I just started writing fan fics on my little pony since October and I hope the stories I do are good enough for everypony
This is the story of how Pinkie became friends with a Pony before becoming friends with the mane five.
This is how it all started.
-NOTE-
This story is based off of the Flash (of the same name)
created by *Swomswom. http://www.deviantart.com/#/d4tv2oe
This is not meant to gain prophet or take credit for the great flash but to write a story based off of it.
Thank you for reading this part and I hope you enjoy.
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Almost as sweet as the original.
This could be even greater if you improved your formatting. I mean it: it's terrible. You're starting new paragraphs MID-SENTENCE!!! That's not just bad grammar, that's just plain bad. You also don't use commas, and there is no place in this entire story where a colon is supposed to be used, but you have several in here. Yo know, I'm half-tempted to just copy-paste this into Microsoft Word and make the corrections for you myself. I'd rather not, of course, because then I'd have to add commentary explaining what I did so you could learn from it. That would be tedious. But, unlike the other person I've done this for, at least this is less than 11,000 words.
Why do you have such an odd habit of starting new lines, anyway?
Despite the errors, I did thumbs-up. You should probably include a link to the original, too.
975950 To be honest I can't really say why I have that habit of starting new lines.
It probably started by around my first story and after that I just stuck to it.
I am trying to stop it though so my stories can flow better.
This is a bitter-sweet story, so mixed reactions. Great idea, though. It almost makes you feel like Tommy was right next to you..............
i saw this on youtube
but even WITH the depressing music its not sad as actually knowing what they were thinking in the story
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You should make a longer more detailed version of this. LIKE WAAAAY longer. Also if you do don't give the video until the last chapter so they would be surprised by the ending that is his death. This seems like a planner to me for someone to make a beautiful story.