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After an accident, Twilight's life is turned upside down and changed forever.
With her friends standing by her, she must manage to overcome new obstacles, learn a new way of life, and discover just how long secrets last when hidden from those who know you best.
You don't seem rusty. The story has no grammer or spelling errors I could see, the story synopsis and introduction draws the reader in from the beginning, and the pace of the story is progressing at a rate that keeps the reader interested without being so fast as to make the story seem to jump.
Overview: You've done everything right.
If this is rusty then I'd love to see you on form, this is great.
I only found one error but it was more me just being nit-picky.
'What do I do? Twilight thought to herself, '
'You can’t just tell me that! Twilight thought furiously, why are you keeping me here? What tests?!'
In all other lines the 'thoughts' were italicized like in the second line; in the first one the thought isn't.
But, literally, that is all I could find.
Now for the story:
Love the start, very smooth and then perfectly dramatic. The idea seems rather far-fetched to have faces appear in the sky but, then again, that is a vivid imagineation for you, take 'The lion king' for an example.Pic here
The rest is great and, as I said, error free. I'm really looking forward to more; so that must be a good sign.
Have a track and a thumb up, you've earned it 
you've caught my interest. please continue? OH PLEASE SAY SHE'S BLIND? the reaction will be great. 
no offense to the character or anything i just like dark stories. a bookworm like twilight going blind plus her extreme OCD would make a beautiful reaction of crazy.
Thank you everyone, for the warm encouragement, I greatly appreciate it. I've got a plan in place for what's going to happen. The next chapter should be out quite soon. 
Thanks for that. I happened to wake up at 2am, purely to remember that my italics formatting would be completely destroyed. I'm amazed I only missed one! 
This is good. There are maybe 5 grammatical errors, all of them at the seams where clauses are joined together by commas, semicolons, or the ends of quotations. My preference is for less internal dialogue - I'd have cut everything from "On the other hoof" to "Find out now, or find out later," because the reader can figure all that stuff out. But I know I tend to go too far in that direction. Good job of not describing anything visually while in Twilight's POV. I agree with the comments by >>953563.
A few typos this time around. Allow me~
Spike shook his head, walking over to where he had found her friend. her should be his
She landed on her back, sliding through a pile of books to a halt as he head hit the wall. he should be her
The doctor says the only certain damage was too my back, - one too many <O>'s there
There might be a few more in there somewhere, but this is what I noticed. Keep up the good work.
I ma not looking at you weirdly at all. Not at all. I actaully find this to be a big wonder since like humans i believe the sense's horse really on most are sight. So it is very interesting, well.. since ya know. a human without sight is worse than hearing or sound, since we DO most things based on sight.
Aw... Blinding Twilight is possibly the meanest thing you can do to her... Even if they have a version of Braille it's not like obscure manuscripts and tomes will have been translated into it. Judging from the synopsis, I don't expect the best for her, but I'm eager to see where the story goes.
Yeah, Twilight going blind is going to be high up there in her worst nightmares spot. Losing Celestia, her family, Spike, who counts as family, POSSIBLY Cadence, maybe probably, not sure, her magic, her eyes, and her friends. That just about covers the whole list for the Best Pony, I think.
I never understood the point of this. I mean, if ONE non-pony was in that group, you'd be wrong.
The most likely scenario is that Spike is included, and thusly "everyone" or "everybody" is actually correct (because Spike =/= pony).
Off-Topic: Rarity's "duck face" ruins everything it touches. Including your comment.
So, it's probably not an error...I don't know. I just don't get it.
Rainbow Dash dressed in a pink raincoat, and mismatched boots, glared at him behind a bright blush, “I lost mine, alright?! This was all I could find!”
“Sure they did.” Spike righted himself off the floor, snorting once again behind a twisted smile, “Is that Pinkie’s?”
Who/what is Spike referring to when he says "they?"
After various editing shenanigans, and a new proofreader, we now have chapter 3 up and ready. I took this as a little challenge to increase the amount that happens in each chapters, as I was beginning to feel that 2000 words was perhaps a little too short.
All feedback is very welcome, and I appreciate all of you!
Wow, you handled the emotion and hurt of that last scene really well. Honestly, someone needs to tell Celestia as soon as possible. This is not something that can be hidden for long, and when it does come out the fall-out will be worse the longer it's held.
Poor Twilight. 
Checks tags: [Sad] & [Slice-of-Life]. "I'm surprised (and glad) that there's no romance tag. I've seen too many character-becomes-disabled fics loose sight of their drive, purpose. The fics that irk me drift from showing a character coping with their disability --- to becoming a sappy-romance (lime) fic."
Afterthought: "I have nothing against romance... it's just that romance tends to be the vain of these character-becomes-disabled fics."
I was almost tempted to pass this up upon seeing just the title, image, and synopsis, but I'm glad to see that I read it anyway. This character's are all n character (almost annoyingly so; dammit Twilight, stop being stupid) and I can't see enough grammatical or spelling errors for me to pass it off based on it's lack of literary merit. All in all, excellent, and I can't wait for Celestia's reaction.
Silly Twilight, always thinking that Celestia will just throw her away...
Also, you had some weird tense changes here:
"If the Princess finds out, she’ll send her to an institution for the blind. Spike will be given to the next unicorn that the Princess takes in to her tutelage, and Twilight Sparkle will forever be forgotten by everyone. Without sight, she couldn’t leave. Someone will have to lead her out of the hospital, and everyone will know that she is a flawed unicorn."
Well, altogether that paragraph was present tense, but the rest of it was past tense.
Other than that, it's quite excellent!
I anxiously await the future of this fic...
That is all.
Journcy Out.
Oooh. There is nothing I can say. Perhaps some sad Fluttershy emoticons can let you know of my feelings. 
Definetely giving you my thumb for this so far. The very thought of losing a sense that brings Twilight something she loves other than her friends and family (books), makes me feel really depressed. Though someone can, say, read it to her, it's not the same. Then again, nothing will be the same. So all I can tell that this story will go from is that eventually, Celestia will know, despite how Twilight will fight to not to let her. If only Twilight learned from "Lesson Zero" is that she isn't like that--she's not really Princess Trollestia, as the fandom likes to go by, despite how I really don't like it, she's actually nice and generous when she's not ruling all of Equestria.
Alright, sorry, but I've got to get a minor rant out. This is a world of magic. And not exactly elitist magic, either. A substantial portion of the population must be unicorns, so it can't be "well, we've never had a blind unicorn before." Okay, magic doesn't work for healing in this variant of the universe, that's fine. But...a blind unicorn has NEVER decided to try an echo-location style spell, or some kind of magical second sight? Or hell, since reading seems to be the major existential crisis, a bloody book reading spell? 
Please, don't mistake me. I like the story so far, and I've no complaint with the narrative. Its quite touching, and appropriately sad. Its just a pet peeve of mine in fiction with active magic. They seem to have any number of flashy spells to set things on fire, or blow things up, or turn things into other things, not to mention the "joke" spells...I mean, they have a spell specifically designed to give creatures moustaches. Seems like, at some point, a "let the blind function in society" spell would have popped up. Or at least pony-braille.
Though, as an additional, non-pet peeve based issue...her magic seems to be undiminished, or at least hasn't been mentioned as damaged so far. Her hearing seems to be fine as well. While getting around might be a theoretical issue, it again seems the reading and studying are the main issues that are behind the crisis. So...just have Spike handle the reading. Not like the little fellow's illiterate, and he'd probably appreciate being able to help. Again, apologies. A bad habit, to always look for the simplest solution.
Well..that sucks for Twilight. But hey, it is the purpose of this fic so it had to happen.
This is a very emotional time for Twilight and now we get to look forward to angry, depressed, frustrated Twilight as she attempts to deal with her new disability. I'm sure that things will be fine for her...many, many years down the road. And who knows, perhaps she'll eventually find someone to love way down the road of life so that she doesn't die completely alone, in the dark.
Kind of curious as to what Twi's brother's reaction would be once he hears about this. Probably would depend on how soon she tells him and how he hears about it. No good would come if he heard it from a third party.
All-in-all, good fic so far and I am looking forward to more chapters in the future.
All hope is not lost! Neigh I say! This is not the end of books for Twilight Sparkle, not the end for sight! so she's blind... so?She's a unicorn! magic can't repair organic matter in this fic perhaps, but magic has other purposes! She could invent a spell that gives her radar vision, or magic-sight! A spatial awareness spell!
Yet even with that... the fic will be sad. Twilight will never behold the sun in it''s glory again. It's almost as bad as losing her horn. She will never see the light of day with her own eyes again. I doubt even Discord could fix them. Even the ability to become a blind magician badass isn't worth your eyes.
Now excuse me while I shed manly tears.
You can't just end it like this! We must have more!
You don't know how right you are.
Hmmm, the rules for magic that you used don't say that there can't be a spell to show you a specific location and I'm sure Twi could change the spell in a way that directly shows her the image, without going over her eyes, but then again, that'd make the sad tag rather moot, right?
OH NOES!
Your mentioning of Luna reminds me of one of Twilight's favorite pass-times, which she can no longer do at all!
Correction: She's not REALLY Princess Trollestia... most the time. Because she DID troll the cakes when they were pouring her tea, which shows she does enjoy messing with her subjects sometimes.
Agreed, there's plenty of ways for her to be able to dance around the limitations of magic to receive the ability to see, even if it's just for short periods of time.
And it wouldn't make the fic any less sad, unless it was a permenant fix, and if it was it could just be applied at the end to give an uplifting ending to a sad story.
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