FIRST POST!

I really like this story, please continue

This is good, faved!

Sounds good.

Mirror's Edge? there are not enough of these. Looks good and well written. Faved!

Add this to the end of the chapter for maximum effect

Why did you republish the entire other chapter into this one?

>>991541991541

I believe he did. tsk tsk. Nice chapter nonetheless.

>>991775991775 Agreed.

>>991541991541

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Wow. It's getting intense in here. What's next a helicopter coming out of no where

This is so awesome

Way to go Logan! Also, I haven't played ME in a while so I forgot who logan was. Was he the police cop that helped Faith after her former leader died.

Damn, shit just got real... and damn Cliffhanger

>>10059121005912

Logan is just an OC. I just made him up. The only Runners that were mentioned in the game was Kreeg, Celeste, Drake, Merc, and Faith. Who knows? At one point in the story, I might ask you all to submit your Runner OC's.

>>10070021007002 I might just take you up on that oc runner

So awesome

I like the transition chapter so that we can get familiar with the new world good job. Also I like how you expanded the runners base of operation after the one previously got ruined. Some spelling errors here and there.Sorry for be a grammer nazi.

Also, I notice that RD is always sent to Earth in a tragic place like she was in WW2 in one them. Why is that?

Cool story so far, kinda wondering how rainbows going to get back though

>>10212891021289

Same here, oh and RD is obviously going to win teh race

Wait...I thought the dad died in the riots as well? or was that not explained well in the game. Anyway I like the seriousness that the chapter have and gives RD insight on why Faith is doing this.

awesome stoey, can't wait for the next chapter

epic story is epic

So in other words the moral of Mirrors Edge is "Fuck the police!"

>>10954151095415

Well, the Runners mostly just take them down non-lethaly. But in this story, Project Icarus has now begun and because the police have become more evil, the Runners now need to change their game plan in order for them to survive, and that is to kill if you have to.

In the story, things might have gone easier if the police forces were CPF instead of PK. That away, the Runners can do their jobs much easier without having to shed blood.

By the way, Fang is Garry's nickname. And he's Ukrainian. But  guess I should have specified it before.

>>10954571095457 I don't nessesarily mean kill the just fuck 'em up a bit at the very least . The blues are always messing things up.

im glad you managed to nail my character, wrote him down pretty much the way i was thinking of him as i was writing him down

me gusta

oh but you did repeat lines and phrases a lot, maybe you should get a thesaurus

btw whats up with ripping off the games intro speech? not cool bro, you could have explained runners/the city a tad, and put more detail into how Faith/RD got there.

if you do the above mentioned, i might just favorite it, 7/10

Agreeing with Padwan here, Great work! And email me if you need anymore details about my guy

My OC dead all ready

At least he die with honour

>>11707591170759

So sorry I had to do that. I really wanted your OC to have more parts in the story. But in Mirror's Edge, your whole life is on the line. Anyways, go check my blog and see what happens to Faith after Alex dies.

Wow, that was an intense chapter. Faith almost killing her boss, Rainbow Dash's mentality going haywired to the point of suicide, Zach having a crush on a pony for being adorable...but who can blame him when he sees something as adorable as Dash. I really like where this is going and if you are new to the scene of death then you would probably be on the brink of insanity as well.

Let's drink to him once more, he was a good Runner.

Wait... Did my OC Alex death made rainbow dash try to kill herself

Now I feel bad

'Looks at story'

Oh hey a new chapter..

'Reads'

Well, I did't see that coming.

Update! Sorry it took me so long to update, but I have been bombarded with lots of work at school. Hope you enjoy this chapter. Also, word of advice, don't put any pony comments in the youtube link. Come on peeps, the comments in the song talks about other people's fathers and sons, so don't comment on the song because it's not pony related. I just don't want to cause any trouble okay? Thanks guys.

>>13546871354687 don't worry about it, as long as the chapters come i don't mind waiting (within reason)

Nicely done

so sad!!! The song is doing me in. not everyone can handle the pressure of being a leader. Also take your time. You don't have to rush.

Argh! Is this story in past or present tense?! Interesting idea, looks good but needs an editor to patch up some parts. I swear I didn't intend to sound insensitive, it's a good story. Take a thumb up mate.

This is really really sad, and tense!!!

Just when I thought I couldn't find another crossover then this happens, omg wow.

OH GOD YES

Please take this off hiatus soon

Very good, I noticed a few grammar mistakes here and there but very good

>not using the dedicated Author's notes section

Great chapter. The plot thickens...?