Hee. Re-reading it from the start, the ending is obviously what was going on. Well played.

HaHa! I love it!

I actually expected this to involve a massage or something.

lolwut

I knew it was going to turn out to be a big misunderstanding. Good job!

Hehehe... Nice.

my jaw is stuck, I can't close it, also, I laughed so hard I think I need to bye a new pair of lungs. lol

Love it.

Oh, that was awesome!

Dear Celestia, help me. I have reduced myself to writing cheap humor fics.

Bwahahahahahaha! This was priceless!

oh you!

"Having fun?" <--- best line ever

MY SIDES

That was absolutely, positively,

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That... was beautiful.

and...

dat ending...

I predict that this will get featured

>>986841986841

Let us hope!

>>986907986907

Good Luck, I really loved this story. It made me laugh harder at a fanfic than I have in a LOOONG time.

It's gonna take me awhile to clean the dirt out of my mind, but that was freaking hilarious

“Well, yeah. What did you think I was doing?” oh Twilight trust me when I say you don't want to know.

Damn, I was sure she was eating Ice Cream. Fyi, adult humor falls under the mature tag now.

>>987651987651

Only if it's explicit.

69 thumbs up achieved

This is a pretty cool fic right here.

I award you 1 point and may the unloved hate.

>>987682987682 I suppose

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Read the first 4 lines. Shes sleeping in. Isn't she.

Edit: whoo! Got it in one! But oh my, Flutters! She seems to be enjoying her nap almost indecently!

>>987682987682

Or it's suggested strongly enough - but that's up for the mods to decide.

What I think Cicero is doing when he's alone in a room making akward chuckling noises 0_o...

from the discription i thought this was a clop-fic i was wrong but it was still very enjoyable

Well.........that was, um, interesting.

Don't think I'll be reading one like this after

9 pints of Guinness again.

Still, got me laughing, a little to loud in the

pub though.

I knew right from the start.

She's not fapping, she's napping!

I was expecting a massage.

I was thinking ''Who in the hoof ,moans while sleeping?!''

I started yawning ,and layed down and streched and letted out a big moan ,when I had the story out of my mind.

I remembered this fic,and face-hoofed.

Edit :I knew this would happen!!It should be rated Mature ,so people don't know that it wasn't clop.

This story did give me the same felling of Twilight's First Time ...Hehe...That was actualy one of the first fics Iv'e ever read....Hehe..

Congruats on getting featured ,by the way!>>987682987682

>>987651987651 Poor Broniestories...

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

i think that described my reaction at this fic

I bet they were actually doing that though.

More dirty mindtricking story. Always keep up the good work, and please do more mindtricking story.

lolz

Right, this will blow your mind...

What if she was subconciously hoofing it while she was asleep?

Yup, cracked the fuck up at that one.

I have to say that this "clop-fic" was simply amazing. i couldnt help but emit a chuckle or two when i read was she was REALLY doing

This surpassed my expectations, and i hope to sample more of your amazing work in the future. keep up the good work

I expected yoga. :/

>>988479988479 Is that... A SKYRIM REFERENCE?!?!!?

good story

Sweet Celestia... my sides hurt

"I can't wait to tell Princess Celestia I tried this

Absolute best line. I caught myself thinking "Hmm, I wonder if the princess does it often!"

In all honesty, I had to read it twice. Or thrice. The lack of oxygen to my brain is making it difficult to remember.

This was absolutely hilarious. It somewhat reminds me of Friendly Uncle's work (Estrus, in particular), and I absolutely love it. Especially the ending... both the end of Twilight and the final bit after that. Pure comic genius.

I lost my shit when Spike went in, and when she said she was sleeping in, I gave myself the world's hardest facepalm.

Hilarious I loved it that was so funny.  BTW out of curiosity was Fluttershy "Hoofing it"    lol

I normally don't click things in the featured box too often, but I am very glad that I did here. This had me on the floor laughing. That touch at the end was amazing. Great work!

And a side note, no errors!

This is very good! Very good indeed.

So predictable. So very predictable.

THIS IS SO FUCKING BRILLIANT!

its great!

this was very interesting I was seriously expecting twilight to be in a message chair or something no those can be adicting.

Ahhhhh... duuuude... you got me!!!! I feel so dumb, I should have guessed.

Ehhh.  We've already gotten a lot of comedic one shots in this vein:  Estrusus, Fluffershy, Twilight's Hornwarmer, etc.

Anyone care to name some more?

(What does it say about this community that I can state these things so quickly?)  

>>988980988980

I know. I felt bad because I had this idea a long time ago, yet I only just got around to writing this.

>>988770988770 LOL YUS XDD

>>988770988770 LOL YUS XDD

But instead of sleeping in, it's... something else... 0_o

My reaction during all that fic (Yes, i have similar drills :D)

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Before attempting to read anything else, I'll have to buy new set of ribs and lungs.

I'd also like to wait for my brain to get 20% COOLER.

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>>986841986841

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Oh, another sex comedy fic. Yawn

I'm pretty sure the latest site blog states that fics like these where you make a pony out to doing something of a mature nature--clopping, in this case--needs to be rated mature.

Now, the story itself? Decent writing. But I saw the joke coming right from the beginning. Not one laugh out of me.

Overall? Seen this way too often. Try a different tangent to writing comedy.

No offense, but there's been quite a few of these kind of joke stories in the feature box lately. I'm not saying they're not funny, but I think we should ease up a bit before the jokes get old.

That said though, this is still a pretty amusing tale.

Erm... you know that adult humor, which this is, needs to be rated as Mature and not Teen.....right?

>>988770988770

A Skyrim reference you say? When I first read Spike's first couple of lines I thought Scumbag Alduin...

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>>986907986907 it got featured

Curses! I had my money on "eating ice cream in bed".

HUE HUE HUE GREAT made me laugh

I thought it'd turn out to be yoga...

Very amusing!  Though I laughed more at the beginning and was left hanging with wonder at the end.   Guess I'll have to make a conclusion for myself!   Fluttershy was enjoying her nap...right?!

If I wasn't already going to pony hell I'd ask if I was going to pony hell

>>989088989088

If this seriously qualifies as "Adult Humor" to the extent that it needs to be grouped with pure clopfic, then I think I can definitely see why some people want a fourth category in the rating system. I was under the impression that something this relatively innocent was fine under teen, no? Perhaps a bit dirty, but nothing even approaching graphic. Lyra and Bon Bon's Odd Jobs, for instance, passed as Teen until ONE CHAPTER where they started drinking... *ahem* well yes I won't go into that. This story is comparatively mild.

>>989408989408  Doesn't matter if it goes into detail or not.  It is still adult humor.

I beleive there are "sex" and "gore" tags that denote clop/gore.

If it lacks these, well then guess what?  it ain't clop. (Unless the author has no idea how to tag)

>>986594986594

Cheap humor is the best humor

This type of story might be a little too common, but as long as they are written well its enjoyable. This one was indeed written well.

>>986594986594

let's not say reduced, I think a more fitting term would be... "diselevated"...

I... but... um...

My bet is that Big Macintosh was in the boutique with Fluttershy!!!!!!!!!! Ooh LA LA!!!!!

i moan while i sleep...

>>989418989418

I suppose it depends on how you define adult humor. I would consider this much more befitting of the term "teen humor," seeing as I know many teenagers who would be regularly exposed to this sort of thing and few would find such playful but ultimately innocent innuendo offensive. I do wish there were clearer definitions of the categories... or, if there are such definitions, that I could find them, seeing as I fail to locate things quite frequently.

...come to think of it, under what circumstances could a comedy fit into teen and not everyone or mature? I mean, I'd think a clean comedy would fit into everyone, and then if even mild "adult" humor goes into mature, what goes into teen?

Dat Vas Funny!

Uh huh... Moaning and talking while sleeping... Ok?

>Sees 'Teen' and 'Comedy' tag.

> Trend in 'misleading title = comedic one-shot' being put in featured box.

...Oh well.

>>989501989501  True.  Oh well.  The mods let it through so yeah.

Huh, Twilight Sparkle Moans and talks in her sleep..

BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

I knew from the start that it would be something stupid, but I didn't see "sleeping in" coming.

I agree wish Dash -- what kind of pony moans while sleeping in?

In any case, this was hilarious, as well as brilliantly written.

I'd read some of your other work, but it all has the "Sad" tag...

In any case, you should do this again.

Soon.

That is all.

Journcy Out.

EDIT:

I agree with >>989232989232

I was going yoga.

Damn, everyone is freaking out over mature themes. Too lazy to find it, but there's a link somebody posted on Knighty's blog about getting things past the radar. This story should be used as an example of that guide.

Now for my thoughts of the story: I've read quite a few of these "It's Not What it Looks Like!" stories. They're always a pleasure to read. This one really captured the characters and tastefully set up for the punchline. I might even use hoofing it instead of clop for now on, such a funny term. I thought Friendly Uncle was the king at situation comedy, but there might be a shared monarchy in the future.

Well, I'm not sure there was anyone who didn't see the misunderstanding ending coming from a mile away. I basically opened it up, read the first scene, and skipped to the end to see what it was. Not very interesting.

Also, I have to ask: if the thing was sleeping in, then how was Spike able to do it at 3 in the afternoon?

And I also agree that this should be rated mature.

>>989501989501

Teen would be swearing and mild violence.

>>989642989642

There's something wrong with society when mild violence is ever appropriate when mild sex is not. There are still tons of teen-rated stories with mild sexual humor, though. I really do wish I knew fimfiction's definition of "adult humor."

>>989335989335 Wing-Boner.

"What, you mean you caught her reading?”

Best line I've seen all day.

>>989642989642

>>989660989660

See, that's the issue right now. People have been pushing the envelope for a while. But ever since Estrus and Lyra and Bon Bon Odd Jobs got bumped to mature, there's no specific guideline how far you can go. Violence is always obvious and while very few people get offended compared to sexual themes which everybody starts to get upset. Reading about RD getting cut up and cooked into cupcakes is okay, but insenuating that somepony is clopping raises a red flag? It's Elvis' swinging hips all over again...

At least it was realistic. Well, time for bed! *Begins moaning seductively*

I got an idea for your next fanfic it involves Spike.

Lol. Nobody mentions FS getting her freak on in Carousel Boutique. =3

I think this needs to be mature for adult humor. This was awesome!

And, this light humor was exactly what I needed after reading "everything is fine". That story is just.. Ima go with freaky... Yeah, that works.

thanks just thanks, now i wont want to get my piwi in twilights wewe (i got this gag from youtube)

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Teh Best Author. Teh Best. Misunderstandings are teh best.

>>986460986460 same.  A massage or stretching, but the stretching came a bit far-fetched when she said that it had already been 30 minutes