Fluttershy Visits the Zoo

Fluttershy and Angel go on one of their weekly zoo visits.

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Bloodpool

Bloodpool #1 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

I can certianly see fluttershy being some kind of animal rights activist. It makes sense somehow. Anyway, good story.
Might want to sort out your spacing though, as a wall of text can put some people off.

TwilightsmyMare

TwilightsmyMare #2 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

Oh Shy you rascal you.

JKinsley

JKinsley #3 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

Good work, Starman! A few chuckles all around. I had no idea Fluttershy was so... militant in her goal of helping animals.

NotABrony1

NotABrony1 #4 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

I always wanted to do this at those really lame zoos that have cages that are 9999 times smaller than they should be, so I guess I'm on Fluttershy's side here Except for knocking a zookeeper unconcious

ChillzMaster

ChillzMaster #5 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

Oh Fluttershy, you so silly.

Oh, and that third paragraph went from charmingly cute to absurdly creepy in .5 seconds. Absolutely perfect

TheBaraclough

TheBaraclough #6 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

I'm usually not a huge fan of extreme animal activists but having Fluttershy be one was hilarious and strangely fitting. Only criticism I have is that you probably should have another line of blank space between most all the paragraphs before the scene change to Fluttershy's cottage. It just seems a little bit jarring to my eyes but that might just be because I'm used to double spacing on all of my college papers. It could definitely be worse and just be a wall of text but I just wanted to share my two bits . Keep up the good work !

PatRoison

PatRoison #7 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

Oh Fluttershy. Cutest activist ever.

flyingcloudcakes

flyingcloudcakes #8 · Jul 23rd, 2012 · · ·

Oh my Luna, that was brilliant. I went from, "Lalala, Fluttershy's off to the zoo, how cute," to "...wait, wut?" and then hysterical laughter was had all around. You, my friend, deserve a Pinkie clap.

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