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Applejack and Rainbow Dash get stuck together in the Apple family cabin when a freak snow storm prevents them from leaving during a weekend get away. Alone. As time passes, the two begin to learn things they never knew about eachother... And themselves. Appledash shipping. Humanized.
All credit for the cover image goes to Domented-inc56 on Deviantart!! Go praise this artist!
>>1006954 Oh hai there.
So this isn't spam, there's something I forgot to say when I commented on this chapter on DeviantART. Big Mac trying to set up AJ with a guy. Why does that make me think he knows she's a lesbian and he's trying to turn her straight by setting her up with guys?
Haha, awesome :) it wouldn't let me upload just the prologue alone, as it did not meet the 1,ooo word requirement on this site for new story. And what you have done may just alter life as we know it! Bwahahahaha!
Thanks! I hope I continue to impress, and I still have a weeee little bit of settup to go ;)
Thanks! Glad to impress :)
Odd, I never thought Rarity was a truck type. Pinkie Pie, however... of course, no sane person would let her drive through the mountain.
And the fic so far... it could be better. Dunno, I don't feel hooked. I'll give it a couple more chapters wait before passing judgment 
>>1007602 It just seems typical, you know? A classic romance fic: "two girls, alone in the snow, get to know each other better and realize they have feelings for each other". The thing about Dash's parents, some sort of hidden grudge, adds some spice, but still falls under the category of things they get to know when they talk about themselves. I feel like, if there were another line of action besides the upcoming romance I'd pick it up better.
Still, I don't know what you've got planned for the future, so like I said, I'll hold my judging until I see more.
Sounds good to me :) I plan on adding in a bit more of an actual problem, as I agree with you as to how typical romances can be lame! Just do me the favour of reading through the whole next chapter that I post before ya make your decision, as it will be at the end of the chapter that I introduce my antagonist :)
Haha, trust me, I was considering it :P buuuuut then I realized some of the people reading might be younger, and I don't want to loose readers because of a few more mature scenes. Maybe I'll post a short one shot fic of what really took place in that tub later ;)
And yeah, I decided that simple romance is nice and all, but I wanted to mix it up a little, make my story a bit more original :)
Very remarkable. I will be keeping an eye on this one because I like where it is going. I am not much of a fan of human fictions, but this is one of the few I can consider acceptable. Keep up the good work, and I will be waiting for future updates. Also...
Dem Cliff Hangers! That is all.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
Woot! A fellow DeviantArtist! 
Thanks do much for reading, I'd love to know what you like most about the story!?
Haha, thank you! I always freak out right before posting chapters cause I'm worried my readers won't like them, but I'm glad to be proved wrong :) I'd love to hear why ya like my story so much :)?
Thanks a bunch! I'm glad you love it so much, but I have to ask, what do you love about it? ( for future story purposes ;) ) and if ya wanna find the artist and give him a complement, in sure it would mean a lot :D artist info can be found in story discription.
Alright then.
First of all: Human Appledash. I like the idea of a human Rainbow Dash and Applejack. It's very sexy. 
Second: Alternative character interpretation. I love it when people dare to take a different approach to established characters and still have them recognizable. 
Third: It has good characterization and good phasing. It flows exactly well and nothing feels padded or rushed. 
Edit: Forth: It has a portable radio. I love portable radios...
>>1354980 It was great. I loved it aaaaand the classic cliffhanger kiss...
I love Humanized AppleDash fics so that's probably the main reason why I like this story so much. I also appreciate the level of intimacy you put with AJ and Rainbow Dash. You can obvously tell they're great friends in the beginning and the flirting/teasing between them is just adorable.
Some parts seemed a little confusing or vague to me, but perhaps that is a result of me reading too fast. 
Hope to see more updates soon! I'm intrigued to know what the deal is with this random bloody guy and where the rest of the gang members are xD
Wordlessly the two friends remained there, still, quiet, contempt.
Contempt? Do you mean content?
Lame. Cliffhangers. Anyway good chapter and I like this story, I'm still confused as to where this is going if it's not going to be a thriller of some sort. Oh, and I originally commented on deviant art but I'm here now cause I like fimfiction better.
You want it? You got it! ( Sorry was too busy watching the hobbit 
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The chapter was pretty awesome! I liked that this time Rainbow was the one who wanted it slowly ( in the most fics it would be AJ ).
I agree with y1fellas here. Don't think the cop would give his gun away just like that. But that's not that dramatic right? 
And now I'm just sitting here, waiting for another story update but..........take you time......... I can wait.......gonna eat some cupcakes or something 
Woot thanks :D And yeah, I agree that I probs should have planned the whole gun thing a bit better... hopefully I'll change it to make it a bit more believable when I edit the whole story when it is done!
:D Thanks :) Hopefully wont be such a wait for the next one.
But... But... Okay.
Man, I was confused at the start of this chapter until I read a little further
The progression of the romance feels kind of weird so far. In the beginning it seemed like AJ only thought of Dash as a friend. AJ could have easily said that Dash was sleeping in her dream also. I suppose it just feels a little rushed for how its been set up, is all.
That said, I am definitely enjoying this story so far. Looking forward to reading more
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"Wordlessly the two friends remained there, still, quiet, contempt"
Contempt seems like a weird word here. You mean to write content?
Fuck. Fuck. Fuck. Fuck. Shit. Titties. Fuck. (In no particular order). 
Last, was Pinkie, and Pinkie, well, Pinkie Pie was just being herself.
Something about this sentence just sounds odd. I think it's the "and Pinkie" part. The only other thing that struck me was the narrator swapping out their names for their nicknames.
SHITTTTT!!!! 
Alright, that was... Yeah, wow. Alright, there was definitely good suspense here. I had to quickly look back at the previous chapters to make sure I didn't misread anything... and I didn't! Damn it Applejack and Dash; at least, Dash didn't let her guard down so easily "guilty until proven innocent!" I'd love to see where this goes... I mean really, that suspense!
Hahaha, thank you for your kind- and quite vulgar- words describing how you felt about this chapter :D Much appreciated ;P
And thanks for the short critique :) I'll see what I can do about the nick-name thing, but would it be possible for you to expand on what you meant by it?
Thank ya kindly for your comments :D correct me if I am wrong, but I get the idea that you found this chapter... suspenseful? and that, just maybe, you would like to see more soon? I dunno, I could be wrong. Aaaaanyway, if there is anything you think I could do to improve this story, or just my writing in general, I would love to hear! If not, glad I impress ya ;D
>>1859901 I don't know, for some reason it just didn't feel right having the narrator go from using their real names, to a nickname, and back. For somepony else referring to them that way in dialogue, it makes perfect sense but seeing it in narration stood out to me.
Awesome, and now that I think about it, that actually makes a lot of sense... Thank you for pointing it out to me :D Once I'm done the last chapter I'm gunna do a full edit of the whole story, so I'll add that to the list of things that I will look out for whilst editing! Thanks again, I really appreciate it :)
P.S.
I've already figured out how I'm editing / improving the first two chapters, and I'm already super excited about it XD Can't wait for you t' see em.
With the update today I read the whole story again and just can say that this is one of the best humazied fics I read so far
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i hope the update will come soon 
I can't click on chapter 3
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to dA! 
. With this story it could go either way *badum* *psh* 
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