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Darth Link 22

Joined April 2012
1,382 followers

I'm a mysterious man with a large Viewer list, despite being very self critical of my work. Looking to write professionally someday.

Sequels

  • Direction
    The Mane Six have to work to save Equestria... without Twilight

    20,055 words · 3,149 views · 391 likes · 13 dislikes

Stories (7)

  • About Last Night
    A night of drinking turns into weeks of...interesting antics.

    45,871 words · 18,514 views · 2,290 likes · 51 dislikes
  • Post Nuptials
    The wedding might be over, but emotions are still running high for many that were involved.
    33,259 words · 21,902 views · 1,895 likes · 44 dislikes
  • Families
    Spike and Scootaloo are acting strange, and Twilight and Rainbow Dash are going to find out why.
    88,134 words · 17,508 views · 1,928 likes · 51 dislikes
  • Honeymoon
    A quick peek at Shining Armor and Cadence after their wedding.
    2,785 words · 4,672 views · 383 likes · 11 dislikes
  • Direction
    20,055 words · 3,149 views · 391 likes · 13 dislikes
  • Metamorphosis
    6,392 words · 5,993 views · 192 likes · 9 dislikes
  • Wedding Bell Blues
    15,387 words · 9,661 views · 753 likes · 52 dislikes

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This story is a sequel to Post Nuptials

In the aftermath of the wedding, Spike is bitter and avoiding everyone. Twilight's determined to find out what's bothering her charge, but she walks a very fine line when dealing with an emotionally distraught child.

Meanwhile, Rainbow Dash suspects something's wrong with Scootaloo, so she starts spending more time with her in hopes of picking the secret from her brain. As she begins to truly mentor the young filly for the first time ever, she begins to see the advantages to having a little sister.

And while all this is going on, Pinkie is struggling with some old family issues that have been brought to the surface, meaning she might have to confront her past at last.

Art by Conicer

First Published
23rd Jul 2012
Last Modified
30th Aug 2013

Comments ( 3,384 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 1d ago · · ·

Well, here it is, the sequel is up. Let me know what you think of it please, any advice would do wonders.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 22h ago · · ·

First? And first viewer! Sweet!

#3 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 22h ago · · ·

I'll  be sure to read this later.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 22h ago · · ·

I dunno, conspiring against Twi like that... doesn't seem like the best way to handle her problem. BTW, loved the first part and I can tell this is going to be just as good or maybe even better!

#5 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 22h ago · · ·

Interesting start, and well written. I just saw this one little thing;

“Well, is Twilight okay? I mean, you seemed worry about it last night?”

I'm looking forward to the next chapter :yay:

#6 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 22h ago · · ·

Oooh, goodie.  Finally here...and well worth the wait.  You're off to an excellent start setting things up and building on the loose ends that you left hanging in Post Nuptuals.  This is gonna be a good read.  I still love your characterizations of the cast--true to form, while at the same time expanding on it in ways that make sense.

Found a typo for ya!

"Still, Big Macintosh was there, ready to help her sister haul home the leftovers from the wedding. " <--should be his?

Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

#7 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

OH god yes

#8 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

This is looking really good, I look forward to more.

Also did you mean The two bakers gave each other a glance before turning back to their foster daughter. Instead of The two bakers glanced at each other a glance before turning back to their foster daughter.

#9 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

This sequel is off to a great start. I like the tiny details you have added to each scene, it really adds to the level of immersion this story has. By picking up almost immediately after Post Nuptials you were able to segue nicely into this story and were able to bring immediate attention to the major plot points.

While bringing attention to them in the first chapter would likely be a mistake in most stories it works well in others, especially ones like this. If one were to pull that sort of stunt in an epic length story it would be a big mistake as most would likely forget about them  quickly, but in a smaller story like this, and assuming that it is likely to stick at least somewhat close to PN in terms of formatting and chapter pacing, it should work out rather well.

Another point in this story's favor is that pretty much every plot point is character based, which adds a great deal of depth to the characters themselves and makes them feel more ... natural for lack of a better term. Furthermore at least two of the plot points, Pinkie and Scootaloo respectively, are very good opportunities for further world building.

I eagerly await the next chapter.

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#10 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

Woohoo! It's here! Been looking forward to this, was a bit concerned when I noticed that Soarin's tag wasn't there, but at least he was mentioned.

#11 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

A great start! I look forward to seeing what happens next.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

Inb4 featured.

Now lets delve into the goodness.....:pinkiecrazy:

#14 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

This is a sequel to something? O.o

That explains a bit. I just caught one thing-

Shaking at the fact that

I think you mean shaking her head, but you may be right.

#15 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

>>958989 We all would. :heart:

And of courser we all can't to see Pinkie Pie and Scootaloo deal with their personal demons. :pinkiehappy: :scootangel:

#17 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

>>959086 Scootabuse? Well let's hope not! :fluttercry:

#18 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

I am grinning so hard right now. Can't wait for next chapter!

#19 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 21h ago · · ·

So happy right now that the sequel has finally arrived.

First chapter was great. It set the tone and the different story-lines.

I eagerly await the next update.

#20 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 20h ago · · ·

The sequel is off to a great start. What will happen? Will they have to deal with the Changelings and Discord?

#21 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 20h ago · · ·

i saw this in the feature box and didn't even realize that it was a sequal to post nuptuals until i started reading. which by the way makes this 20% cooler

>>959086 if this does happen to be the case it will probably take :ajbemused::fluttershysad::pinkiesad2::duck: and:twilightangry2: to keep :rainbowdetermined2: from beating which ever pony is abusing :scootangel: to within an inch of their lives. and that is only if they dont know why RD is suddenly so violent

#22 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 20h ago · · ·

Awesome! I loved Post Nuptials and I'm really eager to see just where this story will go. I especially like the Rainbow Dash angle with Scootaloo and Soarin' from Post Nuptials. The Spike one is pretty deep.

Hm. I don't know why but something about Rarity's conversation with Applejack just doesn't sit right with me. Aside from going behind Twilight's back, it's RARITY commenting about how Twilight can overreact. Yeaaah. Wish I had an icon of a teapot and a kettle, both pitch black. Not that Twilight's...zealousness can't be a problem, it is. But that's not something you can fix short of time and effort. Therapy maybe...not that I think Twi is mentally unwell or anything, but talking about your problems really can do wonders for them. As it stands I feel like Rarity and AJ are looking for some quick fix, like--I don't know--deciding that they're going to try to hide or sugarcoat things in front of her to prevent a future freak out instead of just talking with her like mature, rational individuals. I love this story and I am really eager to see what you have in mind for this.

#23 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 20h ago · · ·

I like this so far. I'll be keeping an eye on it. :trollestia:

#24 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 20h ago · · ·

I liked this a lot.  but why would Dash bring up her date next week so out of the blue?

#25 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 20h ago · · ·

The long awaited sequel to 'Post Nuptials.'  I was so looking forward to this.  BTW:

"Um, I better get home and make sure Derpy has taken good care of Angel and the others,” Fluttershy said.

Wasn't Derpy at the wedding?

#26 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 19h ago · · ·

I hope there is some Soarin' in this story. I love it so far.

#27 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 19h ago · · ·

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I discovered Post Nupitals today and finished it in the same day. I checked your other stories, and was disappointed to see that there was no sequel. And what do I see in the featured box a few hours later? THE SEQUEL!!! Do you read my mind???

*Deep breaths* *Dies of joy*

#28 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 19h ago · · ·

sweet

#29 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 19h ago · · ·

A few typos, but overall an intriguing start that brings over several key points from the first story.

#30 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 18h ago · · ·

I'm liking where this story is going so far.   The part with Pinkie kinda brings up a question that is a reference to PONY.MOV series:  DID Pinkie Pie's father make her put glass in her vajay-jay?

#31 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 18h ago · · ·

Excellent. Just a few grammatical errors and such but I think everyone else got them covered already.

I'm excited to see how the situation(s) develops.

#32 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 18h ago · · ·

Favourited before I even read the first chapter.

Was not disappointed, I'm looking forward to the next chapter with large amounts of enthusiasm.

#33 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 18h ago · · ·

Sequal!:rainbowkiss:  Awesome!:twilightblush:

#34 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 18h ago · · ·

This is a good start!

However, while I can imagine that Rarity might be a bit self-blind and not saying something like "I have a tendency to overreact myself, but...", it feels weird that Applejack doesn't at least call out Rarity for being the bot that calls the kettle black, even if that would simply mean that Rarity explains how she feels her behaviour is different than Twilight's.

#35 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 17h ago · · ·

Yes! The sequel is up! :yay:

By the way, there's a missing word here:

Rainbow Dash sighed. She knew the younger pegasus was looking for an excuse to say no. “Look, think about will you?”

#36 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 17h ago · · ·

Featured already huh? That was appropriately quick for this story.

#37 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 17h ago · · ·

Seems good, I will read this later.

#38 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 16h ago · 1 · ·

Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

As I see it, Twilight's problem is that she's compelled to solve problems that come to her attention, and cannot quit on them.  (the only instances where she has quit actually reinforce this...  The first was the "doozy" that Pinkie predicted, i.e. Something that she never would expect in a million years, and the second was the moment when Twilight betrayed her true nature as a result of Discord and turned grey, giving up on her friends.)  When her every effort to solve a problem is inexplicably thwarted, then her frustration levels rise but she doesn't truly go crazy (see her efforts with Pinkie Sense and Parasprites).  However, when her problem solving instinct is triggered and yet she cannot find the problem to act upon, that is when she becomes unhinged (Lesson Zero and It's About Time.)  

She needs to plan out a course of action and act upon it, otherwise she can't cope.  That's why she's awesome in a real crisis... She's hardwired to deal with them, and won't stop until it's dealt with.  If she gets wound up without a problem to solve, however, then she has no release and meltdown occurs.  

#39 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Seemingly up to the high standards you've set for yourself. I'll be interested in seeing where you take it... especially Twi/Spike's situation. My guess is that Spike saw how happy Cadenza and Shiny were, and now he wants Twilight to feel the same... to have the same in her life... something that she can't accomplish if she has a baby dragon draped over her all the time, so he's starting to distance himself.

Just my guess. Looking forward to where you go with it.:twilightblush:

#40 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Soooo happy the sequel is up!:pinkiehappy:

#42 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Obligatory:

Great job so far, loved PN, excited for this!

#43 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

At the moment I sadly don't know what advise to give you on your writing. I just know I love your characterizations, and form. I'll eagerly await the next chapter! Good start! :pinkiehappy:

#45 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

LOVED post nuptials, and loving this so far too!

Please update soon!:twilightsheepish:

#46 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 14h ago · · ·

>>958781, >>959443

They're not conspiring. They will be upfront with her about it, they're just discussing possibilities right now. They didn't let Twilight in on it at the moment because she's preoccupied with Spike and they're expecting that matter to be resolved by tomorrow.

>>958837, >>958800,  >>958900, >>960134

Thanks for catching that.

>>958916

Thanks for your thoughts.

>>959016

Yeah, I really should have had that in the description from the start.

>>959443

Your criticisms are noted on the hypocracy. However, they aren't looking for a quick fix. They're looking for a way to help Twilight control herself when she freaks out. The expressly avoid what would be a quick fix. I need to rewrite that scene.

>>959478

Because she knows Scoots would want to see him again.

>>959498

If she was, she was a background pony and it can really be ignored.

>>959874

No. This is an E rated story.

>>960338

Interesting analysis...I'll keep that in mind.

>>960436

Actually, Spike's reasons for feeling guilty were explained in my last story, Post Nuptials. He feels like mud because he betrayed someone he loved like a mother, and now he's afraid of telling Twilight he sees her as a mother. This is a sequel...probably should have made that clearer in the description.

#47 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 14h ago · · ·

Please sir, May I have some moar?

#48 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 14h ago · · ·

Oh yeah, been waiting eagerly for this and I was not disappointed. :rainbowdetermined2:

Looking forward to chapter two!

#49 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 13h ago · · ·

SEQUEL TIME!!

And we're off to a good start.  Foundations laid, and mysteries have begun...

#50 · Chapter 1 · 105w, 13h ago · · ·

Extremely happy to see that the promised (or alluded to?) sequel has made it up here, this is fantastic and it has been instantly favorited and tracked.  Based on what I've seen thus far, I can say without fair certainty that this is going to be another fantastic piece of fanfiction.  :scootangel:

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