New brony who likes fan fic
What goes on in the lobby's of a Manehatten hotel? Only the doorman knows...
This was originally going to be just one chapter, but I figured I would split it, to get some feedback before continuing.
Rated teen for implied sex. Because implied sex is the best sex
I didn't think the chapter was bad at all. If I had to make a suggestion, I would say to somehow space out the part where Filly Grand tells the narrator about the problem. Maybe something along the lines of he just says they had an argument and then the doorman has to convince him to tell him the details. It feels like he unloads all of the issues a little too quickly the way it is now. Also,
Because I finally figured out how to put pictures in
I liked it. I thought the ending was a little strange, but it was still pretty funny to me. I would suggest submitting this to some groups if you haven't already.