I actually liked it, i'm sorry but i was in a horrible mood! D:

Please forgive me :(

Nice!

I heard of a crossover with Zelda

but never four swords!

Great premise

Just work on your writing, and it'll be perfect!

>>986717986717 Thank you! I will now reward you with a gift for being so nice!

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Take the d*mn money.

That's not breaking the fourth wall. Breaking the fourth wall means a character says or does something that shows that they know they are in a fictional work. What Pinkie did here wa utilize hammerspace

>>989878989878... Well, f*ck, you got me there.

Don't worry, I will fix it now. Thank you for bringing this to my attention

>>989902989902 Done fixing the problem. Any better?

Sorry that the new chapter is short.

But the battle needed more time to develop in my mind. So it will be the first two-parter of the book.

Link replied, "Okay, creepy, power hungry peto out to destroy Hyrule. I'm with you so far."

That line forced me into favoriting this

Good story so far

>>995969995969 Why thank you!

I'm already working on the sequal, but don't worry. This one won't end for a long time. Maybe...

The idea just popped into my head to do one. But it will be just as good as the first. Pinke Promise.

Oh god that last part made me fav. The fourth wall has been shattered.

>>996393996393 I knew that would be a fave catcher!

>>986526986526 I've seen worse written.

"Link replied, "Okay, creepy, power hungry peto out to destroy Hyrule. I'm with you so far."

phhhhhhhhht-

Um...

Not the worst but certainly needs a lot of improvement.

>>995808995808 Speaking of short chapters, make the normal ones much longer why dont'cha?

>>10007751000775 Well school just started and I have been busy and cant always make my chapters long.

But I will make them as long as I can. Pinkie Promise.

>>10015991001599 Thank you.

>>986526986526 Aw, no problem! Sometimes I'm grumpy and don't think before I type. Here, for apologizing:

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For those who don't understand this story.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qUd5NnkyG3c

Its rupees not ruupies. Lol

I had to stop reading to correct you on that. Ill be back.

Some of the text of the mane 6 seems out of character. When rainbow was going on about all the stuff she gets away from, it seems like that would be something pinkie would say.

And dont forget [ hr ] adds a break.

Like that.

>>10105871010587

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>>10084161008416

Awkward moment when fingers (excluding thumb) are 2...um...sections... bigger than the photo.

Shrek 2. Nice

>>10534961053496 Of course, its my favorite movie!

My longest chapter so far. I hope you like it!

"Huh?" He pulled away from his son and noticed he looked different. He was... almost emo. He was so shocked, he was unable to speak.

"Your pathetic words almost made me cry..." Shadow Link said. He then began to laugh again as he grabbed Link's father by his shirt. There was a black aura, blah blah blah, His fathers eyes widened, blah blah blah, Shadow Link laughed like someone from a mental ward, blah blah blah... lets just skip to the good part.

...

>>11486001148600

Well, what do you expect from a 12-year old girl writing a Zelda Fan Fiction  at 12:00 AM on a school night?

>>11539851153985 I wouldn't try and use that as an excuse.

>>11552881155288 Calm yo self Im changin it.

Later.

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Please more now.

I think I have an idea of what the Mountain Climbing song should be:

"I AM A PONY AND I'M CLIMBING A MOUNTAIN!

CLIMBY CLIMBY MOUNTAIN, CLIMBING A MOUNTAIN......."

It goes on forever, I guess. But when I was reading the Mountain Climbing song sentance, my mind instanly went to 'Diggy Diggy Hole' .

MOARMOARMOARMOARMOARMOARMOARMOAR!!!!!!!!!x9999999999999999999999999999999999. I DEMEAND moar, because if you don't, I'LL BE AS TEMPERED AS BLUE (and normally I'm like Vio, even the backstab- oops. Spoilers)!