Pretty cool

lol glad that didn't end like ti could have

Well done. I can see you learned much about clop from the epilogue of Spartan Shield.

real funny though it would be interesting to see you write a story where twilight and luna actually do get together as a romance shipping instead of friend shipping

Please stop with the same names thing with the OCs it really does make me think they're all the same continuity regardless of authors notes :P.

Other then that though this was a lot of nice innocent fun.  Could've maybe gone a bit longer but overall was a very fun piece.  Archived to my Kindle.

Oh my god. That was adorable.

HA you totally had me going

>>996153996153 He connects all of his stories together.

I'm pretty sure that if this is in the same universe, is happened before TatSS. Otherwise, our favorite Spartan would have ROLF!Stomped the Lunar Stallions AGAIN for trying to run off with his wife.

>>996924996924 this is not connected to any other story of his, so Spartan does not exist here.

Which explains why there aren't ANOTHER dead thousand-or-so Lunar Stallions.

All that needs to be said. Oh wait! I almost forgot

Not sure if shipping or trollfic..

But in both ways, it's as gorgeous as always.

We need a fanart with Twi in the basket!

Shit was hilarious, yo! No really, that was pretty funny. I love that Luna went along with it for a while. Great fic.

Very nice, full of D'aww.

>>996153996153

It does get pretty confusing, but I guess it's sort of like AS's signature, so you know it's one of his stories. I don't think they're all connected stories though.

And then they all fucked...

Great story, I loved Luna playing the evil rapist-goddess. Cute, well written and interesting, as are all your works.

Though I must say I enjoy your serious works a lot more, but that may be because they were the first I read.

>>998383998383

It's good to mellow out with some comedy now and then, or you just turn too serious-face to be any fun anymore.

>>998699998699

I can see that, and I still et a laugh out of these and some genuinly good entertainment, don't get me wrong. Maybe this is some lingering damage from my first "big" fanfic being Fallout: Equestria. I just enjoy the darker themes more.

>>996153996153

Nah, I say he should keep rolling with it. Since there is SOME overarching continuity here, it really helps in making the story more interesting. And since there is a distinct personality to these two guards (which is consistent over his fics, btw) it is a bit like the cameos in the Marvel-Superhero-movies, a nice nod to the fans which adds depth to the story.

some perfectly fine lighthearted Stuff now and then is fine

I usually find myself to be very definitive on my reviews and rating of a fic. It's just the natural course of the path I choose to walk. However, here I found myself a little on the fence. It's not typical that I would write a review on something that took but a glance. That being said, lets jump into it here and see what we can fish out.

I took great notice in how the names of fics popped up from previous works that litter your page. Panzer to name just one. I in truth believe one of the causes of your frustrations is how you write. Each fic contains pieces or small parts of characters referenced to in other work, much like the view of a person through a cracked mirror. While all the images are you, they are different reflections or refractions of the whole, while all look the same all are different and are unaffected by the other in which you see. Somewhat like the theory of a multi-verse. Each picture solid and complete, but unique. I guess it's a different style and is out of the typical litterary norm that you would find at your local book store. But then this is merely works of ones mind for fun.

This piece of work I found greatly entertaining for the various acts and mischief displayed in it. While Luna was taken aback by the actions of here lunar guard, she did not necessarily find their actions disturbing nor reprimanding. It all turned out okay despite the chaos and confusion caused. Memory also serves to remind us that in a certain other fic, the inhibitor has some nasty effects on those who try to use their horns. My question is why such a harmful piece of magic? Would be used on Twilight, noble intentions or not. Either way I found this a short but sweet read, while it won't merit a rating or a story long review from me, it was still decent enough to make me grin and feel a little giddy. I mostly read it to see your characters further fleshed out. The spelling and grammar is also becoming better not as much as some of your other fics.

Keep it up and keep working away, thank you for your efforts!

Signing off,

    Shining Glory

i will be honest

i was hoping for some Molesting action

good... Now make a rape version. Please?

love it, but i was upset with the lack of megusta moments, chapter 2, drunk? XD yay wine!

Awww.

A great short story, hard case! I must admit I am a big fan of what I think of as Ancient Roman style Princess Luna with funny outdated practices and actions; the way it is at odds with modern pony society always gets a laugh out of me :)

Keep up the good work!

Thou art really had me going there!

So... Luna wouldn't molest twilight because they are friends, but she would molest other fillies

Not sure if gusta

The way, Panzer hoof snickered reminded me of this:

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Wel, we can be glad she wasn't a gift to celestia

Great story

5 of 6 spikes:

Not bad, and looks like you made it into the new stories featured box.

It's cute, silly, self contained, and easy to picture. Nicely done, a feature spot well earned.

Okay that was pretty good.

good good.

Man, Luna should try to give more discipline to her guards.

Good story, btw.

That Twilight unpacking Scene had me use up 50% of my monthly Dawwwwww Amount.

The siliness of these grown up Stallion acting like Children to please their Misstress is hilarious then again I would also do anything to keep the Mistress of the Night happy.

Awwww, cute ending!

I am kinda looking forward to the next evening all the Night Guard going about their evening duties and getting a visit from Celestia and/or Shining Armor. Discussing why the guards thought pony-napping Twilight Sparkle, the little sister of the Royal Guard captain, apprentice of Princess Celestia, wielder of the Element of Magic, defeater of Nightmare Moon and Discord, and presenting her as a sex toy to their Princess, Princess Celestia's little sister was a good idea. Their will be ice cream and punishment.

Luna was holding her down firmly and blew on her blush belly again.

'blush belly'? Is there a missing '-ing' or '-ed' in there? Cause I can only imagine something that eats cosmetics having a blush belly :)

Somewhere, someone is drawing a bondage fanart for this thing.

I am not sure whether to be excited or horrified.

The 'other fun things' are.... You know what? I'm not gonna say it. Nope. Niet. Nien.

hahaha! that was awsome!

>>998699998699

Dear god, even your serious face stuff is funny as hell, when you go for outright comedy you have me gagging at 1 am on my spleen.

There were a few issues with characterisation, not many, but really, damn, a very worthy follow up to the amazing Spartan fic.

Kudos.

Hey, guards... If you want to make the princess REALLY happy, I've got this cake here I can burst out of, and this little magic latex s-

HOOF TO THE BALLS

Aegis Shield: ... Wow, those are pretty lifelike

I KNOW RIGHT

Very amusing. Poor Twilight Sparkle.

Unexpected and hilarious. Good job.

Wow..... This was good!

I would've liked the 'mature' ending

I like this as well though

It was awesome

I demand someone Draw Twilight in the basket!

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Yup and a

Quite.

>>10039061003906

there is a pretty good twilight-gift-wrap pic somewhere, i thought that was the inspiration for this, im not sure i can find the pic right now though...

NYAH HAHA, that's a good story, t'was funny....but I didn't laugh.

so hilarious!

and her lunar guards are now proud of themselves XD

“B-but serious, untie me. Those stallions were kind of rough!”

seriously

Sorry for the nazism. Here, have a moustache

>>10040331004033 Are you sure? The closest thing I can find is Twilight as a toy in an Easter Gift Basket...

Good stuff, but I have two questions:

One. Where's the clop?

Two. Gimme the clop.

Great story! It had me laughing through out it and was rather well written. Keep up the good work!

This is wonderfully done! I applaud.

...It occurs to me that the emoticon is somewhat ironic.

someone add a pinkie pie random tag since this is as random as pinkie pie on coffee

>>10042191004219

as i said, can't find it, it was basically a twilight tied up with gift-wrap, i don't remember if there was a basket or something as well, im pretty sure she was on something, but whether it was a pillow, in a basket or something similar; i don't remember. i don't even remember when i saw the pic, but it was a loooong time ago

You had me for a few seconds...

That was awesome! Got a good laugh out of me there. Thanks.

>>10042341004234 Why don't you make an alternate ending? Or request one for that matter?

Well, Twilight got stallion handled! That was a funny story, and the ending was cute.

>>10031191003119 You might check out my story "Twilight and the Spartan Stallion" if you like Greek and Roman-esque stuff! It's historically accurate-- well, as accurate as ponies can be. You might like it!

>>997206997206 I started working on it in my mind the moment I read that part of the fic.  Now that I'm done, I'm breaking out the tablet and gonna start on it.  

>>10045781004578

>>10045801004580  I'll mail you the link when it's done so you can add the link too the story if you want.

THERE NEEDS TO BE A TROLLUNA TO MATCH

dear god i'm still laughing

i find trolling to be one of the funniest things

Bravo, a very entertaining fic, perhaps you'd consider writing another similar fic, but for Mature?

That was great. I was laughing the whole way through.

I didn't check the rating so I couldn't figure out what the hell was going on.

"“Y-you’re gonna h-have your way with m—EEEEP!”" LOL!! XD Sounds like she needs an adult!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2UgcOL2EQM4

Man, ticklish ponies are the cutest ponies. Loved the mare-handling, and the Lunar Stallions too. My punctuation-nazi instinct tells me that you should have used commas instead of periods in some cases, such as “Oh… my.” said Luna. Also, reading italic text is nicer than all-caps'd stuff. A good, not-molestation-based story.

Oh, I think I see what you did there, a little dose of the ancient guards pony art

All in all, delightfully hillarious.

Man that ending came way to quick

I like this.  

THAT WAS NOT THE ENDING I HOPED FOR!!!!!!!!!

Someone should write a clop version of this. Any objections?

Haha that was awesome. Light-hearted, and hilarious.

That was literally one of the best things I have ever read I really enjoyed the behavior of the lunar stallions, they reminded me of... I don't know... puppies? maybe little kids, trying to make their owner/ parents happy... fantastic

i can ony imagine how much those stallions were shitting themselves when they found out tthey ponynapped princess celestias personal protoge and the element of magic.

i can also imagine what happened when twilight caught up to them with the magic inhibiter off and what she did to them.....oh god...what did celestia do to them? although i doubt it was as harsh as what twilight did to the......i just realised how royally fucked they are when there captain of the guard has their flanks for ponynapping his sister. rest in pieces luna stallions.

Aaaawe. Those guards are so cute.

And then they fucked

FUCKING CLIFFHANGER!!!!!!!

That inhibitor ring sounds like a really cool gadget... Can I use it in one of my fics? Please?

i wana twilight in a present at my door..... at ya know... 3am....

I was expecting Twilight to run away doing the worm.

You have disappointed me. But your Spartan Shield fic didn't.

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Twilight  must've looked fucking adorable

Someone show me an image to confirm how many "n"s to put in my

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my only complaint is there is nothing to complain about well done a funny story that was well written and was very much enjoyed

>>997206997206

someone call John Joseco, we need Sexy Twilight fanart!

That was awesome and hilarious I certainly enjoyed it

to bad its complete this had such potential

Oh that's rich!

I wish I could see how Twilight looked!

Awww, it ended too soon. I was waiting for Luna and Twilight to get back at the guards. Still a cute read though.

SSSSSSNNNNNK-HAHAHAHAHAHA! PRICELESS!