Good start

Can't wait for more!

i wish that this story wasnt over...

meh, im just gonna see where the story goes before upvoting or downvoting.

>>10009481000948>>10009711000971>>10011431001143 I realise that the concept of this story is a bit over-used.  I like reading all of those stories, seeing everyone's different perspective on it.  I have many ideas in my head on how to continue this story so please bear with it.  I'll try to make it stand out from the others

Well Luna, ya dun goofed. This is why you should of kept some caffeine with you.

Okay, it well written, so you know your stuff, you added some Luna lol, thats good too. But the idea of getting there, lets just say, it's over used, it's piratically a repellent to most people. BUT, it's better then something lacking logic or just too pinkie. So now, what I would recommend is having the second chapter (and the rest of the story) really really diffrent from others. You got comedy, so make it bad luck funny stuff.

I can tell you (and others saying) I'm hooked, but it's how your going to make the story that's going real us in.

>>10183041018304 Thanks for the kind words

Well that was an interesting first day

Story is coming along great

the reference of doctor who is

GASP*  Of course, Doctor.  I'd love to travel with you!

Hey, why is it bigger on the inside?

A trip?  Ok, sure.  Just let me know when you're going to--*BEEP*--what was that beep just now? *BEEP*  There it is again!  *BEEP*  What is it?

>>10275821027582 Oh my god, I'm so thick.  I completely forgot I put that in there!  There is another line in there that's Doctor Who related but yes, that whole dream sequence now seems pretty obvious

He is actually taking this quite well, despite him being hospitalized for a few more days.

>>10599231059923  Looks that way doesn't it?  You'll find out why he's reacting this way soon enough...

soon though soon...the shit that shall hit the fan shall soon be doubled.

Good Job man i very impressed on how you made this story turn out so far ill be waiting for more keep on writing

Here have a mustache

>>10880841088084 Thanks very much!  Next chapter should be up by the weekend - unfortunately work stops my mid-week typing

>>10881811088181

Thats how i feel lol but i cant wait im excited

OK, now that I think about it, those two would definitely

play a prank on anybody.

Even if it was an otherworldly creature that they knew nothing about.

Great job; Can't wait for more

Like what I've read so far. The start was a bit bumpy, reigniting a number of socio-economic resentments, but we're rolling along nicely now.

When a new character is talking you need to start a new paragraph. This chapter was incredibly hard to read.

It wasn't that hard to read, but it was definitely a little confusing at times.

Every time someone new speaks, new paragraph. Especially if it's a situation where: "Twi talks" "Redheart talks" said Redheart.

>>11168661116866>>11169081116908 Sorry about that guys.  I'll get right to it.  In previous chapters, I thought I was spacing it too much but then again, not the first time I've been wrong/

I like this

MOAR!

ah, now he has to explain technology.

Image: http://i.imgur.com/MCx9t.gif

ummmm... you have a typo at the part where it says "She had an indigo man and tail, styled in a very elegant way." how can Rarity have an indigo Man? just put an e at the end of man:-) other than that, this is awesome

>>11241971124197 Ahh, good spot.  Have a moustache as a reward

I'm not sure how many Americans know what some of those words meant so i offer this...

Shirotora's Guide to Brit-talk for Americans part 1:

Candy floss = cotton candy

Chest of drawers = dresser

Meter = 3.3 feet.

Just remember my fellow Americans, bare with them. It's not their fault they can't speak the language they invented.

>>11273691127369 Thanks for the translation.......

ermygerd FIRST!!!!! great job again man cant wait to see more of this

time for some story telling

>>11515611151561 Indeed.  Beer pong works wonders at parties...

beer pong=hangover

Drunk ponies are best ponies.

Oh.......god. I know this won't end well. Damn you twilight...

Thou art sued for hating the sweet wubs of dubstep! Really though, great story! Keep it coming!

Great job man keep it up

Whoa.... that sound like a great night! Also that twilight such a sneaky mare

+3 manly for you good sir. Keep up the awesome work

Yes, Twilight, they kissed and fell asleep... nothing else...

>>11702991170299 Thanks!  New chapter should be up some time before the weekend.

>>11723401172340 I had fun writing this chapter

>>11741741174174 Seriously man, you're the first reader to reward me with a mustache!

>>11749791174979not just any mustaches MANLY ones(there rarer)

....... No Prince Blueblood?! BUT HES ONE OF THE BEST PARTS OF ANY HiE!

>>11891041189104 Oh don't worry.  He'll get his moment...

I think there should be some shipping at some point HumanxLuna

I sensing a forming Love Triangle between Owen, Rainbow Dash, and Luna. This is gonna get interesting!

>>11892501189250 agreed

>>11892501189250>>11895221189522 All will be revealed soon enough

Very Good job again cant wait for more

>>11895221189522 >>11895851189585 Gonna say it now incase it comes to voting I vote Luna!

>>11895851189585 If this is a shipping with Luna the rateings will be doubled.

>>11902321190232>>11903941190394>>11920891192089 Chapter 9 is in the works but it may take a while.  I damaged my writing hand falling off my bike a few days ago so I'm typing the next chapter with my left hand.  But yes, I can confirm there will be shipping in the future...but with whom...oooooohhhh....

>>11893871189387 let the games be vodka

I want Owen to meet Discord. That would be cool, even though that wouldn't make any sense.

What fun is there in making sense? :discordlol:

This might not go well in the morning.

Omg i love it

Glad to see even with a messed up hand you still put this up

Keep on going dont stop

I'm gonna love the next chapter when celestia walks in and sees him in bed with her.

>>12078991207899>>12080451208045 I'm gonna try and make it as funny as possible

>>12080001208000 I typed this all in the past day.  The hand is getting better - it's unbandaged now and I can type a little with it.  Should be back to normal within a week or so.

No idea why I stopped reading this after the prologue before. But now I'm reading ALL the chapters!

SO AWSOME

and a facehoof for the win!

Image: http://cdn.pophangover.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/04/pop-hangover-memes-with-swag-18-e1333478283541.jpg

nuff said

I can see it now. Celestia sees him in bed with Luna, turns him inside out... the end

D'aaaaaaaaaw

I like.

>>12081951208195 Must admit, I had trouble at first due to it being my first fic but I'm getting better now and I've got a load more ideas for this.

>>12082451208245 Thanks

>>12082551208255 That image is just...just...odd.

>>12084851208485 "Oh hey, Celestia.  What are you...ARGHHHHH!"  The end. - Hmm.......nah.

>>12091671209167>>12099351209935 Glad you like it!

Shit..just..got...REAL

Just seen my story featured!  Thank you everyone who has read, liked, commented and favourited my story!  You guys rule!

Loved it every minute, especially the morning scene.

HumanXLuna always a nice thing.

but in many storys there is always a big problem, enemy or something like this and its "testing there relationship".

i would like to see how they deal on a daily base. no big adventure, no "i must play the hero", just "honey I'm home. you will not believe what was going on today in court."

*Sees this in the feature box*

A story with a generic description with an incorrect title ('Good Things Come...' is proper), along with 'human' and 'romance' tags, which are usually repellants of great strength to many readers, and yet, here it is, in the feature box.

Props to you; you've done something that countless authors on this site have failed to do: Your fic with humans and romance has been well-received.

...This is relevant to my interests, (even though I dislike shipping in general) reading later.

I have given you your 100th like on this story. WHERE'S MY PRIZE!

wow land of nod?

nice old school reference

Did not see it comming.

>>12185971218597 I would give you an imaginary cookie but Pinkie ate them all...again.

The wish "upon a star" and end up in Equestria idea is new to me, well done dear author.

>>12185971218597>>12190691219069 On the contrary!  She saved one, just for you!

Image: http://th08.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2012/124/2/c/pinkie_pie__a_cookie_by_super_zombie-d4yh7li.png

"The taste was almost orgasmic."

oh god was that a salad fingers reference?

>>12194131219413 I never realised that until you mentioned it!  

I sense doom in the morning!

Loving this story, good job!

Was listening to Duran Duran while reading this chapter and it flowed nicely. Cant wait to see where the relationship goes, especially since Rainbow might also like our protagonist.

Is it wierd that I just learned the rules for Beer Pong from a MLP fanfic?

>>12207911220791 I was hoping to educate at least one person by doing that!  I can see that it worked

Hah! That wish just keeps on giving, dont' it?

Shout out to Lancashire!

Really enjoying the story. keep up the great work!

Image: http://i1043.photobucket.com/albums/b436/ElectricDragon_2010/Funny/cryclapping.gif

Beautiful. Just Beautiful.

>Lives in a seafront penthouse

>Playing Xbox360

>Questions why life is so hard

I don't exactly feel sympathy for the character when he has no money in the bank because he lives alone in a penthouse, and not any penthouse, a seafront one.  Not sure what housing is like in the UK but seafront diddly anywhere in the US is pretty damn expensive, and a penthouse being ungodly.  

>>12223581222358 There's quite a few apartment buildings next to the sea where this story is based.  Most of them are expensive to live in - you're right.   But some are owned by the local council and aren't really that appealing.  I mean that - some are just awful inside.  They don't get maintained very well.  Those are called LDA or LDH (Low Demand Accomodation or Housing).

Will there be a love triangle between Luna, Owen and twilight or Luna, Owen and vinyl?

>>12233031223303 Oooooh, the mystery deepens......actually I don't know yet.  I'm leaving lots of options open so that I can choose the right one when I get to it.  But I can confirm that a relationship with Luna will commence!

>>12237051223705 u get 6 moustaches out of 5 for that

>>12220021222002 Thanks!  I recently went on holiday to the Lake District and I went to parts of Lancashire once or twice.  Some parts of Lancashire are beautiful.

"Excellent!", Sweetie and Scootaloo both responded.

Oh man, this is gonna be awesome!

Oh man, I'm so glad Twilight told us about this thing.

I know that may be details but I'm pretty sure ponies don't use "Oh man" as an expression since they're... ponies

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png

>>12250741225074 Hmm...fair point.  *EDITED*

I visibly cringed at "Maroon 5".

>>12257021225702 It's not to everyone's taste, I know

>>10280171028017 Found it;

"Hah!  What about you?  You're not even in focus.....ugh...."

Goodness I love that episode...

>>12358581235858 At last! Someone spotted it!

Blueblood. Knew it the minute he first had a line.

Jealous rival I think that attacked Owen

Also...

I'M GOING TO BUCKING MURDER THE UNICORN THAT ATTACKED HIM

>>12497531249753 Blueblood? Maybe not, he seems too much of a coward in my opinion. Then again, he is a real flankhole, so maybe his jerk rating overcomes his coward rating.