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Welp, featured box ahoy.
inb4 new fanon ship.
Feature it! I demand it! Have a favorite and a thumb.
Title and fic elements were inspired by George Harrison song: Something from the Abbey Road album.
Excellent job on the story, and based on such a great song. Definitely one of the Beatles best songs, and certainly one of Mr. George Harrison's finest.
959453
Coming from you, that is the best news anyone can have.
EVER.
Wow.
I read this because of the desc.
No regrets.
I loved it.
As long as you kick FU's adult-humor comedies out of the featured box, I'm behind this story all the way! Love it! Favorited!
You can't simply let this be a oneshot!
No!
It's too good! Why must such good things like these be oneshots!
Dammit!
This deserves 7/5 moustaches.
Pretty cool shipping! Love it!
You just broke my two favorite ships... But the story was still awesome. Have a thumbs up!
This is a new story and already it's got 28 thumbs up?! FFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUU--
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Lyra is severely creepin' in that picture haha.
This was excellent!!
There were a few mistakes- not in the editing (impeccable), but in the execution. For one, you didn't really offer a backstory, you only said they were close friends since childhood. Er, foalhood. And, at the beginning, you overused the words night, black, and dark. Dusk, twilight, eventide; atramentous, ebony, inklike, obsidian, onyx, raven, sable; aphotic, caliginous, obfuscous, opaque, and I got that all in two minutes on the internet. But, after the first few paragraphs, the word repetition was managed much better.
While detailed, and within the realms of imaginative possibility, it was a bit fast-paced. Not at a breakneck pace, but not as slaw as I would perhaps like it to be. And, while the kiss was realistic, detailed, and emotionally strong, I've seen it all before. I didn't feel any personal attachment to it, which is a must for emotional moments.
Also, I'd like to point out a missed opportunity here. Lyra Heartstrings, harpist. Octavia, cellist. Harp, cello, both stringed instruments. Maybe instead of being foalhood friends, could they be string quartet bandmates? Then you could have a longer, more detailed story, talking about how and why Lyra and Octavia are that close of friends. Then, this could be the middle chapter, after the exposition of the changes you made to the lives- or, added into their lives (which is a shortcut used by rookies that is not often looked well upon), and then you could continue on because you'd bult a base to jump off from.
However, it was very good as a oneshot fanficiton. Also, I haven't heard of this pairing before. have a
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inb4 shit storm saying lyra belongs with bon-bon
I wish I could say whether or not this was a good story. I have a weird sort of interest in shipping fics because, as crazy as this may sound, romance is a completely foreign concept to me. Reading stories like this is like looking into the mind of some sort of alien. I've never understood the strange behavior people have of pairing themselves up like this.
Reading through the story, I really don't get where Lyra's attraction is coming from. They're certainly very close friends. I have a lot of close friends, but I've never had the urge to make out with them. There's something else going on here. It's like . . . lust? But she's not thinking about Octavia's ass. I don't get it.
Let's talk about this sentence:
"I could spot the drool thread that was connecting our mouths together before it broke."
That's my favorite sentence in the whole story, because it's really freakin' disgusting. Drool thread. I like disgusting things, because I think they're funny. Yet "normal" people seem to find that sort of thing enjoyable in a very "positive" way (if that makes sense).
The structure is odd because it doesn't seem to have much conflict. Conflict is usually the crux of a story because it creates the drama. Romance is one of those weird genres like comedy where the drama is light. Is the conflict is Lyra trying to overcome her shyness?
I can't say if this story is good or not, but it's certainly interesting. I guess that warrants a like.
Came for Beatles, stayed for aww.
1st story I've seen where Lyra and Octavia aren't rivals.
Wow. This reminds me a lot of Black and White. I don't know if you've read it, but this sounds like an alternate timeline. Also, I'm glad I'm not the only one who ships Lyra and Octavia!
Did anyone else immediately get this in their head after reading the description?
awesome
u just gotta love these kind of story's 
Very sweet.
Lyra and octavia?...ya I'm down
I didn't care very much for this story, which I find sad to say because it's not poorly written at all, it just doesn't seem to have much of a point to it. Lyra hasn't seen Bon Bon in awhile (the nature of their relationship is ambiguous at best), Lyra comes to Octavia's recital because they're childhood friends, ogles her for twenty minutes, and then walks up onto stage and kisses her out of the blue. Luckily Octavia doesn't seem to mind and they have sexy-fun-time.
To me it feels like there's a whole other half of a story missing here. What was the nature of Lyra & Bon-Bon's relationship? Why did she leave? How did each of them feel about her leaving? Has Lyra always loved Octavia romantically, or was this recent? Did Octavia know about her feelings before she invited her, did she even have them earlier than Lyra? Did Octavia even bother going to her concert afterwards, or did she just blow off the whole thing to make out with her new marefriend?
A little more fleshing out of details would have gone a long way here.
worth it for the fucking song. but it's a good story too
Short and sweet... I loved it!
i like this. it's really sweet and sincere and it works too. plus it's a pleasant surprise because both these characters are normally only shipped with the one character
Hmmm... I could get used to this.
Please, continue.
This was great, plus I've been hoping to find stories that ship the background 6 ponies with each other, other than the 3 common ships, I hope to find more stories like this