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Darth Link 22

Joined April 2012
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I'm a mysterious man with a large Viewer list, despite being very self critical of my work. Looking to write professionally someday.

Sequels

  • Direction
    The Mane Six have to work to save Equestria... without Twilight

    12,766 words · 2,595 views · 334 likes · 12 dislikes

Stories (7)

  • About Last Night
    A night of drinking turns into weeks of...interesting antics.

    38,985 words · 17,177 views · 2,178 likes · 48 dislikes
  • Post Nuptials
    The wedding might be over, but emotions are still running high for many that were involved.
    33,259 words · 20,634 views · 1,820 likes · 43 dislikes
  • Families
    Spike and Scootaloo are acting strange, and Twilight and Rainbow Dash are going to find out why.
    88,134 words · 16,688 views · 1,876 likes · 50 dislikes
  • Honeymoon
    A quick peek at Shining Armor and Cadence after their wedding.
    2,785 words · 4,406 views · 374 likes · 11 dislikes
  • Direction
    12,766 words · 2,595 views · 334 likes · 12 dislikes
  • Wedding Bell Blues
    15,387 words · 8,984 views · 735 likes · 49 dislikes
  • Metamorphosis
    6,392 words · 3,873 views · 185 likes · 9 dislikes

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This story is a sequel to Post Nuptials

In the aftermath of the wedding, Spike is bitter and avoiding everyone. Twilight's determined to find out what's bothering her charge, but she walks a very fine line when dealing with an emotionally distraught child.

Meanwhile, Rainbow Dash suspects something's wrong with Scootaloo, so she starts spending more time with her in hopes of picking the secret from her brain. As she begins to truly mentor the young filly for the first time ever, she begins to see the advantages to having a little sister.

And while all this is going on, Pinkie is struggling with some old family issues that have been brought to the surface, meaning she might have to confront her past at last.

Art by Conicer

First Published
23rd Jul 2012
Last Modified
30th Aug 2013

Comments ( 3,358 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

Well, here it is, the sequel is up. Let me know what you think of it please, any advice would do wonders.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

First? And first viewer! Sweet!

#3 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

I'll  be sure to read this later.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

I dunno, conspiring against Twi like that... doesn't seem like the best way to handle her problem. BTW, loved the first part and I can tell this is going to be just as good or maybe even better!

#5 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

Interesting start, and well written. I just saw this one little thing;

“Well, is Twilight okay? I mean, you seemed worry about it last night?”

I'm looking forward to the next chapter :yay:

#6 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

Oooh, goodie.  Finally here...and well worth the wait.  You're off to an excellent start setting things up and building on the loose ends that you left hanging in Post Nuptuals.  This is gonna be a good read.  I still love your characterizations of the cast--true to form, while at the same time expanding on it in ways that make sense.

Found a typo for ya!

"Still, Big Macintosh was there, ready to help her sister haul home the leftovers from the wedding. " <--should be his?

Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

#7 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

OH god yes

#8 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

This is looking really good, I look forward to more.

Also did you mean The two bakers gave each other a glance before turning back to their foster daughter. Instead of The two bakers glanced at each other a glance before turning back to their foster daughter.

#9 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

This sequel is off to a great start. I like the tiny details you have added to each scene, it really adds to the level of immersion this story has. By picking up almost immediately after Post Nuptials you were able to segue nicely into this story and were able to bring immediate attention to the major plot points.

While bringing attention to them in the first chapter would likely be a mistake in most stories it works well in others, especially ones like this. If one were to pull that sort of stunt in an epic length story it would be a big mistake as most would likely forget about them  quickly, but in a smaller story like this, and assuming that it is likely to stick at least somewhat close to PN in terms of formatting and chapter pacing, it should work out rather well.

Another point in this story's favor is that pretty much every plot point is character based, which adds a great deal of depth to the characters themselves and makes them feel more ... natural for lack of a better term. Furthermore at least two of the plot points, Pinkie and Scootaloo respectively, are very good opportunities for further world building.

I eagerly await the next chapter.

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#10 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

Woohoo! It's here! Been looking forward to this, was a bit concerned when I noticed that Soarin's tag wasn't there, but at least he was mentioned.

#11 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

A great start! I look forward to seeing what happens next.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

Inb4 featured.

Now lets delve into the goodness.....:pinkiecrazy:

#13 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·
#14 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

This is a sequel to something? O.o

That explains a bit. I just caught one thing-

Shaking at the fact that

I think you mean shaking her head, but you may be right.

#15 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

>>958989 We all would. :heart:

And of courser we all can't to see Pinkie Pie and Scootaloo deal with their personal demons. :pinkiehappy: :scootangel:

#17 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

>>959086 Scootabuse? Well let's hope not! :fluttercry:

#18 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

I am grinning so hard right now. Can't wait for next chapter!

#19 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

So happy right now that the sequel has finally arrived.

First chapter was great. It set the tone and the different story-lines.

I eagerly await the next update.

#20 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

The sequel is off to a great start. What will happen? Will they have to deal with the Changelings and Discord?

#21 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

i saw this in the feature box and didn't even realize that it was a sequal to post nuptuals until i started reading. which by the way makes this 20% cooler

>>959086 if this does happen to be the case it will probably take :ajbemused::fluttershysad::pinkiesad2::duck: and:twilightangry2: to keep :rainbowdetermined2: from beating which ever pony is abusing :scootangel: to within an inch of their lives. and that is only if they dont know why RD is suddenly so violent

#22 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

Awesome! I loved Post Nuptials and I'm really eager to see just where this story will go. I especially like the Rainbow Dash angle with Scootaloo and Soarin' from Post Nuptials. The Spike one is pretty deep.

Hm. I don't know why but something about Rarity's conversation with Applejack just doesn't sit right with me. Aside from going behind Twilight's back, it's RARITY commenting about how Twilight can overreact. Yeaaah. Wish I had an icon of a teapot and a kettle, both pitch black. Not that Twilight's...zealousness can't be a problem, it is. But that's not something you can fix short of time and effort. Therapy maybe...not that I think Twi is mentally unwell or anything, but talking about your problems really can do wonders for them. As it stands I feel like Rarity and AJ are looking for some quick fix, like--I don't know--deciding that they're going to try to hide or sugarcoat things in front of her to prevent a future freak out instead of just talking with her like mature, rational individuals. I love this story and I am really eager to see what you have in mind for this.

#23 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

I like this so far. I'll be keeping an eye on it. :trollestia:

#24 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

I liked this a lot.  but why would Dash bring up her date next week so out of the blue?

#25 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

The long awaited sequel to 'Post Nuptials.'  I was so looking forward to this.  BTW:

"Um, I better get home and make sure Derpy has taken good care of Angel and the others,” Fluttershy said.

Wasn't Derpy at the wedding?

#26 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·

I hope there is some Soarin' in this story. I love it so far.

#27 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I discovered Post Nupitals today and finished it in the same day. I checked your other stories, and was disappointed to see that there was no sequel. And what do I see in the featured box a few hours later? THE SEQUEL!!! Do you read my mind???

*Deep breaths* *Dies of joy*

#28 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

sweet

#29 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

A few typos, but overall an intriguing start that brings over several key points from the first story.

#30 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

I'm liking where this story is going so far.   The part with Pinkie kinda brings up a question that is a reference to PONY.MOV series:  DID Pinkie Pie's father make her put glass in her vajay-jay?

#31 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Excellent. Just a few grammatical errors and such but I think everyone else got them covered already.

I'm excited to see how the situation(s) develops.

#32 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Favourited before I even read the first chapter.

Was not disappointed, I'm looking forward to the next chapter with large amounts of enthusiasm.

#33 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Sequal!:rainbowkiss:  Awesome!:twilightblush:

#34 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

This is a good start!

However, while I can imagine that Rarity might be a bit self-blind and not saying something like "I have a tendency to overreact myself, but...", it feels weird that Applejack doesn't at least call out Rarity for being the bot that calls the kettle black, even if that would simply mean that Rarity explains how she feels her behaviour is different than Twilight's.

#35 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Yes! The sequel is up! :yay:

By the way, there's a missing word here:

Rainbow Dash sighed. She knew the younger pegasus was looking for an excuse to say no. “Look, think about will you?”

#36 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Featured already huh? That was appropriately quick for this story.

#37 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Seems good, I will read this later.

#38 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

As I see it, Twilight's problem is that she's compelled to solve problems that come to her attention, and cannot quit on them.  (the only instances where she has quit actually reinforce this...  The first was the "doozy" that Pinkie predicted, i.e. Something that she never would expect in a million years, and the second was the moment when Twilight betrayed her true nature as a result of Discord and turned grey, giving up on her friends.)  When her every effort to solve a problem is inexplicably thwarted, then her frustration levels rise but she doesn't truly go crazy (see her efforts with Pinkie Sense and Parasprites).  However, when her problem solving instinct is triggered and yet she cannot find the problem to act upon, that is when she becomes unhinged (Lesson Zero and It's About Time.)  

She needs to plan out a course of action and act upon it, otherwise she can't cope.  That's why she's awesome in a real crisis... She's hardwired to deal with them, and won't stop until it's dealt with.  If she gets wound up without a problem to solve, however, then she has no release and meltdown occurs.  

#39 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Seemingly up to the high standards you've set for yourself. I'll be interested in seeing where you take it... especially Twi/Spike's situation. My guess is that Spike saw how happy Cadenza and Shiny were, and now he wants Twilight to feel the same... to have the same in her life... something that she can't accomplish if she has a baby dragon draped over her all the time, so he's starting to distance himself.

Just my guess. Looking forward to where you go with it.:twilightblush:

#40 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Soooo happy the sequel is up!:pinkiehappy:

#42 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Obligatory:

Great job so far, loved PN, excited for this!

#43 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

At the moment I sadly don't know what advise to give you on your writing. I just know I love your characterizations, and form. I'll eagerly await the next chapter! Good start! :pinkiehappy:

#45 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

LOVED post nuptials, and loving this so far too!

Please update soon!:twilightsheepish:

#46 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

>>958781, >>959443

They're not conspiring. They will be upfront with her about it, they're just discussing possibilities right now. They didn't let Twilight in on it at the moment because she's preoccupied with Spike and they're expecting that matter to be resolved by tomorrow.

>>958837, >>958800,  >>958900, >>960134

Thanks for catching that.

>>958916

Thanks for your thoughts.

>>959016

Yeah, I really should have had that in the description from the start.

>>959443

Your criticisms are noted on the hypocracy. However, they aren't looking for a quick fix. They're looking for a way to help Twilight control herself when she freaks out. The expressly avoid what would be a quick fix. I need to rewrite that scene.

>>959478

Because she knows Scoots would want to see him again.

>>959498

If she was, she was a background pony and it can really be ignored.

>>959874

No. This is an E rated story.

>>960338

Interesting analysis...I'll keep that in mind.

>>960436

Actually, Spike's reasons for feeling guilty were explained in my last story, Post Nuptials. He feels like mud because he betrayed someone he loved like a mother, and now he's afraid of telling Twilight he sees her as a mother. This is a sequel...probably should have made that clearer in the description.

#47 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Please sir, May I have some moar?

#48 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh yeah, been waiting eagerly for this and I was not disappointed. :rainbowdetermined2:

Looking forward to chapter two!

#49 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

SEQUEL TIME!!

And we're off to a good start.  Foundations laid, and mysteries have begun...

#50 · Chapter 1 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Extremely happy to see that the promised (or alluded to?) sequel has made it up here, this is fantastic and it has been instantly favorited and tracked.  Based on what I've seen thus far, I can say without fair certainty that this is going to be another fantastic piece of fanfiction.  :scootangel:

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