Well, here it is, the sequel is up. Let me know what you think of it please, any advice would do wonders.

First? And first viewer! Sweet!

I'll  be sure to read this later.

I dunno, conspiring against Twi like that... doesn't seem like the best way to handle her problem. BTW, loved the first part and I can tell this is going to be just as good or maybe even better!

Interesting start, and well written. I just saw this one little thing;

“Well, is Twilight okay? I mean, you seemed worry about it last night?”

I'm looking forward to the next chapter

Oooh, goodie.  Finally here...and well worth the wait.  You're off to an excellent start setting things up and building on the loose ends that you left hanging in Post Nuptuals.  This is gonna be a good read.  I still love your characterizations of the cast--true to form, while at the same time expanding on it in ways that make sense.

Found a typo for ya!

"Still, Big Macintosh was there, ready to help her sister haul home the leftovers from the wedding. " <--should be his?

Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

OH god yes

This is looking really good, I look forward to more.

Also did you mean The two bakers gave each other a glance before turning back to their foster daughter. Instead of The two bakers glanced at each other a glance before turning back to their foster daughter.

This sequel is off to a great start. I like the tiny details you have added to each scene, it really adds to the level of immersion this story has. By picking up almost immediately after Post Nuptials you were able to segue nicely into this story and were able to bring immediate attention to the major plot points.

While bringing attention to them in the first chapter would likely be a mistake in most stories it works well in others, especially ones like this. If one were to pull that sort of stunt in an epic length story it would be a big mistake as most would likely forget about them  quickly, but in a smaller story like this, and assuming that it is likely to stick at least somewhat close to PN in terms of formatting and chapter pacing, it should work out rather well.

Another point in this story's favor is that pretty much every plot point is character based, which adds a great deal of depth to the characters themselves and makes them feel more ... natural for lack of a better term. Furthermore at least two of the plot points, Pinkie and Scootaloo respectively, are very good opportunities for further world building.

I eagerly await the next chapter.

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Woohoo! It's here! Been looking forward to this, was a bit concerned when I noticed that Soarin's tag wasn't there, but at least he was mentioned.

A great start! I look forward to seeing what happens next.

Inb4 featured.

Now lets delve into the goodness.....

I would so love to see this:

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This is a sequel to something? O.o

That explains a bit. I just caught one thing-

Shaking at the fact that

I think you mean shaking her head, but you may be right.

>>958989958989 We all would.

And of courser we all can't to see Pinkie Pie and Scootaloo deal with their personal demons.

>>959080959080

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Just hope this isn't what's happening to Scoots...

>>959086959086 Scootabuse? Well let's hope not!

I am grinning so hard right now. Can't wait for next chapter!

So happy right now that the sequel has finally arrived.

First chapter was great. It set the tone and the different story-lines.

I eagerly await the next update.

The sequel is off to a great start. What will happen? Will they have to deal with the Changelings and Discord?

i saw this in the feature box and didn't even realize that it was a sequal to post nuptuals until i started reading. which by the way makes this 20% cooler

>>959086959086 if this does happen to be the case it will probably take and to keep from beating which ever pony is abusing to within an inch of their lives. and that is only if they dont know why RD is suddenly so violent

Awesome! I loved Post Nuptials and I'm really eager to see just where this story will go. I especially like the Rainbow Dash angle with Scootaloo and Soarin' from Post Nuptials. The Spike one is pretty deep.

Hm. I don't know why but something about Rarity's conversation with Applejack just doesn't sit right with me. Aside from going behind Twilight's back, it's RARITY commenting about how Twilight can overreact. Yeaaah. Wish I had an icon of a teapot and a kettle, both pitch black. Not that Twilight's...zealousness can't be a problem, it is. But that's not something you can fix short of time and effort. Therapy maybe...not that I think Twi is mentally unwell or anything, but talking about your problems really can do wonders for them. As it stands I feel like Rarity and AJ are looking for some quick fix, like--I don't know--deciding that they're going to try to hide or sugarcoat things in front of her to prevent a future freak out instead of just talking with her like mature, rational individuals. I love this story and I am really eager to see what you have in mind for this.

I like this so far. I'll be keeping an eye on it.

I liked this a lot.  but why would Dash bring up her date next week so out of the blue?

The long awaited sequel to 'Post Nuptials.'  I was so looking forward to this.  BTW:

"Um, I better get home and make sure Derpy has taken good care of Angel and the others,” Fluttershy said.

Wasn't Derpy at the wedding?

I hope there is some Soarin' in this story. I love it so far.

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I discovered Post Nupitals today and finished it in the same day. I checked your other stories, and was disappointed to see that there was no sequel. And what do I see in the featured box a few hours later? THE SEQUEL!!! Do you read my mind???

*Deep breaths* *Dies of joy*

sweet

A few typos, but overall an intriguing start that brings over several key points from the first story.

I'm liking where this story is going so far.   The part with Pinkie kinda brings up a question that is a reference to PONY.MOV series:  DID Pinkie Pie's father make her put glass in her vajay-jay?

Excellent. Just a few grammatical errors and such but I think everyone else got them covered already.

I'm excited to see how the situation(s) develops.

Favourited before I even read the first chapter.

Was not disappointed, I'm looking forward to the next chapter with large amounts of enthusiasm.

Sequal!  Awesome!

This is a good start!

However, while I can imagine that Rarity might be a bit self-blind and not saying something like "I have a tendency to overreact myself, but...", it feels weird that Applejack doesn't at least call out Rarity for being the bot that calls the kettle black, even if that would simply mean that Rarity explains how she feels her behaviour is different than Twilight's.

Yes! The sequel is up!

By the way, there's a missing word here:

Rainbow Dash sighed. She knew the younger pegasus was looking for an excuse to say no. “Look, think about will you?”

Featured already huh? That was appropriately quick for this story.

Seems good, I will read this later.

Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

As I see it, Twilight's problem is that she's compelled to solve problems that come to her attention, and cannot quit on them.  (the only instances where she has quit actually reinforce this...  The first was the "doozy" that Pinkie predicted, i.e. Something that she never would expect in a million years, and the second was the moment when Twilight betrayed her true nature as a result of Discord and turned grey, giving up on her friends.)  When her every effort to solve a problem is inexplicably thwarted, then her frustration levels rise but she doesn't truly go crazy (see her efforts with Pinkie Sense and Parasprites).  However, when her problem solving instinct is triggered and yet she cannot find the problem to act upon, that is when she becomes unhinged (Lesson Zero and It's About Time.)  

She needs to plan out a course of action and act upon it, otherwise she can't cope.  That's why she's awesome in a real crisis... She's hardwired to deal with them, and won't stop until it's dealt with.  If she gets wound up without a problem to solve, however, then she has no release and meltdown occurs.  

Seemingly up to the high standards you've set for yourself. I'll be interested in seeing where you take it... especially Twi/Spike's situation. My guess is that Spike saw how happy Cadenza and Shiny were, and now he wants Twilight to feel the same... to have the same in her life... something that she can't accomplish if she has a baby dragon draped over her all the time, so he's starting to distance himself.

Just my guess. Looking forward to where you go with it.

Soooo happy the sequel is up!

Obligatory:

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Great job so far, loved PN, excited for this!

At the moment I sadly don't know what advise to give you on your writing. I just know I love your characterizations, and form. I'll eagerly await the next chapter! Good start!

Panic Attack - Dream Theater

LOVED post nuptials, and loving this so far too!

Please update soon!

>>958781958781, >>959443959443

They're not conspiring. They will be upfront with her about it, they're just discussing possibilities right now. They didn't let Twilight in on it at the moment because she's preoccupied with Spike and they're expecting that matter to be resolved by tomorrow.

>>958837958837, >>958800958800,  >>958900958900, >>960134960134

Thanks for catching that.

>>958916958916

Thanks for your thoughts.

>>959016959016

Yeah, I really should have had that in the description from the start.

>>959443959443

Your criticisms are noted on the hypocracy. However, they aren't looking for a quick fix. They're looking for a way to help Twilight control herself when she freaks out. The expressly avoid what would be a quick fix. I need to rewrite that scene.

>>959478959478

Because she knows Scoots would want to see him again.

>>959498959498

If she was, she was a background pony and it can really be ignored.

>>959874959874

No. This is an E rated story.

>>960338960338

Interesting analysis...I'll keep that in mind.

>>960436960436

Actually, Spike's reasons for feeling guilty were explained in my last story, Post Nuptials. He feels like mud because he betrayed someone he loved like a mother, and now he's afraid of telling Twilight he sees her as a mother. This is a sequel...probably should have made that clearer in the description.

Please sir, May I have some moar?

Oh yeah, been waiting eagerly for this and I was not disappointed.

Looking forward to chapter two!

SEQUEL TIME!!

And we're off to a good start.  Foundations laid, and mysteries have begun...

Extremely happy to see that the promised (or alluded to?) sequel has made it up here, this is fantastic and it has been instantly favorited and tracked.  Based on what I've seen thus far, I can say without fair certainty that this is going to be another fantastic piece of fanfiction.  

I love it! Absolutly can not wait for the next chapter. I do hope it's up soon.

Strong start. Addressing all the important problems that the characters will face pretty early on. Looking forward to more. And dude, you deserve all the notifications and features.

Sequel to Post Nuptials? Faved before reading!

Part 2. yaaaaaay!!!

Well done. To be honest I favorited and thumbed up the story before I even read the chapter on account of what it was a sequel to. Having now read it I must say that I am not disappointed.

Ahh, I'm glad to see a sequel! Post Nuptials is a story which deserves continuation.

I like how you included the insightful comparison to when Rarity was being short with her friends while making dresses vs. fake Cadance before the wedding.

I am a fan of Post Nuptials, so I'm looking forward to this.

One critique though, at least in my personal opinion - "Applejack sighed. 'You know thinkin’ ain’t my strong suit, Rare. But for Twilight, I’ll try.'”

Ackgpth... that just seems a little clumsy and tacky for me.  The sentence could be slightly changed.  I think that Applejack probably sees herself as a sensible and reasonably intelligent mare - and she is - but perhaps struggles to help with girly emotional stuff.  Or perhaps instead, as a down-to-earth farm mare, she might not immediately know how to help with the stress that ponies like Twilight heap on themselves.  Or perhaps something else insightful that you as the author think up.  Maybe something to fit with the rest of the story.  Just...something.

It's just that...to me, this comes off as Applejack calling herself a dumb pony - and that just doesn't work for me.

Anyways, sorry to spend so much time on that one thing.  It's the only thing that bothered me, really.

The storyline and emotions of it all seem well thought out, and I like your way of expressing both the characters and the emotions.  Keep writing, this story makes me happy

It's here?

It's really here. already?!?!?

AWWWWW YEAHHHHHH!!!!

This is me

I like it and i loved post nuptials but one objection dont go overboard with chapters and dont re use content like post nuptials was amazing but it just felt the same every chapter except with different characters remember to keep it fresh but still amazing

yay

one crit:

Shaking at the fact that they would go uneaten,

Is "her head" missing from that sentence?

One chapter, sixty-one comments.

How I envy you.

Anyway.

Well written, as Pre-Nuptials was. Looking forward to the rest of the tale, will favorite so I can follow it. There's nothing I can say about edits that hasn't already been said, so I won't bother.

Looking forward to it. Good start to a, I'm positive, great tale.

This is great, it's very well written and everyone seems to be in character.

I'm really looking forward to finding out Scootaloo's and Spike's problems.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Tomification.

>>958158958158

You should put up a link to the prequel. [ url= (the url) ] Post Nuptials [ /url ]

It should look like this: Post Nuptials

What's the bet that that isn't Scoots' home?

I'm guessing Spike ran away.

Pinkie getting all serious is not usually a good sign... Best put the twins to bed first Mr. and Mrs. Cake.

I'm somewhat hoping for RariJack shipping but that's just because my mind is never out of the gutter. Trying to avoid getting my hopes up.

This is good quality stuff. Keep it up! I'm looking forward to the rest of it (if you couldn't tell already)!

Good story. I am worried about angsty spike though. And what could Rarity be planning? To use the crude phrase, I want MOAR!!

MOAR plz

>>958916958916

Have I really used that line that much?

Good start, but if I may be frank, I hope more happens than just endless conversation.  This story makes up for that by having some bloody good dialogue and characterization of each and every character, but still, one can only read conversations for so long.

Still a great start, and....

I eagerly await the next chapter.

>>958989958989D'aaawww-HHNNNNG! *Heart and head explodes from sweetness.

>>959086959086

Wow, that is a powerful picture.  *tears falling*

>>964248964248

I just wanna see Twilight holding Spike saying how much she loves him (crying also)

>>964559964559

I wanna see Dash and Scootaloo happy also

I just realized, I may be the first viewer, and first who commented, but I still haven't read the fiction yet. Okay, now I'll read.

Excellent work at the start of this sequel. You get this.

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May the Grace of the Valar Protect You

Shire Folk

>>958781958781 Kind of feels like Mare Do Well all over again? Going behind her back to do what's "best" for her? I can see that.

So many stories, that looks really interesting, i really like this story and i would love it more when it get more chapters   good work

PS: about this:  

“You don’t have to worry, pipsqueak. We’re all friends again, plus Soarin’s going to come into town in a few weeks to take me out on a date.’ OH MY GOD FINALLY SOMEONE MAKE A KIND OF SHIPPING WITH DASHIE AND SOARIN´ i really like to see that she isn't involving in a mare.mare love  

I really really want to read this but no time I'm going to track it anyway

Great start. I was shocked when Scootaloo didn't want to spend time with Rainbow Dash, I thought little Scootaloo would be jumping around all over the place to spend time with her idol. Interesting. . Also the part with Spike starting to become anti-social, man I must know what started it . I'm following this story all the way! Keep it up!

Glad to see this coming out.  Post Nupitals was a great read, and this is just bringing it all back.  One more story for me to eagerly await the next chapters too.  

Hmmm. This story seems worthy enough to be fav'ed by the sayain prince. I await the next chapter.

>>959086959086 I swear to every god that's ever been worshiped if something like that happens I will somehow build a portal to equestria and fucking kill Rainbowdash.

It will be slow...it will be painful...I will use the most disgusting, vile, and horrible torture methods invented by mankind.

She will beg for mercy...she will recieve none.

I will laugh as every bone in her body is broken, then healed, only to be broken again.

I will watch as the very skin is torn from her body.

I will dance to the sound of her screams.

I will drink the blood that falls from her wings as they are ripped apart, one feather at a time.

I will take out her eyes, but still allow them to see, so she can watch as her body is shredded like cheese.

I will take the remains of her lifeless body and feast on them with gusto.

Then, as her crushed, drained soul floats up to salvation, I will reverse what I have done.

I will bring her back, forcing her to endure every punishment in reverse.

I will turn back time itself

I will allow the rest of the cosmos to stay where it is while I turn Rainbowdash into a filly.

I will erase her memory and leave her flightless

Finally, I will watch with tears of joy in my eyes as Rainbowdash learns her lesson by befriending Scootaloo.

Her debt will be repaid.

Her sin will be forgiven.

She will be loved once more.

The End

The Master of Madness, signing off.(With tears in his eyes)

>>967901967901 I'm no psychiatrist or psychologist, but I think it might be maybe possible that you could have a few . . .  issues, my friend.

Madness, indeed.

>>961054961054

Are you sure? it sounds like she scared of him?

Linking it as much as the last one so far.  Though it feels like this chapter cuts off in the middle of Rarity and Applejack's conversation.

Great start! One suggestion:

Applejack arched an eyebrow. “Uh, Rare? You’re thinkin’ Twilight needs to stop freakin’ out?”

Rarity's next line about hypocrisy made me have to go back and reread that line with a different emphasis. I'd throw italics in there, so it reads more like this:

Applejack arched an eyebrow. “Uh, Rare? You’re thinkin’ Twilight needs to stop freakin’ out?”

Just an idea....

Excellent, been looking forward to this sequel. I will enjoy reading this, thank you

Great! Liked and favorited!  You get a !

Keep up the good work.

If this is even half as good as Post, this'll be really good. Can't wait to read more.

>>968463968463

I will not deny the fact that there is something wrong with me. I have problems, yes but I am not insane. Mabye a little crazy.

You know, the odd/funny thing is that as I started to write my last comment, rainbow factory started playing on my ipod.

RANDOM POEM

Siren Song of The Damned

Hush now, don't say another goddamn word

Up until now I've been polite

If you say anything else, one word, I will kill myself

And when my tainted finds its destination, I will topple the master of that dark place

From my black throne, I will lash together a machine of bone and blood, fueled by my hatred for you

This, fear engine, will bore a hole between this world and that one

When it begins, you will hear the sound of children screaming, as though from a great distance

A smoking ord of nothing will grow above your head, and from will emerge one-thousand starving crows

As I slip through the widening maw in my new form, you will catch only a glimpse of my radiance before you are incinerated

Then, as tears of bubbling pitch sream down my face, my dark work will begin

I will open one of my six mouths, and I will sing the song that ends the earth

If you like it, tell me. If not, then I'll just have to have a talk with the guild of assasins.

Sleep tight, don't let the slendermen bite...

The Master of Madness, signing off.

It's starting to become easier to appreciate not getting featured when I think of having to read through 80 some comments in two days.

Anyways, I just wanna say that Spike should be proud. "Since then it had experienced visits from Nightmare Moon and Discord, and Spike’s rampage added to the list." He's on the fucking list of bad assery. That's equivalent to winning the lottery as a force of destruction. GO SPIKE!

After commenting on Post Nuptialis, after reading this one you have made me a zombie.

But i do not starve for the taste of brains, since my only reason to live now is:

MOAR!

Nice set up and start. Good to see people deciding to help Twilight. Can't wait to see more!

>>960338960338

I would agree, though there are two factors I don't think you are accounting for: Princess Celestia and the time left to finish the task.

The two biggest ''freak outs'' Twilight has experienced would be the Parasprite Incident and Lesson Zero. Pinkie Sense? That seemed more intense studying than a breakdown, with Miss Logic and Rules accepting that not everything has a clear-cut answer. Discord? That was depression over losing her five best friends (much like the sadness she initially felt at the end of S1E2.) Looking at the Parisprite and Lesson Zero, each had two common denominators: Making a good appearance to Princess Celestia, and the full blown ''freak out'' happening when time is almost out to complete the former.

while reading this and the prequel i was listening to Gold and Oden ( One pice OST )

I nearly cried, for me that's a big thing.  

>>973211973211

I agree that those are factors, but as long as she has a plan in place she actually copes quite well.  She's undoubtedly nervous and anal when Celestia's approval is on the line, but she's not delusional or making poor judgements.  She was confident and fine all through "Swarm of the Century" until Celestia was literally less than a minute away, and even then her little bout of crazy lasted all of 15 seconds while she outlined her unworkable "rebuild Ponyville right over there" plan before she returned to normal, sighed dejectedly and said "Zecora was right... we're doomed."  So despite the stress of wanting everything to be perfect for Celestia *and* an actual problem to deal with she didn't really become unhinged all throughout the ordeal, and when faced with failure ultimately just cast about desperately for a new plan which even she recognized as silly right after she said it.

I compare that to "Lesson Zero" and "It's About Time" where she makes progressively worse decisions from an early point in things onwards, eventually turning nothing into a crisis, and to me the obvious connection between those two plotlines is that she never is able to identify a problem to solve in these episodes despite desperately searching for one.  Problems she can deal with, no matter the stakes... be it for Celestia's approval or the very survival of Equestria (and I agree, she seems to place about equal weight on each.)  

However, she can't make a plan if she can't identify the problem, and plans are what give her confidence.  She is all about the plan... she meticulously schedules out everything, she makes checklists for every task... planning is how she functions.  She's a great leader in a crisis because she can always come up with a plan to deal with a problem.  When things deviate from the plan, she can handle it... she just forms a new plan and everything goes back to making sense.  But when she can't make a plan to solve the problem because she can't identify it, then she seems to totally lose her grip.

As for the incidents with Discord and Pinkie Sense, I mainly brought those up to illustrate how the writers have pretty much stated that it's completely against her nature to give up.  A normal person (pony) when faced with no obvious course of action would be able to let things go and just wait for one to present itself.  She's locked into having to do *something* about it, even when there's nothing to do, which is what makes for the tragic meltdown scenarios above.

Cool story brony.

Excellent story. I'm looking forward to seeing how these problems resolve. And hoping for some D'awwwww moments with Spike/Twilight, and Rainbow/Scoots.

>>971469971469 I do enjoy a morbid poem now and again. And I'm not saying that because of the threat of possible assassination. Did you come up with that?

And for the record, I said issues, not problems. Nothing is wrong with a touch of insanity here and there.

Loved it,ant wait for the next chapter !

OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH!!

Sequel to Post Nuptials!?!

I actually read that story today and finished it the same day, Im glad that there's a sequel coming up

I have to see where this is going, especially with Spike

I loved the first story, and the sequal is already shaping up to be just as awesome! Please, sir, i want some moar!