Octavia is a successful earth pony cellist who lives in the quiet town of Ponyville, spending most of her time always perfecting her art. But one day, she gets a knock on her door, and realizes she's gotten an unexpected visit from her younger sister, Viviola. They don't always get along - they are siblings, after all - but in the end, they are family.
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My first fic, yay.
A little bit of a background explanation: after seeing the violin-playing pony next to Octavia in Sweet and Elite (S2E9) and considering her likeness to the violin-playing Octavia recolor in Luna Eclipsed (S2E4), a huge chunk of backstory popped its way into my head. So, like any good, dedicated fan, I started writing it into a fic. I realize that most people consider the Luna Eclipsed pony to be Octavia in costume, but what fun is writing fan fiction if you don't take some things in your own direction?
Note that the first chapter is merely to establish their relationship together and show the two interacting. There will be more story elements later on, but since this is more of a Slice of Life than anything, it'll be slow in coming.
And maybe the name "Viviola" will stick, who knows
yay first fics!
you've got more initiative than i did, my first was just a one shot thing. course, no one was happy with how it ended so ima have to write more.. but, i digress. you've done well, specially for a first. 
im hoping this turns out amazing, because i'll be following it. 
taking things in your own direction is the best. haha
also, congratz on breaking canon with your first fic.
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i think im certifiably insane.
Heh. I finished this and thought, 'I really want to know how this develops...' So well done, I look forward to the next chapter! :)
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I was going to point out these things. But damn, you're good!
Thanks for the feedback
Now that I know at least a few ponies are watching, I'm gonna work extra hard on Chapter 2. Expect it soon 
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Hah
I win
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Indeed you do, good Sir.
Oh dear. Look at those gigantic paragraphs. HEY DOOM PIE, CHINA CALLED. THEY WANT THEIR WALL BACK.
Anyway, this was more of an expository chapter than anything. I wanted to sort of explore their past and I decided on one specific event I’d like to focus on for this part. I’m not displeased with how it turned out
I forgot to say this earlier, but I do appreciate any feedback. Despite what my ego keeps insisting, my logical mind keeps telling me I’m far from perfect, so feel free to tell what you’d like to see done better, if the compulsion possesses you to do so.
Also, no picture because I don’t know how to Photoshop
i think youre doing a good job. there's some good characterization, and tbh, i love octavia in general, and its nice to see her not being shipped with anything and everything that can make music (DJ-PON3, Lyra [with possible Bon Bon 3-some action], pinkie pie driving out parasprites, scootaloo singing
) so yeah. keep this up 
and i seriously wish i could help you with your picture issues, but the best i can do on photoshop is copy and paste several ducks onto a cannon.
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Hehe, thanks. I do like my characterization, but to be honest, I think my ability to assemble stories is a bit lacking. But hey, it's my debut fic, so we'll see how it goes.
And yeah, I decided not to go for shipping just yet. I don't know who I'd do it with anyway. I honestly love Octavia/Scratch, but after reading things like Allegrezza I can't imagine writing anything but a feeble copy. I simply prefer normal fiction stories such as this.
Hey, no worries. That's about as far as I can go too. I figure if I put some picture like that up people will start to think this is a trollfic
Thanks for the feedback. Makes me feel warm and fuzzy to know that somepony's watching
One chapter per week? LOVE IT.
But seriously, normally when I’m working on a project I go a bit faster than this. I blame the holidays.
Anyway, I’m pretty happy with the fact that there is some actual story element now. A goal for the main character to reach. I suppose I’m making it more about Octavia than Viviola now, too, but I’ll make sure the latter still plays a role.
With that said, any and all comments are appreciated. You know what happens to a member of the Pie family when they feel abandoned.
Ooh nice chapter! I like the direction the story is taking. Some tension has been laid out and a I spy a journey to reach a conclusion! I like!
Keep up the great work, I look forward to the next instalment!
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Hey, thanks! I wasn't quite sure how the direction in which I pushed the story would be taken by the readers, but I'm glad to see at least somepony likes it
Glad you like it, and hopefully the next installment won't be too far in the future from now!
82712 I get the feeling sometimes that you only comment to use the Mustache Spike emote
But thanks! I'm glad
83812 you are almost exactly correct.
its just nice to have emoticons that can express my feelings better than standard :)'s and :('s. but i do comment to tell people how awesome their stories are, as well. 
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Why don't you update the story anymore?