Oh dear... I think I know where this is going...

Oh this can't end well...

If big mac becomes a pretty pony, this will be wounderful.

Big Mac meet Rule 63. Rule 63 meet Big Mac.

>>10060971006097 Eeeyup.

Is pretty good. Though you can put some space in between things like the part where Applejack is at the farm to the library.

I'll stay.

>>10061151006115 Aren't they all ponies? He might become a mare if this is were I think it's going

>>10061591006159 Of course that's where it's going :D

I just have to read this... I gotta ask, but am I the only one who thinks that R63 Big Mac is cute? Just me?

Well, whatever. You've got yourself a thumb and a favorite.

Applejack's accent is too thick. With her, less is more, and as it is, her dialog is kinda hard to read.

Not bad, 'cept I got confused when AJ went to Twilight's house, there needs to be a page break there. I guess I'll track this.

>>10061651006165 So basically:

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>>10062271006227 Sounds about right

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looks at pitcure, is hooked.

Reads description, "No, it can't be."

Finishes chapter.

>>10062351006235 Then the question is just how long does he need to be a mare.

Oh and he forgot to turn the Swag off

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I wonder how many of the guys in town are going to try and hit him..er....her

>>10062661006266 Hopefully all of them :D And then spike totally needs to think Mac is a "rustic beauty"

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"She watched her brother examine every tree until he found a suitable tree for his nape, just as she had known he would." << italics need fixing

A very entertaining idea, well executed thus far. I'm interested to see how you'll keep it funny past 'big mac being a mare', ie their antics and his management of said dilemma. Thumbs up and a track, definitely

>>10062031006203 Although I can see where you're coming from, it's not so bad; I've seen far worse. It does need toning down just a tad, though. Less 'fer's and 'ahm's, more cliche similes.

>>10062751006275 Maybe even Rainbow Dash is even gonna try

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>>10063121006312

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Swag

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Reads describen. Alright where's the popcorn?

This is going to be interesting

>>10063121006312

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>>10064991006499 >>10063451006345

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WHAT THE HAY?!

ERROR: nape should be nap.

Moar!

Need a bit more transition, otherwise it's beautiful.

Now the question becomes what shall we call R63 Big Mac?

>>10072961007296 The general consensus is that her name is Red Gala.

>>10074281007428>>10072961007296

AJ just calls her 'Big Red', though.

>>10074521007452 Where's that?

bilbo baggins

I like this story

Poor AJ, she's in for a rough day.

YES. I knew it. I'm not the only one who thinks R63 Big Mac - Er, Red Gala is a cute pony. In the beginning of the chapter, I noticed "How they hay did this happen?" Might wanna get rid of the "y" at the end of "The".

I eagerly await more of this... To be honest, I eagerly await more of Red Gala. Keep up the good work.

>>10076371007637

You have no idea.

And to all of you who guessed the Rule 63, good job! And, sorry, there will be no sex with Rainbow Dash. This IS rated everyone after all.

And so...IT BEGINS!

Oh this is some great setup. I eagerly await the hilarity that will come.

Wait wait wait. You have Rule 63'd Big Mac, and then made him act like a slut, and you made it rated for Everyone?

Fuck off :P

>>10077081007708

Um, yeah, I AM considering changing that.

It took m five minutes of staring at the picture to realize hes a and im read the description ohh this is going to be juicy

Stupid nookIt took m five minutes of staring at the picture to realize hes a and im read the description ohh this is going to be juicy

AJ, what have you done? Do you not know what you have unleashed upon the world?

Hmm, okay why would Twilight not recognize her own spell? Things seem to happen a little too fast for my liking. Maybe next chapter will be an improvement.

And I still haven't found my popcorn. Did you take it Pinkie?

Pinkie: No

Me: GAH!! Holy shit, Pinkie!

Big Mac genre savvy.  It would seem he knows who has a weakness for mares judging from this.  Personally, Spike should see this and lets watch the hilarity spread.  For that matter, unexpected visit from Blueblood comes to mind.

ummm.....he's taking it rather well. I mean he just finds out he swapped genders and the first thing he thinks of is who to show it off to? If I were suddenly turned into a girl I would probably panic for a few hours, cry and mourn my lost "manhood". Big Mac does none of that! He just thinks "nice prank sis! you really got me there!" Come on at least show a little rage, anger, anything! You interested me at the first chapter but lost me on the second

>>10077191007719

YOU.

PROOFREADER.

NOW.

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... Go on.

oh joy 63'ed Big Mac

this gun b gud

>>10061161006116

oh Celestia lol

let the gender-swapped shenanigans begin!

Big Mac-ahem, Red Gala, I hope 63 is your favorite number. You're going to be hearing a LOT about it.

>>10080431008043

Big Mac did feel something.

Trollish.

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this is going to be hilarious

"Thanks, Twi, y'all're the best!"

FINALLY, someone spelled it correctly!

wow ok you need to slow down a bit. sorry it all happened to fast you need a proofreader oh i'm sorry for the negative comment but here come a good one the story line is a good one i still think this is going to be interesting  

>>10076651007665

What's Rule 63?

This will be fun to see what she has in store for us. I still wonder if Rainbow Dash is going to try and hit that

>>10098991009899  Rule 63 is Gender change.

>>10098991009899

Internet rule 63: If there is a male character a female version of that character must be made, the only exception to this rule is if the male in question is androganyous enough that the female version would look like the male version or the female version has not been created.

>>10074651007465

No specific place, just headcanon.

Oh Mac, you're such a tease! I can't wait to find out what happens next. Don't keep me waiting too long!

>>10082341008234

He he. Sorry, I don't have one. BUT if things are pointed out in the comments, I do go back and fix them.

>>10105281010528

I'll do it then.

>>10105571010557

What exactly do proofreaders do? I mean, besides the obvious.

AWESOME job

I've said it before, and I'll say it again (and possibly many more times in the future), if ever there was a time to make a statement regarding the current reality of excrement, that time is now:

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...Considering that she is in fact a colt-turned-mare, I'm willing to believe that Red Gala is a lesbian here.

But this is a bit much. Shouldn't there be some form of panic first?

I could say I don't enjoy this story...but that would be LYING!

>>10106441010644

proofreaders fix small mistakes. prereader read it and tell you if it's good. i do both. i can also critsize the heck out of it if wanted. ((i hate kindles-_-))

>>10116151011615

Okay, I'm working on a new chapter right now. I'll pm it to you when I'm done.

>>10116211011621

k. i can't do gdocs for now. i'll need a link to the chapter.

>>10116431011643

Okay. I'll send it when I'm done. Or I'll just copy and pase it into a pm.

>>10116491011649

...

I meant the unsubmited chapter on fimfiction. i was going to do the corrections in a notebook.

>>10116681011668

I know. I wouldn't publish it until you'd corrected it.

>>10116701011670

k.

just give me credit somewhere for proofreading.

>>10116881011688

Of course.

>>10116931011693

k.

off to grill a story.

hmmm here we go! oh man, cant wait for more. this is awesome, great good so far.

Sir, I demand you give me a bro-hoof! /)

Don't leave me hanging.

>>10139651013965

(\ Brohoof!

Where is Rainbow Dash when you need her!?!

This is brilliant, I never thought of the fact that he wouldn't like colts looking at him.

I notice you refer to him as a she at the start, then towards the end you start saying he again. Not that it stops me reading the story, it's just very noticeable, and a quick fix

This just get's better and better.

So the royals are coming to visit? This can only end in hilarity!

Blueblood...

ahuehuehue you can already guess what is going to happpen

>>10061161006116 rule 63?

i love this story

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Can't wait!

This just keep getting better and better, i almost lol right in the middle of the lunge-room but focks are watching the Olympics not going to work

by the way any one know how to talk like Zecora i'm trying for my storry and man is it hard

Wait, Blueblood?  If this is going where I think it's going, then Blueblood will never, never, never, never, never live this down!

>>10159911015991 If like a zebra you wish to speak, I assure you it will take at least a week.

I like this story a lot, I am excited to see where it goes however, lol.

This is absolutely fantastic! I find myself wishing for it to be more inappropriate, but part of the charm is the level it's at~<3

>>10144791014479

Internet rule 63: If there is a male character a female version of that character must be made, the only exception to this rule is if the male in question is androganyous enough that the female version would look like the male version or the female version has not been created.

Wonderful, as always

Oh, this will not end well at all.

Great chapter, sad it's so short but oh well.

This should be good. I eagerly await more, my friend.

i loath you blueblood. i hope that u and big mac do it so he can laugh at your face and say "HA you just had sex with a colt that hates you!"

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Ah, Blueblood. You bastard.

Also, this chapter? Yeah, I can fit it on my screen. The whole thing. At once. Is this supposed to happen?

Aaawkwaaaaard...Mac may very well be(readies drum) Screwed!

badum-tish!

But please, continue.

If it were me:

Luna: Is there a problem here?

Me: Yes... actually... Though it was a kind gesture, I declined Bluebloods offer to ride with him on the float. When I had said my response, he had no intention of going with my wishes, and claimed to have "misheard" me, as if to make me say yes.

Luna: And... *Looking at Blueblood, a touch of malice in her voice* Blueblood, you were going to go against this beautiful young mare's wishes and have her with you against her will?

Blueblood: Wh-I-d-never! I'm a chivalrous colt! I'd never oppose a nice young mare such as this one here...  *Staring at me, moderately pissed*

Me: So... *Looking to Luna* with her majesty's permission, may I go now?

Luna: Yes... *The sound of silk returning to her voice* Yes you may...

Blueblood: *Watching me leave, disappointed, and annoyed*