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    Ever since a particular violet librarian came into town, you have become used to the occasional injury. However, recently it seems like the hospital has become your second home. Why is this? Well the reason is none other than a particular mail mare that has caught your eye. Unfortunately every time you try so much as even just say hello to her you end up caught in some crazy accident. The most recent of which has put you in the hospital for three days.

    What's worse is that the string of injuries have kept you out of work, and pushed you to near poverty.

    Will you ever get out of this string of bad luck, and will you ever get to speak to this somewhat clutzy mare that has garnered your attention?


    This is my first second person fic, trying it out after spending so much time on my HiE fic. Picture borrowed from mahaugher found here http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=&section=&global=1&q=mailmare+derpy#/d4s6e1c

    First Published
    26th Jul 2012
    Last Modified
    5th Sep 2012

    Comments ( 8 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 43w, 22m ago · · ·
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    Meh.:twilightblush:

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 43w, 13m ago · · ·
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    If you don't have one already, a betareader would really help you.

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 43w, 13m ago · · ·
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    Sounds like this could be fun

    Bty a fact youa fact you

    should no well

    KNOWN :facehoof:

    That aside keep it ul:pinkiehappy:

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 43w, 12m ago · · ·
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    Enjoyable indeed, but it just ENDS.  There's no buildup to the chapter conclusion... it's just over.  For future reference give a clear stopping point, but also make it a bridge to lead into the next chapter.

    Still, I like the "narrated" style and look forward to more :raritywink:

    #5 · Chapter 5 · 36w, 6d ago · · ·
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    cool an update:pinkiehappy:

    #6 · Chapter 5 · 30w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Update this  :D

    #7 · Chapter 5 · 30w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1462513

    I wish I could, but between managing a youtube channel, my two main fics, a contest fic I'm working on. And my University studies. I'm struggling :D.

    #8 · Chapter 5 · 30w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1462513

    glad you enjoy it though :D

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