Liking this story so far can't wait to see more

This sounds promising i will read later

Knew they would be watching

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this story is GENIUS!! please make another chapter.

This is like the most awesome story ever!

Keep it up!

I like this story quite a bit! Keep it up!

I only have one problem with this and it's not with the story, rather the picture; all i can see is a black-haired justin beiber which I can't stand because of my utter dislike of him. Other than that, this story is quite enjoyable.

I would follow it, but having him turned into a pony immediently upon arrival killed my interest. but keep going!

Why does it switch to third person at the end?

Still, this story is just awesome.

Rainbow Dash would probably read this, other than Daring Do's books.

Is this like a self insert? Because I'm happy to hear someone else is interested in ocarinas too.

everyone, i try to keep the POV changes to a minimum. unless it's to describe a crucial story event, like the POV change in the upcoming chapter 6, i won't do it anymore. sorry!

love it especially when u added an ocarina to the story

more! more!! more!!! lol plz update the story im hooked ur such a good author.

Well this chapter just completely destroyed the 4th wall

A young emo faggot is suddenly self-inserted into a poorly made story.

OH MERCIFUL LUNA, PLEASE, I WANT TO READ MORE. oh yeah and spike said "Me gusta."

>>10093101009310 dont be a bitch dude>>10063631006363this is a great story and i cant wait to tead more keep up the good work

>>10106211010621

nice name

Whoa.

Something's bad gonna happen, something REALLY bad... I feel like Discord is not even the 1% of what i think about, and i have no idea of what i'm thinking about. Maybe it's something about repressed rage, that wants to be vented on something, and the magic of the unicorn is a good way to release this power...

Uhm, lemme think about it.

I clicked solely for the picture, but I was disappointed (I don't like it when humans are turned into ponies).

Still giving it a like though, it seems well structured.

hey man just wondering what idea did i give u lol??? and that dream andrew had has got me grasping for more chapters to come out soon and the story im gona be working on im startin the outline for the first chapter tomorrow. Thanks again after reading your story its inspired me alot. Talk to ya soon until then Brony on!!!!

>>rainbowdash_25 the idea wasn't really an idea, but sort of a chain reaction. after you saying that you were working on a new story, i decided to read some for ideas on the next chapter. there was one that had me listening to Skillet's "Monster" and... well, it's called "Monster". i hope you can all grasp what goes on from there. new chapter hopefully posted today, everypony!

love it! Hope the 7th element has Death and a army of wolves and a keyblade with a case of a heartless/nobody and if your into bleach a hollow  

>>SpikeDark i love bleach and i like ur thinking and >>Plasmadon okay i was just wonderin lol and im about ti post my first chapter after im done typing this so hope u like it. It is a lil different and just doesnt jump right into mlp but it'll get there.

I made an account just to follow this story.... I made the right choice and hope to read more of your work. I await your next chapter with angst.

Yo man this is some heavy stuff!

This ain't gonna end well...

awesome ending!!

but if he breaks free wont he break the blood pact. come on man you just dont do that crazy evil scypho path or not

i made a acount to specifically follow this story, although i would like to see a bit more development between applejack and andrew (dusk).

>>dogstar don't worry, i'm already working on it in my head. >>everypony else the new chapter might not be up tomorrow, sorry!

How does he play the ocarina with no fingers? MAGIC!

Wonderful work! And I need to ask: could you slip in a Wheel of Time reference somewhere? Just asking, it's fine if you say no for any reason.

"if i was a pegasus i would put a wing around her" isn't he a alicorn?

other than that very well done. carn't wait for the next chapter

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Vael, Celestia, and now THE DOCTOR!? He's pretty screwed ain't he?

>>10478631047863 i dont think he is a alicorn hes just a unicorn

>>10478631047863 i dont think he is a alicorn hes just a unicorn

Playing poker with a magical wolf, Death, and a demon bent on destroying everything? Sounds like every other Wednesday night to me.

add DOMINIC

3. yes, i get the refrence. 1, 2, 5.... 3 sir

Guys, i'd like to say just how sorry i am for keeping you guys waiting for a week. i think i must have writer's block or something. but no matter: romance, adventure, and an irrational fear of Vael will cure me of that!

Yes! next chapter is when the parasites come and pinkie gets rid of them

The Grudge sounds oddly like The Rake.

I love the Wheel of Time references. And I memorized the Pandorica speech yesterday!!!! You just won an everything!

And the Angels ran because they knew who first gave that speech.  

Edit: Just noticed I was in the author's note. Thank you very much!

>>11070191107019

Buck... yeah.

PLASMADON, I can't wait for the next chapter... Also, I believe you could of dipped in a little more into the back story of Zecora's mother, but that is my personal opinion. Like i said... can't wait for the next set of tricks up your sleeve for the next chapter.

>>10481211048121 wouldn't he be screwed from just one? And you do NOT make an enemy of The Doctor.

>>11067181106718 don't forget what Pinkie could do to you if you take too long. •_•

LoL the ending good chapter

whats screwed up i see what you did there because sweetebelle say whats fucked up probably wouldn't have gone well with rarity

The Wrath of Andrew. :D

Woot! Dear agony! I love that song and that album!

Edit: I just want to explain why I love that album so much. Anthem of the angels, Dear Agony, and Without you, all remind me of my mother, who passed away due to breast cancer when I was three. I remember reading that those songs were references to Ben's dead grandfather, which is how I realized why the songs meant so much to me.

All i can say for this is... The beginning was a bit sad but well written and the ending is just full of "D'awwwwww" moments.

>>11294691129469

You, dear sir, are freaking AWESOME!!!!!!!

A song by Breaking Benjamin and a Percy Jackson reference?

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Yay!! Stuff involving the Doctor!!!

hey plasma nice job, man the last time i was on here i had just got done reading the chapter b4 this lol

very perplexing indeed

this chapter brought the LOL's. Cum rainbows

poor rainbow

This was gold!

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I LOVE BENNY HILL THEY MAKE THE BEST CHASE SCENE MUSIC

So typical everyone lucky enough to get to equestria is a soldier psychopath or had some weird thing that shits with his mind

RUN BITCH RUN

DAMN YOU FOURTH WALL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"when an object hit me in the head and i started bleeding, and blacked out"

twilight: RARITY, THAT WAS A BRICK!!!!!!

rarity: whoops...

moar please...

celestia got told

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Hahahaha, Luna's everyone's favorite! The only way this could've been better is if Luna was there too.

Poor pinkie pie.

Well at least Celestia is no longer trying to kill and/or rape him. (actively)

ANDREW BUCKING PWNED CELESTIA MOAR IS WHAT I WANT!!!!!!

freaking love the song boulevard of broken dreams

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L-ip02FknUo&feature=player_embedded#!

I'm seeing bits of pieces of Nathan Traveler's "Omnius's Travels - Equestria" Chapter 8 (mostly the Restaurant to end of episode part) dunno if it's intentional or not just thought you should know

>>12573201257320 it was totally unintentional, but as they say...

great minds think alike.

ive noticed how the stories with a mating season in it always seem to be awesome....

i wonder what the reason might possibly be....

ah, i was wondering when this would next update. great chapter.

Wait is the cross there because it is said that cross's harm vampires

That was hilarious. You sir win all of my imaginary cookies. Here you- Pinkie did you eat all of the cookies again?

Alright, near the end of the chapter there's a trigun reference. It has to do with our favorite Nicholas D. Wolfwood. whoever finds it will not only get a special mention in the next chapter, but possibly an OC as well. Good luck!

>>15548921554892 is it a quote?

>>15566861556686 No, it's an action. Another hint: What is Wolfwood's favorite weapon shaped like?

>>15581411558141oh is the giant cross on his back the punisher or I think thats what its called i used to watch the show but havent in forever so im a bit rusty

>>15615411561541 Alright, you have the pieces in place. one last hint: it is an action that both Andrew and Wolfwood do in the end.

>>15619371561937 ok i cant figure it out i fill i should know but just cant place my tongue on it

Alright, but I'll give you the cameo anyway. It's one of the last scenes with Wolfwood in it, where he's dying in the church. As he confesses, he leans on his cross and falls asleep. he dies several minutes later. i know Andrew doesn't die, but i tried to make it as similar as possible.

>>15652521565252 are you kidding i know people say this all the time but i actually was going to suggest that but like i said its been forever sense I have seen that show i cant believe i missed that    

also i find it funny im the only one who even attempted it

Pinkie Pie sugar high sweet mother of god we are all dead

>>15771321577132 dont worry ive got a bunker exactly for this scenario you can use it if you like

>>15771321577132 don't worry I have a bunker exactly for this scenario you can use it if you like

>>15930331593033 Its okay I got my pillow fort ready.

first when i saw him turned into a pony i was like, bof lost interest, but when i read the word Eragon and Brom, i was like OMG NEED TO READ MORE

This one.

This one

This one please

A Storm is Coming