Pretty good so far. I was just thinking that Rarity and Rainbow don't get enough interaction time in the show. Looking forward to more!

I wasn't particularly interested in reading a Rarity x Rainbow Dash, but I decided it was worth a shot. I must say, the way you write is absolutely beautiful. I hope to see the same quality in future updates. *tracks*

>>970517970517

Thanks~ I'm actually writing up the next chapter right now. So you probably won't have to wait too long.

>>970657970657

Thank you so much! ; w; I've been feeling a little down about my style lately, so I really appreciate that you like it~

Deprived, not depraved. This seemed a bit short, but I look forward to future chapters.

>>971107971107

Ah! Thank you! I didn't catch that when I was reading over it. (:

Interesting concept, but a tad bit wordy - nothing blatantly wrong, it's just that your prose could use a little trimming.

>>974141974141

Some people say too short, others too long-winded... Well, I guess we'll just see how it goes! Thank you for the feedback~ I'll try doing a little more editing next time. (:

Well, I'll be one of the ones with the opposite opinion. I liked the "wordiness" of your story. You do a great job of describing what's going on and creating the environment of the story.

I agree that no trimming need take place.

>>975241975241

Oh? Thank you! I probably wouldn't have changed my style anyway. :P It's hard to switch styles around in the middle of a story. (:

>>975952975952

Good. xD Thanks~

Pinkie may be , but you can always count on her in an actual disaster!

After some mumbling about wordiness in a previous chapter, I went back through this one and pretended to be an editor. What would I leave out, what would I rewrite?

Answer: nothing, and hardly anything at all.

Which I suppose disqualifies me as an editor, but it makes me a happier reader.

>>990483990483

I know, right? I was kind of counting on that. :P

>>990677990677

Thank you so much~! I love it when other people edit and stuff, it makes me feel better about my writing. x3

No not Fluttershy!!!

Can't wait to see more.

>>10186101018610

Haha~! I've had a lot of people feel bad about Fluttershy. xD But I wanted somepony that Rainbow Dash would want to help immediately, and Fluttershy worked nicely. :P

I finally read through this a few more times and fixed bunch of mistakes... "Only the princesses have horns and tails"... Geez, I don't pay any attention when I write.

Sorry for the short chapters... I could probably combine a few of them, but I'm not going to bother at this point.

This is getting worse and worse! ...The situation in the story, of course.

The story itself is pretty suspenseful.

>>11635111163511

I guess it is kind of suspenseful... :D Not exactly what I was going for, but it works!

Thanks so much for the continued support~ It means a lot!