Not too bad, here, have a thumb!

I really like the use of pictures, I used to do that in my stories. Ya'no, for better imagery?

Oh, this should be interesting. I can think of somepony who's in for a rather unpleasant time because she got locked out of the loop. Oh, wait. Add in three more someponies.

Good, so far at least.

I did notice a few mistakes, but only one bugged me. WHY DID YOU REPLACE A QUESTION MARK WITH A PERIOD THAT IS MY LEAST FAVORITE GRAMMAR MISTAKE EVER!

>>10153691015369 Yeah, when they're needed, they're needed. When there are not well known ponies running around, much better.

>>10155851015585

Miss Hooves is way too important for that Besides, I reckon she'll have her hooves full soon...

>>10155891015589

Ok, I fixed a couple things I could find. Truth is I don't use editors of proofreaders. Yes, I know

Thanks for your comments and following. I though a different story such as this would be a little better received. Still, if someone reads it, I'll work on it. I also can point you to my other stories? :3

I liked the solution o using links to explain who some of the background pony characters used are. Maybe I should start using that as well, everytime I write about the background pony Rainbowshine I get somebody telling me "you mean Rainbow Dash, right?"

>>10237431023743

Yeah, most fics grab the most known BG ponies, Lyra, Bon Bon, Cloud Kicker, Vinyl, Octavia...

There are so many severely underused ponies.. I searched in the database and chose two pegasi whose design really impacted me. In fact I had to drop some, such as Blossomforth because they don't seem to be active as weather ponies, though I suppose they could be called for emergencies ala Hurricane Fluttershy.

>>10238291023829

Airheart is one of those I was gonna use as well, cus I too liked her design. and I just really liked the name for some reason.

>>10239741023974

You know what, it sounds like Amelia Earhart (or whatshername) and given her flying helmet... Hey, that could be an awesome idea...