frankly quite alien for the pony world but then again it could just be me. Also the ending, as others have noted, is very sudden and really detracts from the story. I'd recommend either having a sequel or just finding a better point to end the story. The ending is just sudden and unsatisfying. I did enjoy your story a lot though! I was just trying to offer some constructive criticism.
This site needs more TwilightxCheerilee fics.
Produce the next chapter soon.
>>10382681038268 Love that gif
I have to agree with the moar boar. I would really enjoy seeing this continued, if you're of an inspiration to do so.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
“Oh!” the monarch chuckles, unfurling the document with a happy grin.
What can I say? Adorkable Twilight, Twirilee, and Cheerilee's mom. My interests have been appealed. I'd agree that jokes are a bit forced, but it's nothing too distracting for me.
Love that last line.
Thank you God, Jesus, Zeus, Buddha and whoever that we got the trepidition over with. That's why I can't stand shipping. The story wouldn't exist if the supposed couple didn't get together at the end, so where's the tension? You clear that shit up in the first chapter.
One weakness to me is the old mother pushing the daughter for grandkids. I can't speak from experience, since I'm a guy, and I'm only in college. But it's a character type we've seen before (well, I've seen before) in other fics, and she comes out of nowhere, without explanation, to help move the story along. She's not a character in the show, and isn't a popularly acknowledged character in the fimfiction community like the horny Cloud Kicker, or the maternal Ditzy. Why is she bothering Cheerilee at her workplace? Does she live in Ponyville? Is she really that unperturbed by her daughter's homosexuality? The way she kept asking about grandfoals, I was wondering at first if she even knew about it. "You do know this a same-sex shipfic, don't you lady?"
So cute. And I can really see Twilight and Cheerilee working out long term.
Your writing, I love it.
Yes, definitely my response, especially to the end.
Continue this or I shall make your existence painful and unpleasant.
A CheeriLight fic, there's another CheeriLight fic?
But that's my One True Twilight Sparkle Pairing.
ALL OF MY WANT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
In light of the LOEG thing, I can understand why this ends so abruptly. You guys were running up against a deadline.
I do hope you continue this. Hopefully without the pressure of an end date looming over, you can take the time to catch some of those little typos.
(If I was reading the LOEG post correctly, this was originally meant to be swapped to Sleepless Brony? With all the references to Romance Reports, this one just might have spilled the beans on the whole project if it had.)
For all your answers, seek out this commenter. >>10433741043374
The story was rushed to an end point due to the encroaching deadline. There is story behind the story. It'll be on my blog once I finish it and, you know, not get 502'd.
I've never read Romance Reports, nor did I check out any fic that Sleepless did. My only knowledge was that it ends with some Cheerilight. In fact, the most gratuitous shoutout was made without prior thinking. I graduated Twilight's 'Friendship Reports' into those that dealt with relationships, and presto: Romance reports. However, I did realize the connection the moment I wrote it, but I kept it because, "Oh man, that would so be his style.
"His" as is the author I'll mention in the blog soon. Cliffhangers in the comments ahoy!
And You! ...You're my favorite.
I was just thinking of Cherilee when I saw your story.
I had just listened to Love Me Cherilee by The WoodenToaster and The Living Tombstone.
Very good story. Although twilight seems a little too hyperactive and overthinks everything.
And finally, the inspiration for how I approached the fic.
Sure I deviated from the idea in which there is only one subtle reference, but, still. You get a Trixie.
...I hate Trixie.
HOW DARE YOU END IT NOW
THERE MUST BE MOAR
“Are you asking asking what I think you’re asking Twilight?”
This fic is super great fun time.
Step 1: Read story
Step 2: Finish story
Step 3: Up vote the sh*t out of the story
Step 4: ????
Step 5: Profit
Bravo...just needs moar
Time to put on my cracked shipping goggles
The tag has changed to incomplete?
400th LIKE WOOOOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOOOO you deserve it auther