Awww, zat is a good prompt. Nicely done.

>>990040990040 I may have cheated a little making them both heroes.

Dear Idiots

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Can I come to the wedding?

>>990126990126 No. We have many chapters of Eternal till then.

>>990152990152 So their is a wedding? You have to let me in?

Ah Spike. Makin' our lives better one atta time!

D'aaawwwwww.

Short and sweet. 10/10.

*Before reading*

"The Breakup"

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>>10002111000211 Kinship is over rated. Trust me I have four siblings myself.

>>10002231000223 you ruined this moment with your one-sided optimism.

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*ahem*

Small error:

“I do lover her Twilight. Can’t you see? I had to do this, for her.”

Love*

AND THEN, "And with a shit eating grin, Spike carried a very red Rarity up the stairs."

HA.

It was good. Glad to see additions.

>>10002431000243 Well that's... creppy.

Thought I caught all of those, damn.

Yeah, I needed to break the 1000 word minimum for submission so as soon as there was one I could work with I jumped on it.

I honestly think this was a bad prompt because people will use it to write hate fics about ships they don't like most likely.

Also, I do so enjoy the shit eating grin.

>>10002781000278 I'm still reluctant to write for a prompt, but given I'm making a new story for Writing Month...

SPEAKING OF WHICH, said story is Sparity... in an odd way. Spike finds a Death note, and uses it to kill all love-rivals, and old flames Rarity has; anything that will hurt his chance with Rarity. It's a dark comedy with the usual gimmick of Spike struggling to find out a pony's full name or even trying to see their face. opinions???

I'd also ask opinions for my art, but I'm asking for too much alread.

>>10003031000303 Interesting. I don't do grimdark, usualy. I don't mind dark evil or Batmanish... spell check doesn't catch Batmanish, what the fuck? I did like DN though so it could be cool.

>>10003201000320 It's actually not Grimdark. The dark part is just the fact that killing is involved. It's mostly comedic. Dark comedy because it's all "LOL DEATH." The closest I would EVER come to grimdark would be Spike contemplating the murder of his friends. But yeah, he kills in the name of love. I may end it with Sparity being an outcome.

>>10003351000335 Fun.

>>10003591000359 eeyup. o_o

If I may...

Another small error:

“I love you for who you are, and you beings a dragon"

being*

Another great, short but sweet, little read. That part at the end was hilarious Poor Twilight.

>>10009021000902 Fuck me. Appreciate the fix,

I found it quiet amusing too. I like ending short stuff on a funny note. Always leave em laughing after all.

I know this meme has been done to death but

Way better love story than Twilight

This story made me D`awwwwwwwww so much I scared my cat.

Five out of five Rainbow Dashes for you!

The ending of this made me laugh so hard!!!

Five out of five Rainbow Dashes!!

Great story! :)

>>10002431000243

Christ, what anime is that gif from?

>>10036161003616 I can love too!

Down Twi, they meant that shitty  book with sparkling vampires.

Oh, yeah that was bad. Never thought I'd want to rip a book apart.

>>10036911003691 I have achieved D'awww and laughing level of 5 Victory has been assured!

I admit I lol'ed

great story

Well lets see.

*Reads title* Please let them do it for some love reason and not because someone cheated

*Half way done* I'm so sorry Spike but you are both stupid and loving you did it out of love so I can understand

*The end* You two are the reason love exist

Path you sly devil why do you trick me so.

I went from hating you to understanding you to wanting to hug you. You and your writing. Fuck it take the hug just because It's a happy ending and I do love me happy endings

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>>10041561004156 I'm a bad person, why else? Oh, and sadistic, can't forget sadistic.

Eyes closed, lip open and extended, yeah I don't think Pinkie was planning on a hug. Spike's all, mare on mare action incoming, happy day.

Spike, you dog.

Oh Spike, you're such a pimp!

>>990174990174 Hey hey hey..... You're not going without me.

>>10042331004233 You do love to dole out anxiety like a pill don't you by the middle I was barley breathing good no ya mate.

i think you made my eyes water

give her a slap across the butt for me

Nicely done!

Adorable...

And i love how Spike gave himself a concussion by growing.

>>10313721031372 Falling roof + spontaneous growth = unpleasant head injury

That was cute and the ending was hilarious! Keep that combination up!

There are way too little stories that combine love and fun well.

>>10314771031477 Poor Twiilight, sleeping on the couch. Worse still, she forgot to soundproof the bedroom

>>10321361032136 Dear Princess Celestia

Today I learned that selfless love is a beautiful thing, that Spike is really good at mating and that Rarity makes pigeon like noises when she is on it.

Now please show me how I can forget that again.

Your heavily traumatized pupil

Twilight Sparkle

>>10341461034146 Well, maybe she decided to join in, who know?

>>10344061034406 Or she seduced the princess, just so she could tell Spike that she just did his mom.

>>10345541034554 Possibly.

I only had 30 minutes to think this one through before I had to start writing, as I found out about the prompt an hour and a half before submission closed.

"his few encounters with dragons being positive"

that should probably be,

"few of his encounters with dragons having been positive"

>>10384121038412 Something to that effect. I will fix it! Thank you for pointing it out. Side effect of writing at 11:30 at night in a hurry I guess.

>>10381571038157 yesh this chapter was delicious.

>>10384541038454 You should probably refrain from eating type. Ink and/or computer parts are not healthy.

i like this. this is good. go on and stuff

>>10385561038556 Running out of original comments, huh?

for a few minutes I swore I was reading the next chapter of eternal, then I kept reading.

this was good, I'm imagining that this particular story arc will continue, or are you going to leave us hanging?

Nice. Also, takes a while after Rarity and Spike got back together in the library. Did they....errr.....you know.

Spike breathing Ice... now that is an interesting concept. I would definitely like to see that in Eternal.

ooohhh~

>>10384641038464 Life is short my mouth is big your story is delicious. num num num num

>>10386061038606 Hanging probably. There's enough there to draw a conclusion, and I'm fairly busy as it is. I did see this as something that could take place in the Eternal universe though, interestingly enough.

>>10387601038760 Maybe, I kind of, "burrowed," the idea from Spyro and a picture of a ice dragon I saw earlier that day.

>>10387741038774 aaahhh~

>>10387261038726 It does seem implied.

Loved it!

>>10002231000223

I have two, we rarely even talk and one until a few months ago i hadn't seen in years.

Spike is a asshole for that ending though lmao.

>>10403851040385 And that's what makes it amazing.

>>10381571038157

This pone needs to be a story in itself, I can see this going great places.

>>10404521040452 Yeah, I'm reviewing the submissions now. And someone, wrote two lines about Spike, and then proceeded to write a story about Pinkie Pie and Twilight making out. A good author should make the prompt their own, spin it to their taste and strengths, not ignore it and do what ever the fuck they want.

Anyways, probably not. Well maybe, if another prompt has potential for advancing it.

>>10405161040516

Lol actually I was talking about into the blizzard, it should become a story on its own. I can see it being something amazing seeing another world of dragons, dragon art work and show it influencing both rarity and spike. While spike learns more than what he think he knew about dragons and their culture.

>>10404111040411

I would've called the bluff and teleported in

>>10406021040602 I know. I was just raging at incompetence from others. Yea it has the potential, but I have so much on my plate already. I actually wrote the first chapter of a fic Sunday, while I was forced into a position where I had to do SFW writing and didn't have the next chapter of Eternal fleshed out, that won't be released for a month or two since it won't be getting worked on further till I finish something else.

>>10406171040617

Dammit I want more eternal lol. I know this is off topic but I'm thinking of doing a sparity comic

>>10406251040625 Those are few, but they are usually very amusing.

>>10406251040625 Those are few, but they are usually very amusing.

>>10385671038567 I could always start using fancy GIF responses?

>>10413171041317 ... And you win.

This chapter needs to be a story, hopefully in future 30 Min Sparity's (Sparities'?) you'll do more on it.

>>10423701042370 It could prove a useful base for stories. A prompt about art or learning could really push this one forward.

Feel free to point out any errors or typos, while telling me what you thought of it.

Also, as requested, this is a continuation of the story I started last prompt.

"With her eyes closed, See reached for something"

she

"Did I hit a bad spot, to much pressure"

too

This was pretty awesome. And the implications that arise from the ending Please, continue.

That ending. Best day off ever!

Take the Day off

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Get laid.

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Nice continuation as it was great to see Spike and Rarity unwind like this.

oh i like this story

I have Spike's talent of surprisingly good massages, but most women would see it as a cheesy porno pickup line.

>>10534591053459 I find an impromptu back massage often works for that scenario. It's harder to get um laying down, than it is to get them to accept one sitting in a chair.

>>10534871053487 Perfect. Now to offer a back massage when I'm not spewing my nerdy knowledge of pones....

hay fires

You mean FRIES

Also, oh hahaha Spike, you never cease to be a pimp :D

>>10541031054103 Good catch.

And look, Rarity initiated this time.

loved it loved it, loved it. I'm still waiting on that fic where spike and rarity enter parent hood together.

>>10525111052511 This fucking thing never posted my reply. Thank you for the corrections. Although, I believe the to is right. I was told that you use too only when you could use, also or as well as. Neither of which work there.

>>10585861058586 I'd give this a read. I hope I don't come off as too much of an ass for that haha, I'd just like your stories to be the best that they can be

>>10592501059250 Not at all. You were very useful in error detection, and you always have good comments.

>>10592721059272 Not going to lie, that put a genuine smile on my face

I really enjoy your stories, dude. Keep up the good work!

>>10597381059738 That's funny. usually I'm putting the smile on Spike's face.

Definitely adorable

Finally got a few spare minutes to read "Magic Claws"! Thanks for sending along the link! I really liked the idea that Princess Celestia made a point of ensuring Spike learned how to perform massages and other stuff outside of book-learning, as well as what that implies about the somewhat parental relationship that Celestia and Spike might have once had. Also, Spike's obvious love and concern for Rarity were very sweet. - Donny-Boy

Due to certain failures on my part and my part alone, this didn't make the submission on time. However, the mods for the Tumblr were kind enough to review it anyways. I felt it was a shame not to let the review be read by anyone but me, as they work hard on the blog and delivering the reviews.

awww

Dam Rainbow Dash it looks like you want it now.

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Boy, dragons must be naturals at giving shit eating grins

>>10881741088174 Wink wink nudge nudge hulabaloo

>>10882381088238 It's the fangs man.

im so glad that u decided to continue this, this could be given its own story man, not as part of thriry minute sparity

Like I said this deserves its own story in itself. It deserve more than just the thirty minute sparity...

Skype ain't working right.  FlimFlamBros. and I are blaming you are to blame for it.

Man, not even Rainbow Dash could keep up with Dragon wings.

His older sister and her best friend would always be their ADORKABLE, overbearing pain in the flank...

ADORABLE

Great chapter, looks like Spike already got some flank in the last chapter,

please continue?