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  • E Trinkets

    In the aftermath of Past Sins, Twilight and Nyx go through the things from Nyx's castle bedchamber
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  • E Winter Bells

    Can Nyx find acceptance with her extended family during Hearth's Warming, or will she find the holiday hymns are filled with nothing but hollow promises?
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  • T A Mug of Hard Cider

    Celestia's thirst for good alcohol leads her to a pair of new drinking buddies
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  • T Drop of Moonshine

    A thousand years is a long time to go without a good, stiff drink
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  • T Into The Depths

    Celestia must brave the depths of her old castle to save Twilight and Luna
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  • E Better Living Through Science and Ponies

    Not all is well in Equestria when a failing portal gun brings Aperture Science to the land of ponies
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  • E Bureaucracy is Magic

    Can Ponyville survive when our favorite six mares have to fill in for the mayor?
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  • E Creeping Darkness

    Alan Wake must write a story where Twilight faces the Darkness of his world to save Equestria
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Blog Posts101

  • 2w, 3d
    Life Pulse & Nevermind

    12 comments · 480 views
  • 8w, 5d
    Ice Bucket Challenge & Game Project Plug

    So, I was challenge by BronyWriter last evening, and so I had to squeeze this fun little bit of brain freeze in during my morning routine as I got ready for work.

    To reiterate from my video, I challenge Blankedmind, Gremlin Grenade, JustAnotherTimeLord, The Illustrious Q.

    The challenge to Kkat has been retracted. She isn't in a position where she can perform the challenge due to a lack of equipment & funds as well as her personal preferences about the internet.

    Also, on  side note, a project I contributed to is back on Kickstarter. Scott Easley's 3x3 Wildstyle Basketball, a mobile street basketball game. If you supported it last time, please go do so again. If you haven't, please go check it out.

    28 comments · 720 views
  • 12w, 18h
    Bronycon Day 2 Plan * Identifying Attire

    Day one was awesome. Met too many people to list off in these few minutes I have to write this. Today looks to be more awesome and my busiest con day since I have all three of my panels today. I'm wearing an Applejack shirt today and blue jeans. Hope to see you around. Best time to catch me is after my panels.

    - Do's and Dont's of Fanfiction - Hall of the Sun - 10:00 to 11:00 AM

    - Worlds Beyond: Crossovers in Fanfiction - Hall of Stars - 1:45 to 2:45 PM

    - Quills and Sofas Hangout - 3:00 - 4:00 PM

    - Shattered Kingdom Game - Hall of Stars - 5:30 to 6:30 PM

    2 comments · 325 views
  • 12w, 1d
    Bronycon Day 1 Plan & Identifying Attire

    So, since there are folks wanting to meet up with me today, here is a rough idea of where I'll be and when. Also, such a late start today. I slept in, but I had a reason. Work made me stay up all night Wednesday to put out a last minute fire.

    0) 12:00 Float around the convention, likely checking out vendor hall

    1) 2:00 - Vendor Hall Shadow Box booth. Someone ordered something Past Sins related and they wanted me to sign it.

    2) 3:00 - 4:00 - I'll chill out at the Quill's and Sofa's room for an hour. Probably the easiest time you'll have finding me.

    If your looking for me today, I'm wearing a gray plaid long sleeve shirt and blue jeans.

    Hope everyone has a wonderful time at Bronycon today and I hope to see several of you around.

    4 comments · 354 views
  • 13w, 14h
    Bronycon, Shattered Kingdoms, & A Plug for a New Past Sins Movie Project

    Bronycon looms just next week, and I look forward to the fact I once again get to attend this year. So I hope to see lots of friends and to meet anyone new. One person asked in e-mail if I'd be willing to sign his/her copy of Past Sins while I'm there. I'm totally cool with doing that for anyone that asks, just be sure to have a pen since there is no guarantee I'll remember to have one.

    As to Bronycon itself, I get to be on three panels this year. The last one I'll speak about in greater length, but the first two are writing panels. I'll be returning properly to the panel I kind of snuck onto last year, the Do's and Don't of Fanfiction. I'll also be on the Worlds Beyond: Crossovers in Fanfiction panel, both on Saturday. In fact, all three of my panels are on Saturday this year it would seem. It makes for a very interesting day.

    Now, as for the last panel, it is for a project I've been contributing to as a partial-writer as well as a story adviser. That project is "Shattered Kingdoms" and I'll be on the panel with several other members of the development team. Shattered Kingdoms is a game project that has been going on for several months now. The team lead, Gremlin Grenade, has a blog post from Fiesta Equestria last year that tells a lot more about the project then I can really fit into such a multi-purpose blogpost.

    Now not only is the development team having a panel this year, but there will be a live demo of the game available to play. I believe it will be in the Baltimare Arcade room, since it's the only electronic game room I'm aware of, but I'm sure Gremline Grenade will post up a blog soon with more information on what the demo will contain and verify where it can be played.

    Also, the team is looking for more writers to fill out its ranks and to ensure the story is as polished and properly complex as possible. So if you have any interest, drop Gremlin Grenade or come see us at our panel. The time and place are below, along with the time and place of my other two panels.

    - Do's and Dont's of Fanfiction - Hall of the Sun - 10:00 to 11:00 AM

    - Worlds Beyond: Crossovers in Fanfiction - Hall of Stars - 1:45 to 2:45 PM

    - Shattered Kingdom Game - Hall of Stars - 5:30 to 6:30 PM

    Again, I hope to see a lot of you there, and I'll see if I can't do something to make myself easily identifiable. (Besides the fact I basically wear the same outfits to every convention :P. Saturday I'll be sure to save my Applejack shirt and red, plaid short-sleeve button-down shirt.)

    And to wrap up this blog post, a commenter on Past Sins point out a new animation project that is starting to get underway. Someone new has begun a project to make Past Sins into an animated feature. It takes a lot of effort for someone to get far enough to even have a teaser trailer for something like this, so go give these guys some love and get hyped. (Especially because their design for Night Stone Castle looks pretty amazing!)

    TLDR version:

    - Going to Bronycon

    - I'm on three panels (check the list above for times and locations)

    - I'm a member of the Shattered Kingdom's dev team

    - We're having a panel and live demos at Bronycon

    - We're looking for writers, contact Gremlin Grenade.

    - Watch the video above for a Past Sins Movie Teaser Trailer, and give the creators some love.

    EDIT: To clarify some misconceptions in the comments, I am not doing the movie. Just giving a plug to the guys/gals who are.

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Rarity returns to Ponyville from a business vacation in the camel homeland, bringing gifts for all her friends. Amongst the souvenirs, Fluttershy receives is a beautiful, blue bottle. Yet, upon taking the bottle home, she quickly discovers it contains something magical: a genie.

How will Fluttershy use the three near-limitless wishes she has been given, and why does this feline genie's smile seem to mask more than it reveals?

Written to be somewhat episode like. Was apart of the FimFiction LOEG Story Swap of August 2012. Originally appeared on Ninestempest's account

First Published
4th Aug 2012
Last Modified
4th Aug 2012
#1 · 116w, 1d ago · · ·

hurrah for second non - shipping story :twilightsmile:

#2 · 115w, 5d ago · · ·

And it was secretly a Pen Stroke story the whole time. :pinkiegasp:

Well played, gentlecolts. :moustache:

#3 · 115w, 5d ago · · ·

hmmm intedesting

#4 · 115w, 4d ago · · ·

Still think they should make this more then a one time thing it's a great idea.

-delves into reading-

also YAY penstroke.

#5 · 115w, 4d ago · · ·

Oh boy, gonna get critical up in here.

This was the same story that every story about a genie has been. Protagonist makes a wish or two, wishes get twisted, use up the last wish to turn everything back to normal. You also fell into the same trap many other writers (including the staff of FiM itself) have fallen into concerning Fluttershy: trying to make her stop being such a pushover, even though they've proven several times that she's past it oh wait we need another episode lets just backtrack her character development, shall we? :fluttershysad:

To be fair though, the story was well written. It was just... stale.

Also, and this is just a personal nitpick, why does everyone assume that one bad show completely ruined Trixie's career?

#6 · 115w, 4d ago · · ·

Uh-oh. Trixie If Harmony or the sun, do NOT wish to switch places with Twilight (though that might be interesting:pinkiehappy:) or anything that could compromise her current existence!!!

JAG
#7 · 115w, 4d ago · · ·

Not bad. A little predictable, but a fun read anyway.

#8 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

Love it!

#9 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

I truly did enjoy this story as it was almost like an episode from the show itself. Good work upon such a novel idea.:yay:

#10 · 113w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

“All I got to do is rub some of this dirt off.”

..and then shenanigans ensued. :derpytongue2:

#11 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

For something that was allegedly proof-read by numerous people, there were quite a few mistakes such as the following:

"Do you want two want to come?"

Use of the phrase "in her magic" instead of "with her magic" is awkward.

... and crap I can't remember where the others were. I want to say I spotted about five such errors.

Also, as has been pointed out, this has a very predictable plot line. The Rainbow Dash courage thing was a nice twist, but it wasn't enough to spice up a tired plot line imo. This story definitely shows that you have talent, but I just don't care for it.

#12 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

This story has got me thinking of writing a crossover about the girls meeting another trickester "cat" from a different world... A white one with red markings and way too many lives.

#13 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1117259

Red and white markigns... I can't say I know the reference. The first white and red animals that come to my mind are Okami and the cast of deity animls from that game.

#14 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

Great story. But the proofreaders and editors missed one thing:

"Yet the sound of breaking class never came."

Class should be glass.

#15 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

that ending...:twilightoops:

#16 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

That butterfly part was a spongebob reference wasn't it?:rainbowkiss:

#17 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1117501

Cloud's referring to the anime "Mahou Shoujo Madoka Magica", in which there is a cat-like being that grants wishes with *major* strings attached.

As for this story, I'll have to take a look at it sometime. Always been a fan of your work. :yay:

#18 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

“All I got to do is rub some of this dirt off.”

We need a new one for Trixie I would LOVE to see what she would wish for.

#19 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1117501

Kyubey from Puella Magi.

He had a way of twisting your words and wishes until you regretted existing... And the moment that regret filled your heart, something tragic would begin.

Your genie reminded me of him greatly.

Edit: Dr Freemare got it!

#20 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

QUICK SOMEBODY SHOOT TRIXIE

#21 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

Every time.

This is one of those things. The third wish is the one that undoes the first two.

Brilliant tale.

#22 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

Trixie's wish:

1. Turn into an alicorn

2. World Domination

3. Three more wishes

:rainbowlaugh:

#23 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1120955

Technically, it didn't undo the second one. :scootangel:

#24 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1121988

Quiet you.:twilightangry2:

#25 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

Discord would be involved in genies.

Oh, and the Trixie-tease ending? Perfect. Kudos!

Fluttershy can often be hard to write properly, I find, but you handle things very well here.

#26 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

Hmm... Camels, Dromedor... isn't it from Where the World Ends?

#27 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1122142

It may very well be. I did't look at it anywhere else, but at the same time I wouldn't be surprised if someone else came up with the idea.

#28 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

great story but 1 problem...I can't get the image of belly dancing camels out of my head :raritydespair:

But seriously it was a good:twilightsmile:

#29 · 113w, 5d ago · · ·

if you do a sequel with Trixie, could you please please please please please please PLEASE not portray her as an egomaniac? Not such a huge one maybe? :fluttershysad:

#30 · 113w, 4d ago · · ·

Second wish: wish to undo the first one.

Third wish: wish for the genie to always interpret a Master's wishes, including this one, as the Master intends.

#31 · 113w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1122722 I've been meaning to ask: How did you feel about CardsLafter trying to seduce you?

#32 · 113w, 2d ago · · ·

If Trixie is supposed to be a jerk victim here, I don't feel it, consider these genies don't believe in comeuppance, they believe in torture! I don't know why you chose to include the stinger. The story was perfectly good as a stand alone without a faux sequel hook. You told a good and clever story. Interesting that the bottle FORCES the genie to grant the wish no matter what. Why would Discord include that?  You think REJECTING a wish they couldn't betray would be practical.

#33 · 113w, 1d ago · · ·

This was the first pony fanfiction I'd ever read and it was fantastic! It feels just like an episode with the characters staying true to who they are. I definitely recommend this to everyone! :pinkiehappy:

#34 · 112w, 6d ago · · ·

A very enjoyable read. Truly episode-like, if a bit dark near the end. The concept itself isn't very original, but the way you executed it--masterpiece.

Genie from a Camel homeland. Brilliant. :twilightsmile:

>>1152917

Let me warn you now: staying here longer, you're bound to read some canon shattering and/or mind-blowing stories sooner or later. No one leaves FimFiction unchanged. :trollestia:

#35 · 112w, 3d ago · · ·

This better be an episode eventually. :flutterrage:

#36 · 111w, 6d ago · · ·

Allright! Be careful what you wish for story AND a nice ending that leaves an opening for a sequel? :pinkiehappy:

#37 · 111w, 6d ago · · ·

Good, but not great. The basic plotline has been done to death many times and this failed to bring up any truly novel twists on the old idea. Still, it was an enjoyable read. I really liked the part with Dash defending Fluttershy in spite of her being terrified. To quote some really wise person (Internet gives many conflicting attributions):

Courage is not the absence of fear, but rather the judgment that something else is more important than fear.

I have to echo one of the posters above and say that for a story with so many pre-readers it had an inexcusably high number of mistakes.

#38 · 111w, 5d ago · · ·

It's very ironic when you think about it.

Genie make a living out of twisting language into completely absurd deliberate misinterpretations.

But this time the genie got screwed over by a GENUINE misinterpretation within her misinterpretation!

The genie didn't understand that courage isn't the lack of fear, but acting in SPITE of fear. So the genie thought she was granting the twisted version of Shy's wish, NOT by removing the courage of her friends, but by super amping up their fear! So Dash still had her courage underneath that mountain of fear the genie gave her.

So for once the genie screwed herself over.

Interesting don't you think?

#39 · 111w, 11h ago · · ·

Stellar storytelling. This could easily be an episode.

#40 · 110w, 4d ago · · ·

:pinkiegasp::twilightoops: O ye alicorns and little green apples...  Equestria dodged a bullet with this one.  I'm very glad that Flutterrage :flutterrage: saved the day.  I was wanting to borrow Arthur Arcturus' cane and give that "pseudocat" a beatdown like nothing it or Discord had ever known.  :flutterrage::rainbowdetermined2::twilightangry2::ajbemused:  Excellent storytelling skills, Pen Stroke... The ending was a little too close to Butterfly Effect for my peace of mind, but thankfully you cannot erase who a pony is by spackling fear over the top of what's already in their souls. (Element of Loyalty and Beware the Nice Ones FTW!) :pinkiehappy:Now if they can just convince Trixie to put that darned box back where she found it--or better yet, as they find these brassafracken "vessels", have Luna collect them all and teleport them to the moon...! *rolls eyes*  

#41 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

Overall I applaud this story. While it is a generic genie story, you did add your own flair and it worked very well. Well done sir

One slight critique I have is the suggestion to revise this paragraph where Fahima describes the effects of Fluttershy's 1st wish

“But you did,” Fahima said coolly. She strode closer to Fluttershy, beginning to circle her. “Across the world, creatures are suffering because of you. You took away the courage soldiers need to stand their ground, and thus monsters are free to run wild. You took away the bravery of firefighters and police officers. There is no one courageous enough to put out fires. There is no one courageous enough to stop criminals. Doctors are not performing life saving surgeries because they are to scared they may make a mistake.”

If all sentient beings are cowards there should be no wars and all 'monsters' should be just as scared as the rest, so soldiers have no need to stand their ground. Same goes for criminals. However the other effects are good :)

also, I have found my favourite FIMfic writer. After this, Past Sins and Creeping Darkness there is no doubt. You have serious talent :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#42 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1312984

Fahima, at this point, is really trying to trick Fluttershy into making a wish she'll regret, so providing her with only selective information makes sense. You point is valid, but Fluttershy doesn't need to know that. :pinkiecrazy:

#43 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1313805

That's a good point. Keep up the good work.

Also, it's doubtful I know, but will you be signing the Past Sins hardbacks?

#44 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1313832

Unfortunately, the mass shipping isn't happening anywhere near me. Thus, there's no real way I could sign all the copies. I'll gladly sign any copy, but the book and its owner has to get me first.

#45 · 109w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1313893

It was wishful thinking :)

#46 · 108w, 4d ago · · ·

I knew that ending was coming. It is Pen Stroke after all. :rainbowlaugh:

#47 · 108w, 3d ago · · ·

“Bu all of you were egging her on!” Twilight said.

I think you mean "But"

#48 · 99w, 5d ago · · ·

Fluttershy should have consulted an attorney first...

#49 · 98w, 6d ago · · ·

Dat ending.

#50 · 94w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Damn. This could totally be an episode.

And it needs to be.

Luna needs more screen time darn it.

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