Oho... THIS looks intriguing...

So, meta!

I wonder if Luna knows about this...

Maybe there will be a few more stallions in Season 3?  Who knows.

That was entertaining though, and I agree with Chaodiurn, I wonder if Luna knows Aegis was writing either their 'experiences' together, or creating his own little fantasies.

Interesting idea.

[Insert seal of approval]

Oh, this ought to be good... *marks for reading*

Edit: I would read a story like this so hard...

That explains the dissaperence of this story for your account.

Please more?

Also you know we will want you to resurrect some of these eventually right?

Woah

Story Deja vu. Where have I read this before?

You're just torturing us now aren't you? A bunch of first chapters to what would undoubtedly be awesome stories which will unfortunately never see the light of day.

You big troll you.

How about we find out what its like working for Celestia. It could be from a guard's POV. Like he/she rises from the lowest position to Capt. Shining Armor, perhaps?

Killing people quietly and not making a big deal of it.  The exact opposite of a Spartan.  Sounds pretty interesting to me.

Yeah, I can understand how it would be pretty hard. I wouldn't even be able to imagine how he would meet applejack and the relationship between the characters.

"We was a big fan of things like Forgotten Realms, The Wheel of Time, and certainly Harry Trotter and World War Z."

.............. "The Wheel of Time"

..............  OH thank Celestia I'm not alone! I was starting to think that I was the only one left in the world who even knew what the heck "The Wheel of Time" was! No one else I have ever conversed with besides my dad has even heard of it! Oh, and i think this story could have been great if continued. Oh well.

Now what would be cool is if you wrote about Spartan Shield and Ninja Star going at it, quite similar to the Spartan vs. Ninja episode of Deadliest Warrior!

Grammar Nazi Powers, ACTIVATE! Form of a Grammar Nazis, go!

"He reaching, noisily unwrapping his night’s first moon pie." No, no, no! Write it like this. "Reaching, he noisily unwrapped his night's first pie." In fact, you never did say where he was reaching.

"She ventured forth only occasionally, when the sun touched the mountains of Canterlot, until she was tired in the night." ...until she was tired in the night??? Try this, "...until she grew tired at the end of the night." Not the best I know, but this way the sentence just dosn't drop off.

"Occasionally stop a falling terracotta pot from creaming somepony." stopping

Whew! I must say that was some fun. I think I need a cigarette after that.

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....zzz.*snrk* huh? Wa..what? O..oh uhh, oh yah. Form of a, uh, of a...grammar...porcupine...er...something...

"We was a big fan of things like Forgotten Realms, The Wheel of Time, and certainly Harry Trotter and World War Z." He Unless you're saying he's writting in the Ubonics style.

"He had a meager little bookshelf in his apartment, not full of books but certainly lovingly cared for."  Also, he had a...

"Emerging out into the practice field, she saw Soarin’ stuffing his face on a sideline." onto Could have sworn we already had a discussion about the differences between emerging onto something and entering into something else. Must be my imagination.

"“Goodbye, Spitfire…” he said, wilting at her as she turned to go." Get rid of 'at her' because 'wilting' is the action he's performing as she turns away from him, and don't forget to put a comma after 'wilting'.

Ok, now where was I? Oh yah zzzz.....

SOMEONE GET THAT MAN A RAPE WHISTLE

Why was this scrapped? You usually list a reason for scrapping it.

>>10573191057319 Too many projects right now, I don't wanna burn myself out.

Hope that this will get more later.

Well..... This was an...... interesting read. I think I'm gunna go re-read Luna's Story.

*shudders*

Changlings........

Well, I'll just post here what I was going to with the first chapter.  Funny thing actually; when I finally came up with what I wanted to say, and hit "Add Comment," the circle just kept turning.  At first I thought the site was just having problems (again).  But I edit-cut the comment, hit the "back" button, and the story didn't exist anymore!

"… and what was that hanging from the ceiling."

Is there suppose to be a question mark at the end of that?  Also, I still don't understand the answer to that question.  Was that the bed before it got lowered?  

I'm all for sex scenes when they fit into the story, whether it's touching like the end of SS, wild like the beginning of Nuptials, or creepy like Diaries of a Teenage Foalsitter (and I'm guessing here as well).  But the situation feels kind of slapdash.  Not  much tension, and not as easy or engrossing to read as your other works.  

If you're going to make an "alternate universe" fic, you need to firmly establish how it's different.  If it was her goal all along to sieze Shining, and not the Capital, why have her changelings attack the capital.  She got away by absorbing the build-up of love magic within Cadence.  Did she plan on Twilight breaking her out?

>>10573541057354

This is a bit...violent.

[Aegis Shield: One point of canon I must uproot it about Ponyville. According to canon Ponyville is maybe 100 years old at most. In this story, Ponyville is much, MUCH older than that. Nothing else is different, just the age of the town itself.]

Actually if you ever read Urban Moose's The Stranger and Her Friend, you'll find that the Ponyville of Twilight's time wasn't the first.

To our loyal subjects.

An unprovoked attack most cowardly and foul has occured in our borders of Equestria by Crysalis and her forces. Who this Crysalis is, we do not know at this time, but rest assure we will find out.

This attack has struck several high ranking members including Shining Armor, a highly respected officer of the Royal Guard who was taken from us , His wife Princess Cadence(Beloved Wife of said Shining Armor) and most importantly My sister, Princess Celestia.

To Twilight Sparkle: We owe deepest thanks and deepest Apologizes to her. It was she who saw the dangers,. It was she tried to raise a warning and she was repulsed much to our reget.

As of this moment Equestria is a nation at war. How? Why? Doesn't matter. This attack upon our peoples and it leaders will not go unanswered. We must strike such a fear into the hearts and mind of Crysalis' and her peoples so great that never will they think about attacking us in anyshape or form.

So i'm calling upon all ponies from every walks of life in our fair Equestria to walk into the recruiting offices and take up arms againsts this most evil enemy. We princesses/Goddess are with you.

Signed Princess Luna. Co ruler of Equestria. Goddess of the night

Big Macintosh.  The stallion who could pull a house, running speed, across town, struggles to pull down a giant dead tree?

Hrm.

And that would have been difficult.  Interesting to read, though

I was sad to see this one go.

>>10639031063903

So, does this mean I finally get to use my special talent, without having friends and family to fear me, because if so, I'm in.

>>10984011098401

Princess Luna approaches Warhorse_Legend  and says: "Sign here, Mortal."

"I'll assume i don't have to go thru the long and boring process of explaining why thou is signing on and what my sister and i expect from thee?"

>>10995341099534

*Warhorse signs the paper and puts  it on the table.* "Just tell me what you want me to do"

Luna: "We fight and if necessary......................Die".

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Oy you two. Remember what Knighty says about RP in the comments section. I don't want you guys to get in trouble.

We're just fucking around, Aegis.  

>>11008861100886

Sorry Aegis, but your stories are so good!  This is what they do too me!/

>>11008731100873

Warhorse:First to fight, last to die.

Although, this little screwing around could make for a good story.  I would write it (even with my terrible story telling and writing level) but if you rather wouldn't since it's kinda based off one of you stories, or would rather write it is up to u.  

Shame you didn't continue it, seeing the interaction between fame dazzled rainbow dash and weary Spitfire would have been really interesting. Also much like in the Spartan story you have someone who needs to earn a living with few transferable skills...

The fact that Big Mac should be instantly recognized would fit perfictly as a Superman allegory.  Don't be silly Scootaloo, Big Mac can't be super stallion, super stallion doesn't wear a yoke.

Y U QUIT

Hmmm.... I remember seeing this one around the time the RL hammer landed on my head.  Given the other stories you were working on at the time, I can see why you back-burnered this one.  You're leaping way off the canon path with this story, and I can see where it's going end up needing a mass of Changeling biology exposition to pull off the story correctly, and that's a mass of work to pull off.  If Chrysalis' primary goal was acquiring a strong male breeding partner, and the whole invasion was a secondary objective, you'd have to put in some time with backstory to explain why things were allowed to progress to the point they did in canon.  You'd be spending a lot of work setting up just why Chrysalis didn't abscond with Shining Armor much sooner, and in a way that didn't have the whole of Canterlot in such a paranoid furor over a potential threat.  This is not to say that I doubt you couldn't give us a worthy plot line for it,  but as you've said, you've got a lot of projects higher on the priority list for now.  Here's hoping that you come back to it sometime, I see... potential

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This'd be a good one shot if you continued it. You're probably right about it not having a series in it though.

Still, it's interesting as it is.

Was this story going to be about Equestria going to war so enough souls could be sent to Tartarus to keep War from waking?

It would have been interesting to see where the story went, because I read and loved the first two.  But I can understand why you want to leave it at the two and not add a third.

Hey I was reading that!

Sad face...

Aww...

I wish this continued

Dammit...

What?  How could you?

In the words of so many before me:

NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

Ooooohhhhhhhhhhhhh you are EVIL!!! If there was one series I was shitting myself in anticipation for, it was this! BUCK! It feels liek Season three of Pony was canceled. *FUCKINGSADFACE*

I'll be hoping that Aegis will come back to it at later date and time.  Right now he has his hands full with The Fluttershy/Mossy story, the 4th installment of the Luna story and the new Nightmare moon story.

Man, and i had just finished the first two Seeing the Patterns and was exited to read it. Then i see it got canned . I hope that one day you come back and continue it, but in the mean time i must fill the void that has been created with more stories.

Hmm, can't you just change the story to something about Pinkamena finding her successor? Something like an epilogue? I would love to read a Seeing the Pattern 3, hope you can finish one soon.

I kind of have to agree, I mean I was excited to see a 3  part but now that I think about it, part 1 and 2 had a pretty good begining middle and end. It was wrapped up nicely and with the exception of one question that will forever be on my mind...ended just perfectly. Pinkamena is happy, Split is happy, everyone gets what they want, we all go home happy.

Then make up another plot for the third one, you lazy stallion

I had been so excited to see a third installment of the "Seeing the Pattern" series, but then it vanished. I hope that you can figure out some way to continue this in the future, Aegis Shield.

I was wondering where this got to, oh well.

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That was pretty cute... Only one stallion in Ponyville? BIG FREAKING MACINTOSH

I know I speak for many when I say I am disappointed by the news. But Unlike many I understand. A good writer has rules of what they will and what they won't write about. And when you make one story that ends with no more questions to be asked it can get hard to make a sequel that keeps to those rules, so to those who are disappointed just know you still have what came before this and that you can still live with two and not three

W-what? B-but... This... I- I don't....

So i get in the site aqnd see i have 2 updates.....never thought they would dissapoint me.......

(not being rude/insulting or anything though, i just really liked how the stories were going)

Some people like the premise enough to ignore that it's a re-hash. Just FYI for the future.

Plus any Multiverse story is, IMO, worth checking out, so that's a read lost to the Void.

Sometimes a new twist on an old premise can make a truly appealing story.

You should keep this in mind, Captain.

I dont know what i should feel now, but i am pesonally happy for the fact that you have stopped FatWS, as i did not like that story. Does this mean you will update lunar stallions or what princesses need sequel?

... Fluttershit... ... A for effort on the poor kid

What a Princess needs needs your attention along with the lunar stallions. Those are your best in my thoughts.

Well... I really enjoyed this. I'm gonna miss it.

However I'm really enjoying The Return of Nightmare Moon!

It was an interesting story but were could you honestly go with it?

Oh nooo, I didn't even notice this story had passed away.  

It was going so well, too!

This cancellation actually made me sad.

Awww, I was wondering what happened to this. >_< I really liked this story too!

the graveyard of stories I would have loved to see continued...damn you aegis

Farewell, my story. Farewell.

If you need a potential red herring character, how about Snowflake (aka 'Roid Rage' or just the 'YEEEAAAHHH!' Pegasus).  Additionally, why does Supermane have to be thought to come from Ponyville? There are lots of farms and "rock farms" around the area that probably breed strong Stallions.  Being 'around' all the time and his near-monomaniac work ethic being well-known would actually give Mac a lot of cover as everypony would say: "Mac? Nah, it can't be! He's always working on the farm! He's got no time to be doin' other stuff!".

BenRG's Justice Herd Equestria

Listed in order of first appearance:

Amethyst Witch - Twilight Sparkle

Lightstreak - Rainbow Dash (Plays on her speed to make her a sort of airborne Flash)

Enchantress - Rarity (Telekinesis and telepathy-like mind-magics that she normally uses to determine what ponies want in a dress)

Titanmare - Applejack (The world's strongest mare!)

Paradoxica - Pinkie Pie (Think of Freakazoid mixed with The Mask)

Valkyrie - Fluttershy (Living up to the warrior heritage of her ancestresses of the ancient pegasi; she dresses up in her Crystal Fair Joust armour with a modified Hellenic helmet to mask her face - who'd ever guess? )

Mare-do-Well - Unknown latecomer (can either be an OC or a version of Trixie firmly on the 'journey of redemption' track)

The thing that really gets in the way is the fact that Ponyville is tiny and has a near-non-existent requirement for costumed heroes.  I  get around this by having Luna set up the Proactive Opponent Neutralisation and Intelligence Executive (PONIE) to deal with special threats outside the normal training and experience of the Royal Guard (army) and the Civil Militia (police).  The JHE are their special operations team used when extreme measures (and flashy visuals) are deemed necessary.  The Herd are distinctly separate in the public eye from the near-anonymous Bearers of the Elements of Harmony and few make the connection between them.  To help keep their identities secret, Rarity has designed their costumes to conceal their identity, either with masks, helmets, hoods or such a flashy colour scheme that the last thing anypony will be looking at is their faces.

Naturally, every antagonist character/group from canon and most fandoms ends up recast as super-villains.

Could be a nice Rainbow Dash "coming of age" story, really.  Spitfire runs into Dash and her stories make her begin to wonder whether the fame of being a Wonderbolt is worth it.  Maybe Spitfire gets a job teaching the Pegasi foals in town the basics of flying, leading to hundreds of innocent crushes on the 'cool new teacher'.  Maybe, in the end, Spitfire can't settle down and finds a new life that suits both her desire for peace and her need to stretch her flying skills to the very limit.

Yeah, it's a toughie to write a character like that, let alone write their interactions with others.

I'm assuming that the Four Trees mark the place where Ninja Star was hidden in stasis during the Nightmare War?

This is no freakier than any other D/s Chrysalis/Shining story. The addition of dubcon actually makes a it bit less freaky!

Ah this story, I had it in my read later list since the first chapter came out, unfortunately, it got burred and I never got around to it.

Then I find it here, and I said, WOW he wrote a lot, I guess I'll check it out, then I did... Then got a sad from it being an abandoned work.

I had an idea of ow you cold keep the story going.

okay so  its pikamena's wedding day. pikamena is about tosa i do when er pinkie sense  goes off. it's a new one and it's very vague.

its a combiatio of a doozy, a pinchy knee and a stiff tail.meanig the exact opposite of a twitcy tail. 'something is below you'

meanwhile back at the castle, luna is in full panic mode becase she checked the portal to the underworld and War is gone. she as no idea where he went utill celestia bursts in with a letter from twilight... end chapter 1

i would love to try to contine it for you if you dont want towrite about war... i mean, if that's okay with you...

Don't mean to be a killjoy, but isn't it against the fimfiction rules to post separate stories in one posted story?

WE TRUSTED YOU!

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was wondering what happened to this story, i had a feeling it would be scrapped. tis unfortunate though your reasoning is perfectly valid

Oh... okay. Still enjoyable though.

Are any of these stories up for adoption?

Aww. I actually flew into a panic a few days ago and went on a rampage to find out if 'Our Mom Princess Luna' was in teh Scrap File.

>>21134592113459 Sure, so long as you leave my name somewhere for "original idea" and such.

I'm confused as to how the thought process might have gone regarding cutting War's genitals off. I guess I might be happier not knowing.

>>21143312114331 War raped Luna, was the plan. Thusly her bizzare violent bedroom fetishes, and domination of her lovers. Makes her feel better for the scarring it imparted, and served as a root for her brashness. But, the story never saw fruition.

damn shame.I like your writing style, but it seems like the stories by you I want to read are the ones you don't want to write.

Damnit not again!

WHY?! DEAR GOD WHY?! Your best stories are the ones in the scrap file. Sure the others a good.. but this one was great. you having such great luna and fillies/colt stories!

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definately agree.  Our Mom Princess Luna is better than anything on the active list.  And Fluttershy and the Wild Stallion has me liking Mossy Mane better than  Spartan Shield

Nooooooooo PLEASE write more Seeing the Pattern!!!!! I have to know what happens next! I want to see Pinkie more, as she trys to be death AND prevent deaths. Not a big fan of the War thing (not really sure what that's about), but since you obviously don't like it either, why not start 3 over agin differently? And Lickity would probably have to find out some time. I mean, it's kinda hard to keep something like that from someone you live with, especially if they're smart.

I absolutely love how Luna is portrayed here!

Aw, I just tried to check if anything was happening this story, since it hadn't updated in a while, and instead found it was just plain gone. Did some sifting through your blogs to find out what happened with it.

Well, it was cute while it lasted, but I suppose I'm not really sure where the story could have gone anyway. I haven't read the one you said it was too similar to, though. Would you have eventually turned this into an actual romance between Fluttershy and Mossy? The last I recall, she was treating him practically like a pet.

Ah, so this was where it went.

Oh well. I guess I can make up my own story that have my favorite things like funny writing, Fluttershy in awkward situations, Fluttermac, ponies as fish out of water, and all the other good stuff.

>>10112571011257

I wonder which version of that Pony this is, given that he's both in Luna's service and (was) in Nightmare's before running off with a Changeling (Unless I've got him mixed up with a different Pony and I need to read the Nightmare fic again).

Ah, worlds that ended and are left abrupt. Many of these have I seen, and some I have walked only to see an abrupt patch of white abyss where a town road simply ends. The citizens move about and speak and go about their business, never noticing the emptiness that they walk into or walk out of as they go about their daily business...but then, their world has always been like this, so why be concerned? They never suspect that their world is incomplete, for only those whom have been outside their little world can realize the sad truth...

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Myth-Mind aside, I like how you're taking stuff that you never completed and are turning even that into it's own little world, as it were.