You know what day it is? Yes, this is the day daddy is going to teach me how to fly! I've been waiting for this day for so long!
My name is Aeria, and this is my first day of flying!
After all the stuff that Chip went through recently... I felt like taking a leap sideways into d'aaaaaaaw land.
So. Much. D'awwwwwwwww!!
Also, you captured a young filly's voice perfectly! I was totally reading this as though there was an excited young girl bouncing around behind me.
Its so happy
Its just so happy!!!
How Im I supposed to write another dark and scary chapter now!?
Oh I just love it
I don't know how you did it, but i felt like you got the personality of a young filly pegasus completely right, and also she was so cute
If you ever make another of these i doubt I will mind it
i nu rite. :|
You definitely captured the "young filly" voice here. Beautiful description of being a pegasus in the wind, too.
D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this!
For just a few seconds, you put me in her skin. Wonderful!
thumbs up, yo.
caught one error:
“I can fly! I can fly!” I yelled at the top of my longs, the voice muffled by mom and dad’s manes.
probably a couple others strung throughout, but good job.
"I sometimes heard him tickle mommy late at night."