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Pen Stroke 154724

Joined November 2011
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    Pen Stroke's Stories (15)

    • Drop of Moonshine
      A thousand years is a long time to go without a good, stiff drink

      10,332 words · 16,789 views · 1,990 likes · 28 dislikes
    • A Mug of Hard Cider
      Celestia's thirst for good alcohol leads her to a pair of new drinking buddies
      12,433 words · 10,737 views · 1,181 likes · 16 dislikes
    • Trinkets
      In the aftermath of Past Sins, Twilight and Nyx go through the things from Nyx's castle bedchamber
      7,396 words · 12,279 views · 1,149 likes · 19 dislikes
    • Better Living Through Science and Ponies
      Not all is well in Equestria when a failing portal gun brings Aperture Science to the land of ponies
      39,976 words · 11,244 views · 1,503 likes · 27 dislikes
    • Winter Bells
      95,663 words · 10,879 views · 1,509 likes · 28 dislikes
    • Fluttershy Wishes
      12,821 words · 6,308 views · 325 likes · 3 dislikes
    • Into The Depths
      44,185 words · 5,652 views · 611 likes · 10 dislikes
    • Bureaucracy is Magic
      14,346 words · 3,301 views · 418 likes · 7 dislikes
    • Creeping Darkness
      63,186 words · 3,283 views · 449 likes · 9 dislikes
    • A Zebra in the Bed
      4,549 words · 3,736 views · 423 likes · 10 dislikes
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    On a dark night filled with even darker magics, an insane cult attempts to give Nightmare Moon a body and life of her own, utterly separate from Princess Luna. But, when the spell is interrupted by Celestia, something unexpected is created.

    Now, a little black alicorn filly named Nyx finds herself living under the care of Twilight Sparkle, only to be haunted by memories and emotions from her past. Is she Nightmare Moon reborn or is she simply a doppelganger with a soul and mind of her own? Can Twilight Sparkle protect Nyx from those who refuse to see past her dragon eyes and black coat?

    Or, will Nyx be forced to inherit the sins that may not even be hers and become the greatest evil Equestria has ever known?

    First Published
    29th Aug 2012
    Last Modified
    30th Aug 2012

    Comments ( 2,341 )

    #1 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 19 · 3 ·
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    #3 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    O

    MY

    FUCKING GOD

    Im going to admit it

    i cried a little bit

    #4 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 4 · ·
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    OMG! It's here finally!

    Look out feature box, you are about to be destroyed!

    I cannot tell you how much I love this fic.. nah, this should be called a epic!

    Can't wait for my copy of the hard back to arrive!

    Now If you excuse me, time to celebrate

    #5 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    IT BEGINS

    #6 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    And here comes the horde

    #7 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    The feature box will never be the same...

    #8 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    YES! :pinkiehappy:

    #9 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Kitaaaaaaaaaa

    #10 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oooh, you brought it here!

    The Feature Box will be broken for a month now. :rainbowlaugh:

    #11 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hmm... I've heard of this story before...

    #12 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Sequel please? :twilightblush:

    #13 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Dear god........:yay: Also We are going to need a new featured box.....

    #14 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    YES!!!!!!! I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS!!!!!!

    #15 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh, God I have waited for this moment! NOW TO READ AND NOT LEAVE MY ROOM! :rainbowwild::rainbowwild:

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    #17 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    R.I.P Featured Box :ajsleepy:

    #18 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #19 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Glad to see it finally up here Pen Stroke, sorry I kind of dropped off on helping with it :pinkiesad2:

    #20 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Well, it'll be good to finally read this one.

    #21 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    This story is one of my favourite fim-fictions and I enjoyed reading it immensely. I'm very pleased to see it here! :twilightsmile:  

    #22 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181047

    No this is perfectly legit.

    I can confirm it.

    #23 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I love this story!! I listened to it of youtube from Vozdesuenos, and when he hasn't updated, I pretty much read the rest of the way. Bravo my friend, bravo!:rainbowdetermined2::eeyup::ajsmug:

    #24 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hooray

    #25 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    YES! I have been waiting for this!

    #26 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    And there it is, the perfect excuse that I needed to read this again. THANK YOU! Take it, take them! all of my yays!:yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

    #27 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I still haven't read this...

    IT IS TIME!

    #28 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #29 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    OH NOES...  All those other stories I have to read are gonna get pushed back in the queue, just so I can reread another.  :yay:

    #30 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Just to be sure... This is the FINISHED version, right? No more being told we need to re-read chapters...

    (Also, Everfree 2012 writing panel shoutout! Woo!:pinkiehappy:)

    #32 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    IT BEGINS

    #33 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Promised myself to reread this when it would be posted here. Looking forward to it...

    #34 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181073Beat me to it!

    #35 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Huzzah! I was wondering if this ever would make it on this site. Time for a reread!

    #36 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181047 Actually, this is the guy who wrote it, Pen Stroke. He just finally decided to bring it here.

    #37 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Been meaning to read this ever since I finished Fallout: Equestria. Needed a super epic fanfic to read.

    This one I think I can and need to manage. Background Pony's chapters are just too long...

    Time to become even more well-read!

    oh god, there goes my social life

    #38 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    EEE!!!

    It's here it's finally hear.  Well I know what I'm doing for the wrest of the day.

    #39 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    O my....Past Sins here? Instant Fave!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    #40 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I've been waiting for a chance to celebrate something Fanfiction related so here's to Past Sin on FimFiction commence the fireworks

    #41 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    This story took me around 18 hours straight to read. Meaning I read this for 18 hours straight. I loved every bit of this story on Google Docs, so I will do my part and like and favorite this story to help the cause of getting this story to the Feature Box. :ajsmug:

    #42 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    >71 likes

    >4 views

    Seems legit.

    Anywho, now that this is finally on fimfiction, I shall read it for the first time. Time to initiate Operation: Ignore Hype.

    #43 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    For all the controversy around this fic, I personally find it quite enjoyable.

    #44 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Well, I'm taking shelter for the rest of the day.

    I hope the world is still there when I return.

    #45 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Within five minutes it's already taken over the feature box

    #47 · Chapter 16 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    There are a lot of good moments in this story, but this chapter, "missing joy", is probably my favourite.

    #48 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Ivan receiving the impression that this story might be worth reading.  I suppose I shall read it then.

    #49 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1181110 I know, it's crazy, it's almost like it's been around for months and people who've read it before are pre-emptively liking it. MADNESS.

    #50 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181088  Agreed, and not just cause that Colgate is creeping the everything outta me...

    #51 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I can't believe it's finally here! I loved this story and my favourite OC is Nyx!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    #52 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181124

    That's crazytalk! Crazy!

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    #54 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Whoa....that was intense.....

    #55 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Is this a rewrite or otherwise heavily edited? Might reread it if it is.

    #56 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181118 I love that movie so much!!

    #57 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    You just had to. You just HAD to bring it here, didn't you? Now I have to read it again!

    #58 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    OH MY GOD! YES! IT'S HERE IT'S HERE I'S HERE! THE FIC THAT INSPIRED ME TO WRITE IS HERE!

    YESSSS!

    Um.

    #59 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Finally, been waiting for this.

    #60 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 1 · 2 ·
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    Read it once and didn't like it.

    I doubt it'll be any different this time.

    #61 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    You may have just broken this site. The feature box will never be the same.

    #62 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    .....*sigh* so much for getting work done tonight.

    #63 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    So they finally added it to fimfiction! Took long enough.:pinkiecrazy:

    #64 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 4 · ·
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    >>1181047 You're an idiot.

    #65 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    easily one of the best stories I've ever read

    truly a beautiful work of fiction

    #66 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Best. Story. Ever.

    #67 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    If FIMFiction goes down again, we know why. Because 200K words of awesomeness have finally arrived! :pinkiehappy:

    #68 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181130 Sorry about that, she just-

    : Oh I am, am I?

    No! Bad Colgate! No creeping out the commentors.

    #69 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #70 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    Sweet Celestia it's here!  This is the Fic that got me into pony fanfics.  I'm going to have to read it again now.

    #71 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181073

    I raise you one of Gorton's Fisherman.


    And the Faithful shall scream as the Unholy Effigy shakes the Holy chains of EQD, and lives once again to battle the light of the Emperor and pony-kind.

    #72 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    It is finnaly here. Past sins! Must read! And to all that dislike this: this is what a true brony are. This is our life jurny.

    #73 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>1181204

    This is the fic that got me to start watching MLP in the first place, in addition to being my first fanfiction ever! Woohoo! :eeyup:

    #74 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Finally! I've been waiting months for you to finally post this! One of the finest pieces of fanfiction ever written and one that is at the pinnacle of MLP:FiM fanfiction. Thank you Pen Stroke for bringing "Past Sins" to this site.

    In the Name of Her Serene Majesty Celestia Everfree,

    Celestia's Paladin: Ex Solis et Lunae, Providentia et Prospera

    #75 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I've never read this fic.

    I read a lot about how much people seem to hate it.

    And about how much people seem to love it.

    So what's up with that? :derpyderp2:

    #76 · Chapter 2 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Dear lord...she's cute...too cute...

    #77 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    The original version of this story is without doubt the most beautiful work of pony-related prose I've ever read. I had to read through the whole latter half of it in one sitting it was that captivating. I felt emotions I haven't felt in years afterwards. (I'm a cold, passionless monster, so that you moved me to tears multiple times speaks volumes about the sheer emotional charge that this story creates.)

    It starts out as a wonderful slice-of-life-esque story centred on the adorable Nyx. The tension rises inexorably as she slowly but surely discovers who she really is. Chapter 10 is definitely the turning point in the story and is one of the most heartbreaking things I've read in a long time. Everything succeeding that is a perfectly executed drama with plenty of mystery and mayhem to keep you glued to the story. At the end of it all, you won't look at Nightmare Moon in quite the same way ever again.

    That this story is now on FIMFiction, having been rewritten and improved, is momentous indeed. Let Commentgeddon begin. :pinkiecrazy:

    #78 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Guys (and girls, robots, ponies, Discord, living shadows, penguins, etc), the feature box was built to withstand this kind of awesome. They reinforced it soon after Pen Stroke made an account here, because they expected this day would come sooner or later.

    Now, if Kkat submitted Fallout: Equestria, then that would make the site crash forty times a day for the next month. :rainbowlaugh:

    #80 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    if Past Sins is now on FIMFiction then i won't be no longer surprised to see Crisis: Equestria get posted here

    #81 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Bugger. I have college starting soon. This fic be long. Better get started then.

    #82 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    It begins.

    #83 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh God yes I was waiting for this to come. This story is one of my all time favorites and what inspired me to write.

    #84 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    its good to see this here.

    #85 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    The greatest fic of all time is finally here :yay:

    #86 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    ERMAGHERD YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES

    #87 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!!!!

    :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

    Also: Feature box- be ready for the biggest shitstorm you will ever see.

    #88 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I was wondering when this would be uploaded :yay:. S'bout time :ajbemused:. I'm really suprised how many dislikes it has right now though:rainbowhuh:, I liked it so much that I read it twice; and the scene with Nyx fighting the monsters 3 times by itself.

    #89 · Chapter 2 · 38w, 1d ago · 3 · ·
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    WARNING!!!

    WARNING!!!

    BLOOD PUMPS ARE OVERLOADING!!!

    EVACUATE HEART!!!

    EVACUATE HEART!!!

    #90 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1181328

    Nah. It's good, but no fic can beat On a Cross and Arrow. That fic is perfection. This one is very well-written, but it doesn't have a canon feel to it like Cross and Arrow does.

    PS: OH COME ON! After putting off reading this for over a year because it was so long, just last week I finally got around to reading it on EQD, and NOW it gets posted on FiMfiction.

    JAG
    #91 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    One of my favorite fics, and absolutely one the fandom's best. Glad to finally see it here, and I'll be re-reading it one of these days.

    #92 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    'Twas only a matter of time.

    :eeyup:

    #93 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    And here is finally the fic on Fimfiction; the fic that single-handedly changed my mind to write a romance instead of a Nightmare Moon re-imagining. Why? Because this thing is so obnoxiously popular almost every attempt to elaborate on or flesh out Nightmare Moon has been pooped on or largely ignored.

    At least this story has an OC that didn't fade away to obscurity.

    #94 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    POSTING IN LEGENDARY THREAD.

    Past Sins is all of my yes.

    IGNORE THE ELITIST BITCHY HATERS! They aren't really people anyway~ :trollestia:

    And be nice to the people who just plain don't like it, folks. Let's keep the endless Pro and Anti Past Sins war to a dull roar.

    #95 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Here it comes!

    #96 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · 2 · ·
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    ABOUT  TIME THIS LANDED HERE!!!!!!!!


    here it is ladies and gentlemen the fanfic that got me into  ponyfic ( well antipodes) but THIS   is the one i made people read.  and By  people i mean i literally got  eleven different people to read this story. they all loved it .

    and haters gonna hate, but  NYX IS BEST PONY. there I said it. Deal with it.

    #97 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    AND SO IT HAS COME TO PASS...THE NEXT GREAT STORY POST OF OUR ERA...

    #98 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh, I remember this. T'was a fun read, despite its problems. Still, never did quite understand the enthusiasm, and I'm talking about both its fans hyping it and its detractors slating it.

    But you can't say it wasn't memorable.

    I really hope this is the last time this damn thing gets revised though.

    #100 · Chapter 22 · 38w, 1d ago · · ·
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    :raritystarry: <-My expression when I saw this in the feature box.

    :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: <-My expression as I open the first chapter for a leisurely re-read.

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