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In the last five years humanity has been brought to its knees by the conversion movement and the purification that has followed. Now in its final hour the last survivors of this once great race will make their last stand. Set in the Conversion bureau: Ten Rounds universe.
The thing I like with this take on CB is that the ponies are treated like zombies. They're sweet and kind and loving, and they just want what's best for you, if only you'll let them infect you with their kindness...
I love the dichotomy, even as it makes me cry how the poor things are being treated. It's funny. It's really, really terrible what the humans do to the ponies in these stories and I see it as the world gone mad, quite, quite mad. You have to feel for the humans, because if you ask me they really ARE misguided and evil when they will put a bullet through their compatriots just because they grow hooves.
As an outside observer, I love the turnabout. As a fan of the genre, it's a unique look inside insanity.
Goddamn this is one of the best stories I have ever read. I actually cried manly tears. Also, thank you GaryGibson for the song name, it goes well with it.
If the human race were to ever to gasp its last breath, you can count on it that that last breath will be used to enact revenge of the highest order possible.
>>66485 nice song, I do think that The Lightning strike by Snow Patrol goes better with this story though (hence why I put the lyrics in at the end lol)
and to answer your question, no I have no plans for a sequel as of right now, I do have an alternate ending/epilogue that I originally cut from the story that I may post at a later date.
You have one hell of a good story here Steel. I admit, the ending certainly struck a chord with me. You don't very often see a ten rounds fic, but you pulled it off very well. I think that this story should be kept as is, in terms of the total plot of the story, but I think that there could be some pretty interesting back stories you could put in here. Keep up the good stories!
The ten rounds universe is a fic that was written by Defoloce setting up the Equestria invades earth style of TCB fics. The original can be found here
That post immediately made me think of World War Z except with TCB ponies as the zombies...
In all seriousness though, I personally like the idea of a Ten Rounds universe fic every now and then. I occasionally enjoy a good grimdark story every now and then.(As long as it's not grimdark for grimdark's sake.)
>>66537 SHUT up! the humans should have won!, its the ponies faults that they made those damn Conversion stations in the first place!. think of it? no more shooting guns, no more call of duty, no more TF2! in exchange for... rolling in grass, and flying around.... "ooh soo cool..."
>>66537 SHUT up! the humans should have won!, its the ponies faults that they made those damn Conversion stations in the first place!. think of it? no more shooting guns, no more call of duty, no more TF2! in exchange for... rolling in grass, and flying around.... "ooh soo cool..." >>67056
Aw hell no! , they dont have video games, guns, WMDs (weapons of mass destruction) tanks, helicoptors, or anything! they can keep hteir stupid magic while i get technology, weapons, video games, HANDS, and what do ponies have? carriages, royalty, things we used 1000 years ago!
The way I see it is, if you can write something that gets a reaction like >>67731 then you're doing something right, whether the commenter is agreeing or disagreeing with you.
I'm pretty sure that the guest there commenting is tongue in cheek - but to be honest, there ARE people like that (gapaot for one), and when I look at it, I can't help but think they're nuts. WMD's are a good thing? Magic, flying, happiness, friendship aren't worth giving up video games (the one thing from that list I'd actually miss) for?
Misanthropy in and of itself isn't something bad, Badly written misanthropy is a different problem. The difference is between whether you're a good author writing a crapsack world, or whether you're a crap author writing a 'bad' world. If you want excellent misanthropy as well as heroic humans, then just read Yellowstone and follow it up with xmen comics. Heroes and villains, the tapestry of humanity is diverse and varied.
When I read this, I can't help but imagine the Team America theme song playing in the background, which makes it all the more awesome.
That being said, THEY DIED LIKE TRUE AMERICAN HEROES.RIP.NEVR4GET.
Funny, I made a blog post on this site just about that a couple of days ago :P
>>WMD's are a good thing? Magic, flying, happiness, friendship aren't worth giving up video games (the one thing from that list I'd actually miss) for?
Well, it's more complicated than that. While nukes are a terrible weapon, they are more than that. They ushered us into a new age of technological prowess, and they symbolize just that. As a human, I can't help but be utterly fascinated by them. Science burst upon the world devices that weigh a few tons themselves but deliver energies equivalent to *millions* of *tons* of TNT. Devices that match the power output of our sun for a few nanoseconds. Devices that taught us how that there is far, far more potential within matter than just chemical combustion.
Heh, sorry. that's the engineer/science nut in me talking 
We have far more technology and scientific knowledge than just nukes. Plus, we discover new things all the time. Would you really want to give all that up for a simple, quaint life pulling doorknobs with your teeth? Probably without ever progressing beyond that?
Sure, it would be a new and unique experience. But for the rest of your life?
...Although: flight with your own wings? That's always been a very strong dream of mine...
The scientist in me agrees in progress, it agrees very strongly with understanding truly how the world works, and an amazing device that rivals the power of the very suns themselves is nothing to be sniffed at - but the romantic and humanist in me understands how "more stuff" doesn't equate to "more better".
I'm not a bleeding heart liberal (although as a slightly politically left of centre european, compared to "centre politics" in the USA, that's exactly what I am) so I am fully aware that merely throwing away everything we have to live like cavemen would be bloody awful - the thing I'm comparing it to is an entirely different world, with different world laws and an entirely different form of civilization.
In this candy-coloured world, the mythical golden age that is spoken of in our world by only the thick and the deceitful is true. That's the amazing thing which a lot of the neighsayers just don't get. We're dealing with a world where friendship really is magic, and magic is everywhere. That world is something I would give up very many things in this one for - not for some facile facsimile thereof.
This,
the ending.
It is either terribly perfect or perfectly horrible I am not entirely sure which.
The last of the humans fights the pointless battle for "freedom".
"Freedom": that fearfully fickle thing flowing from the idiotic idea of independence inarguable.
The last moments are played out;
betrayal by a lost love,
false victory proclaimed,
and the ultimate Revenge.
To strike back at the very precipice, the height, the original Instigator of this oh-so grim scenario.
The result determined only by what is left unsaid,
only those who do not fear searching their own imaginations will know for sure.
/lame word spew
Oh this was good! Anything which makes me uncontrollably regurgitate words like that is, it means that you've made me think.
(And that is an achievement indeed!)
Continue.
>>199641 The healthy human doesn't wake up in the morning thinking this is its last day on earth. But I think that's a luxury. Not a curse. To know you're close to the end is a kind of freedom. Good time to take... inventory. Outgunned.Outnumbered. Out of our minds on a suicide mission. But the sand and rocks here, stained with thousands of years of warfare... They will remember us. For this. Because out of all our vast array of nightmares, this is the one we choose for ourselves. We go forward like a breath exhaled from the Earth. With vigor in our hearts and one goal in sight; We. Will. Kill her. 
I loved this story. As much as I love my Little Pony, and I do love My Little Pony, the idea of humanity giving up everything just sounds wrong. Giving up themselves, their culture, their history, all of that, it just doesn't sound right...
This story though, was beautiful. Heck, even if Celestia didn't die, I'm happy knowing the last human went out as a human, not as a pony.
You have the following nominations:
THE DALEK IX SEAL OF APPROVAL
FOR TALES OF DEFIANCE TO THE END.
Thing is, in the Ten Round universe... they are.
Celestia has ordered them to throw their lives away, without care for personal safety, to convert humans. By Celestia's will, she will have dozens upon dozens of ponies will literally throw themselves onto a sword just to convert a single human.
And they will obey without thought.
They are zombies. No will of their own, only living to please Celestia. And if she's willing to let untold numbers of ponies die like that, she is not a good master to serve.
Sorry, I thought that you didn't understand when you said -
"humans, because if you ask me they really ARE misguided and evil when they will put a bullet through their compatriots just because they grow hooves."
They do become akin to zombies, so putting them down when irreversibly infected just makes sense.
Well, you've got two sides to the take on it - one is in-universe, the other is extra-universe.
All said and done, from the outside, fluffy zombie horde or not, even the world of ten rounds isn't entirely horrific. The ponies don't actually hurt you , and when you become a pony you really do feel much happier and care-free. The happiness they offer is genuine as it is intrinsic to their very being.
The body horror is there though - a fanatical devotion to Celestia and mental changes which are high-grade, unavoidable and permanent. I could argue both sides of the "fanatical devotion to a cause you believe in", but the idea that ponies would throw away their lives to convert humans by force is part of the mental body horror (have I got that right?).
From the outside, what you've got is instantaneous elimination of a friendly creature who just wants the best for you. The worst you're going to get from an 'unarmed' pony is a strong nibbling and a big hug. From one point of view, that's pretty evil. It's pretty fucked up.
From the inside, the ponies represent an extinction-level event - a soft genocide, and every new pony is (much like a zombie) another trooper for the other team. It's logical, if cold and cruel, to shoot anybody infected at the first opportunity before they can any sort of threat.
Having read this series and some of the responses, I'm so glad that I'm not the only brony who has an issue with using the FiM-verse for a story whose basic moral is, "It's okay to commit genocide against some groups of people because you're better than them." I would nuke the entire world into a glass parking lot before I'd ever let the Conversion Bureau ponies get their hooves on it.
>>273301 "Soft genocide" is an oxymoron.
>>331026 Thank fuck, I was starting to think I was the only one!
You two aren't the only ones with a low opinion of the Conversion Bureau-verse. I have to agree with whoever said this: "Basically, the story seems to advocate genocide/forced assimilation."
I'm okay with MLP:FiM war stories but somehow, using the FiM-verse for a story that essentially advocates genocide seems so wrong.
I would rather put a bullet in my head than be converted. After all, you die either way. I mean conversion deletes and then overwrites your identity, mind and body, everything that makes you, you.
>>338203 Indeed. Are you at all familiar with S. M. Stirling's Draka series? The ponies here are basically the same deal: A race that's more physically powerful than humanity and from this develops a racial supremacist doctrine it uses to justify conquering Earth and killing (or brainwashing and genetically modifying for their own purposes) every last member of the human race. And they have an "I Win" button. The only difference is we're not supposed to root for the Draka.
Thank Odin's hairy balls, I'm not the only one! I find the TCB universe an intriguing idea and I love the amount of writing materail it can provide people. I must say I only have a few qualms with it. Firs of all, the misanthropy is more than enough to make me want spew pure acidic hatred into the TCB version of Celestia and the Mane 6's faces.
First off the huge plothole from the original fic which got carried over a few fics. Equestria was suffering from overpopulation.....let's convert 19 billion humans to ponies! Ingenious! Who cares there's not freaking way even an Equestria-nized Terra could even fit that many ponies without covering Terra with arcologies. I mean the world currently has 7 billion souls on it already 19 billion with no interstellar trade to support the population plus many humans being jobless. Yeah, call me a nerd but that shattered my suspension of disbelief. It's shouldn't kill authors to at least use that monkey brain of ours they love deriding
Second....IT'S XENOCIDE. Freaking xenocide! Genocide is the destruction of an entire race or religious groups. What Hitler did to the Jews was genocide. Homo Sapiens Sapiens is a species not a damn race so that makes what the ponies are doing in such an inane and bright and colorful way xenocide which is the destruction of an entire species.
Third in many TCB fics Equestria and the ponies are so damn perfect it truly sickens me. Hell, I'm glad the shows aren't any where near what the TCB fics do. The pones have plenty of conflict and more than a few dangers. I've read a few TCB fics that claim nothing in Equestria is poisonous. Poison Joke and the CMC's love poison apparently being something else. Also baked bads.
Anyway, my inforant aside, I enjoyed this fic. The ponies are over the top with their love and caring to the point they'll attack en masse to convert humans forcibly. Celestia was a bit OOC but then again, the arrogant bint just took a nuke to the face. Even if her godhood deus ex machinaed her to safety she's missing a ton of followers now. I like TCB fics like this because they put a new spin on things.
Except of course, being a sun god, trying to kill Celestia with an atomic blast is like trying to drown an ocean. The sun is nothing but a giant natural nuclear reactor. And exposing her to what is effectively a fragment of her own essence is like tossing water balloons at a body of water.
>>429685 O Most Honourable Lady Chatoyance, I humbly beseech thee to kindly bestow upon us poor fools at FIMFiction the wondrously woven literary tapestry that is Ten Minutes: Aftermath.
Also, CRUSAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAADE MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
Humans always die standing. At least, I know I would.
This story was amazing, and i like how the men didn't give a fuck. In my opinion, these stories are somewhat, undersold, and many people hate them. these stories are fucking amazing. Still don't see how the ponies would be able to overpower the U.S Military, Russian Military, British Military, Chinese PLA, Korean Military, Taiwan PLA, Japanese Military, German military, and EU Warhorse. I just don't see it. these stories are sometimes really fuggin' ridiculous. Putting that fact aside, the story was very good! I liked it, even though i believe the men should of held out longer.
You could implant a small amount of explosives in your head and trigger it by pressing a gun a a certain area. To make sure they can't convert you.
A .50 cal would be nice though. A .45 magnum is pretty good too. Any type of gun the will obliterate your head will work. Incendiary and explosive rounds would work best in those situations too. KABLOUIE! No more head!
Hakuna Matata! as the saying goes.
(Or however you spell it)
I am now, an instrument of violence
I am a vessel of invincibility
I cannot leave this undecided
Stepping down to battle another day
Remember me for all time this
Determination is a vital part of me
Surrender now or be counted
With the endless masses that I will defeat
Come on bring it
Don't sing it
Better believe it
Broken down till your hope has died
Beat down till victory's mine
Stand up and show me some pride
And now, are you ready?
I'm the one with the warrior inside
My dominance can't be denied
Your entire world will turn
Into a battlefield tonight
As I look upon you, through the warrior's eyes now
I can see the fear
That will ensure my victory this time
I can't be told to compromise this
They'll never doubt the body lying at my feet
A most formidable reminder
They will speak my name for eternity
I have no need of any guidance
I am a weapon, powerful beyond belief
Seen through the warrior's eyes, I
Never need to question, how to defeat you
Come on bring it
Don't sing it
Better believe it
Broken down till your hope has died
Beat down. Till victory's mine
Stand up and show me some pride
And now, are you ready?
Chorus:
I'm the one with the warrior inside
My dominance can't be denied
Your entire world will turn
Into a battlefield tonight
As I look upon you, through the warrior's eyes now
I can see the fear
That will ensure my victory this time
You can't hide now
I am the warrior
So decide now
How they'll remember you
Do not hide now
Act like a warrior
Show some pride now
Solidify your place in time
I'm the one with the warrior inside
My dominance can't be denied
Your entire world will turn
Into a battlefield tonight
As I look upon you, through the warrior's eyes now
I can see the fear
That will ensure my victory this time
I'm the one with the warrior inside
The evidence can't be denied
The entire world will stare
Into this battlefield tonight
As I stand before you with a warrior's heart now
I can feel the strength that will
Ensure my victory this time
Disturbed- Warrior.
quite fitting don't you think?
so, could someone who sides with the ponies for these fics explain to me how wiping out an entire species, taking away their culture, their history, and everything else is a good thing? if anything you sons a' bitches make me sick. you embody what you hate. but you know what? you have my pity.
Oh, and one final thing, for the finale:
I applaud you, Brony of Steel, that was one hell of a last stand. Death to the CBverse ponies. Glory to the Human race.
COMRADES! AWAKEN FROM THE STUPOR OF YOUR INSIGNIFICANT DAILY LIVES! THE BEAST HAS REARED ITS HEAD FROM THE SHADOWS. NOW IS NOT THE TIME TO FEAR. TO DOUBT. TO SUBMIT. TOGETHER WE WILL MARCH. WE WILL MARCH STRAIGHT DOWN THE BEASTS THROAT. CHOKING IT WITH WILLPOWER ALONE. STAND WITH ME COMRADES. TODAY WE WILL SHOW THIS BEAST THAT WE CAN NOT BE CONTROLLED. THAT WE CAN NOT BE ENSLAVED. THAT WE WILL PREVAIL AT ANY COST. WE WILL BE VICTORIOUS!
ONWARD COMRADES! TO GLORY!
>>66537 COMRADES! THE SITUATION IS DIRE. EVEN NOW THE ENEMY GATHERS AT THE GATE. THEY WISH TO DESTROY US, TAKE AWAY WHAT IT MEANS TO BE HUMAN! THEY SAY THEY WILL BRING PEACE IF WE JOIN THEM AND BECOME LIKE THEM. DO YOU KNOW WHAT I SAY? I SAY THAT IS NO PEACE AT ALL! AS YOU FACE DOWN THE ENEMY TODAY, REMEMBER YOUR FAMILIES REMEMBER WHY YOU FIGHT. DO THIS AND WE CANNOT FAIL!
THE NIGHT IS DARKEST BEFORE THE DAWN! ONWARDS COMRADES! TO GLORY!
>>1014131 COMRADES! THIS TRAITOR WOULD SEE YOU ALL DEAD! OR WORSE! THEY WOULD MAKE YOU A SLAVE TO THE IMPERIALIST CELESTIA! ASK YOURSELF COMRADES, WHEN WE DROVE OUT THE CZAR AND HIS IMPERIALIST PUPPETS DID WE FALTER? DID WE DOUBT? WHEN EVERYTHING WAS AGAINST US DID WE SURRENDER? NO!
REMEMBER THE BRAVE SOULS WHO FOUGHT THE IMPERIALISTS DURING THE WORKERS REVOLUTION! THE SITUATION IS GRIM, BUT THEY DID NOT SURRENDER AND NEITHER WILL WE!
FIGHT COMRADES! FIGHT WITH ALL YOUR HEART AND SOUL! WE CANNOT, NO, WE WILL NOT FAIL! FOR HUMANITY COMRADES! STRIKE DOWN THE IMPERIALIST TYRANT CELESTIA, AND ALL OF OUR OWN WHO WOULD STAND WITH HER.
THE SECOND GREAT PATRIOTIC WAR HAS BEGUN, DO NOT FALTER. DO NOT DOUBT. DO NOT FAIL.
>>429685 This story offended you so badly you had to go and make a fixfic? I am so astonished that I can't even find the heart to use my Soviet propaganda voice. If you don't like the premise that Humanity would prefer to go down fighting than be indoctrinated into ponydom then by all means do not read a story from the "ten rounds" continuity.
But do not post a story that "fixes it" so it better fits with your own version of events. If you do not like it then you should not read it.
No disputing that.
Friendship is Magic ponies are fine, overall. I am a grown man who like military sci-fi like Starship Troopers (book) and Warhammer 40000 and I am a Brony. But give me CBverse ponies and count me among those who would toss molotovs into Conversion Bureaus and watch them burn. Glory to the Human Race!
>>1028196 COMRADES! HERE IS A FINE EXAMPLE OF A TRUE WARRIOR! UNWAVERING IN THEIR BELIEFS! READY TO FIGHT TO THE LAST! YOU COULD ALL LEARN SOMETHING FROM THIS BRAVE SOUL!
FIGHT LIKE THIS MAN COMRADES AND WE CANNOT FAIL! ONWARD! MARCH FORWARD, HEADS HELD HIGH, FACING THE FUTURE! FOR HUMANITY!
Because clearly Reaper was a homicidal maniac, capable of only cruelty and atrocities, acting purely out of his anger and spite for ponykind.
All I'm seeing in this response is misanthropic/pony>human propaganda and blatant denial of facts already established in this universe (the Ten Round TBC universe). If I wasn't aware of your reputation, I would have mistaken that as a trollfic.
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