oh, Spike, you poor, oft ignored comic relief side character you.

... What.

That, good sir, was brilliant.

Rated Everyone for adult humour.

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The "wat" is also about the story. Is this a somewhat meta fic about how fanfics are done? If so, then... yeah, you've got it down.

Well, that was deep and existential.

Derealization; the best of mental illnesses

This could be applied to reality.

Well, it's nice to see this actually has a story to it. It's nice to see that this actually makes sense.

Ho-ray.

Reminds me of the breakdown that Harold Crick goes through in Stranger Than Fiction.

I just watched that movie the other day...I might watch it again now...

>>10006011000601

I was going to post that!

I'm not going to post anything awesome or witty, because that's just what the narrative would want me to do!

I'm off to go eat some breakfast, 'cuz it's 8:30 and that's what I wanna do.

Have a thumbs up.

Hmm, really good. Can't wait to see what Pinkie says. She'll confuse Twilight even more with her crazy logic and 4th wall breakage. Then she'll stand on top of the hub logo.

Also, one error I saw: 'shoved her hooves into her hands' <- hands? Maybe shoved her head into her hooves? idk

my life is a book, sometimes I wish I could find that fucking book and skip to the good parts then peek at the ending to know how everything goes down.

I'd be thrilled to find I'm a character in a book, and a main protagonist no less! I'd always be assured that everything would work out for the best.

Really, does it matter, Twilight?

>>10009371000937 The ending is never fun. The main character always dies.

Brilliant. Keeping my eye out for more.

God, it's exactly like me when I'm drunk...

>>10009371000937

>>10010411001041

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He writes books, and everyone in this world is in it. But no one is writing him, he never dies.

This is a great piece.. I've never really read anything like this and I think that helped with the hilarity. This entire idea is just perfect. I really wanna read more.

>>10006011000601

As opposed to adolescent humour - which would warrant a teen rating - or immature adolescent humour, which would warrant a mature rating.

I wrote a ludicrously long post about it on my FiMfic blog, but to keep it simple it is first and foremost a story about derealisation and a parody of metafictional fiction in general.

>>10010381001038

Imagine being the main character in Kafka's Metamorphosis.

I'm assuming that "Rated Everyone for adult humour." is some kind of joke?

I mean, we've all seen this, haven't we?

>>10009111000911

My reaction?  If you're frazzled by a fourth wall freakout, who better to go to than Pinkie Pie?

>>10006891000689

And I'm one who has suffered it, If you can say "Suffered". Oh 2011, What a tip of the iceberg year you were for me. Wait, Why did I write this?

Myself from some random day in late 2011 or early 2012 quotes a Morphine song: "I propose a toast to my self control; You'll see it crawling helpless on the floor. "

Here I am, Still wondering if I'm doing this for the funny farm effect or something. (What is "The Funny Farm Effect"?)

We're only Making Plans For Nigel, We only want what's best for him...

Be happy.

And now, A Silly RD Emoticon!

PUPPIES!

>>10011101001110  this actually made me think of when Chuck Norris actually dies what would happen and now I know. The mayan prophecies says it is the end of the world on Dec 21st 2012. This is when Chuck Norris will die

Oh, And I haven't taken a bite of the Cake lately.

Is my brain in check?

Meh. I might as well go back to what I was doing which is listening to The B-52's.

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>>10011311001131 Oooh, the roach thing. Yeah, no, that doesn't count. Didn't he commit suicide? I wouldn't do that.

I'd hide out in the woods and scare passerby.

This story is marked "incomplete". This implies that more will be written of Twilight's literary exploits. This initiates two chemical chain reactions in me, commonly refered to as anticipation and happiness. :)

>>10011361001136

>I'm assuming that "Rated Everyone for adult humour." is some kind of joke?

Again:

>As opposed to adolescent humour - which would warrant a teen rating - or immature adolescent humour, which would warrant a mature rating.

>>10011491001149

And when they open up his coffin.....

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Chuck Norris will never die. When they find him dead in his sleep, it would be a Changeling, dying from an insane roundhouse kick. If Chuck Norris has a heart attack, in reality, it is a Spy from TF2 being raped by the awesomeness of Chuck Norris' chest hair. In all, he will never die. He watches the sun and moon rise and fall, he sits back and drinks beer with God and Satan, but he is eternal.

Yeah, I would be pretty sad to see him dead on the TV though...that's why I will protest the new Expendables 2 movie if they kill Chuck Norris in it.

>>10011311001131 I got ya.

>>10011701001170

The blog post doesn't look like it accepts exceptions, but I've said what I wanted to say. Also, before you get annoyed at me mentioning that which has already been mentioned, my comment was posted before yours. There was no answer when I asked.

>>10011951001195

I'm not annoyed at you, ha.

I just write in this incredibly dry manner; I apologise if I've offended you in any way.

Too silly and meta for me.

BRILLIANT~!!!!!!!

>>10011311001131

Yum. Literary pretense.

But if I was in a work of fiction is would either not give a shit or I would rage against the cage(by being as boring and uninteresting as possible).

The best of us spend our entire lives rebelling against a plot we do not find particularly interesting.

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Well it was well written...... dam it!   

How am i supposed to comment on this anyway?  What a strange power it is that you have wrought.  

Twilight breaks the forth wall tonight at 8:00

k. wtf

The index file is looking itself up in the index file.

I had a short story happen to me once, cumulating with an elevator ride where I said the theme out loud as the doors closed.

Surreal, but I didn't loose my cool like Twi.

Take my thumbs! You clearly have greater need for them than I

This is amazing. It's cerebral and hilarious. That's a combination I rarely see executed with any kind of skill, but you're pulling it off very well here. And it includes my personal pick for Best Pony taking the express train to Crazytown -- something I'm a little embarrassed to find so amusing.

Going to see Pinkie about her problems is either a brilliant or terrible idea, not much room for a gray area there. I'm looking forward to learning how it turns out.

You broke my brain

>>10015501001550

Its all because of the author.... hes watching us...

>>10011951001195

Saying it's adult humor is just a joke. The blog rule about adult humor being rated mature is for actual adult humor (which this story isn't. At all.). Just wanted to clear that up.

>>10018621001862

Has already been answered, check my comment again and you'll see that it's been replied to. If this story really weren't adult humor, then it wouldn't be mentioned in the description.

>>10011311001131

Pretty sure that any circumstances in which one was turned into a bug and your family were so horrified by your presence that they locked you in your room and killed you (literary or otherwise) would be terrible.

>>10006891000689

It is pretty fucking terrible, really. Especially when your family keeps leaving voice mails, and there's just no point in responding because, whatever, it just doesn't fucking matter. None of it does. And everyone at work is getting confrontational, but why? This report or that scheduled meeting, whatever. Why don't all these fucking pylons just go away?

Anyway, liked the story. Really liked the logo (or whatever the images are called), simple pleasures are best for simple minds (and all minds are simple).

>>10018731001873

I read the comment, but I'm afraid it kind of confused me. Same with this comment as well. In the first part of the comment, you say that it's been answered (which makes me think you understand that him saying it was rated everyone for adult humor was just a joke), but then in the second part you say he wouldn't have put it in the description if it wasn't true, so now I'm not really sure how to respond.

Basically, the reason he put that in the description was to make a joke. He's calling it adult to refer to the stuff in the story (thing like existentialism) because of the intelligence needed to understand it. In his previous comment, he said adolescent humor would be teen (probably stories with a lot of bad language) and immature adolescent humor would be adult (probably stories with nothing but sex).

To keep it short: nothing in this story could actually be considered adult (in terms of material it contains) so it's not rated wrong, and the only reason adult humor is mentioned in the description is for humor.

I'll just shut up now, because it's past midnight (and I'm seriously tired), which means I probably just misread your comment. That said, feel free to ignore this comment.

Insane Twlight is Insane. But fun to watch.

Oh crap, Twilight is getting too close to the true. Pinkie, stop her!!

YES.

I look forward to seeing Pinkie share her knowledge.

>>10010381001038 You haven't read my stories, have you?

Upon learning aout the fourth wall, most ponies find it fun.

The rare few, however, react poory.

"Right, since this is all narrative, all I have to do is find the pony with a writing cutie mark."

Sees Fausticorn.

"Figures..."

Oh my god.

Comedy is overrated. Meta isn't as bad as some say it is, but it's not perfect.

But this. This tickles my funnybone and my intellect in equal measure. You, sir, have done something that few featured fics have done for me (though it looks like you're headed there yourself). I'll admit that witty self-parody fics are getting old, but this stands out not only because it doesn't make fun of crappy writers, just of the irony of creating a fictional world. What's more, the whole story arc may very well be a ruse at this point, and Twilight may discover that she's not a fictional character at all (well, she is, but she may not find out).

But what am I saying? Of course you know all this, you wrote it!

I look forward to what happens next.

EDIT: Scratch that, I see you hit the featured box already!

Adult humour, as in relatively sane and psychologically mature humour; the sort that should be in the possession of an adult and, apparently, the kind that many of the readers here lack. Said readers need to stop stumbling over it as though it's some sort of immense concept, and just laugh at the silly story.

Oh existential crises, I ye well.

I don't get it...

Oh, this is fun. The sad thing is that it's fairly in-character for Twilight. Somehow I just know Pinkie is going to know everything due to her apparent 4th wall shattering powers.

Only problem I see is that you don't seem to know exactly how to use commas and semicolons. I'd read an online lesson or something.

A few of your sentences run on a bit, and though they technically aren't run-on sentences, they are quite distracting, as you tend to just keep going on for a while when really you should just break it up into two or three sentences, but then again, I'm doing that right now, but on the other hand, this is a sort of mocking example, but really, I don't mean to offend you, I'm just using a bit of hyperbole; overall, the fic is great.

Mostly this sentence:

“C’mon, Twilight,” she begun, before she realised that her talking to herself represented growing madness; where she would have said ‘keep it together’, she simply stopped and stood, and walked down the stairs, deciding to do something without purpose; she froze half-way, knowing that her search for pointlessness had a point and therefore was part of the narrative, and so she stood there for a few minutes with her eyes and mouth wide open as she tried to solve the problem through sheer willpower."

...as a side note, in this quote "begun" should be "began."

*steam comes from ears*

>>10026911002691

Goddamn, I used two semi-colons in a single sentence. That's something I demanded of myself never to do, and it's been corrected with great prejudice.

That being said, I am aware of the run-on sentences. They're meant to represent the sort of run-on logic one tends to develop while contemplating the actions that might indicate free will in a potentially fictional universe. Try it some time; it's really quite an intellectual exercise. If you like short sentences, Solace might be for you.

I truly appreciate the time that you have taken to note these errors, but it's rather difficult for me to keep track of comma and semicolon use and I'm honestly not sure whether it's regional difference or actual error causing the problem.

Also, damn these past tenses and participles. I've corrected the two instances where that occurs as well.

>>10028791002879

Come to think of it, I do think the running on works well as train-of-thought in most cases in this story. I'm a bit of a grammar nazi usually. Nice stealthy way of trying to get me to read your other work I will eventually get around to reading more of your work, as you do seem to be a good writer. Being fairly new to the site and MLP in general, I have a lot to catch up on. Also, school coming up. EVENTUALLY xD

I've always thought commas and semi-colons were more universal than regional, but I suppose I could be wrong. I'm letting it slide because of the train of thought structure that you use, which works well for the story.

Umm....

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I have no idea what teh fuck just happened. And yet I enjoyed it very much.

I'm following this, just because it's an awesome idea and I want to know how it continues

That was very funny

They say those who gaze upon the Fourth Wall go crazy instantly...Pinkie Pie embraced her insanity, made it a part of herself...Twilight is not so lucky, or so accommodating...

Man, if you thought Twi worrying about a late assignment was bad...

<Sudden-realization-of-the-constructed-nature-of-her-reality-and-consequential-futile-attempts-to-fight-the-will-of-the-narritive> Twilight is Best Twilight!

I love it, do more!

Also, food for thought: An outside force controls your thoughts, not you.

Do you refute the concept? Accept it willingly? Try not to think about it?

Was it you who just made that choice?

Oh so much paranoia. Tasty! Isn't that also called solipsism?

Niiise.

This sounds like something I'd do if I was having a REALLY bad/paranoid day...

In a word: HILARITY.

Good day, my sir.

Dear Amit,

Are you French or do you speak french??

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>>10036271003627

My French is bad enough to teach a Frenchman English, and I'm moving temporarily to France in a few days.

So, no.

>>10037131003713

Eh Ben , Bon Voyage En France,J'espere Que Vous Ne vous perdrerez pas dans les rues de France.

En Passant,Vous Allez En France,mais Ou???

Paris?Marseille?Bordeaux?Poitiers?Toulouse?Rouen??

Please Answer,J'ai besoin de savoir ou vous allez!

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>>10037241003724

Je m'en irai à quelque part en milieu rural de la Bretagne; je ne sais pas le nom exact du village.

So,you won't have to worry about ......

Nevermind,I just read this novel a few years ago: L'Ankou ou l'ouvrier de la mort.

Creepy story that happens in a Britain Village.....

I Don't Know if Bretagne is Britain in English...

I'm more of a French guy Than English...

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>twilight and pinkie tags but no shipping tag

Dammit.

I'm not sure how much help Pinkie will be, but I hope Twilight can recognize that life in and of itself can be seen as a narrative, even when there is no narrator. Tropes are not bad, darling.

I have hopes for this fic that are so high that they break the boundaries of good-natured science.

>>10038561003856

Bretagne is the French name for Brittany; it's a region in France, ha.

>>10039041003904

I had the silly thought, when I was first writing this, that this might be a shipfic where Twilight is cured by Pinkie's good, old-fashioned Pinkie-flavoured love.

Of course, that would have completely broken the entire idea of the story. Funny to contemplate what could have been, though.

Hmm

Holy cow. This story hurts, like a punch in the gut. That's not a bad thing, mind you! It's a tragedy, in some sense. It's supposed to hurt. But by Celestia, does it hurt!

I think we've all had moments like this.

Well, I know I have, at least.

What? Stop looking at me like that.

Yay

>>10040981004098

I generally envision the reader to be the greatest blocker in the world, the author to be a puncher of varying quality and the story to be a wrestling mat.

In other words, I am literally picturing myself punching a wrestler caricature of you in the gut right now.

>>10041091004109

Catharsis: the release of emotions. It's tough stuff. When you write happy stories, we laugh. When you write sad stories, we cry. And when you write stories that punish the characters through the very act of us reading them, we stop and wonder for a second, "Am...am I a good person?" It sucks! And yet we enjoy it, in a way only catharsis can be enjoyed.

So, to watch Twilight suffer like this hurts. And, in that cathartic way, I'm loving every second of it.

>>10041091004109

I like this comment more than the rest of the story put together. And I LOVE the story.

Made my evening.

ok, now this is getting really freaky. Don't know why, just it feels like it's getting really freaky

The horror, THE HORROR!

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She's Gone CRAZY!!

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RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!!!

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Damn, this is getting deep. MOAR plz.

Anyone know what the other two stories around the"spiderses" referance are if they are indeed other stories?

The fact that I am reading this narritive makes me so sad!

>>10041091004109

That explains VOLUMES about you.

>>10041021004102

Your not alone. I thought like this eversince I had that one dream wherenI was a lady, and i wasent sure what gender I was when I tried to use the restroo-......you know what? Nevermind. Have a fluttershy!

>>10042891004289

'Treehouse on fire' is a general disaster, and 'dream-reading jewellery' is from YukoAsho's Dream a Little Dream, wherein Fluttershy expresses her desire to be em-dashed by Luna.

It's not safe for work.

>>10041091004109 and I thought my writing process was weird... eh.

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Very interesting Amit. I didn't know you wrote, but now I am glad to be wrong. You have an... interesting style, and an unusual topic. It grabs the eye, and I like that.

This is... It's just... AMAZING!

Pure genius! Anyone can write an existential crisis, but to write it this well?

This is taking a very dark yet comedic twist...