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    • The Electric Defender
      A human is sucked into the pony world by Princess Luna on accident and has to gain thier trust.

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    Logan Adams was a seemingly regular kid, well not really in behavior but he was in intrests. Logan was a skinny kid but noone bothered to bully him he was too fast to catch. He was a good student in highschool and got mostly A's. Logan had a personality like no other he was always willing to help anybody, most of the time to help his friends he would listen to them and agree out loud even if he really disagreed with them.

    he would let them go on about how stupid he or others were and what's wrong in their life. The only problems he had were his own, but noone would listen to him. Still he was okay with it. Logan loved to make others feel better. He had dark blond hair and white but not pale skin, but what people really loved about him was his wonderful blue eyes and soothing voice. His friends asked him to do a few hypnosis videos with his voice in it, and of course Logan said yes. He wanted his friends to take all the credit but they insisted he take credit and tell viewers who he was at the end of the 8th video.

    People were shocked that he was just 15 years old and Logan was shocked that most of the other highschoolers from his school we viewers or listeners of his videos. Too bad his own voice didn't sooth him, to get his anger out he would read and play video games. If he wasn't reading or playing games he was playing his favorite sport, hockey.

    Logan's friends never questioned his method of releasing his anger because it would make him angry and he would take it out on the person who made him very very angry. Logan would usually get angry when bullies pushed his friends around. Only once did it lead to violence and it only took that one time for people to understand not to push him or his friends around.

    Logan remembered that day all too well. He remembered it because he got himself out of deep trouble, he hurt the guy so badly and it happened yesterday at band camp.

    Yesterday

    It was almost to the end of band camp 8 hours for 5 days and it was almost over. Out of the corner of his eye Logan could see someone he didn't recognize. 'Must be new,' Logan thought, 'I guess I'll be adding someone new to my list of friends' As he came closer Logan could see he was very tall, Logan could see he was only 3/4 the kids hieght. Logan saw he had big muscles and must be very strong.

    After everone was dismised Logan put away his trombone and went over to talk to the new kid.

    "Hi, I'm Logan," Logan said, "and I'm going to be a sophmore"

    "Sup I'm Mike," the new kid said, "I'm going to be a senior that means i shouldn't talk to you.

    "Why?" Logan asked.

    "Because I'm not going to," Mike said crossing his arms, "if I did I would be lowering myself to a looser like you." Logan ignored this and started reasoning.

    "I have tons of friends that are seniors," Logan said.

    "Then they're loosers," Mike replied.

    "Then your calling us loosers," a girl said Logan knew it was Jess and with her was her sister.

    Mike turned around and started laughing, "I thought you only lowered yourself to a looser but you are a looser. You both are so small and fat." They were small and a little tubby but not fat.

    "Hey!" Logan said getting a little angry, "they arn't fat"

    "Yes they are," Mike said, "this ones so fat I could roll her like a ball" Mike pointed his thumb at Jess's sister.

    "You're very wrong and very mean," Logan said.

    "Oh yeah," Mike said, "watch this." Before anyone could do or say something Mike pushed Jess's sister onto the ground. Logan rushed over to help her up, his anger ready to be used.

    "Hey!" Jess shouted getting closer to Mike, "you can't push over my sister!"

    "Shut up you fat ass midget!" Mike yelled and punched Jess in the face. This sent Logan over the edge.

    "SHUT UP YOU WORTHLESS PIECE OF SHIT!" Logan yelled and ran at Mike in that short distance he felt his anger give him more strength than ever, and he knew how to use it. Logan delivered a punch to Mike's right eye with his left hand with the right side of Mike's face still showing Logan punched Mike's right eye again with his right hand.

    Mike leaned back covering his eye. Seeing the opportunity Logan punched Mike's upper legs and upper arms. Mike lurched foreward as Logan predicted who delivered his right knee into the left half of Mike's face. Mike stumbled back his right eye already begining to rapidly swell.

    "Hey," Logan said, "make a triangle with your thumbs and pointer fingers, look through it with both eyes open and put my nose in the triangle."

    Mike did what Logan told him to do quickly so he could go back to rubbing his face.

    "Now what the fuck did that accomplish?" Mike asked

    "Whichever eye I can see most is your dominant eye which was your right eye." Logan explained

    "So my right eye is dominant," Mike said, "so what"

    "So that means your right eye helps you most," Logan explained, "which also means your right hand is probably your dominant hand"

    "That still doesn't explain anything why you punched my right side," Mike snapped

    "Oh but it does," Logan said, "by punching you in the right eye and making it swell closed, I take away your good eye and leave you with poor perception of depth and center balance." Logan was  right Mike couldn't open his right eye and he was leaning off balance to the left. "With your legs and arms hurt it will be hard to give punches and kick as well as slow you down"

    Eventhough Logan was right Mike still charged trying to punch him. Logan moved a little to the left and dogded the right arm punch and grabed Mike's right wrist then using his other arm Logan elbowed Mike on the center of the lower arm. Logan moved behind Mike and towards the blechers. Mike again charged and tried to punch with his left arm. Logan again dogded this and grabbed Mike's arm swinging him face first into the chain link fence.

    Mike tried to punch again barely missing Logan and hitting the fence. Mike ignored Logan for a short timeclutching his fist Logan climbed much of the fence and kicked Mike in the nose while still holding on. Logan got to the top of the fence and jump, Mike looked up to see Logan put all his downward momentum and leg power to kick and land on Mike's face. Mike slowly got up and look to see Logan standing.

    "Don't you ever," Logan started the last three punches "hurt," one punch Mike stumbled back, "my," second punch Mike stumbled back and was on the verge of unconsciousness, "friends." one final punch Logan felt and heard the crack of bone and Mike was unconscious before he hit the ground.

    Today

    The only way Logan didn't get in trouble was because he and his friends claimed they had fought out of self defense.

    Logan decided to play some Battlefield 3. Quickmatch, game mode and map "supprise me," Logan said. Operation Firestorm 500% tickets. 'A long game,' Logan thought, 'pelnty of time for me to kill' Logan chose to snipe with a rifle scope, flash suppresor, and slugs. Logan went to the top of the mountain near the US deployment. Scanning around he saw someone running on the highway. 'easy pickings' Logan thought

    He fired one shot to see the distance he fired a second one and missed, the third one hit 'hotthorns (870MCS) NightRuler1000' and he was soon sniped off. Logan got into the support chopper that was flying over the RU depoloyment when he spoted a jeep he shot at it an wasted half of his ammo until as it was going up the hill he hit the driver 'hotthorns (870MCS) NightRuler1000'

    The pilot was then going low in the RU base, Logan decided to jump out and go for an enemy jet he. Jumped out and saw and enemy heading for the jet. Logan touch the gound just in time to knife the enemy and barely get in the jet. Once in the jet he noticed who he killed 'hotthorns (ACB-90) NightRuler1000' unluck for them. Logan got off the ground only to accidentally fly into an enemy support chopper disabling his jet, he spoted the first person and flew straight into them.

    Once again he killed NightRuler1000, over and over and over again Logan kept running into NightRuler1000 and over and over he kept killing him or her... probably a her. Latter on in the match he looked up to see his entire team was being annihilated by NightRuler1000. Logan hoped she didn't find him, too late she was right in front of him with a USAS-12. Logan ran from cover to cover as NightRuler1000 went through clip after clip. Then an idea popped into his head "defib time" Logan said.

    He ran straight at NightRuler1000 who missed every shot and shocked her to death. He couldn't believe it worked but it did. He started jumping up and down when all of the sudden the TV started blacking out like a loose lightbulb. then electricity shot out of the TV shocking Logan constantly not sure of how he was still alive or would be alive after he wait and started to notice that the electricity was hurting him really. Then he was lifted off the ground and slowly felt his body colapse as it was sucked into the TV 'never thought I'd go out like this' was the last thought that went through Logan's mind before he was completely sucked into the TV

    Comments ( 14 )

    #1 · 42w, 6d ago · · ·
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    First fanfic Keep thinking chapters are longer than they actually are like sucked in felt like it was at least 2100 words but it wasn't ._.

    #2 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Again, a spammer.

    Anyway, this is good, keep it up!

    I wonder how it will end! :rainbowkiss:

    #3 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    DAYUM SUN this is actually pretty good a cool way to start a fic :pinkiesmile:

    :flutterrage:moar writting plz

    #4 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I see a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, mostly with commas. But I still like the story.

    #5 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    i like it when's the next chapter coming :twilightsmile:

    #6 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Two minor grammatical/spelling mistakes in the story description; 'Thier' should be 'Their' and you change from present to past tense: "Ponies assume it is evil... and will not trust it" should be "Ponies assume it is evil... and do not trust it". They are only minor, but a story's description is the primary means by which you can attract potential readers. :eeyup:

    #7 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I wish I could write intresting srories like this. Guess I gotta fav now for updates......

    #8 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This entertains me :pinkiehappy:

    #9 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Very interesting, I look forward to more.:pinkiehappy:

    #10 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Very interesting but I spotted a few typos in there... Looking forward to the next chapter

    #11 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Typos, but definitely tracking this :pinkiehappy:

    #12 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>997623 You do know that is my online name for PS3 and i get most of my mcs kills with extended mag, slug and no scope Right?

    #13 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Awesome! Give me more!

    #14 · 39w, 15h ago · 2 · ·
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    Ironically, Luna's reaction is exactly how I think most people react when they keep get killed in games like that.....

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