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A few weeks ago, Chrysalis and her brood attacked Ponyville for revenge against Twilight. During the fight, the final spells of the two collide and create a portal that they're sucked into. The Princesses with the help of the others manage to summon them back only to find... that the two are marefriends!? How the buck did that happen!?
Like the image says, really good so far, please continue.
Another welcome addition to the Fiction Multi-verse traveling story. This week's episode... Jurrasic Park, watch your step!
Good mix of action and comedy, both in fic, and in everyone's responses/their actions back in EQ. Keep it up, I approve, even if it ranged far wider than The Sweetie Chronicles.
Sadly, I'm very familiar with this concept of a story from probably three other fandoms so it isn't as new to me as it might be to most. Still, I'm enjoying the trip and look forward to what worlds your duo traveled through.
((Places a bet on Star Trek and the humor of meeting Q.))
“WE'VE GOT TO DO SOMETHING! WE CAN’T OUT RUN IT FOREVER!”
“ WHY? ALL I'VE GOT TO DO IS OUTRUN YOU!”
“WE'VE GOT TO WORK TOGETHER TO SURVIVE!”
Just thought I should point these out... because they stand out a little bit... otherwise I really like the concept and the story so far
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Glad to hear it i got a lot idea's for place's you could have them go to.
Ranma 1/2, Generator Rex, Gargoyles, Kid's Next Door, Fairly Odd Parent's, W.I.T.C.H, Storm Hawks, Total Drama island series, Xiaolin Showdown, American Dragon, Lilo and Stitch, Darkwing Duck, Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends, Powerpuff Girls, Futurama, Adventure Time with Finn and Jake, Avatar the Last Airbender, Avatar the Legend of Korra, Teen Titans, Young Justice, Disney Aladdin, Disney Hercules, Simpsons, Buzz Lightyear of Star Command, Kim Possible, Phineas and Ferb, Yin Yang Yo, Ben 10, Jackie Chan Adventures, Transformers, Danny Phantom, T.U.F.F. Puppy, Static Shock, Justice League.
Like i said a lot of idea's. Let me know if you like any of the show's i put down. I'm not asking you to have go to all of them i just put down a list of universe's that i would think would be interesting to see them go to.
I love the writing and the story so far, but it seems like for a Queen, Chrysalis doesn't think of her duties much. I know their various professions and life's work is not the focus of this story, but I guess it's a preference of mine for that side of characters not to be understated especially when so much responsibility is involved. Your Chrysalis represents the interests of her people (criticizing the prejudice against their race) which is part of the equation, but for her to have been gone so long from her people, I'm surprised she hasn't even thrown a thought their way. Like wondering how they have fared without her all this time. To me it seems like it would be the first thing she does- return to her duties or at least ascertain the situation of her unintentionally abandoned responsibilities- before bothering to tell the ponies several year's worth of adventure.
In any case, awesome fanfic, looking forward to more! 
Harry, you've outdone yourself this time. I loved 'The Wizard and the Lonely Princess', but this? This is pure concentrated awesome.
So, Chrysalis and Twilight eventually become world-hoppers, and - more eventually - fall in love.
So, we know they're visiting Jurassic Park, and that they visit three different versions of Gotham.
Will they visit Karakura Town and help Ichigo fight off Hollows at any point? Or are you going to keep this purely Western-based?
You hint that this story is going to be a multi crossover (which I NEVER find a well written example of) and the first world you start off with is Jurassic Park?
If you are indeed taking suggestions for the world, I'd humbly like to throw Discworld's pointy wizard hat into the mix.
The idea of those two meeting any one of the characters from those books (from Rincewind to Nobby Nobbs to Granny Weatherwax) makes me laugh extremely hard.
I think it might be less obnoxious if it weren't made so blatant at the very beginning of the story. I can sort of see how it would happen: if Chrysalis is going to survive Twilight has to convince herself she at least likes her in order to feed her. I'm honestly not a fan of any part of the "present" so far, especially the convenient scapegoat that seemingly absolves Celestia of any guilt while explaining why Chrysalis was a jerk.
Still, it's a more or less fresh idea (for mlp anyway), so I can't resist giving it the benefit of the doubt for now.
So despite being kind of rushed and having a hectic writing style, i.e I'm finding your descriptions hard to follow, I must say that I am enjoying this story quite a bit. Particularly when you break from the memories and focus on Twilight and Chrysalis' relationship, and the other ponies' reactions. These moments are particularly well writing and quite humorous. I would recommend you focus solely on this and not on the whole inter-dimensional stuff but hey, if you want to go there it may turn out to be interesting.
Just a word of warning. Multiple crossover fics are tricky things because they can become... unfocused. I recommend you pick franchises and games that have similar themes or tones.
I Do have a more suggestions.
Anime-Naruto, Fairy tail, Evangelion, Pokemon (or would that fall under the cartoon catergory), One Piece, Familiar of Zero, Card Captors, Rosario Vampire, Bleach, Ranma 1/2, Fate Stay night, Code Geass, Love Hina,
Games-Kingdom Hearts, Jak and Daxter, Sly Cooper, Sonic, Mario, Super Smash Brothers, Legend of Zelda, Banjo Kazooie, Tak and the Power of Juju, Ape Escape, Spyro, Disgaea,
Books-Harry Potter, Artemis Fowl, Percy Jackson and the Olympians,
Movies-Megamind, The Incredibles, Monster Inc, Shrek, How to Train Your Dragon, Rapunzel, Cars, Escape to Madagascar
TV shows-Stargate, Star Trek,
Cartoon-Samurai Jack, Invader Zim
I think that's all the ideas i got so far. What do you think any good choices? One last question will you have them go to alternate Equestria like in Wanderer D story The Sweetie Chronicles?
Dr. StrangeSparkle. Does this mean Chrysalis is going to explode?
As in, kaboom explode?
Silly Steel, Changelings don't explode!
Well they could, I guess. The entire Changeling race is vague enough to allow for a LITTLE weirdness. Maybe they absorb too much love and cause a chain reaction, destroying the entire Hive?!
Then Cadence's nuke would've slaughtered them all. Even though she threw them all away by that shockwave, I'm pretty sure they all got enough 'love' to feed them for weeks.
True, true...hmmm...what would make a Changeling explode?
Too much magic in the system could cause your horn to blow up. It hurts a lot, of course...but it can happen.
Then how does your horn hold together? You levitated an Ursa Minor and a bottle across the Everfree!
Being the Element of Magic probably means my body is more hardy in the way of raw magic use.
Hm...well, I think that's enough time spent dodging the story, let's give 'er a read.
Alright, hopefully this one is better than those crazy gorefics we read...
Miss Sparkle, ANYTHING is better than those stories...though I am guilty of enjoying them for what they were.
I'm... fairly ambivalent on this. It's certainly an interesting concept, but there are numerous technical problems and overall I'm not particularly convinced of the quality of your execution of that concept.
So, before I decide whether to favorite this (and thus, come back for more), two questions:
1. Do you have a plan? That is- is the journey Twilight and Chrysalis took before returning home a route you know from start to finish, or are you making it up as you go? What about the development of their relationship?
2. Are we going to see all of that journey, or focus on the bits that are important to Twilight and Chrysalis's relationship?
>>1004131 Oh look, the troll has arrived. I hadn't seen you post anything in a while so I was starting to get a little worried that one of my favorite trolls had wandered away.
As for the story itself, good job! I noticed some minor spelling errors here and there and some places where words appear to be missing, but they were fairly minor so w/e. I especially like how Chrysalis' antics in the present keep derailing the story. I can see it all in my head. The story, being told normally, when things suddenly start to get a little...weird.....then the record scratch sound effect, jump to the present and hilarity ensues. Me gusta. I can't wait for them to get to the various versions of Gotham. It's gonna be hilarious.
Also, I agree with one of the previous posters. Since you're doing a multiple crossover story, try to stick to worlds that have a similar tone or at least have some kind of connection. Getting too random with the worlds they go to could end up hurting the story. Though if you feel like you can pull it off, then who am I to deny your skill?
HOLY POP CULTURE REFERENCES, BATMAN!
You said Sharptooth. Oh, the memories. Land Before Time was pretty epic. Even the straight to video sequels. Some of them, anyway. A few. Well, I still remember a couple! I still remember some of the songs, at least. Beyond the Mysterious Beyond and Big Water will never leave my head. Oh god, now I can't stop thinking in Chomper's voice. Fuck you so much.
so they're reality jumping. interesting, and the first world you took them too was jurassic park on isla sorna the auxilry island where they made and hatched most of the dinosaurs before relocating them to isla nubar. and by the sounds of it youve took them to the many vairants of batman. i wonder where else they've been. perhaps you should take them to the fan fic universe of 'the memoirs of a reality jumper'. that would be a really weird chapter but interesting.
>>1003068,Nicole Bolas of Magic the Gathering as the Antagonist? He has RIPPED APART A UNIVERSE to keep his power. And released world eating GODS to have a CHANCE of getting back his old skills. It took the LAWS OF REALITY CHANGING to take SOME of his power. He also survived BEING ERASED FROM EXISTENCE. WE ALWAYS NOTE THINGS OF IMPORT WITH CAPS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
aaaah, i see. still im absolutely f****** loving this story and i would like to see MOAR!!!!!!!!!!...*ahem* sorry about that, i dont rightly know what came over me. im loivng this very much and cant wait to see the next chapter, and the one after that, and the one after that, and the one after that times 17 and so on and so forth. please dont let this end with only a few measily chapters as this has a lot of potential of being easily dragged out and not getting boring.
but ignoring all that above keep one thing in mind..keep up the excellent work.
Awesome if they went to the land of Portal 2. 
Derped if they went to the other generations of MLP 
Bloody if they went to the Halo world 
Hilarious if they went to the land of Mario Kart 
Lovable if they went to the land of Looney Tunes
Confusing if they went to earth 
I like the narrative and there were enough funny moment that I want to upvote this...
But the technical quality is bad enough that I want to downvote with a vengeance and then punch a hole in my computer screen... 
The short version is that you really need a proofreader, but if you want, I can go into an editor rant in a PM or something.
To be honest I went into this expecting to more or less find what amounts to yet another boring retread of a tired theme. Instead I am more than pleasantly surprised to find a comedic adventure style romp through the multiverse as a backdrop to a budding romance between Twi and the Changeling Queen. Congratulations you have my interest. I will continue to track this.
Nodding, while flicking her mane out of her eyes as she looks around, Chrysalis nods.
Department of Redundancy Department.
Also, may want to ditch the caps lock. A simple exclamation mark should be enough to convey shouting, maybe some bold to really get the point across. Besides, SENTENCES WRITTEN IN ALL-CAPS TEND TO GET VERY ANNOYING, VERY FAST, don't you agree? This article (along with other's on that site [don't forget the comments!]) could be beneficial to read.
Well, I'm enjoying it pretty much. Except for the 'I'm not really a villain, I'm a victim of prejudice!' trope. I dislike that trope in general, but even moreso when it's used to make people sympathize with a villain who eventually turns good. It always seems like a cop-out in the story to avoid the slower, more difficult route of turning a genuine villain into a good guy. Now, DBZ did that with Vegeta, and that was one of the best parts of the series! :D
Especially in this case, when the Changelings really were evil creatures who sucked ponies emotions out until they become husks.
I mean, come on, Queen Chrysalis had that whole song, "This day is going to be perfect, the kind of day of which I dreamed SINCE I WAS SMALL!" When she was just a larva she was fantasizing about taking over Equestria!
Ah well, this will have to be another totally alternate Pony reality to retcon the discrepancy.
I cold do without the heavy romance aspect of this story, but it's understandable, so I won't complain. That being said... wow, this story probably has the potential to rival The Sweetie Chronicles.
Sounds like a lot of chaos. to me.
Also, are you taking suggestions for universes? I'm sure you have plenty already lined up, but I would love to pose some options. Seriously, that would be awesome.
I really dislike this idea. But... you're making it work. Very good.
I do want to point out that prolonged feeding on Shining Armor was seriously injuring him, though. Either Chrysalis found a way around that with Twilight, or their relationship has a time limit. Presumably love freely given is much more filling, but even so... I'd be grateful if you addressed this in story.
As a direct suggestion, I very strongly suggest putting a paragraph break in here where I put the 
:
Nodding, Twilight turns and winces as she limps towards the river. "Yeah, that would be a good idea..." After crossing it, they turn back one last time to see the Rex standing on the opposite side, watching them with a burning gaze through it's good eye. After a moment it turns away and walks towards the dead body of it's former foe. A few hours later has Twilight gasping as she wipes away some sweat. "It's so hot..."
Since a few hours have passed, having it in the same paragraph is odd at best, confusing at worst.
You have done the near impossible. You have succeeded in delaying me, for nearly half an hour, from playing my new copy of Kingdom Hearts 3D. So yeah. The story is excellent, and I would love to see more of it.
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Kingdom Hearts crossover. Cause a crossover with a canon crossover is always awesome.
>>1004495 twilight the shinigami what would chrysalis be a blade or a shinigami or maybe both
I wonder if they will meat Sora and the gang they both are world hoppers after all the possibility's in this story for crossovers are endless and so are the bad quotes, pun and references well you better make some very good or obscure crossover at least 1 Disney film and 1 Warner brothers
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