It's funny how a random whim can turn out to cause the most profound encounters in a person's life. By attempting a bit of magic, I was able to get the once in a lifetime chance to talk with actual royalty! Only, royalty from another world...
Well.... Haven't quite seen a story like this before, or if I have it wasn't centered about Celestia. The detail you've put into the story is excellent, I have never seen anyone go into that much detail to describe any of the ponies, much less the Princess. I can't completely judge this story until I have a better idea as to were it will go, but at the moment keep up at what you are doing and set yourself apart from the other "Bronie meets Pony" stories. I wish you luck, and I will keep an eye on this story.
In the Name of Her Serene Majesty,
Celestia's Paladin: For Honor and Duty, For the Sun and Moon
You ought to have that fountain pen checked and adjusted by a professional. The kinds of ink flow problems you describe just aren't normal. Also, an ache in your wrist is a sure sign that you've been applying too much pressure. A fountain pen doesn't require nearly the kind of pressure on the page that a ballpoint does. That's why fountain pens are still the best for fatigue-free note taking.
Oh, and congrats on the interview. Celestia's a tough one to land.
Very creative I like this story
Yeaaaaaaaaaaa.....ima call it one of the best story's I've ever read
I dub the story maker second class
MORE DAMMIT MORE!
Usually, I abhor fics like this for the simple reason that human insertion into the pony world is just plain...wrong. Whenever I see something like that, I scroll straight past it. Now, seeing this, I'm actually tempted to read a few of them.
Although the general premise, I admit, is a bit unoriginal, the execution of that premise is unlike anything I've seen. And, of course, the masterful prose demonstrated here makes the story even more attractive.
I am currently reserving judgement, pending development of plot, but my curiosity is piqued. Let's see how this turns out, shall we?
Hmmm... interesting, very interesting. Keep it up I really like where the story is going.
I cant help but feel reminded of Ah My Goddess with Celestia showing up behind him. Did she come in through the mirror?
LOLs shall ensue.
Not as many LOLs as I had thought would ensue...
But, more will likely come!
I will watch and i will read
Keep it up great work
This is clever. I like the direction I believe this will take.
Continue, good sir. I desire to read what happens next.
I'm liking what I see thus far, looking forward to seeing more of it. Favorited and 5-starred
An old tune got a remix, it seems. My good sir, you have turned "Yankee Doodle" and transformed it into something akin to "Stairway to Heaven". You have deservedly earned my compliments, and my thanks, for a rivteting story. If the rest of your work shapes up to be this magnificent, I have no doubt this could gain as much fame as other notable MLP fan fictions. Three hooves up. I'd say four, but levitation is more of an issue than balance.
This is...actually really good. And I'm surprised to see a Brony who sees Celestia for what she is: a wise, benevolent ruler of magic and grace, not a troll or nasty tyrant.
It was time to finish up this nonsense, or so I told myself at the time.
-Going to be some magic applied to the fire, or is he just going to lace it with copper to make it burn green, or what? Also, the summary or whatever you want to call it implied that he was trying for any Fairytale Princess... maybe it means that he will get Luna instead somehow?
I noticed that the sun was already setting.
-This might explain it if Luna shows up, but "Lesson Zero" (if that was out when you wrote this) implies that Celestia uses the night as her "off hours for personal business"... then again first-contact with other dimensions is a fairly "official business" sort of thing.
, she would probably not be at all amused by my writing letters to fictional pony princesses
-Missing a period at the end.
I lighted the fire pit and,
-"lit" I think...
I imagined her as an immortal who had long ago become used to the pain of never having a constant companion,
-You mean "having lost her only, here-to-for constant companion" or something like that?
“I accept your invitation.”
-To what? "Hey, come over to my dimension! I'm 99% sure you aren't made of anti-matter, and the atmosphere isn't poisonous to you."? Of course, he might have specificially offered her the chance to talk to her extra-dimensional fans directly.
Try to get through this quickly, though, because you’re missing the good parts.
is that your brain decides that it needs whatever processing power it can grab, and decides to free up resources by cutting your control to your legs.
“If you didn’t know that I existed, why did you invite me to visit you for an interview?”
-Well, that answers that question regarding the general text of the letter.
Saying that she was equine in nature, however, was like saying that a supermodel is really just a really a type of monkey.
the hairs of her mane and tail were individual and distinct.
Eh, I figured she didn't have hairs, just an energy-field that looked like (and for many purposes IS) a miniature version of the aurorae.
how conspicuous she was.
It was time to take this party indoors,
-This needs either one more carriage return, or one less.
She blinked suddenly and looked surprised.
-Surprised at the mystical feel (including none at all) of a sun not her own?
My host reflexes, trained into me over a period of years by my wife, kicked in, much to my relief. I now knew exactly how to act.
-Celestia is skilled at smoothing over social situations.
It shouldn’t have shocked me when her horn glowed and the glass raised itself to her lips.
-I was thinking SOMETHING about this before it happened, but I can't remember WHAT...
“However, if you don’t mind… I would like to ask a few questions of you, first.”
-This should be interesting...
(Sonic Colours) AMAZING!!
Great story. I'm trying to write one like this myself, but...it pales in comparison to yours! Truly, magnificient.
Wow, impressive. Tracked, watched, and 5starred. Next chapter's going to be interesting!
I like it. Not really my type of story, but there would be no way to deny it's not excellently written, and that is good enough to turn something I wouldn't otherwise care for into something I enjoy.
My thoughts exactly!
the description you gave of celestia was, for lack of better words, AWESOME. i really want to see were you are going with this story.
Wow, everyone. Thank you! While I was obviously hoping for a positive reaction, I wasn't expecting this! I'm both honored and humbled that you all like my story!
The good news is that after having to take a couple days off of writing due to work, I'm busily typing away on the rest of the chapters. I fully expect that I will have this completed by the end of the day on Sunday.
Thanks again for reading, and I hope I don't disappoint in the next few chapters!
All of my stars for sharing and utilizing my fantasies far better than I could've put into words. I demand MOAR!
Hm! Quite a promising story so far. I had to stop reading halfway through due on an unrelated incident involving my friend and "buttah" (*giggling*), but I think this is definetly a story I'll be following. All my stars! Have them! xD
Definitely original, very creative. I LIKE IT! I have just finished reading this page and I can already tell I am going to like this I simply can't wait for you to continue it I have never read a story that involved anything but a pony or other animal interacting with a pony, never a human being. so this is definitely something that will get positive reviews, and I see it already has a few
awwww a some what cliffhanger at the end. I think I sense more suspense around the corner ready to kick me in the head as I come around the corner to realize I will have to wait for the story at one point or another
One last chapter after this, and an epilogue to follow. I know I was intending to have this all wrapped up by the end of the day today, but this is my first fanfic, and I greatly underestimated the amount of time it would take for me to finish this. Another day or two, and I should have this completed!
Hopefully, those of you that are tracking this will enjoy this chapter at least as much as the first two. For those that pointed out grammar and other errors in the first parts, I thank you for helping me make this a better fiction.
Please enjoy, and feedback is always welcome!
are you going to ask the golden question "may I go to equestria"
Finally! The LOLs I have arrived!
OMG I was first!
Very interesting. Having the G-rated nature of the show conflict with what actually happened. That was bloody brilliant on your part, mate. It shows the reader that the real Equestria is a lot grittier than we thought, and may set up a few questions for the next chapter. I couldn't find any errors, but then again I was too busy being captivated by the story to notice... Or care, for that matter.
Another excellent chapter, sir. Well done, indeed.
Excellent chapter. I never thought I'd read or see Celestia or any pony from Friendship is magic actually watch the show so you definitely hit something that from at least my knowledge has never been done before good job
Very interesting concept that you have working perfectly for yourself. Very good job indeed!
The way you describe everything... I want to believe this really happened.
"Could Celestia herself be a brony?" I just loved that part. Awesome chapter, man!
you could merge this with chapter one and it would be fine in my opinion.
This is lovely, I'm enjoying it a lot.
I probably would have shown her my favorite episode, Luna Eclipsed. I think she would get a kick out of that one. However, I doubt whether it would have prompted such an enlightening response.
Keep it up your doin great
And there we go. I know the final chapter was pretty heavy on the talking, but this fic is called "Interview with a Princess", after all
I hope I managed to end it in a way that you all find at least satisfactory. Once again, I want to thank everyone who reads this, and thanks again to everyone who took the time to comment. This is my first fanfic, and I am stunned and humbled by the overwhelmingly positive feedback I've gotten. Thank you all, sincerely.
The LOLs I just had were unbelievable!
that was epic........why do we still not have a luna emoticon really...
She had it comin...
Love and Tolerate. Though, in this case, just love. That was really good.